Shattered Hearts (Finale on Pg. 11)

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Hey guys, I am back with a new story based on the upcoming track! Let me be very clear that I absolutely despise the shit we're about to be thrown at us and sincerely hope that they delete these violent and disturbing scenes from the show entirely. This will ruin Shiva's character beyond repair or redemption. But still, this narrative came to my mind so I decided to pen it down! This story is the aftermath of the hospital disaster and leaves a little bit of room for Shiva's redemption if at all it's possible! I hope you like it!

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Dhara and Gautam bail Shiva and Krish out of jail after the chaos that ensued at the hospital. Shiva fumes with rage and feels like he can spit fire and the first person he wants to burn is Raavi! She betrayed him by supporting Anita and Maami. She proved herself to be maami ki behen ki beti after all. He reminisces their moments together and starts hating himself for ever loving her. He can’t wait to throw her out of his house and his life for good.

After spending some time with Anita and making sure her Maasi Ma is okay, Raavi returns to Pandya Niwas one last time. After everything she witnessed at the hospital and just how violent and out of control Shiva had become, Raavi is determined to get out of that toxic environment for good. She can’t believe how her life changed in a span of a mere few hours. Just that morning she was excited and happy to tell Shiva that she loved him. She was going to forget about everything that ever happened between them and start this new year with love. But now, there is no way she is going to stay with him under the same roof.

Raavi is halfway to the living room when she hears, “RUK!

Shiva sees her entering his house and rushes to stop her and throw her out.

Teri himmat kaise hui mere ghar mein kadam rakhne ki?” he says and grabs her by the arm and violently turns her around.

At first, Raavi is startled by the sudden movement as her arm starts hurting, but she soon gathers her strength and snatches her arm back.

She looks into Shiva’s blood thirsty eyes and says, “Teri himmat kaise hui mujhe chot pohchaane ki? Tu samajhta kya hai apne aap ko?

Suman, Rishita, and Dev come out of their rooms hearing the ruckus while Gautam, Dhara, and Krish get ready for another showdown. The silence in the house is explosive as they all know that this is the point of no return; they know that life will never be the same again for any of them after this moment.

Tu hai kaun mujhe aur mere parivaar ko maarne waala? Tera naam kya Shiva rakh diya, khud ko bhagwaan samjhne laga hai tu?” Raavi continues as she, too, feels like she can spit fire.

Shiva’s anger reaches a new high and he screams, “CHUP! BANDH KAR APNA BAKWAAS AUR NIKAL JA MERE GHAR SE!

Gautam loses his temper and rushes to hit Shiva, but Raavi stops him and stands between him and Shiva. Dhara comes to the front to interject but Raavi turns toward Shiva and asks, “Warna kya? Kya karega tu? Mere bhi baal kheench ke kaat dega?

A sudden and deadly silence fills the room! Shiva is caught off guard and completely taken aback. He takes a step back unsure of how to respond.

But Raavi steps forward and continues, “Bolna? Mere bhi baal kheench ke kaat dega? Ya woh kenchi mere seene pe chala ke jaan le lega meri? Ya mera bhi maar maar ke woh hi haal karega jo tune aur Krish ne hospital ke staff ka kiya tha?

Shiva is stunned into silence. Krish feels ashamed and says, “Bhabhi …

CHUP! Khabardaar jo mujhe Bhabhi bulaaya toh!” Raavi yells at him shocking everyone.

She grabs Shiva’s collar and asks again, “Bol na? Yeh hi karega na tu mere saath? Kyun ki iske alaawa tujhe aata hi kya hai?

Raavi beta meri baat sun … “ Suman interjects and comes towards Raavi.

But Raavi doesn’t let her finish and says, “Kya sunu mein kaaki? Bacha kya hai kuch sunn ne ko? Aaj jo dekha utana kya kam tha?

Dhara comes to her and cups her cheek, but Raavi pushes her hand away and steps back at once.

Raavi, please! Tu toh jaanti hai na Shiva ka gussa bachpan se hi aisa hai?” Dhara tries to explain.

Woh aisa nahi tha!” Raavi screams in agony, “Nahi tha mera Shiva aisa!” and cries.

The thundering cloud of anger quiets down at once in Shiva’s mind hearing this. He goes completely blank and the only thing he can hear are his own heartbeat and Raavi’s words.

Bachpan se leke aaj tak, uska gussa, uski chidh, uski nafrat, maine dekhi hai! Jitani maine dekhi hai utani aur kisi ne nahi dekhi! Lekin sahi aur galat ke beech ka farq woh aaj se pehle kabhi nahi bhula! Aaj se pehle kabhi usne kisi begunaah ko jaanwaron ki tarah nahi maara. Kabhi bhi kisi ladki ke saath iss hadd tak badsalooki nahi ki jeetani ussne Anita Di ke saath aaj ki hai!” Raavi says and cries again.

Raavi wipes her tears, looks at Dhara, and says, “Aur yeh sab aapki wajah se hua hai!

Rishita steps forward and says, “Nahi Raavi! Isme Bhabhi ki kya galti hai? Woh toh waha thi hi nahi! Woh khud uss aag mein fasi thi!

Inhe kahi bhi khud hone ki koi zaroorat nahi hai! Bas inka zikra kaafi hai inn teeno ka dimaag ghumaane ke liye!” Raavi rebukes fiercely, shocking everyone.

Uss din bazaar mein sabke saamne Shiva ne Maasi ke sar pe balti daal ke unhe suffocate karne ki koshish ki tab pata hai ghar aake inhone mujhse kya kaha?” Raavi asks Rishita and says, “Shiva aur Maami ka rishta bachpan se aisa hi hai!

Looking angrily at Dhara Raavi says, “Woh bachpan se aisa hai, bachpan se aisa hai kar kar ke har baar uski galatiyon pe inhone parda daal diya. Aur agar parda nahi daala toh usse peet diya! Ek baar bhi usse nahi samjhaaya ke woh galat hai aur woh galat kyun hai! Par fir bhi aaj tak Shiva itana kabhi nahi gira jeetna woh aaj gira hai!" She grabs Dhara by shoulders and asks, "Kya kar diya hai aapne Shiva ko? Naye saal ki uss chaasni waali chai mein kya ghol ke pila diya hai aapne usse?” and heartbroken, she falls down on the cot and cries her heart out.

Seeing Raavi falling apart in front of his eyes, Shiva suddenly looks around as if waking up from a dream! The reality hits him hard as he stumbles back and sits on a nearby step. His mind replays his actions and the way he had pushed Raavi and screamed at her. The fear on her face at the hospital comes in front of his eyes and suffocates him. He realizes what he had done and the monster he had become. He can’t think or comprehend anything as his mind goes completely blank once again.

For a long while, the only sound in the house is of Raavi’s sobs! Breaking the silence, Suman goes to Raavi and puts a hand on her head! Feeling the movement, Raavi gets up, wipes her tears, and goes to her room. Shiva sees her leave and goes after her even though he doesn’t know how he’ll face her.

Dhara tries to go after them, but Rishita stops her and says, “Meherbaani karke unhe unke haal pe chhod do aap! Waise hi barbaad ho chuke hai woh dono aapke wajah se! Ab aur taang matt adaao apni unke maamle mein please!” and storms out of there. Dhara cries and goes to her room followed by Gautam. Dev leaves the house while Krish goes to the bathroom unable to meet his mother’s eyes. Suman stays where she is contemplating what just happened to her family!

Raavi enters the room and stops in the middle of it. She sees all the decorations she had done to confess her love to Shiva and tears start flowing from her eyes. She remembers Shiva’s words from the night before …

"Chidh toh bachpan se hai Raavi! Aree kutte-billi ki tarah ladte the hum pan aaj yaha ek chhat ke niche khade hai! Kyu? Kyun ki tu mujhe pasand aane lagi thi!" … “Ek ek pal ek-dusre ke saath guzaarna itana mushkil tha! Par waqt ke saath saath dheere dheere aanewaale pal ka intezaar hota raha! Kyun? Kyun ki tu mujhe pasand aane lagi thi!" … "Aree itani pasand aane lagi thi ki mein tujhse kehna chahta tha mein tujhse pyaa ... teri bachkaani harkatein teri saadgi ki nishaani hai Raavi! Tu bohot acchi hai! Khud ko badal matt!"

Raavi’s heart breaks into million pieces as the events of the last few hours play in her mind vigorously. Her mind spirals out of control as she falls on the floor and cries. Shiva comes to the room and sees the decorations and the heart with “I Love You” written on it and becomes completely numb! Raavi feels his presence and gets up. She packs her bag and turns to leave but stops and takes down the decorations. She snatches the bedsheet and puts all the decorations in there and sets it on fire. Looking at Shiva, she rips up the I Love You card and throws the pieces in the fire, too.

Aaj mein tujhse apne saare naate todti hu! Aaj ke baad na tere aane ki khushi aur na hi tere jaane ka gham!” Raavi says with heartbreaking calmness and leaves Pandya Niwas without turning back.


Continued on Pg. 4

Edited by Mitsu91 - 3 years ago

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Mitsu loved it ❤️

Really you have portrayed audience’s opinions the right way through Raavi.

That’s so on point ki bhabhi ke naam se unke sarr ghum jaate hai and Shiva ki galti on par ek toh paani fera jaata hai kehe ki uska gussa aisa hi hai woh Bachpann se aisa hi hai ya toh usko peseta jaata hai.

But I know they will never do this Shiva’s redemption because they never do it if some one is wrong and opposite to it they will make the right person apologise because they have the dirty habit to sweep all the mistakes under the rug like dust .

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Thanks for writing this! Raavi’s outburst is perfect and I think it’s time for her to move on.

At the same time Dhara should be ashamed of her parvarish😕

Edited by mpks1 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
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Thank you so much for writing this ❤️

This is beautiful.i feel attached to raavi as a character and seeing her being manipulated by her maayka, disrespected in her sasural and repeatedly hurt by shiva breaks my heart 💔

I so wish she goes somewhere far away and spend some moments in peace and shiva realises what a gem he has lost.i Loved her outburst and taking a stand for herself here.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Hopefully writers do something like this. But given the bhabi maa not possible

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Never thought I would be oddly satisfied with Raavi leaving Pandya Niwas, but this is a beautifully written piece.

Extremely fair and just. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it ❤️

Loved it when she said "Nahi tha mera Shiva aisa" and I feel as an audience, that's how we all are feeling at the moment.

Edited by nolee3097 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
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awwww man!! my heart was all sad but my brain went GO RAAVI!


I love how you wrote her outburst! I wish there was some progression with Shiva's anger issues, we are stuck exactly where we were in august :(

Looking forward to the next part!

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Beautiful❣️❣️

That's what raavi should do.............

Last dialogue was a conter dialouge it took my heart...........

Shiva has hurted Raavi so much now he don't deserve her Raavi should leave him..............

Well written😍

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Posted: 3 years ago
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My heart is hurting.. This should happen but sadly this is bhabhi & bhakt show.. Nothing of this sort can come out in this show.. My heart is hurting so much for Raavi 💔

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Mitsu🤗! Love what you've done here. Raavi has always been that one character who knows right from wrong in her innocent childlike way. It's a different thing that sometime she adjusts and lets things go, but she's always known. And that's why she managed to shine like a gem through the third angle track, really.....

So, it makes sense that now that she realises that it's Dhara that makes the brothers go crazy, and I'm happy she's leaving that place. Also glad that Shiva finally realises what she meant by calling him junglee, gawaar, back from ak the way back on the day of their temple showdown. Not about his literacy or clothing, but the fact that he beat her friends up like animals without any strong reason, that he pushed her like that and could've hurt her too. Sad truth that it may be, comments like the one Raavi's friends passed about her happen everyday to women everywhere. If all of their fathers, brothers, boyfriends or husbands choose to beat them up, then where would India be?

As someone who used to have a very short temper, then learnt to manage it after unintentionally causing trouble for a once friend due to it, I have always hated that Shiva, after his wedding, never even tried to control his anger. I'll be following this story as well, then, and I hope Shiva gets a redemption worthy of the man he originally was post leap. ❤️

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