new arshi ss: teddy bear (complete ss) note p55 - Page 24

Originally posted by: anjaliforarnav

Hi

I read your short story-"Teddy Bear" and I must say you're a very imaginative and creative writer!

Your work makes sense and is quite good but, you need to do major improvements to your knowledge in English!

Grammatical and punctuation errors are all over the chapters.

Small things like where to put a comma, full stop and other lack in knowledge of vocabulary is literally spoiling the outlook of your work also causing you loss of readers who came across your story but left it seeing the plentiful mistakes in English even though your story is quite good.

For example, some mistakes that were VERY silly and repetitive were the use of words "posing" and "sensible"!!

Posing, my dear means "becoming" (E.g. pollution poses a threat to the environment) OR posing means forming a kind of expression or position when someone is photographing you (E.g. she posed for the camera). What you meant while using this word was- "Khushi put/placed the bowl of kheer in front of Arnav." Okay?

Sensible, means responsible or in Hindi- SAMAJDAR (E.g. It would be sensible to reduce costs right now). What you actually should have used was- "Khushi is a very sensitive girl". Now sensitive means delicate, softhearted, in Hindi- NAZUK. Okay?

Hope it was of help!

There are many online websites that will help you improve your English! Just search on Google- "use of comma", "punctuation marks", "grammar".

To improve your knowledge in vocabulary read other Arshi fan fictions of better writers who write very good. You'll find it interesting and side by side you'll also improve your English! Just remember that whenever you come across a new word while reading, immediately highlight it, right click on your mouse and then click on "Search Google for ----"! You'll get the meaning!

Bye 😊

Good luck 👍🏼