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debby

@debby

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Posted: 16 years ago

#491

[quote=raveenamc]
oh wow! plz plz plz get them back together!!!!!!!!! [/quote]
They will.. :)
Thanks for reading!

[quote=aato1429]
Oh man.. it was a very nice update..

in the beginning i thought u will drag it like thye dnt meet and MU over gunjan samrat wedding but u actually showed everything so nicely.. a

and the reason for nupur to step back is justified as well...

just loved the part.. update next part soon [/quote]
Oops, I am happy you didnt think it dragged after all.. :)
Glad you liked it!
Thanks so much. :D

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Divya

@myownarea

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 16 years ago

#492

its amazing debby!
I especially liked the dream and Mayank thinking it was for real!!
I loved the ending bit, Mayank tells her ...wo, finally...while she refuses (ofcourse! 😊)
Still, he knows she is not gonna get married ..is just really upset while she knows he loves her...it may not be the best feeling, but not a bad feeling either..
😊 gr8 update!!

luv
Divya

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madhvi

@-madhvi-

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#493

Hey debby
i finally read all parts and im commenting on each part😊. Thats so not possible i kno, but atleast i can mention the most and the least favourite parts😛
Part 6-
Yaar mujhe mayank ne jaise bataya woh toh thik laga, but uske bad hi tried avoiding the situation kyu?😔
Then nupur reacted in a very expected manner, even i wud hv thot its a joke😛, but mayank had to tell the truth😔, so sad yaar. So they are breaking up, it seems.
Oh i feel bad for nupur😭, mayank has fallen out of love😭, i feel terrible for her yaar😭
What she was thinking is very similar to wat im thinking or wat i wud hv thot.
i found mayank rude😭
Im very sad after this update debby, but yeah i like the christmas flash back😆, so sweet😳

Part 7-
Thank god the three years are over😛, i thot that part 7 will hv a lot of rona dhona, but no nothing at all, n mayank will be back soon yipee😛. So mayank used to call her, and they used to fight again😔
Nupur is trying to forget him is upsetting😔
So mayank realized his mistake😃, but seems like he has suffered too not only without nupur but also because of himself (i hope i made sense)
I was wondering wats wrong with mayank, but i guess something is wrong with both of them, ability to express their love is missing😊, or communication gap u c😆

Part 8-
mr paul is hillarious🤣, he forgot his schools address🤣
Mayank will be losing it soon🤣..........emergencies🤣, paul surely doesn't get sarcasm🤣
Nupur is badly hurt by watever mayank said, still she will call him😳
Satyanash😆, wrong things hv to happen, she calls n he yells
Nupurs bday, nice surprise destroyed by uday😆
mayank cudnot call her
Oh man cj is so true😊, i like her words honest n true😊, i also feel bad for her n mayank
a new addition to the misunderstanding list, now the sim change
y dont they use emails n ol😕😆
ok mayank loves her a lot and he realized his mistake, but cant apologise
This part was very well written debby, i liked the way u write😊

Part 9-
MM is amazing, mayank's marriage😆
gunjans marriage😆
marriage is in the air😆
oh man nupur lied
the nth misunderstanding possible
im super excited to read part 10 now😆

Part 10-
Now mayank is so desperate to meet nupur😆
gr8 imagination for mayanks part😆, nupur getting married today😆
she told guards not to entertain mayank😆 madman mayank😆
now now gr8 imagination agn, disadvantage of excess brain😛
u dont hv it and no chance of using it😉, par zyada ho toh u need to😆

Mayanks dream 🤣, he is sounding obssesed/ traumatized😛
but i like it😉
ok next gunjan's marriage n mehendi, so which design r they using??😛
mayank meets nupur and atleast some air cleared thank god😊
but this makes me restless for the next update, not fair😒
i liked their closeness in this part, nupurs rxn was well done👏

debby ur an amazing writer n im sure ur hearing this nth time, by me others😆
so keep on writting and pm me when u update coz ill be waiting😃
sorry for the terriblly long post😆
im so sorry😛
love
madhvi

Edited by -madhvi- - 16 years ago

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sheena

@sheena_12

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#494

Amazing!!
I cried while reading...it was sooo damn awesome...the last part was just UUFFF UFFF UFF!! i read it like fr 10 times...LOL!! really amzing!!
Update the nxt part sooon!!

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Senny

@Senny

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Posted: 16 years ago

#495

Originally posted by: debby

Hey Senny! Missed you man..!

Ha ha, yes, there is sumthin infectious abt his temper.. I cant help it. LOL Glad you liked it!
Seriously, if only everyone was so honest, the world would be a better place.

Aww.. glad you liked the little SG part and the conversation that followed. Yes, he does find ways to justify himself.. but then we all do. ;)

The killing hallucination was fun to write.. really really happy you enjoyed it. I know ya, sumtimes we cant think rationally no matter how much we try. Human failing you may call it..

Seriously? Megha is like a friend of mine.. great to know you share some of her traits! She is fun to be with when she thinks beyond alcohol.. LOL

Yep, her mind won over her heart for now.. But like you said, its hard to resist Mayank for too long. :D
Bloodshed and murder? Ha ha.. yeah, no more of that. =)

Thanks a million Senny... I love you for this. :)

Hey Debs, love you loads Hope all went well for you last week, you seemed to be really busy.

My anger is uncontrollable at times too hehe or many a times i must say, i have to learm how to control it. But i so glad to read that there will be no bloodshed hehe. True thinking rationally is so hard and its going to get harder for poor nupur man, mayank is so irresistable so what can she do hehe.

Hey really you have a friend like megha, well you have two now debs.

Hope to talk to you really soon, would love to read any piece of work written by you.

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debby

@debby

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#496

Originally posted by: Bollywood_chic
Debby!!
Great part, The start was great, he was letting his anger out on those poor guards. Thank you for showing them not taking a bribe.. now only if all/most ppl in India were like this. It was funny to see him jumping to conclusions, the whole hallucination of killing Samrat. He needs to take a deep breath and think things over..

The garden scene was written beautifully.. the whole decription of the tree and how nupur would be around it.. was really good (Y)..

Great part overall.. lke always.. i wanna see more of Nupurs inner thoughts of her trying to stay away from Mayank

: )

Thanks soo much for the PM

xSonia

Hey Sonia!!

Yep, an honest guard is becoming as rare as an honest politician... Mayank does indeed need to think things over though.

Glad you liked the garden scene :D
Yeah, more of Nupur's thinking comes in the next chapter.. after all it isnt easy to resist Mayank. ;)

Thanks so much Sonia!

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debby

@debby

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Posted: 16 years ago

#497

Originally posted by: utfracks
Debby, you finally updated.🤗 How i missed your awesome updates!
And this part is now my current favorite. It was written so beautifully, that i have no words to explain.

The way Mayank was yelling at the guards was amazing. I'm surprised they didn't accept the bribe. I wonder if all guards would be as efficient as this one. But then again, I'm happy Mayank didn't get past. I do love him now, but then again, he needs to suffer. Oh, and he actually thouht Samrat was cheating on Nupur. I don't blame him though. Poor guy, might be going through a lot.

You described the mehandi ceremony really well. Poor Dia, was being "amused" by Benji and megha. hehe.

And the garden scene was the best part of the entire update. I am glad Nupur didn't give in to Mayank. And her conclusion is so justified. I would have felt the same if i were her.

So now, we have to see what Nupur does.

Please update sooner this time Debby. I just looooooove this update. It was mindblowing, fantastic, amazing, and well, just fantabulous!

Hey Rachna! 🤗Great to hear from u as always!

Yeah, everyone is pretty surprised with the honest guard... LOL I too am glad he didnt get past. ;)
Mayank is going through a lot for sure.. but then, tit for tat.

Aww.. glad you liked the mehandi!

The garden scene was my favourite too. :D I am happy you found her reaction justified.

I will surely try to update sooner this time.. Thanks so much for the spectacular review!!

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#498

I'm finally all caught up! Debby, you are absolutely amazing and the story is brilliant!! Once I started reading, I just couldn't stop...been staring at my computer screen for God knows how long. 😆 So I guess my theory about the meaning of "Lost and Found" ended up being somewhat accurate, though the "found" part hasn't quite happened yet. I'm sure it will soon enough though. 😉

Okay, so obviously, such a beautiful story warrants a long detailed review, so I'll do my best to be as complete as possible. Let's start with the characters...Nupur and Mayank are not perfect people in any sense of the word, and that's what makes them so powerful. There are things that both of them have said and done (Mayank more so than Nupur) that really annoyed me, but ultimately I can't help loving them and sympathizing with them. You've done a wonderful job with Gunjan and Samrat as well...they're not exactly like the characters in the show, but have very vibrant personalities nevertheless. The Samrat in your story is definitely more appealing to me than the one in the show. 😛

Mayank's characterization really intrigued me from the start. His workaholic nature, the coldness towards Nupur, showing up at the bar...it all seemed very strange considering the fact that he and Nupur had been in a committed and happy relationship for so long. When he finally announced that he was moving to the US, everything kind of clicked in place. Mayank said some really hurtful things to Nupur at that moment, but I don't think he truly believed any of them. It seemed to me that he was just trying to justify his decision to leave to himself. The only way he could possibly allow himself to leave her was to convince himself that they didn't belong together, specifically because he couldn't deal with her so-called flaws.

The scenes of their fight, Nupur hugging him and realizing she had lost him, and her breakdown were wonderfully written -- actually, some of the best writing that I have ever encountered in this forum. I truly wanted to cry for Nupur and knock some sense into Mayank. I especially found these sentences to be brilliant: "I could have taken the three years if I knew he was there, loving me as much as always. Clinging onto him even tighter, I wished I could convince myself that he loved me as much as ever. If God would just grant me that, I vowed to never ask for anything again. But prayers aren't meant to be answered. Dreams are meant to die... with the first instant we open our eyes." *Sigh* Why does life have to involve so many misunderstandings and complications?

The latest chapter has got to be my favorite...Mayank's jealousy, irritability and possessiveness for Nupur once again make him a very believable character. The scene at the mehndi ceremony between the two of them was phenomenal! I absolutely loved the build up of passion after he finally confessed his love for her. As unwilling as Nupur was to accept it, I'm sure she had always been hoping against hope that such a moment would come when Mayank would say those three words once again and they would be able to rekindle their love. But unfortunately, Mayank chose the wrong words right afterwards...and now, Nupur once again misunderstands him. 😭

Part of me wants you to bring them together again, but I have a feeling that will be the end of the story. Am I right? Well, I certainly don't want the story to end so soon...Grr, I'm torn. Well, if you do end the story soon, you'll have to promise to start another one ASAP. Deal?

One more things I have to mention...I absolutely loved how throughout the story, you kept giving us glimpses into Mayank and Nupur's four year relationship. The short flashbacks and memories were wonderful to read and helped me understand what brought them to this point.

I'm really sorry for taking so long to come back here. Exams always seem to get in the way of all the non-academic plans I make. Anyway, can't wait to read more!!! Hope this review was long enough. Continue soon!

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debby

@debby

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#499

Originally posted by: myownarea
its amazing debby!
I especially liked the dream and Mayank thinking it was for real!!
I loved the ending bit, Mayank tells her ...wo, finally...while she refuses (ofcourse! 😊)
Still, he knows she is not gonna get married ..is just really upset while she knows he loves her...it may not be the best feeling, but not a bad feeling either..
😊 gr8 update!!

luv
Divya

Hey Divya!

Aww, glad you enjoyed the dream/nightmare.
Yea, he knows she isnt getting married and she knows he loves her or claims to.. I agree wid you abt the feeling not being bad.. :D

Thanks so much for reading!

[quote=sheena_12]

Amazing!!
I cried while reading...it was sooo damn awesome...the last part was just UUFFF UFFF UFF!! i read it like fr 10 times...LOL!! really amzing!!
Update the nxt part sooon!!

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Hey Sheenu!

Oh man, I am thrilled you liked it so much!
Thanks a LOT dear.. will try to update soon :)

Edited by debby - 16 years ago

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Hgrhrnwl

@hgrhr

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#500

Hey Debby...!

you updated...oh god i was actually craving for an update to know what happens next....and just seeing the PM i went dancing..! hehe...

And thank you for making it SO long..!! I literally didn't want it to end....!

coming to it......after reading it....i'm split now between what to think....LOL...

One side I'm totally having this guilty pleasure in watching mayank suffer like that for what he did to her...and on the other side I cannot bear to see them apart...I mean his desperation is just killing me..!

This is Mayank Sharma....calm and composed.....and right now he's just so desperate for her that its heartbreaking to see him like that.....especially after what all he did....he's realising all his mistakes and lashing out at himself for being so work-obsessed...that he even left her alone.

I love the way he's so jealous and possessive...!! 😆

He thought samrat was cheating in her...! LOL...his thoughts were really amusing..! well yeah since we actually knew the truth....hehe

He even imagined killing samrat....wow...and the scene following it was really very touching....he actually believed his hallucination and Shilpa was consoling him....he cried over losing her. Oh god even i wanted to cry with him.

You're writing him so perfectly...each and every emotion of Mayank and Nupur put into words.

I don't know which was my most favourite...the one when he was crying of the one when they meet and finally talk...if that falls in the conversation category....at all.

So they finally were alone and acknowlegding each other's presence...or rather Nupur finally acknowledged his presence....y'know the way she was crying when he said he stil loves her. The way he kept kissing away her tears....

I was totally in the moment there....just like you're watching a very emotional movie and you're moved by it.

And no matter how much she was dying to be with him she couldn't ignore the years worth of hurt feelings from surfacing...and spat them out. Well he had to face it all.

I'm shutting up now....or i'll keep going on and on and this has actually gotten way longer than i though...LOL

Last thing i want to mention is those little things you put in between like that one with the caterer....small things and details that make the character so live and believable...so very Mayank this was...!

You truely are the best FF writer I've seen...! Honestly even some of the published novels don't capture everything so well like you've done..!!

Please do continue soon..!!

Edited by hgrhr - 16 years ago