..The Confession..VirMan Story...!! Part 5, Pg 16 - Page 7

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Posted: 14 years ago
#61
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Originally posted by: ..luv_shahid..



hey thnx for commenting 😳
yup wrote the nxt part will be up in few minutes...hope u'll like it 😊
n hey *high five* got another bengali mate in this forum 😃



😃 where r u from?
um new in IF
GOD!!like u ppl's writings r just inspiring me to write smthng of my own...but u knw i can't take the risk to get chappals from ppl šŸ˜†

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Posted: 14 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: nuzhi94

there's nothing good in this part???????

r u PSYCHO??? šŸ˜›
it's like made me feel goosebumps 😳
i like this kinda romance...sweet soft innocent...😳
plz continue soon n PM me...
can't wait 😭



lol lol..I guess I wasn't a psycho but NiShal's effect will soon make me one šŸ˜†
awww thnx a lot for such sweet comments...will be updating in few mins 😊

Originally posted by: nuzhi94

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😃 where r u from?
um new in IF
GOD!!like u ppl's writings r just inspiring me to write smthng of my own...but u knw i can't take the risk to get chappals from ppl šŸ˜†



I am from India...what about u??
n please yaar please go ahead n write a FF, SS or and OS...I m pretty sure u'll do a fab job n dont worry IF members are way too sweet to give u chappals šŸ˜†
Edited by ..luv_shahid.. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: nikki028

fab writing dear..jst read two parts..n d ending of part 2..gosh i cud literally visualise tht scene..super awesome..plz continue soon n do pm me too plz :)



hey thnx nikki 😳
really glad that u liked it 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
#64

The Confession- Part 3

Finally it was 6 pm...and Manvi was all set to leave for Hrishikesh...everyone gathered in the main hall to bid her goodbye...be it 1.5 foot ka shlok or 6 foot ke dadaji (in Mannu's style) everyone was there but still she was feeling lonely...there was an emptiness in her eyes...her eyes wandered around the room to look for someone...and that someone was no other than Virat...she was so lost in looking for Virat that she didn't even listen to what everyone else was saying...she maintained a fake smile throughout

"yeh chep kahaan hai?? main aaj jaa rahi hoon aur uska yahaan koi ataa pata nahi hai...kahin mere jaane se woh sahi mein toh dukhi nahi hai???" Manvi thought

"hey everyone...yahaan itni bheed kyun lagi hui hai??" Virat's voice brought Manvi back from her thoughts

"main faltu mein hi itna soch rahi thi...isse toh yeh bhi dhyaan nahi ki mere jaane ka time ho gaya" Manvi said to herself disappointedly

Virat looked at Manvi and understood what was going on in her head...no matter how badly he wanted to stop Manvi from going back he had to control himself..."so bandariya tum finally jaa rahi ho...ab sab chain ki saans le paayenge" and laughed aloud

"kaha toh bada miss you miss you kar raha tha subah...shaam aate aate hi kaya palat ho gayi...chep kahinka" Manvi thought making faces at him

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"accha chalo Manvi...ab humein nikalna chahiye warna pohochte pohochte late ho jaayenge" said Viren to Manvi

Manvi nodded her head and hugged Jeevika, Kadambari Chachi and Vanshika...and looked at Virat blankly...she herself couldn't figure out what was wrong with her...why she looked at Virat that way...with questions in her mind she walked past Virat...looking Manvi go Virat felt as if hundred of thorns went across his heart...he didn't want to let her go...he couldn't let her go but all he could do was stand there and see her going...his eyes were fixed on Manvi and deep inside he was wishing for a miracle...a miracle that could stop his bandariya from going away from him

TRING TRING...TRING TRING...Viren's phone rang

"hello"

"kya?"

"abhi?"

"abhi mera aana bilkul bhi possible nahi hai...try and sort out the issue now...I'll be there at the office tomorrow morning"

"tch...okay..okay...wait there...main kuch karta hoon"

Everyone were looked at Viren anxiously

"Dadaji, Mr. Gupta ka phone tha aur unhone mujhe urgently office bulaya hai" said Viren

"Par beta iss waqt?? Sab theek toh hai na?" Dadaji questioned Viren

"Dadaji mujhe bilkul bhi idea nahi hai ke kya hua hai..." "Manvi, u mind if u have to stay here for another day??"

Virat's heart jumped out of happiness hearing this...his happiness knew no bounds after that...one more day with his bandariya, he could actually see his wish becoming true...but again he had to get back to his original avatar just to the annoyed look on his bandariya's face which he loved to the core

"oh no bhai!! iska matlab isko ek aur din jhelna padega...yeh humpe kaise atyachaar hai bhagwaan" Virat teased Manvi

"jiju, mujhe aaj hi jaana padega, beeji ne kal ke hi tickets books karwaye hai aur mujhe kisi bhi halat mein subah tak pohochna hi hoga...aur waise bhi main kisi ki khushiyon pe paani nahi ferna chahti" said Manvi looking angrily at Virat...Virat on the other hand was smiling at her but inside he cursed himself for hurting her again.

"VIRAT" Swamini Bua called him..."tum toh free ho na?? tum kyun nahi chale jaate Manvi ko chhodne Hrishikesh?" Virat for the first time loved what his bua said...he just wanted to run upto her and hug her...

"No ways bua...Chandigarh to Hrishikesh...iss bandariya ke saath? Aur woh bhi akele? Main aap hi ka bhateeja hoon thoda toh soch leti aap mere liye"

"mujhe bhi tumhare saath jaane ka na koi shauk nahi hai...Chandigarh se Hrishikesh ke liye public transports bane hai...main khud hi chali jaaungi...waise bhi mujhe tumhara ehsaan nahi chahiye"

"haan toh jaao na...tumhe roka kisne hai??"

"haan jaa rahi hoon..." Manvi picks up her bag and angrily walks towards the door

"Ruko Manvi beta..." Manvi stopped at once hearing dadaji's stern voice

"Virat, Manvi iss ghar ki sirf mehmaan ho nahi par Jeevika ki behen bhi hai...aur itne raat ko uska akele jaana theek nahi hoga...jaao aur use chhod aao..." Dadaji said firmly

"ji dadaji..." Virat said keeping his head low...obviously it was dadaji's order...he had to obey it and in any case, he himself was dying to go to Hrishikesh with Manvi...

Virat and Manvi leave the Vadhera house together...Manvi was mad at Virat and therefore didn't speak a single word...and here we had Virat who could think nothing other than Manvi...the thought of spending that night with Manvi was making him crazy...he and his bandariya and a journey to Hrishikesh


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Finally managed to make VirMan go to Hrishikesh together...have already wrote the next part bas few final touch-ups are left šŸ˜†...n the next part is gonna be fun with VirMan getting stuck in a landslide...will update the next part tomorrow...hope u all like this part as well... 😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
#65

Awesome !!!! Awesome !!!! Awesome !!!!

I loved it, especially when Virat was saying something but he wanted something. And I absolutely agree with Virat, Buaji aur Dadaji, dono ne zindagi mein pehle baar kuch acha kam kiya hoga . . . šŸ˜‰ šŸ˜†.


I am in a bit of hurry so in short - šŸ‘ šŸ‘ šŸ‘ šŸ‘ ā­ļø šŸ‘šŸ¼

You rock . . . . .keep writing and Thanx for the PM. 😊





Edited by -Shwetasri- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#66
Wow gurl u are amazing Plz continue soon Plz Nnd Plz.update me :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#67
just reaadd caught up with thiss story <3 hayyee ii lovve ihh. virat hadd fallen in love withh maanvi' annd maanvi iss fallin for him. awesomme ii soo cant wait for the next part. VirMan stuck. oye hoyee. update soon xx
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Posted: 14 years ago
#68
i loved it!!!! plz update soon nd pm me...
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Posted: 14 years ago
#69
This is sosweet and LOL virat PLEASE PM ME!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Amazing fabulous!!! I'm in love with this totally! Their nok-jok mein chupa pyaar awesome!! Will wait for your PM :) thanks!!

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