Humdard-shraman TS(chapter-3 pg11 25/01)

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Hey guys how are we? All good people? So there was kind of rain of stories some days back loved each one of it and thought why don't i contribute? So here is mine...

This one is dedicated to my piya di (crazypiya) and the idea credit goes to her too

This was meant to be an os but then verbal diarrhea struck me and now this is a TS

The song use is dariya from baar baar dekho...a beautiful one indeed

So here we go..please bear with typos..no proof read

This is on the pct demolition track

She saw her dream...her pct getting shattered in front of her and she was not able to do anything...could not stop them...some minutes ago they were celebrating their success and now...now all of it just finished ...with every sound that a vessel made...her heart broke...broke into million pieces she felt helpless...helpless more than a person with no arms and legs would ...her every dream broke with the breaking of the board with her mother's name...the amount of scratches on the vessels were very less when compared to the scratches on the little and innocent heart willing to achieve success...to make her parents feel proud

But no she cannot lose...she is sumo and sumo kabhi haar nahi mananti...mustering courage she got up and went to the inspector

"esa kaise kar sakte h ap inspector sahab? Ese kaise kisi ki zameen pe tod fod kar sakte h ap?" vakil sahab zara madam ko court ka order padh kar sunaiye..the inspector says..."case number dhc 401/16 ke tehat adalat is mukadme me chandan katyal ko doshi maante hue is property se bedakhal karti h shobhit berry ke vakeel SHRAVAN MALHOTRA ne court me ye saabit kar diya h...shravan malhotra...shravan malhotra...the name kept ranging in her mind along with thoughts...nahi nahi...sharavan esa nahi kar sakta...but that sign..it proved everything it is shravan ...shravan her best friend did this to her...shravan the only man she loved since childhood helped in shattering her dream ...how could he? Why did he? She had million questions which needed to be answered and with these she left for his office wanting all her answers

On entering the office what she saw killed her from inside ...after shattering her dreams...he was celebrating...celebrating his success...her loss...he won..she lost...lost completely

And then the man...the sole reason for all the hatered shravan had towards her came to her...she could see the evil smirk on his face...the dirty glint in his eyes "tum yahan? Yahan kya kar rahi ho tum...konsi musibat khadi karne ayi ho?"

"uncle please mujhe shravan se baat kani h...please"

"tum use koi baat nahi kar sakti ...vo tumhari koi help nahi karega...karna chahega to bhi main nahi karne dunga"

"uncle please hatiye...ap samjhte kyu nahi mera usse baat karna bohot zaroori h...VO PCT MERA SAPNA THA...SABKUCH THA MERA she said in a voice slightly high pitched"

"shut up! Just shut up! Himmat kese hui tumhari mere papa se ese baat karne ki? Ye case mera tha jo kuch kiya h mene kiya...suna tumne YE SAB MENE KIYA"

She broke again...all over again ...the with the words "mene kiya" kept ringing in her mind ...she ran...an out of that office towards her car

"kyu kiya tumne esa shravan? Kya ab itne paraye ho gaye hum? Itne saalo ki dosti bas tumne is kaan tod ki mene tumhaari bekasoor ma ko tumse milana chaha? Kyuki me ye chahti thi ki tumhaari zindagi ki khushiya laut aye? Ki tum aurato me vishwas karne lago? Ki tumhe bachpan ka khoya hua pyaar mile? Ki tumhaari family complete ho jaye? Ki tum mujhpe fir se bharosa karo...mujhse pyaar karo? Saari galti merit hi shravan

With these thoughts she sat in her car and started driving...unaware to the fact that 2 ears heard it all...yes he heard it all...when came running behind her...becuase he could not see her in such pain she was going through...he did not knew why he was following her but that felt correct ...and then he heard it " kit um bhi mujhse pyaar karo" did he hear it right? Did she love him? Did his sumo love him? He could not register those words and then he saw her leaving...with a tear striken face and a heart broken into pieces because of him...he felt he could never forgive himself for such condition of her...no one was beside her to console her to pacify her...he felt so incomplete...so guilty and with heavy steps he walked inside the office

She kept driving...driving insanely having no idea of the traffic or the road events of the day flashing inside her...

Oo dariya mujhe nahi jana us paar

Ayaa ranjha meraa...aya ranjhaa mera

Oo dariyaa zara rokan do majhdaar...

Aya ranjhaa mera...aya ranjha mera mera...X2

Flashback

Sumo is cutting vegetables while cooking and suddenly cuts her finger

" aah...uhh''

He comes running towards her and sucks the blood on her finger

"kya kar rahi thi? Pagal ladki...dekh ke karna chahiye na...zyada lag jata to''

"laga to mujhe h sharavan ...tu itna hyper kyu ho raha h?''

"chup karo tum...jab tumhe lagti h na to tumse zyada dard mujhe hota h''

"kyu?'' she asks innocently

"tum nahi samjhogi'' he says smilimg slightly

Flashback ends

Haath na choote ranjha ve

saath na toote ranjha ve

menu to bas deedar tera

lakh kaha na mana ve

dil kesa deewana ve

kab se kare h intezaar teraa..

oo dariya..zara tham to ja ekbaar

aya ranjha mera...jahan ranjha mera

pehle to mere ek cut se tumhari jaan nikal jati thi shravan or aj mera dil poori tarah tod kar bhi kya tumhe koi farak nahi pada shravan?

TO BE CONTINUED...

p.s :- okay it is way too long isn't it? Sorry but couldn't help

pss:- that court document part seems too elaborated ...sorry but i love law

psss:- buddy me for a p.m next time

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chapter 2

chapter 3

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Castile2 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Dolly!

This is interesting! Shravan did come out behind his Sumo...hope he uses his brains and rectifies his mistakes.
Waiting for the next part

Till then
Cas 😊
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Intrigued beyond help..
This was soo gripping. Cant wait to read further!
Great job buddy
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Wow Dolly...this looks really interesting. ..very unique twist to the PCT demolition plot. ..hooked on for the next part!!
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Wow Dolly... Very emotional and around the first big fight... Used the song beautifully.. him to dost hi hain aap ke... PM nil jaaye to kya baat hai!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: deltadawn

Wow Dolly... Very emotional and around the first big fight... Used the song beautifully.. him to dost hi hain aap ke... PM nil jaaye to kya baat hai!!


deepti thanks...sure will p.m you...if you don't mind please buddy me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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👍🏼 it's really good yar kash ye serial m bhi tb clear hi jata but it's ok jo bhi hona rha vo ho gaya vaja nhi to yaha hi 👏 this is for you
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi,
a new insight into the PCT demolition incident,,,

do continue soon...eagerly waiting for the next part
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Harshi_ta

👍🏼 it's really good yar kash ye serial m bhi tb clear hi jata but it's ok jo bhi hona rha vo ho gaya vaja nhi to yaha hi 👏 this is for you


Thanks a lot harshi
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sorry for being late...
A bit stuck today..
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Dolllyyy... First of all lovely plot selection... And the way you wrote Sumo's pain it was really amazing. The song selection was also on point. And the law wala part... Of course you love law... Wakil sahiba...but honestly loved it. Ab dekhte hai Shravan ka dimag kaise chalta hai... Will be waiting for the next part eagerly. Love ya... (Bahut sara... U know that right!)
Ohh yes.. Thanx for the pm.

Love...
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