Jaan hazir, par vo...... (Updated part lV page 17) completed - Page 4

Originally posted by: Odette_delusion

"Jaan haazir ,par vo nahi"

Would be apt🤣

Thai topic suits the story bt i have a little suggestion nahi ko hata de... It creats some suspence in story...

Jaan hazir, Par woh.....

Its only my suggestion if you don't want to adopt it then its chill....

Originally posted by: aimmyangle

Thai topic suits the story bt i have a little suggestion nahi ko hata de... It creats some suspence in story...

Jaan hazir, Par woh.....

Its only my suggestion if you don't want to adopt it then its chill....

As i am not going to put it at end as Shiva being Rowdy and hitting the the man........

I have some changes and your suggestion of title will suit more...........

Hope so you will like it........

Originally posted by: Odette_delusion

would surely consider it but actually i am making changes in the story...............

As i am not going to put it at end as Shiva being Rowdy and hitting the the man........

I have some changes and your suggestion of title will suit more...........

Hope so you will like it........

Heheh i m loving it already... Actually thats y i was saying to u that keep it suspence k what shiva will do next... Its very predictable that he will hit him... Nothing new to audiance ... This is something new ... Update soon... Eagerly waiting 😍😍😍😍❤️❤️❤️

One more thing lols i m more excited about this 😂😂😂😂😂 you can also add full setence in last... Jaz hazir hai, per wo nahi... If it justify ur story

Originally posted by: aimmyangle

One more thing lols i m more excited about this 😂😂😂😂😂 you can also add full setence in last... Jaz hazir hai, per wo nahi... If it justify ur story

Will update soon hope so you will like it.............

I need a suggestion also ... I have an idea of story which is about some possessive story of college going shivi ... And also have an other old story of some other forum in which a theft falls for a widow ... Both story some how have same incident should i continue with only new one or edit old one also and post both of them ?

Originally posted by: aimmyangle

I need a suggestion also ... I have an idea of story which is about some possessive story of college going shivi ... And also have an other old story of some other forum in which a theft falls for a widow ... Both story some how have same incident should i continue with only new one or edit old one also and post both of them ?

Rest is upto you as i know you will make a nice story............

Go with your instincts😘🥰

Originally posted by: Odette_delusion

according to me you should edit both seperately and than post but if they are really very much connecting only than combine them.......

Rest is upto you as i know you will make a nice story............

Go with your instincts😘🥰

Ok i will try ... Same ase l ek 2 pahses ek jesay hn bt mn larti hn try un dono ko seprate kar k post karti hn .. thanks for the suggestion... ,😇😇😇😇

Originally posted by: aimmyangle

I need a suggestion also ... I have an idea of story which is about some possessive story of college going shivi ... And also have an other old story of some other forum in which a theft falls for a widow ... Both story some how have same incident should i continue with only new one or edit old one also and post both of them ?

I guess both separately!

Originally posted by: aimmyangle

I need a suggestion also ... I have an idea of story which is about some possessive story of college going shivi ... And also have an other old story of some other forum in which a theft falls for a widow ... Both story some how have same incident should i continue with only new one or edit old one also and post both of them ?

rest it's upto you dear😊