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Hola All,


Yes am on break, but Justhad this thought brimming

We are going to have some Awesomatic track on Akshara andAbhi love acceptance…

And I hope its played out the way I am imagining

Abhi will know that Arohi has been lying all along and thatAkshara is his true mate

But Madam Akshara has been giving him heart aches and pains…rejecting and disrespecting his love in front of all… and here we have our growling Lion

Arohi: [In her anger, corners Akshara.. after a major showdown with Birla’s on her lie and lets her tongue loose on Akshara…] Akshara, you did this purposely to demean me amongst the Birla’s so you can get your Hero… I didn’t know you were taking up my challenge of stealing My ABHI for yourself. I didn’t know you would back stab me like this.

Akshara: AAru Chup ho jaa.. Please.. Just stop [She looks at the other side and notices Birla’s and Goenka’s walking towards them] but the continuous rant and fire spitting of Arohi is not letting her notice this and she Goes on].

Arohi: You would go against all of us, against my love justto get your happiness… you would seek your happiness of getting Abhi’s love at my cost. I knew you would do this… you always said you will never acknowledge your love for Abhi, for my happiness, you will never let him knowhow much you love him, that it was you all along who has been saving him… be it the court, be it temple or be it fire… but it was all a sham…

Arohi: you were just plotting against me…. I curse you Akshara… You will never be happy… Abhi will never accept your love… he will never believe that you love him, even if you say so now…. He will never ever Love you… you will never be happy, U stole my mother away, you could never see me happy, why have you come back,… you were better away from all of us, we do not need you… just listen to me and go away, like the last time u did, no one, absolutely no one needs you here… Get lost Akshara Goenka,… why didn’t you die in that fire when you saved Abhi… you shud have died… then I could have thought of having a peaceful life… only when you go away will I ever be happy and I order you to go away.

Suddenly there is silence: Arohi notices Akshara is quiet and looking at something Beyond. She turns around and notices the Clan, each face is angrier than the other… dejection on everyone’s face… and then there is a storm brewing between the two souls that have been separated by the cunningness of the third. Their eyes spell dejection, sorrow over the time lost, the pain of distrust, the angst tat each went through

Suddenly there is a Sharp Noise. They turn around and see Badi Maa slapping Arohi.. and Bade papa on with his Rant

Manish: Jaanta tha main… kitni bhi achchi parvarish dedo…Ganda Khoon hamesha Ganda hi rahega,… achchai kuch nai kar payengi. Gandi naalika khoon milaya aur usne saare ghar ka vatavaran Ganda Kar diya… Humari beti kohumse door Rakha… Aakhir Apni Nani ka rang hai… dikhayegi hi… Humari achchai iss Gandagi ko nai Dho payee. Bade sharm ki baat hai… CHiii!!!

( I knew it, What ever be the upbringing, a dirty bloodline will always make everything Dirty, the atmosphere, the relationships … everything…like she did… kept our child away… from us…After all,, she has her maternal Grandmother’s blood… it will show.. that was so dirty even the good bloodline of Goenkas could not help…Chi… This is disgusting

Arohi… Bade Papa

Akshara: Bade Papa

Manish: Ekdam Chup… Akshara.. stop protecting her stop defending her… she is not deserving of our love and care… she is one shameless and thankless being…and I am sorry that you had to go to such pain my child

Arohi: Bade papa… Badi Maa..

Manish: Just shut up… [Manish and all turn around and walk away, Arohi doing bade papa and Badi maa running behind them. Kairav and Vansh are also like… we are really ashamed of you Arohi.. they turn around and walk away… Birla’s seeing the truth out understand Abhi and Akshara needs space and time to talk, turn around and walk away.]

We have the two souls shedding tears of relief but pain over lost times.

Akshara falls on her knees ,helpless and crying… Abhi sees her and comes and takes her in the arms..consoling her [Imaging him running to her like he did during her panic attack]

Abhimanyu: Akshara, kya itna aasaan tha tumhare liye mujhe apne se door karna,kya mera koi vajood nai tha, tumhare ghar walon ke saamne, main kuch bhi nai tha… tumhare liye itna assaan tha mujhe apni behen ko saup hena…kissi aur ka hote hue dekhna

Akshara: Abhimanyu, main majboor thi (in tears).. holding his face and pleading for his understanding

Abhimanyu.. (holding her face… cleaning the tears) …Maj…Majboor… seriously, majboor… kya majboori thi.. batao mujhe, samjhao mujhe… I wantto understand… aisa kyat ha.. jo tumne mujhe apni life mein zaroori nai samjha…Batao mujhe kaise hua tumse..

Akshara: Abhimanyu…..(in tears)

Abhimanyu: Arre.. pyaar ka izhaar nai kiya Samajh sakta hoon, but apni behen jaisi fitrat wali ladki ko mujhe saup diya… bas itni hifikr this meri… Tum jaanti thi tumhari behen har kadam mujhse jhoot bol rahi thi,but tumhe nai laga ke Ek baar mujhe sach bata do… meri shaadi hone wali thi…tum yeh jaanti thi ke main majboori mein use shaadi kar raha tha… kyonki agar tum nai to phir koi bhi… lekin phir bhi tumne mujhe nai bataya… Jhonk diya mujhe Uss aag mein…

Akshara: Abhimanyu [in tears].. please mujhe samajhne ki koshish karo [Try and understand me]

He pushes Akshara away and stands up… turns his back to akshara, kicks the door in frustration and growls and then begins again

Abhimanyu: arre yeh to meri kismet achchi thi ke main bach gaya..warna tum dono behno ne to mera aur meri family ka game bajane ka pura plan kiya hua tha…. Nai Akshara, yeh tumne Sahi nai kiya. Aur main tumhe iske liye kabhi maaf nahin karunga.. Kabhi nai

Akshara: [Noticing abhi is about to go, rushes to him and holds his hand, turning him to her, she tries holding his face again, but Abhi is not giving any inch… however, the softie he is.. continues to wipe her tears].. Abhi please… Main bahut majboor thi… maine yeh sab sirf isliye kiya taki dono pariwaar mein Sulah ho jaye… yeh narazgi khatam ho jaye


Abhimanyu: Seriously, narazgi… Narazgi khatam ho jaye.. aur tumhe ky alagta hai Akshara Goenka… Ke ab narazki khatam ho gayee???… Nahin… ab narazgi ke saath saath Sharmindagi bhi jud gayee hai.


Main sharminda hoon ke maine aisi ladki se pyaar kiya.. joitni selfish haio, ke khud ko achcha banaye rakhne ke liye usne yeh nai sochaki who kitni zindgiyon ke saath khel rahi hai.......

Mera parivaar isliye Sharminda hai ki unhone ek aise ladki pe bharosa kiya, bahu banana chaha,, jo upar se neeche tak jhoot mein lipti hai…tumhara parivaar isliye sharminda hai, kyonki unke parivaar ki do betiyo ne jhoot kaha aur unki parvarish daagdaar kar di Aur tum Akshara, tum sharminda ho.. kyonki.. tum Mahaan nai ban saki… koi tumhe shabashi nai de raha…


Kabhi Socha hai… agar tumne pehle hi sach keh diya hota,,,pehle hi ikraar kar diya hota,.. to aaj yeh naubat nai aati… itne parivaaron ko itne Gharon ko sharminda nai hona padta…


Kabhi socha hai… Nai tum kaise sochogi… tum apni uss jhooti behen se upar uthogi tab to kuch sochogi.

Nahin Akshara Goenka,,, yeh tumne Achcha nai Kiya. And main tumhe kabhi iske liye maaf nai Karunga.


Congratulations Akshara Goenka, Aaj tumne mujhe sach mein khud se door kar hi liya.. Congratulations on your success… ab tum mere bagair move on ho sakti ho… main kabhi bhi tumharein peeche nahin aaunga

Congratulations!!!!

Akshara: [Abhi pls ruk jao… pls mujhe samjhane ka mauka do]

Abhimanyu: its Dr. Abhimanyu Birla for you, Ms Goenka

[To Be continued]....

So a short story on ur way...


tell me if you like this and want me to continue... will will make Akshu atone for so much pain that Abhi had to go because of her

[One more thing i started with english, but felt hindi had real punch lines so went ahead in that.. let me know what would u prefer.. is Hindi Ok or you want english version

awaiting your responses... then we will have the NOk Jhok of Akshara doing the work of Manaoing Abhi... :)

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Posted: 4 years ago
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kaash bade papa aisa boleganda khoon nd all

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Originally posted by: Khushi_Albeli

kaash bade papa aisa boleganda khoon nd all


Manish also has no filter when angry

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: mtina0207

Hola All,


Yes am on break, but Justhad this thought brimming

We are going to have some Awesomatic track on Akshara andAbhi love acceptance…

And I hope its played out the way I am imagining

Abhi will know that Arohi has been lying all along and thatAkshara is his true mate

But Madam Akshara has been giving him heart aches and pains…rejecting and disrespecting his love in front of all… and here we have ourgrowling Lion

Arohi: [In her anger, corners Akshara.. after a major showdown with Birla’son her lie and lets her tongue loose on Akshara…] Akshara, youdid this purposely to demean me amongst the Birla’s so you can get your Hero… Ididn’t know you were taking up my challenge of stealing My ABHI for yourself. Ididn’t know you would back stab me like this.

Akshara: AAru Chup ho jaa.. Please.. Just stop [She looks at theother side and notices Birla’s and Goenka’s walking towards them] but thecontinuous rant and fire spitting of Arohi is not letting her notice this andshe Goes on].

Arohi: You would go against all of us, against my love justto get your happiness… you would seek your happiness of getting Abhi’s love atthe cost of me. I knew you would do this… you always said you will neveracknowledge your love for Abhi, for my happiness, you will never let him knowhow much you love him, that it was you all along who has been saving him… be itcourt, be it temple or be it fire… but it was all a sham…

Arohi: you were just plotting against me…. I curse youAkshara… You will never be happy… ABhi will never accept your love… he willnever believe that you love him, even if you say so now…. He will never everLove you… you will never be happy, U stole my mother away, you could never seeme happy, why have you come back,… you were better away from all of us, we donot need you… just listen to me and go away, like the last time u did, no one,absolutely no one needs you here… Get lost Akshara Goenka,… why didn’t you diein that fire when you saved Abhi… you shud have died… then I could have thoughtof having a peaceful life… only when you go away will I ever be happy and I orderyou to go away.

Suddenly there is silence: Arohi notices Akshara is quiet andlooking at something Beyond. She turns around and notices the Clan, each face isangrier than the other… dejection on everyone’s face… and then there is a stormbrewing between the two souls that have been separated by the cunningness of thethird. Their eyes spell dejection, sorrow over the time lost, the painof distrust, the angst tat each went through

Suddenly there is a Sharp Noise. They turn around and see Badi Maaslapping Arohi.. and Bade papa on with his Rant

Manish: Jaanta tha main… kitni bhi achchi parvarish dedo…Ganda Khoon hamesha Ganda hi rahega,… achchai kuch nai kar payengi. Gandi naalika khoon milaya aur usne saare ghar ka vatavaran Ganda Kar diya… Humari beti kohumse door Rakha… Aakhir Apni Nani ka rang hai… dikhayegi hi… Humari achchaiiss Gandagi ko nai Dho payee. Bade sharm ki baat hai… CHiii!!!

( I knew it, What ever be the upbringing, a dirty bloodline will always make everythingDirty, the atmosphere, the relationships … everything…like she did… kept ourchild away… from us…Afterall,, she has her maternal Grandmother’s blood… itwill show.. that was so dirty even the good bloodline of Goenkas could not help…Chi… This is disgusting

Arohi… Bade Papa

Akshara: Bade Papa

Manish: Ekdam Chup… Akshara.. stop protecting her… she isnot deserving of our love and care… she is one shameless and thankless being…and I am sorry that you had to go to such pain my child

Arohi: Bade papa… Badi Maa..

Manish: Just shut up… [Manish and all turn aroundand walk away, Arohi doing bade papa and Badi maa running behind them. Kairavand Vansh are also like… we are really ashamed of you Arohi.. they turn aroundand walk away… Birla’s seeing the truth out understand Abhi and Akshara needsspace and time to talk, turn around and walk away.]

We have the two souls shedding tearsof relief but pain over lost times.

Akshara falls on her knees,helpless and crying… Abhi sees her and comes and takes her in the arms..consoling her [Imaging him running to her like he did during her panic attack]

Abhimanyu: Akshara, kya itna aasaan tha tumhare liye mujhe apnese door karna,kya mera koi vajood nai tha, tumhare ghar walon ke saamne, mainkuch bhi nai tha… tumhare liye itna assaan tha mujhe apni behen ko saup hena…kissi aur ka hote hue dekhna

Akshara: Abhimanyu, main majboor thi (in tears).. holdinghis face and pleading for his understanding

Abhimanyu.. (holding her face… cleaning the tears) …Maj…Majboor… seriously, majboor… kya majboori thi.. batao mujhe, samjhao mujhe… I wantto understand… aisa kyat ha.. jo tumne mujhe apni life mein zaroori nai samjha…Batao mujhe kaise hua tumse..

Akshara: ABhimanyu…..(in tears)

Abhimanyu: Arre.. pyaar ka izhaar nai kiya Samajh saktahoon, but apni behen jaisi fitrat wali ladki ko mujhe saup diya… bas itni hifikr this meri… Tum jaanti thi tumhari behen har kadam mujhse jhoot bol rahi thi,but tumhe nail aga ke Ek baar mujhe sach bata do… meri shaadi hone wali thi…tum yeh jaanti thi ke main majboori mein use shaadi kar raha tha… kyonki agartum nai to phir koi bhi… lekin phir bhi tumne mujhe nai bataya… Jhonkne diyamujhe Uss aag mein…

Akshara: Abhimanyu [in tears].. please mujhe samajhne kikoshish karo

He pushes Akshara away and stands up… turns his back to akshara,kicks the door in frustration and growls and then begins again

Abhimanyu: arre yeh to meri kismet achchi thi ke main bachgaya..warna tum dono behno ne to mera aur meri family ka game bajane ka puraplan kiya hua tha…. Nai Akshara, yeh tumne Sachi nai kiya. Aur main tumhe iske liyekabhi maaf nahin karunga.. Kabhi nai

Akshara: [Noticing abhi is about to go, rushes to him and holds his handturning him to her, she tries holding his face again, but Abhi is not givingany inch… however, the softie he is.. continues to wipe her tears].. Abhiplease… Main bahut majboor thi… maine yeh sab sirf isliye kiya taki donopariwaar mein Sulah ho jaye… yeh narazgi khatam ho jaye

Abhimanyu: [Seriously, narazgi… Narazgi khatam ho jaye.. aurtumhe ky alagta hai Akshara Goenka… Kya narazki khatam ho gayee… Nahin… abnarazgi ke saath saath Sharmindagi bhi jud gayee hai.

Main sharminda hoon ke maine aisi ladki se pyaar kiya.. joitni selfish haio, ke khud ko achcha banaye rakhne ke liye usne yeh nai sochaki who kitni zindgiyon ke saath khel rahi hai

Mera parivaar isliye Sharminda hai ki unhone ek aise ladkipe bharosa kiya, bahu banana chaha,, jo upar se neeche tak jhoot mein lipti hai…tumhara parivaar isliye sharminda hai, kyonki unke parivaar ki do betiyo nekhoot kaha aur unki parvarish daagdaar kar di Aur tum Akshara, tum sharmindahoo.. kyonki.. tum Mahaan nai ban saki… koi tumhe shabasi nai de raha…

Kabhi Socha hai… agar tumne pele hi sach keh diya hota,,,pehle hi ikraar kar diya hota,.. to aaj yeh naubat nai aati… itne parivaaron koitne Gharon ko sharminda nai hona padta…

Kabhi socha hai… Nai tum kaise sochogi… tum apni uss jhootibehen se upar uthogi tab to kuch sochogi.

Nahin Akshara Goenka,,, yeh tumne Achcha nai Kiya. And maintumhe kabhi iske liye maaf nai Karunga

Congratulations Akshara Goenka, Aaj tumne mujhe sach meinkhud se door kar hi liya.. Congratulations on your success… ab tum mere bagairmove on ho sakti ho… main kabhi bhi tumharein peeche nahin aaunga

Congratulations

Akshara: [Abhi pls ruk jao… pls mujhe samjhane ka mauka do]

Abhimanyu: its Dr. Abhimanyu Birla for you, Ms Goenka

[To Be continued]....

So a short story on ur way...


tell me if you like this and want me to continue... will will make Akshu atone for so much pain that Abhi had to go because of her

[One more thing i started with english, but felt hindi had real punch lines so went ahead in that.. let me know what would u prefer.. is Hindi Ok or you want english version

awaiting your responses

❤️

Heart touching revealation. Hope cvs read this and implement it.
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Posted: 4 years ago
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What is this horrible reference to gandha khoon. Guys, come on! We are better than this!

I am sorry to say but I couldn't read further after that.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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This is so amazing. Please continue.♥️

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Originally posted by: Ekahriz

What is this horrible reference to gandha khoon. Guys, come on! We are better than this!

I am sorry to say but I couldn't read further after that.


Thank you.. and no problem at all... you have a right to your views... its a fiction and as we know... Manish has no filter... i felt it is right ... however, i respect your opinion

god bless :)

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Posted: 4 years ago
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I really like the story.. please continue.

This conversation has to happen between Akshara and Abhimanyu.

The way he has valued Akshara and the way she has treated him is quite demeaning.

He has to make her repent and a redemption track is needed.

She keeps helping him then insulting his whole being is quite stressful.

Your storyline catches that point its nice.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Lovely!! Well akshara does deserve those dialogies from abhi! It was very intense! Please continue ❤️sooonish

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Nice one… please do continue. I want to watch Abhi tadapofy Akshu

Thanks for tagging me.

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