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Posted: 6 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: srain10

When is next update?

aaj koshis krungi agr net aur current ne sath diya to aaj hi mil jayega😊

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Posted: 6 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: Kammy02

ye aapko chota laga😳glad u liked it😳

Jindal sahab se ye jaroor ho payega

will continue soon

lamba update dene ki koshis krungi😆

to kya hum aaj ki umeed lga skte hain??😃
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Posted: 6 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: Viditian1

to kya hum aaj ki umeed lga skte hain??😃

Ha Aj raat tak mil jayega update😛

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Kammy02

Ha Aj raat tak mil jayega update😛

hume intezaar rhega😃
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Part-4

Next Morning

Tanya was going out

Meeta - Beta tanu kha jaa rhi hai tere papa tujhse kuch baat krna chahte hai she took her with him.

Tanya- what happened dad y u stop......she noticed Aj is also standing there by his father's side she went to him - aap yha mri complain krne aye ho papa se tumhara kuch nuksan nhi kiya aur na hi tumhari koi chiz mre pass hai waise dekh kr to tum nhi lagte pr tum yha pr mre papa se paise wasool krne aa gye

Akshat mindtalk-tumhare pass mri ek kimti chiz hai guddan aur vo hai mra dil jo ab sirf tumhare liye dhadkta hai.aur usi ko to lene main yha aya hu.

Abhay- sant princess shant ye mra bachpan ka dost hai and mra business partner v aur ye yha pr mre kehne pr aye hai.

Tanya was embarrassed for her behavior she start chewing her nail

AJ chuckles – don't need to be sorry maaf kiya tumhe

Tanya was shocked – aapko kaise pta ki ham...

AJ- tum apna nails chew kr rhi thi..

Tanya thought a while then shrugged it off

Aj(in mind)- Yadasht bhale hi chali gyi ho par harkate nhi badli tum u start chewing ur nails when u r nervous for saying sorry or u r about to tell a lie..

Abhay- Tanya beta tum indore jana chahti thi na ye indore mein hi rhne wale hai and as u wanted to learn about business he will help u

Tanya- ye indore ke rhne wale hai aapne q nhi bataya okk ham challenge bt inse keh dena ki hame lecture na de as I m not a fan of lectures u know that

Abhay- ya we know and plz plz apna temperature control mein rakhna warna Jindal bhawan mein aag lag jayegi to which everyone chuckles he gets silent when Tanya glared at him.

Abhay- sorry baba now go and pack ur stuff or u will get late kal ki flight hai tumhari.

Tanya leaves the room .

Abhay- lo AJ tumhari AAdhi help to hamne krdi baki ab tumhare upar hai and ha unlike ur Guddan Tanya is having a habbit of getting drunk and breaking every rules and getting stuck in any conflict so take care

Suddenly Guddan's rash driving a day before images flashes on his mind- yup maine uska namuna dekh liya hai mushkil hai pr use pane ke liye main koi v raasta nhi chodna chahta.

Abhay and meeta patted his shoulder and left AJ then calls at his home and informed everyone about the matter and instructed them to make necessary changes. It is not the right time to tell guddan the truth or it can be harmful for her health and he don't want to take any risk right now.

Whole day Tanya was busy in her shopping, partying and enjoying the sites with her friends while Aj was collecting her medical report about her diet and her changed habbit .

At 7'o' clock Meeta was sitting in the hall and Aj was working on his laptop suddenly meeta gets a call.

Meeta- what ?? fir se ok main krti hu kuch...

AJ- what happened meeta everything is fine??

Meeta – police station se phone tha Tanya I mean apki guddan ko police ne arrest kr liya hai and everyone is busy in the meeting samjh mein nhi aa rha qa kru main hamara lawyer v out of station hai and itni der ko koi aur lawyer kaise arrange kru main.

Aj- guddan ko police ne q arrest kiya u don't worry I will take care main apne lawyer se baat krunga aur Guddan shi salamat ghar aa jayegi. He left the house.

Meeta-hey bhagwan help krna AJ ki Tanya ko sambhalne mein

At police station

Aj entered in the police station and just escaped from a heart attack after what he is seeing Police station is no more a police station papers was scattered every furninture is broken some constable are sitting on the ground as they r very tired and their condition is mess all the criminals in jail are laughing he was so lost in observing the condition he almost forgot why and where he is standing. His trance broked when he heard some people shouting Tanya name.

Aj-gu..guddan kha hai main yha pr use lane aya tha he turned around and he once again become flabbergasted guddan is sitting on the top of an cupboard with a wine bottle empty wine bottle her friend and some of policemen asking her to come down bt she is stubborn and lost her balance and fell. .

Tanya has her eyes closed- arey ham gir v gye aur hame chot bhi nhi aya wah!

Her friend- areey pehle ankh to khol ke dekh le kha giri hai.

Tanya opened her eyes and get shocked as she was in AJ's arm-aap and with that she faints he made her sit on the nearest bench and goes to policemen.

Policemen- aap Tanya ji ko lene aye hai na jaldi lekr jayiye inhe yha se bail ki koi jaroorat nhin hai aap bas yha se le jayiye inhe roz thora bahut nuksan krti hai aaj to poora police station hi barbaad kr diya.

Aj- pr hua qa hai??

p- aap ye sb inke doston se hi jaan lena ham mein ab kuch bolne ki himmat v nhi hai.

Aj took her in the car and went to her friends he had prepared himself for hearing the entire story.

Aj- police gud I mean Tanya ko q le gyi thi?? Aur ye police station ki ye halat kaise hui.

F1- waise aap use hamare samne guddan boola skte hai we know the truth uncle aunty ne hame bata diya hai aur rha police station ka sawal to aap jyada tension lene ki jaroorat nhi hai ye iska roz ka kaam hai din mein ek baar yha jaroor aa jati hai aur apko pta hai isme upar rash driving, drink and drive ,ye bolo murder ke alawa kon sa case nhi hai ispr.

F2- aur aaj pta hai qa hua isne aaj ek aadmi ki car tod dali uska thapadon se swagat kiya vo to ain moment pr police aakr baccha liya. Accha ab ham chalte hai ..

And they leave from there Aj sit on the car and gulped her saliva by lookin at Guddan he will have a hard time in controlling her with that he drove to singhania's house he made her sleep on her room he look at her innocent face a smile of satisfaction was adoring his lip he kissed her forhead and went to his room and lay himself on bed he drifted into slumber by thinking about Tanya's changed behavior.

Next morning

Aj woke up he had a peaceful sleep after a long time and today his guddan will be going back to indore with him. Aftersometime Tanya too came with her luggage they bid their bye to everyone and they sat in the car Tanya was upset as she will miss her family and her friends her head was paining a lot Akshat gave her a pain killer and she slept in the car itself as it was 4 hrs journey to the airport. AKshat called at his home and informed them that he will not take guddan at Jindal bhawan and ask them not to inform about it to Gupta family they were upset as they was desperate to meet guddan bt akshat assured them that he will be with guddan and will take her home at the right time.

Akshat (mindtalk)- main av guddan ko ghar nhi le ja skta q ki ise apne purani jindagi ke bare mein kuch yaad nhi hai aur iske behavior dekh kr gharwalon ko shayad accha na lage and jo Guddan ko waha jante hai unke wajah se guddan ko problem v ho skti hai isliye better yhi hoga ki guddan mere sath dusre ghar mein rhe jb tk sb thik nhi ho jata.. They went to airport akshat manged to wake her up they boarded the flight and after long hour they reached to indore airport they sit on the car they reached outside the house.

Tanya urf Guddan was lost by seeing the house it was not a house it was beautiful house like a palace .

Aj smiles seeing her lost she was looking cute he wanted to pull her cheek at that moment he purchased this house for her two year ago he wanted to surprise her but instead he got biggest shock in his life he shrugged his thoughts – ab yha pr ghurti rahogi ya andar chalogi ye ghar tumhara hi hai I mean apna hi samjho.

Tanya- Are baap re Aj ye ghar apka hai ye to bahut sundar aur bara hai kamse kam 2 ya 3 singhania house arram se aa jayenge isme hai na.

Aj chuckles ab sari raat ghar ko hi dekhogi ok main kuch bana deta hu tb tk tum ghar dekhlo

Tanya- mjhe v help krna hai chalo chalo kitchen chalo

Aj- tumhe ata hai khana banana tumse ho payega

Tanya- oh hello aisa koi kaam nhi hai jo guddan se na ho payega. Guddan she just uttered the word guddan Aj looked at her maine av av qa bola aur q bola aur ye guddan kaun hai.

Aj- chalo tumhe kitchen chalna tha na chalo fir they went to kitchen Aj wore his costume while Tanya was struggling Aj help her and Tanya thanks him. Aj was skillfully making the dish and Tanya was absorving her carefully Aj got a call he ask Tanya not to touch anything he exit Tanya remembers how Aj was tossing she does the same Aj enters till then all the dishes fell upon her and she started crying.

AJ went to her- ye qa kr rhi thi tum mana kiya than a hath mat lagana.

Tanya started crying more loudly – av aap v to same kr rhe the hame bhaut accha laga isliye hamne v wahi kiya pr ye sb hamare upar hi gir gya.

Aj wipe her tears- stop crying now go and freshen up yha pr sb main sambhal lunga Tanya ran from there.

Aftersometime AJ prepared dinner he shouted his name bt she didn't came he went to her room he was memerized as guddan was wearing shorts and an off shoulder top and was dancing like a kid he just wanted to pull her and kiss her senseless bt he controlled himself – Tanya chalo niche khana taiyar ho gya hai he stopped the music system when she doesn't listen him.

Tanya- ye qa kiya aapne Aj wapis on kro warna.

Aj started taking his steps towards her- warna qa her back hitted the wall

T- dekho Aj pass mat aaon warna

Aj- wahi to warna qa they were so close that they can feel each other breath AJ took her in his arms and went to the dinning table ab khana kha lo kab se bol rha tha pr sunai nhi de rha tha tumhe isliye band kiya music.

Tanya still didn't overcame with the proximity they shared she was lost in his eyes she felt something which she cant understand Aj realized her dilemma so he didn't utter anything they had their dinner peacefully after that they went to their respective room.

They lay on their bed but their thought was occupied by each other Tanya was remembering Aj's concern for her his images were flashing in his mind she thought it as a mere attraction and went to slumber shrugging all her thoughts.

Next morning

Guddan came out of her room her mouth remain wide open when she saw AJ shirtless in the swimming pool AJ realizes her gaze on him and he succeeded in seducing her Tanya move towards him she didn't understand when she fell in the pool as she was so engrossed in drooling at him Aj cought her by her waist his hand on her bare back send shiver in her body both were so close soon Aj's nose caressed her cheeck Aj closed the distance between them and capture her lips he took her in his arm and kissed her intensely Tanya was lost she didn't understand what is happening bt one thing she knew that she was loving his touch and the way he is kissing her.

Aftersometime Aj parted in need of oxygen They both realized what happened they literally shared a kiss. They didn't know what to do

They were embaressed and ran from there at the same time without looking at each other.....

Sorry guys for late update as I had my exams. Here is the second last part I know it was boring as always plz bear it and ignore the mistakes and do share ur views

Part-5 pg-9


Edited by Kammy02 - 6 years ago


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Posted: 6 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: Viditian1

hume intezaar rhega😃

next part updated do check😳

Aur maine puri koshis ki hai lamba likhne ki😆

Edited by Kammy02 - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#47

Originally posted by: Kammy02

next part updated do check😳

Aur maine puri koshis ki hai lamba likhne ki😆

arey yrrrr😳it was superrrrr se bahut abut bahut uparrrrrr.....loved it❤️❤️

The kiss☺️☺️muje aagey bhi aise romantic parts pdhne h..jahan jindal saab ke andar ka bhukha sher bahar aa jaye..aur vo hosh kho baithe..aur gudiya..oops tanya ko kuch samajh na aaye..pr acha lge uss ko😛😛

Plz isko itni jldi mtt khatam mt kriye..mera kya hoga😭😭ho ske to isko ff bna dijiye😃

Plz update soon.😳.hope aapke exams ache gye honge⭐️

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Posted: 6 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: Viditian1

arey yrrrr😳it was superrrrr se bahut abut bahut uparrrrrr.....loved it❤️❤️

The kiss☺️☺️muje aagey bhi aise romantic parts pdhne h..jahan jindal saab ke andar ka bhukha sher bahar aa jaye..aur vo hosh kho baithe..aur gudiya..oops tanya ko kuch samajh na aaye..pr acha lge uss ko😛😛

Plz isko itni jldi mtt khatam mt kriye..mera kya hoga😭😭ho ske to isko ff bna dijiye😃

Plz update soon.😳.hope aapke exams ache gye honge⭐️

Thanks for liking it🤗

Yr main isko aur lamba nhi taan skti aur sath mein utna tym nhi milta mjhe ha bt main dusra story jaroor likhungi😳after finishing this two 😃sorry for that😛

Exam to thik thak gye hope apka exam v accha jaa tha hope apka exam v accha jaa rha ho

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Posted: 6 years ago
#49

Originally posted by: Kammy02

Thanks for liking it🤗

Yr main isko aur lamba nhi taan skti aur sath mein utna tym nhi milta mjhe ha bt main dusra story jaroor likhungi😳after finishing this two 😃sorry for that😛

Exam to thik thak gye hope apka exam v accha jaa tha hope apka exam v accha jaa rha ho

chlo koi ni😆but muje aur pdhna tha..koi ni but..will w8 for tge updates of ur other stories😃

Mere v ache hi jaa rhe h😃glad aapke exams ache gye😃

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Posted: 6 years ago
#50

Originally posted by: Viditian1

chlo koi ni😆but muje aur pdhna tha..koi ni but..will w8 for tge updates of ur other stories😃

Mere v ache hi jaa rhe h😃glad aapke exams ache gye😃

Ham jald update krne ki koshis krenge😆

Bst of luck for ur exams mre exam kitne acche gye vo to result se hi pta chalega

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