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Swetha

@swethasyam08

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+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#81

actually Selu part is a fiction for sure to my knowledge 😛

but i didn;t get the link as to how did cgm entered greek army and all. 😒

so just wanted to add this part to get some sense and later part will be even more interesting and i will tell u after posting that part. 😆

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Moner_Radio

@Moner_Radio

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Posted: 14 years ago

#82

@ swetha :

gr8 update dear⭐️, but in my opinion, you should use more direct conversations instead of writing in passive voice😊, writing in active voice makes it more effective, otherwise passive voice se aisa lagta hai jaise tum bahut jaldbazi mein update kar rahe ho !! ( it's just a suggestion😊 )

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Khusi

@khusi_*

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#83

nice one😊

😆...bichara selu...socha v nehin hoga...ki CGM uska future damad hai and war haar jayega woh cgm se...🤣

Edited by khusi_* - 14 years ago

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Swetha

@swethasyam08

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#84

Thanku Jayathi, Ashi, Polly n Kushi!!!

Polly thank u for ur suggestion re!!! actually this time i didn't get much time so just gave such update 😔

actually i myself didn't like the update this time 😆 i said the same to Jayathi also. hahha.

don't worry next update will be in a conversation way only. and next will be a bit lengthy i think as i cannot stop in the middle for that part atleast 😆

all ur suggestions are well come dear... 🤗

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Swetha

@swethasyam08

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: khusi_*
nice one😊

😆...bichara selu...socha v nehin hoga...ki CGM uska future damad hai and war haar jayega woh cgm se...🤣

yeah kushi! though it was a fiction part which was mentioned in the update; i was like 😆 when i read it. 🤣

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Moner_Radio

@Moner_Radio

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#86

@ swetha :

actually this update had huge scope for conversations, so when i read it, i immediately understood that you have done it in a great hurry..warna update ko passive voice mein nahi likhte !!😆

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Swetha

@swethasyam08

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#87

exactly polly too many dialouges in this part. but couldn't do it 😔

next will be good. it will be the discussions with Puru and his nature will be known now...

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Prachi

@justjayati

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#88

waiting for the next!!!! and don't worry if its a bit lengthy... actually i now want them to be lengthy... in that case we all will get to read more about it!!