Pt 21 Updated Pg 146: Predator Turns Prey Advni FF

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saxena_hgt

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Posted: 8 years ago

#351

Who r these mad ppl.. seriously paedophile .. its one of d awww wali love story.. from start to end.. u can't help yourself from becoming stupid lamb going gaga over this drool worthy lion.. & for d record i m HP fanatic too..

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amortentia15

@amortentia15

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Posted: 8 years ago

#352

Page 36 part1 :

Hii chittu... I wanted to review your chapters separately...so here's the first installment:😊

I loved the flow of your writing...not once was it jarring nor did I feel disconnected anywhere...

Advay's musings have been so realistically explained in your writing I am completely floored...your advay is as true as he could be portrayed in the show...yes he was blinded by mad rage at the gruesome spine chilling decimation of his entire family...but as time progressed he evolved...don't we all do it...he opened himself to reasoning and rationale...understood that a person like chandni couldn't really harm anyone intentionally...not at age 7 and not now..

Chandni...she is a woman who is poised compassionate and reasonable... Yes her feelings are still somewhat conflicted considering dev pops up in her mind...but she strives to make the best of her situation and her answer in the affirmative to his question is the ultimate proof of how strong she is and how she can love unconditionally...

Pooja is another strong character...I love the fact that she is Ao accommodating so lively despite what life had thrown at her...and is always looking out for her brother...knows where his true happiness lies...

The small details you've added like the interaction with the florist and the concern shilpa has are extremely well placed and I love how you conjure up these small yet pertinent parts in the story...

I'll gradually review all the parts

Hope you like how I've perceived this chapter

Love and hugs

Juhi

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ChitraGS

@ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

#353

THE STORY IS NOW AVAILABLE ON MY WATTPAD ACCOUNT, ON THE LINK BELOW

https://my.w.tt/UiNb/jJ0GHOJujK

Edited by ChitraGS - 7 years ago

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ChitraGS

@ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

#354

THE STORY IS NOW AVAILABLE ON MY WATTPAD ACCOUNT, ON THE LINK BELOW

https://my.w.tt/UiNb/jJ0GHOJujK

Edited by ChitraGS - 7 years ago

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ChitraGS

@ChitraGS

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Posted: 8 years ago

#355

Okay guys

Here is the next part, its seems like two parts, but it is actually one

Its a sweet update with nothing major happening, i am going to write a couple of sweet updates before moving on with the story, as I think they need to warm up to each other, He had only just returned and need to romance his wife a little bit 😆

I hope you too like this part, this is my humble offering to the incredible street food of Mumbai. 😃

Oh Actually i also wanted to thank u all guys for posting such wonderful, sweet reviews to my last updates. Priya and Juhi i will be replying to your reviews, trust me on that 😳

What i really wanted to thank you guys abt was that, I was in a lot of dilemma before i posted the update, over whether Chandini should consume with Advay or with Dev.

But strongly believed it should be with Advay, as Dev has now transformed almost metamorphosed into Advay, So its only fair that chandini accept the man she had married for who he is , and not because he is Dev. I was hoping to see this angle in the story, but alas the CV's made total mess of the story and the characters SIGH !!!

So when i wrote this part, i thought i was going to face a lot of criticism, and a lot of you would resist the idea of Chadnini consummating with Advay. But i am pleasantly surprised as well as pleased that none of you seemed to mind that she had accepted Advay. So thank you guys, thanks a lot for sticking with my take on this story. I am moved, touched.

So yeah hope u enjoy this one, and the next couple of ones, before we move forward. But trust me I have written the future parts, the story is going to flow in an organic manner, nothing forced nothing out of the way, Everything will happen in its own time and in a way that it will seem like as though we will be looking into the lives of Advay and Chandini, more than reading a story.

So hope you stick to the end, cause i am going to be writing this till the end

Cheers, Chitra

PS pls forgive Typos and grammar, i am too tired and my eyes are hurting right now, so if there are any errors, them MAAFI

Edited by ChitraGS - 8 years ago

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2filmy

@2filmy

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Posted: 8 years ago

#356

Originally posted by: saxena_hgt
Who r these mad ppl.. seriously paedophile .. its one of d awww wali love story.. from start to end.. u can't help yourself from becoming stupid lamb going gaga over this drool worthy lion.. & for d record i m HP fanatic too..

I am so happy to meet u
People feel Edward is more aged than Bella great grand father
So he is a paedophile to fall for her
I used to be aghast at reading such non sense
I love both the series

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saxena_hgt

@saxena_hgt

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Posted: 8 years ago

#357

Originally posted by: 2filmy

I am so happy to meet u
People feel Edward is more aged than Bella great grand father
So he is a paedophile to fall for her
I used to be aghast at reading such non sense
I love both the series

Than these ppl have no idea wat this story is about.. i personally alwayz liked a cretain age difference.. its give an edge to d story plus characters.. & i m pleased to meet u too..

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2filmy

@2filmy

Trailblazer

Posted: 8 years ago

#358

Thank u dear
I too feel the same
Also Edward was forever frozen at 17
So he was an all time teenager
nice to meet u too

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2filmy

@2filmy

Trailblazer

Posted: 8 years ago

#359

OMG 2 more updates so soon
I am already jumping and dancing in joy
Read them both over all
Will review later in details

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CrazyBilli

@CrazyBilli

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+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#360

Loved it..The towel scene..the beach scene..The small doubt Chandni has now that Advay might be Dev..Loved all parts of it..❤️ The beach scene has to be my favourite..

Will be waiting for the upcoming parts. 🤗

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