FF: Ishq-e-Watan *Chapter 78 Posted* - Page 4

Originally posted by: DelusionsOfNeha

Haan, that sounds good too!! When are you planning to reveal what age was Monu when her mother died?

That's alright, do what you feel comfortable in. ❤️

Yup, it's good and fun!🤗

Thoda sabar rakho. Saara kuchh hi naa bata doon tumhe main? Dheere dheere, haule haule, sab kuchh pata chalega. 😆 Have patience.

Sabke past dheere dheere reveal honge. And uske baare mein zyaada koi hints nahi. Important details ki toh bilkul nahi.

Originally posted by: NoeticLife

Thoda sabar rakho. Saara kuchh hi naa bata doon tumhe main? Dheere dheere, haule haule, sab kuchh pata chalega. 😆 Have patience.

Sabke past dheere dheere reveal honge. And uske baare mein zyaada koi hints nahi. Important details ki toh bilkul nahi.

Are are.. readers se sabr karwana to koi humse seekhe (ek saal me ek ya do chapter dena😉)

I'll be patient❤️🤗

Originally posted by: DelusionsOfNeha

Are are.. readers se sabr karwana to koi humse seekhe (ek saal me ek ya do chapter dena😉)

I'll be patient❤️🤗

Don't worry. Itna bhi sabr nahi karwaungi. But reveal kaafi late hoga. At least, according to the plan I have in mind.

Originally posted by: NoeticLife

Don't worry. Itna bhi sabr nahi karwaungi. But reveal kaafi late hoga. At least, according to the plan I have in mind.

Main apni baat kar rahi thi 😆

Good that you're a plotter/planner. I mostly follow the on the go strategy, jo hoga dekha jayega and then my characters decide on their own phir Jo hota hai dekha nahi jaata🥺

I read at work lmao I am impatient with a story like that.

- monu stutters in front of people yet her internal monologue is something else. So why is she nervous? I like how you portrayed her uneasiness with small things. Hiding behind people, letting others go fast, not meeting eyes.

- karan monu first meet wasn't written or I missed a chapter?

- i adore sid monu. Haye they are so cute. I won't mind a story just with them lmao navigating army life.

- karan and his rich kid ka bhasan 💤💤💤 chup be. with one glance you are making so many judgments. Chup raho. And I hope in future faizi don't lower his voice to criticize him. Muh pe bole u suck 🤣

- sid with that ego wala line followed by lappadasan 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂🔥 loved it.

- so there is drama with hostage dying and some special agent leaking info. And now this.

- good to see karan wants civilians to succeed and even planning for them on training.

- so sid lives in monu's house? Where is his parents/dad?

- i think someone older man, maybe like monu's father's age abused her. Idk if it's related to her mom but the way she reacted to her maid was something. If that's true I wonder how she will react to batra sir.

I read in edt you have written it already so please more chapters 🤩😂

Originally posted by: DelusionsOfNeha

Main apni baat kar rahi thi 😆

Good that you're a plotter/planner. I mostly follow the on the go strategy, jo hoga dekha jayega and then my characters decide on their own phir Jo hota hai dekha nahi jaata🥺

I know tum apni baat kar rahi thi. Main bhi apni baat kar rahi thi. 😆

Yeh plotting and planning toh naturally start ho gayi. I only had Monami's background in mind because jab maine apne liye likha tha (this was originally purely for my own entertainment) maine auron par bahut zyaada dhyaan nahi diya tha.

Then, I started writing the first chapter, and things just started coming together in my head. 🤗

Finally read the chapter!!

Ohh godd, there are so many things I want to praise, actually pura chapter hi hai, kya kya bolu? Okay let me try.

I really really really liked Koel and Faizi's first meet. Little bit dramatic but suits Faizi's character as you said. Na zyada filmy, na zyada simple.

Sanju, karan ka crush ho na ho, tum zarur impressed ho gai ho sid se, not bad 😉

That tadka of some gadbad in academy, totally goes along the concept.

Loved the details about complete course like theoretical and practical training. That makes sense.

It's good that Bala has come here willingly, to serve the nation. This gives the message that one doesn't need money or other facilities to serve the country, bas dil mein chah aur zid honi chahiye. Tabhi to dil ziddi hai.

I liked Sumanji and Koel's first conversation.

Completely opposite of the show. Ofcourse Koel's situation is better here, so contrast on her behaviour is understandable.

What I liked most is about her parents supporting her. This gives another message, that girls after divorce shouldn't be left alone to live on their own. With her parents' support, she can fight any circumstances.

Sid behaving mature and not lattu on Sanju is another aspect I loved. This is going to be beautiful and subtle journey for their relationship too.

Overall, loved it, Chica!! Thanks again for this masterpiece. Greaaatttt going!!!!

I read at work lmao I am impatient with a story like that.

- monu stutters in front of people yet her internal monologue is something else. So why is she nervous? I like how you portrayed her uneasiness with small things. Hiding behind people, letting others go fast, not meeting eyes.

There's an explanation for this. It's related to her past. It'll ALL make sense when it's revealed.

- karan monu first meet wasn't written or I missed a chapter?

It's in chapter 2. Their "official" first meet was before the beginning of the trek but if you're talking about Karan thinking that's the same person who bumped into him and didn't even look up, scroll up a little to the scene where Karan-Faizi are exiting the registration center and Karan bumps into a girl.

No words exchanged, just a small, subtle scene.

- i adore sid monu. Haye they are so cute. I won't mind a story just with them lmao navigating army life.

They are so cute! I love them!

- karan and his rich kid ka bhasan 💤💤💤 chup be. with one glance you are making so many judgments. Chup raho. And I hope in future faizi don't lower his voice to criticize him. Muh pe bole u suck 🤣

I wanted Faizi-Karan's relation to be a little different here. Faizi rarely calls Karan out in the show, but I wanted him to call him out, although Karan doesn't really listen. But uska toh kuchh nahi kar sakte. 😆

- sid with that ego wala line followed by lappadasan 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂🔥 loved it.

- so there is drama with hostage dying and some special agent leaking info. And now this.

There is no "drama" per say about the hostages dying. It's just something that affected everyone around and especially pinched Karan because he himself was on that mission. (His intro scene if you don't remember)

- good to see karan wants civilians to succeed and even planning for them on training.

Karan here would be someone who's hell bent on doing his duty. If he thinks it's going to serve the country, he won't think twice about doing things he hates.

- so sid lives in monu's house? Where is his parents/dad?

He doesn't live in her house. They just spent a lot of time together and sleepover and stuff. Since they were both supposed to leave early, they just decided to stay together for the night so there is no time wastage.

- i think someone older man, maybe like monu's father's age abused her. Idk if it's related to her mom but the way she reacted to her maid was something. If that's true I wonder how she will react to batra sir.

Maybe. Maybe not. Who knows? I mean, I do. But you don't. 😆

I read in edt you have written it already so please more chapters 🤩😂

I haven't written entire chapters. I just have written a lot of scenes. There's still a lot of scenes that needs to be written between the scenes I have already written for them to make sense to you. 👍🏼

Finally read the chapter!!

Ohh godd, there are so many things I want to praise, actually pura chapter hi hai, kya kya bolu? Okay let me try.

I really really really liked Koel and Faizi's first meet. Little bit dramatic but suits Faizi's character as you said. Na zyada filmy, na zyada simple.

That's what I was going for. Dramatic, but not overly so. Glad that I achieved it.

Sanju, karan ka crush ho na ho, tum zarur impressed ho gai ho sid se, not bad 😉

That tadka of some gadbad in academy, totally goes along the concept.

Abhi toh bahut kuchh hoga. 😆 Dekhte jao.

Loved the details about complete course like theoretical and practical training. That makes sense.

It's good that Bala has come here willingly, to serve the nation. This gives the message that one doesn't need money or other facilities to serve the country, bas dil mein chah aur zid honi chahiye. Tabhi to dil ziddi hai.

As I said, I wanted this to be their one common point of connect. This is one thing they would all put their differences aside for, no matter how big it is.

I liked Sumanji and Koel's first conversation.

I wanted less drama between the cadets, and more bonding and solitude, and again, didn't make sense for that with the storyline.

Completely opposite of the show. Ofcourse Koel's situation is better here, so contrast on her behaviour is understandable.

What I liked most is about her parents supporting her. This gives another message, that girls after divorce shouldn't be left alone to live on their own. With her parents' support, she can fight any circumstances.

Definitely supportive. I didn't want to emphasize too much on family drama, which would have inevitable if there were problematic families. Not every family is perfect (there'll be drama with Monami's and problems with Sid's) but not anything extreme or something because I wanted to keep this ff concentrated on military, soldiers and all the problems they face.

Oh also, Koel isn't divorced. She's a widow. It's going to have a mention in the next few chapters anyway and it's nothing secretive or anything so I am just going to slip this in...

Sid behaving mature and not lattu on Sanju is another aspect I loved. This is going to be beautiful and subtle journey for their relationship too.

Yes! I was thinking of making Sanju be the lattu one in their relationship, although lattu would be the wrong word. Basically, Sanju would be the one who runs after Sid first.

Overall, loved it, Chica!! Thanks again for this masterpiece. Greaaatttt going!!!!

Haaye! Itni tareef sunkar... I literally had to take a walk around my room to calm down. 🤣

Originally posted by: NoeticLife

I know tum apni baat kar rahi thi. Main bhi apni baat kar rahi thi. 😆

Yeh plotting and planning toh naturally start ho gayi. I only had Monami's background in mind because jab maine apne liye likha tha (this was originally purely for my own entertainment) maine auron par bahut zyaada dhyaan nahi diya tha.

Then, I started writing the first chapter, and things just started coming together in my head. 🤗

OMG!! I really appreciate you writing and sharing it with us! When I first started writing I did it for myself too! And it's really good to know that you have your target audience (yourself) fulfilled! 🤗❤️

Keep your characters under control, don't let them have the reins 😆