Originally posted by: IFLove
Hi mandy🤗 Ur dp is but I loved Ur adiya DPs more😆 I found this pic in gallery in BP forum. Went there after a long time and found it cute 😆 Don't worry it will change soon 😉 Beyhadh 2 is coming, so u know what to expect to see in my DP 🤣
Btw, I m traveling so it took me long to complete Ur story n comment on it due to poor connectivity...but finally I m done reading it thoroughly😊 Travelling? Vacation? Enjoy 😃
I hope I can be honest in my comments? Of course u can and I do understand everyone has their view points and I can respect it regardless of whether I agree to it or not.
I m not really a fan of those stories where fathers or mothers r so much into their grief that they can't see the pain of their children. It really makes them self centered and parents can't be self centered. So I couldn't fathom someone like adi in ur story could do that🙈 Maybe there's more to the backstory that turned him into this shelled man? See every person is not the same and they deal with grief differently than what we expect one to in an ideal scenario. I don't believe in characters that are perfect or ideal and u will never see that in my stories coz I personally cannot relate to them. But let me be honest here as well - if i wear the reader's hat like every reader I expect happy endings too 😆 but thats not to say I do not enjoy a story that has been penned beautifully with a tragic end coz tragic stories have their own beauty and it's more difficult to write on them coz the characters are complex and they have layers. They are not one dimensional and as a writer it allows you to explore them. About parents for a long time I had a view that they are perfect and selfless and maybe akin to God but why don't we like seeing them make mistakes or why can't we accept they are humans too? That's how our minds are tuned to think. I am blessed to have a wonderful mother who has been very supportive and she filled the gap of a father too who abandoned us when I was very little. Infact she raised us so well I never felt like I missed a father in life. But there was this friend of mine who was dealing with a troubled childhood and her parents, far from being understanding and supportive neglected her. I had a hard time believing her when she spoke of her mom coz I felt all mothers are nice and they all are supportive. But later on I realised what she was going through. Not saying her mom was bad person but she failed as a mother to see what her child was suffering through. Adi at the end of the day is a human. He has been through a lot in life and its easy to say situations always bring out the best in you because the optimistic you within a person wants that. Adi was broken from within and you can put the pieces of broken glass together but the cracks will always show. Zoya had healed him to some extent but if u observe closely even when he was with her the cracks did show in the form of his anticipation for the future. If this were a TV show I would probably show Adi to be jumping around cheerfully but that is not my Adi. He is a more subdued character here with a past. And never have I justified his actions in any way I think 😆 Even Arjun reprimands him for his negligence towards his daughter though he understands y his brother has become what he is today and Adi himself admits that he was wrong.
Though I liked the fact that he accepted his mistakes and made conscious efforts to make amends. I loved every scene between adi n Aliya. I imagined the baby girl playing pari in silsila as Aliya. And when I visualised those scenes with that girl n harshad, I was only in awww😍 mode. I teared up a bit when adi stepped in her room for the first time and checked out her doll house. I loved their day out, it was so cute! I was waiting to know what she knows about her mumma, loved how she confronted him about dhaaga in the dargah. I hope u r going to write further chapters wherein we can see more strengthened n natural bond between the father daughter. And I also wished he would take her along on the flight when he traveled to see roshnaq...why didn't you do that?😭 I love that kid who played Pari in Silsila but have u seen Haq Se? This girl first made an appearance there even before she acted in Baaghi 2 and when I started writing this story she wasn't in Silsila yet and I imagined Haq Se's character here and there also her name was Aliya. So now u get y I chose that name? 😊 It was the same kid. Adi is taking baby steps towards his child but he cannot become a cuddly dad all daughters want their fathers to be in this circumstance. Time has created a rift between father daughter and only time will bridge it. I deliberately made Adi go alone because going back to Zoya's house after all that time meant opening a floodgate of memories and he needed to deal with it alone and also I wanted him and Roshnaq to have a heart to heart conversation which could have happened only because he was alone. He might not have expressed his emotions if anyone else had accompanied him. That being said, don't worry. He will take Aliya to Dehradun 😉
I loved his scene with roshnaq too, that bond is deep n precious since the show time! I always liked Roshnaq, such a sensible character.
I loved Noor's characterisation in Ur story. She was that chirpy girl but yet she was mature n sensible. She has brought up Aliya to be this sensible baby girl, it means a lot. I loved Arjun when he made adi see sense. I again teared up when adi chupkese ate her bday cake. As a story writer if there is one thing I am proud of where it concerns this story, it is the portrayal of Arjun and Noor. Most of my readers felt it is better than the show and to be honest, I feel that too 😆
About adi Zoya, all their scenes were beautiful. I specially liked that proposal part u had shared with us the other day, saree draping part n their night before wedding chat where he assured that she'll always be Adi's Zo before Mrs Hooda... wonderfully written Mandy!! Btw when he proposed her for the first time in the dargah, did they kiss in dargah itself?😂 Dargah mein nahi re Haye Ram! They were walking back home and they walked quite a distance. So its safe to say they did not violate any rules there 🤣
About the story telling part, a part of me loved this idea of past n present together because it held the suspense. But a part of me didn't like it because it was too confusing to understand the timelines... specially because I read all the 7 parts together 🙈 anyways, I still understood the whole story I guess😂 I loved how u have equal screen space (if I can call that for a written story?) to all the characters. They had their own story as well as were revolving around the leads. I love such side characters! I know it could be confusing given this is in writing and not a show where we have different actors portraying the different versions of the character in their childhood, teenage phase etc. But I personally enjoyed writing it as it allowed to peel off the layers from characters and show their transformation. I could have written it from starting to end but that's no fun if u ask me. One dimensional story telling doesn't appeal much to me. For me Adi is a central character in the story and not necessarily a hero. In my story I don't follow the pattern of hero and heroine. They are characters around whom the story revolves. So I like exploring all characters because they all of them together take the story forward and they are not mere props. So even in my Ronakshi story u will see how every character has a story of their own,
And now for the last time, where's Zooooo????😂 Her depressed state n Yash's involvement in it doesn't give me good feels😂 u see, Yash never gives a good feeling 😂 so write that down fast, maybe in just 1 long chapter and complete that SS...don't leave it dangling for those who want to know the truth completely!! Yash is not a bad person here 😆 Zoya was dealing with a lot back then and there is a dedicated chapter just for her.
I had a good time reading the story Mandy, thanks for recommendations!🤗 But I am sorry Anu. I should have realised that you may not like it much since not all readers like bitter sweet stories. I should not have recommended it to anyone here and I am feeling bad for having wasted your time and worse pushed you to read it. U know about fanfictions thing is readers always have a set expectation in mind. Long ago when I first started writing fanfictions one of my stories had a dark background and the backdrop was mafia. Back then since readers had accepted me whole heartedly I mainly wanted to write to make them happy. My story had a lot of characters and each had a story of their own. But to make the readers happy I focused more on the lead couple and made their story so romantic that in the end I lost connect with my story and I was like what the hell have I done? Readers on the other hand enjoyed it but as a writer I had failed because in a bid to keep them happy I had ruined the very essence of my story and I vowed I would never do that again or never write. So I stopped writing fanfictions for a long while. Then I got back with AdiYa but this time I decided to stick to my instincts and not cater to what audience expects. I did not develop an idea keeping the readers in mind. As a writer I got an idea for a father daughter bonding and I went along with it and I have tried to stay true to the characters I came up with. And please do not think I am trying to convince u otherwise and I respect ur opinion and u know that too! I only explained my thought process behind that story.
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