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Hey All! Back again! I hope that the chapter is fine. If not, apologies in advance :)

Happy Reading!

CHAPTER-30: BLACK OUT

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Having her breakfast, Ishani slowly got up as she felt her head heavy. "Whoosh! This is so heavy!" she said as she got up with the help of the side table. . Looking at the sun from the balcony, she said "The rays, missed it in Dallas. Though you were physically present, I did not feel you" she turned "It's perfectly fine now" she smiled as she now slowly managed to stride to the wash, for bath.

Twenty five minutes later, she saw herself in the mirror wearing a white tee and a blue printed long-skirt. Complimenting herself about her look, she cleared the plates as she now went towards the kitchen for preparing Rashni's breakfast. "Kaki!" she entered as she smiled, beamingly.

"Ishani? What happened? Do you need something?" she asked as she now saw the unclean plates. Taking them, she said "Ishani, just take rest. We'll take care of everything" as she recalled Ranveer's words. Looking at her bemused, Ishani said "Kaki, it's perfectly fine. I'll take care of it. I just came here to prepare the breakfast for the two of them. How about Isha? Did she have anything?" she asked as she now took the needed ingredients for the breakfast.

"She hasn't. Yet, why don't you take rest? You must be tired." she tried to make her agree, but failed in doing so.

"Kaki, I'll be fine. Where's the atta?" she asked as she now peeled the potatoes, for the paranthas as Amba helped her in getting them.

As she started making the dough, Amba asked "Ishani, are you fine? You seem tired" she stroked her hair to which she answered "I am Kaki. You've asked me this for the hundredth-time now. Just feeling a bit giddy. It'll be fine. I always have them."

"Giddy? Why do you have to do this then? Give this to me. I'll take care of these. Make my granddaughters get up. That is more than fine. The breakfast will be ready by the time they reach." She said as Ishani interrupted "Kaki, I'll just finish cooking for Rashni. She'll not have any other food other than the ones prepared by me. I hope you didn't mistake me. I just..." she explained, "Ishani, I know about kids, its fine. You may...Why am I going to say anything?"

"Thank you so much Kaki" she hugged her as she rushed out to take a vessel and made poha, in a jiffy. "Pretty much experienced in poha, eh?" Amba chuckled as Ishani smiled "She likes this for morning. At times, I give her Cerelac." she transferred them into a small bowl as she kept them aside. "Kaki, just make sure that it is hot...I'll be back" she wiped her hands as she ran towards her girls' room.

***

"Babies! Wake up! It's time!" she set her hair into a bun as she shooked Alakya. "Mama!" she wailed, "Two minutes...Just two minutes" she said as she covered herself with the quilt, tightly. Smiling carelessly, she went towards Rashni's cot, as she saw her sleeping, pleasantly, without any sort of tension in her. Gazing at her lovingly for a few minutes, Ishani finally, carried her into her arms as she sang-

We're all in our places

With sunshiny faces,

And this is the way

To start a new day!

Good Morning Baby girl!

As Rashni yawned, Ishani wiped off the tears which were driving out from her eyes because of her yawn. Taking her inside the bathroom, she took the paste as she made her brush, first with the brush and then the hand. As she helped Rashni in brushing with her index finger, she bit it hard, as usual, as Ishani shrieked in pain, once again. But all Rashni could do was, laugh at her, shamelessly.

"Rashni, please stop biting my fingers! It's becoming a hard time for me to do a plaster every day!" she cried as she now undressed her for bath. Sensing that she was going to bath, she started crying as she always hated to have a bath.

"Princess! Stop being like your Papa. If he doesn't like water, that doesn't mean that you should be the same. Look at him; he started developing a liking for rains just because I loved them. Now if you love daddy, stop crying and have a quick shower. Mama will get a chocky for you if you do so" she challenged her, hinting her for a chocolate as her return.

Quickly stopping her false crying, she obliged to her mommy as she made it difficult for her by splashing water over her face, dress, hair as Ishani now begged for freedom "Princess, stop this!" she cried as Rashni gave her a toothy smile. "Stop smiling at me like that. I'll complain to your Papa!" she warned as she heard Alakya say from a distance "Don't ever imagine that he'll believe you!"

"Alakya, C'mon! He will support me!" she cried from the bathroom, making Rashni get up from her bath tub. "Let me see, Mama" she challenged her as Ishani came out with Rashni who was covered with a tiny bathrobe which had a sky-blue and a pink combination.

"Alakya, Stop acting! Get up" she hit her on her back as Alakya threw her hands up, her eyes still closed, asking Ishani to lift her. Smiling at her, Ishani made Rashni sit on a baby chair as she carried Alakya, though with a bit of difficulty. "Alakya, ask your Papa to carry you the next time. Mama is getting weaker day by day" she said as she tucked Alakya's clumsy hair into the right place. "Mama, are you okay?" she asked, her voice concerned.

"Of course, sweet heart. I am." She ruffled her hair as they went inside the bathroom. "Mama, look at me" she said her mouth, white in colour because of the paste's effect.

She looked on, tired as she said "Brush your teeth completely...You may talk later." Finishing with her brushing, Ishani said "I'll get your dresses, have a quick shower and come back soon."

"Mama, shall I have a head bath, please?"

"Not today, Mama is very tired" she said, her voice unconscious.

"Okay" she sighed as she went out to take Alakya's dress. "Is that yellow frock fine for you?" she heard Ishani shout from a distance. "Yes Mama" she answered as Ishani gave her the dress. Closing the door, she held her head as she sat down "Why am I feeling so weak? Why am I not able to do much amount of work like earlier? What is wrong with me?" she thought as Rashni, with a difficulty said "Mam...Mama" as she threw her hands, asking her to carry her. Getting up from the bed, she found herself dizzy as she slowly carried her and made her lay upon her shoulders. Picking her a tee which had chocolate prints and a jean skirt, she dressed up Rashni quickly. Combing her hair, Ishani made her completely ready for the day as Alakya now came out. Making Rashni sit down, she advanced towards Alakya as her head spinned. As she noticed Ishani very weak, she caught hold of her and asked "Mama, you're lying again. You look pale and...growing cold! Let me get the medicines." She said as Ishani stopped her "It should be taken after the breakfast, Alakya" her eyes now, going cataleptic. "Okay...Okay...Where are the medicines?" she asked her as she mumbled "In...Inside the wa-" she went unconscious. "Mama? Mama!" she called her again and again as she rushed towards her room.

"She must have kept it somewhere..." she thought as she searched every other place in her room and finally found out after five minutes. Smiling, she rushed towards the kitchen, making sure that she wasn't noticed by anyone. "What shall I make? What shall I make?" she thought as she noticed oranges near the cutlery. "Orange! Juice! I can make juice" she ran as she peeled off the orange peels and made the fruit into juice, as quickly as possible. Looking at the place, she thought "I can clean up the place later..." and ran with the juice and medicines.

"Mama! Mama" she woke her up, sprinkling some water as she gave her a huge glass full of juice. Drinking them, Ishani held her head as she tries to tell her something. Guessing them, Alakya said "Mama, I know. It's just 8 and we'll be fine. We'll have our breakfast only if you give us" and made her have the medicines. After its effect on her, Ishani's face was pretty fresh as Alakya now scolded her "You are becoming irresponsible, Mama. I've messaged Papa and he'll call you anytime now." She threatened her as Ishani's face went all scary with that. "Ranveer? Why...Who asked you to tell him?" she cried as the phone rang. "Ha! Papa is never late!" she squeaked as Ishani now picked up the call "Hello, Ranveer?" Rashni heard her Papa's name as she tried "Pa...Pa" she asked Alakya to pick her up as she carried her and made her sit on Ishani's lap, who was now sitting, cross-legged.

"Can you switch on the video call? I want to see your beautiful face."

Switching it on, Ranveer looked at her for the next two minutes. Heaving out a huge sigh, he started "Why the hell are you doing this? I asked you to take them and even wrote them in your hands. Can't you realize its importance, Sunny? Why do you do this? To be frank, you are making a fool out of you. The doctor has asked you to take them regularly for another few months so that you come back to normalcy, without any weakness in your body. Can't you understand them? How can you be so damn careless?" he shouted at her as Rashni saw them with her eyes wide open, trying to comprehend what their parents were talking all while. As she found both of them silent, she looked at Ranveer, who was still staring at Ishani, who was although was looking down in shame. Calling him, she pointed at her tee with her tiny fingers. Failing to understand them, Ranveer asked-

"What does my princess want?" he asked, pouting at her daughter. But all she did was pointing at the tee. Understanding them, Ishani said "Baby wants a chocky, right princess?" she asked as Rashni nodded, smiling beamingly at her success.

"Chocolate? Why?" Ranveer asked as Ishani replied "I promised her to get one if she took her shower."

"Okay. Papa will get you and Alu Di a big chocky while coming back, Fine?" he said as Rashni gave him a broad smile, showing her tiny teeth.

"Ranveer" he heard her say. Looking at her still with anger, she said "I'm sorry Ranveer."

"I'm in no mood Ishani. I'm fed up with you" he moved forward to cut the call as she interrupted "Get one for Isha too" Nodding, he cut the call, abruptly and it left her, heartbroken.

With two big plates and a bowl, Alakya entered the room with their breakfast.

"Mama! Breakfast!" she said as she had her breakfast as she fed Rashni and Alakya too, side by side.

"Mama, what did Papa say? Did he scold you?" she asked, her mouth full.

"Your Papa cut the call abruptly. He's very angry." She said as Alakya consoled her "Don't worry Mama. While coming back home, he'll be back to normal. So chill"

"No Alakya. He was really angry today."

"Should I tell him?"

"No! Don't make him still angrier. I'll take care of him" she said as she fed her.

***

"Mr. RV?" he heard his name from the other side of the phone.

"Yeah. May I know who's on the other line?" he asked as he heard "There's no need of my name, Mr. RV. Just store this number as one of your enemies. By the way, before I forget, I've kidnapped your wife."

"What? Stop this sh*t and tell me who you are" his voice turned grey.

"I am serious, Mr. RV. By the way, why is she fainting always?"

"Fainting? Is she okay...Give the phone to her, I have to talk...Please" he pleaded, his eyes turning red and teary.

"Oh C'mon, Mr. RV. Stop crying like a baby and look out for a sandwich shop" he heard the voice say as he searched for them. "Did you find them?"

"N...No"

"Take a right. You'll have the shop there." He heard the voice say as he obeyed the instructions. "Yeah, I'm inside the shop. What do you want me to do now?" "Have some and pack for us too. There are two people here. Myself and your wife."

"Do you think that I am out of any job? Why should I?" he reprimanded, clutching his ring, stirring and twisting it to and fro, in tension.

"And what do you think of me? Am I mad to do these? Give the bill in the stand so that you'll get something and hung up the call.

"Hello...Hello!" he shouted as he now gave the bill for the sandwiches. "Sir, are you Mr. RV?" he heard the guy say as he nodded carelessly, without having an eye-contact.

"Sir, someone asked to give this to you" he gave him as he saw them, stunned. It was Ishani's chain which was gifted on her baby shower. Grabbing them, he asked, impatiently "Who gave you this?"

"A lady"

"Lady? How does she loo-" his phone vibrated as he now took his parcels and attended them, "Mr. RV, not bad, I must say. Don't forget that your wife is with me. I may then call anyone and ask them to show you her plasma. Is that fine?"

"No! No...No...I'm coming. Where should I come now?" he asked, panting.

"Good. Smart boy, I must admit. How about the Marine Drive? That must go good, right?"

"C'mon! Stop irritating me. Tell me cut and right of what do you want" his voice went demanding as he heard the voice "Shh! don't try to get angry. You may lose her...lose her smile, eyes, laugh, cry, everything! So think thrice before you talk. And let me give you something now. I'll allow you to talk with your wife for ten seconds. Ask her to be strong, because, I cannot afford to sprinkle water every time." as the phone was given to Ishani now.

"Ishani...are you okay?" he asked as she heard him crying now.

"Ranveer...Please save me Ranveer. It's too dark here. I'm scared" he heard her say, with fear overtaking her.

"Don't worry. All will be fi..." he heard the same voice again "I just quantified ten seconds and not ten lifetimes. Now get back to work."

"Okay..."he breathed out, "Where should I come now?" he asked, wiping his tears.

"Marine Drive"

***

Done! Constructive Criticism will be more than welcome and sorry for typos :)
Edited by Bloomfield - 10 years ago
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hey my cutie pie!
loved the intial part of the chapter so much :)
.
those family moments of ishveer wid their princesses
.
and ishani making poha and aalu ke parathe in bf reminded me of something u better know what🤣
.
and rashu and alakya both r so sweet daughters...<3
.
and ishu is feeling giddy :O i hope she start taking her health seriously :(
.
and then the video call conversation of ranveer wid his sweet family.. <3 .
.
rashu demanding for chocky..?? she is like me.. :)
and what was that ishu got kidnapped..??
m very much sure that chirkut is behind this >_<
update soon yaara!
and plz make nothing happen to ishu
love u so much
Ur choulmate
AASTHA :)
Edited by aasthaarora - 10 years ago
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2nd comment 😛 res 😊
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You're so fast with your updates that I feel like an old day whose trying to keep up with them. 🤣🤣 I'm not going to apologize because it's no use to you, so I'll start away with the reviews right away.
Wow! 😃😃 The story has taken quite a big twist in these five chapters. Ishaani's recovered partially, Alakya has become an integral part of the family in one year and Rashni is only getting more and more adorable. 😳😳 And Ranveer as usual...
So, they've finally decided to move back to Mumbai, but not before making a stop at Ahmedabad to make amends with the Parekh family. 😛😛 It was a pleasant surprise to see that they were all settled, even though they did have a lot of financial crisis. 😕😕 And Baa is no more...
Thankfully, the Parekh clan agreed to live with IshVeer and family now and have accepted them wholeheartedly into their lives. 😃😃 That's very good. 😎😎 And IshVeer just can't leave a chance on getting their hands upon each other now, can they? 😉😉
I also loved the fact that Ishaani and Nitin have made amends and atleast she's bestowed the honour of calling him 'Papa'. 👍🏼👍🏼 I liked that parcel he had for Ishaani; it was sweet. 😆😆And speaking of sweet, the two girls are siding with their Papa too much these days. 😈😈 Poor Ishaani. 😒😒
And they've finally come over to Mumbai where the Parekhs and Vaghelas make amends and are now happily living under the same roof at the Parekh Mansion. 👏👏 Ranveer has entrusted Amba with the secret about Ishaani's ill-health and I like this motherly Amba. 🤪🤪She makes me smile. 😃😃

And Ishaani's carelessness with her meds have already started showing their effects. She's fainted once in the washroom and now again in the morning. It's no wonder why Ranveer is so pissed off with her. 😡😡 I don't blame him one bit. 🥱🥱
And what?! 😲😲 Kidnapped? 😲😲 Ranveer's barely been to the city two days and Ishaani got kidnapped? 😲😲 What on Earth is wrong with the enemies already? 😲😲 Don't they have better things to do? 🥱🥱 And goodness, how on Earth did she manage to get herself kidnapped?! 🤓🤓 I just hope that she's alright and Ranveer gets her back home soon. 🤔🤔
Now, I've got two particular suggestion for you. 😛😛You're primary growth as an author has been exceptional, and you've proved your metal with the amount of improvement that you've made. Now comes the secondary growth process, where you work upon the minute details. 😉😉


These aren't negative points, but work tips.
1. Your use of vocabulary is outstanding! I'm not ashamed to say that I have to take a dictionary and sit when reading your chapters because many of the words are those that I've not heard earlier. But as much as the words you use are vibrant, you have now got to concentrate on making the words work. More often than not, the right word in a sentence always makes the correct impact even though the meaning behind it may be the same. Try working with words and make the correct ones match. It may be a simple word at times, but sometimes, simplicity brings out the best and most deepest of emotions.
2. You've improved a lot with a your narration skills, and that's a kudos to you in such a short span. However, you must make sure not to be abrupt in change of scene or narration points. Connectivity is very, very important when you are writing chapters and the flow should never break, especially when shuttling from FBs to present time. Always try making the transitions smooth. Also, when writing dialogues, don't wrote the dialogues of two people on one line in case they speak together. Separate them.
On a personal note, I have another suggestion that will help you out in the long run:
You say that this story was always meant to be a dark one, but you changed the idea around a bit. Now this may either be because you complied to the readers' request or else were uncomfortable to go ahead with your idea (I'm ready to bet on the former because you seem more than comfortable with the latter).
Always remember one thing - do what your heart says and what you've foreseen for the story. All of us do this when we are writing our first novel FF (even I've done this with NC by deviating with two or three points). It's because the readers views are the most important to us and we never want to disappoint them. But as a friend, I will advise you that do what feels right in your heart. At the end of the FF, you should be happy with the outcome and the events.
With NC, till date whenever I read snippets, I'm more than satisfied with what I've put up and that satisfaction is something you should feel as well. So in case you have ideas that you thinks may/may not be accepted, don't worry and just go forward with them. Trust your instinct.
You've been really doing a brilliant, brilliant job! 🤗🤗 Do update the next chapter soon and keep delivering such great works! ❤️❤️
Loads of love,
LM ❤️
Ps. My pet name is Rashu. 🤣🤣 And whatever on Earth is wrong with Gauri's kid, Isha? Why is she an introvert? Is it coz of her dad? 😲😲
Edited by LadyMeringue - 10 years ago
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Arushi u really so fast in updating ,very good going dr 👏👏but one suggestion from my side ,do make sure that ur connectivity blends to ur scenes,coz the characterisation is laid so perfectly when it comes to making points on relativity ,u must be a little bit moving on to that scenes,coz I am used to compile story as my profession rest on that hence these are advices my teachers gave to me ,while I was presenting my own story /poems,hence do make sure of that but ur flow is quite unique ,keep going ,Waiting for the next chapter😃😃
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Originally posted by: aasthaarora

hey my cutie pie!
loved the intial part of the chapter so much :)
.
those family moments of ishveer wid their princesses
.
and ishani making poha and aalu ke parathe in bf reminded me of something u better know what🤣
.
and rashu and alakya both r so sweet daughters...<3
.
and ishu is feeling giddy :O i hope she start taking her health seriously :(
.
and then the video call conversation of ranveer wid his sweet family.. <3 .
.
rashu demanding for chocky..?? she is like me.. :)
and what was that ishu got kidnapped..??
m very much sure that chirkut is behind this >_<
update soon yaara!
and plz make nothing happen to ishu
love u so much
Ur choulmate
AASTHA :)



Hey babygirl!

Thank you so much for liking the chapter :) I'm happy that you liked it :)

Yaar, meko aur kuch yaad nai raha...to isliye🤣

I already specified, she's just weak...That's it :) And the video convo was, to be honest ;)

Rashni has a touch of you, got it?😛😛

And regarding the kidnapping, all I would say is CHILL DUDE as Ishani is going to get very nicely from Ranveer😉😉

Ur choulmate

Aarushi😳😳
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Originally posted by: LadyMeringue

You're so fast with your updates that I feel like an old day whose trying to keep up with them. 🤣🤣 I'm not going to apologize because it's no use to you, so I'll start away with the reviews right away.

Wow! 😃😃 The story has taken quite a big twist in these five chapters. Ishaani's recovered partially, Alakya has become an integral part of the family in one year and Rashni is only getting more and more adorable. 😳😳 And Ranveer as usual...
So, they've finally decided to move back to Mumbai, but not before making a stop at Ahmedabad to make amends with the Parekh family. 😛😛 It was a pleasant surprise to see that they were all settled, even though they did have a lot of financial crisis. 😕😕 And Baa is no more...
Thankfully, the Parekh clan agreed to live with IshVeer and family now and have accepted them wholeheartedly into their lives. 😃😃 That's very good. 😎😎 And IshVeer just can't leave a chance on getting their hands upon each other now, can they? 😉😉
I also loved the fact that Ishaani and Nitin have made amends and atleast she's bestowed the honour of calling him 'Papa'. 👍🏼👍🏼 I liked that parcel he had for Ishaani; it was sweet. 😆😆And speaking of sweet, the two girls are siding with their Papa too much these days. 😈😈 Poor Ishaani. 😒😒
And they've finally come over to Mumbai where the Parekhs and Vaghelas make amends and are now happily living under the same roof at the Parekh Mansion. 👏👏 Ranveer has entrusted Amba with the secret about Ishaani's ill-health and I like this motherly Amba. 🤪🤪She makes me smile. 😃😃

And Ishaani's carelessness with her meds have already started showing their effects. She's fainted once in the washroom and now again in the morning. It's no wonder why Ranveer is so pissed off with her. 😡😡 I don't blame him one bit. 🥱🥱
And what?! 😲😲 Kidnapped? 😲😲 Ranveer's barely been to the city two days and Ishaani got kidnapped? 😲😲 What on Earth is wrong with the enemies already? 😲😲 Don't they have better things to do? 🥱🥱 And goodness, how on Earth did she manage to get herself kidnapped?! 🤓🤓 I just hope that she's alright and Ranveer gets her back home soon. 🤔🤔
Now, I've got two particular suggestion for you. 😛😛You're primary growth as an author has been exceptional, and you've proved your metal with the amount of improvement that you've made. Now comes the secondary growth process, where you work upon the minute details. 😉😉


These aren't negative points, but work tips.
1. Your use of vocabulary is outstanding! I'm not ashamed to say that I have to take a dictionary and sit when reading your chapters because many of the words are those that I've not heard earlier. But as much as the words you use are vibrant, you have now got to concentrate on making the words work. More often than not, the right word in a sentence always makes the correct impact even though the meaning behind it may be the same. Try working with words and make the correct ones match. It may be a simple word at times, but sometimes, simplicity brings out the best and most deepest of emotions.
2. You've improved a lot with a your narration skills, and that's a kudos to you in such a short span. However, you must make sure not to be abrupt in change of scene or narration points. Connectivity is very, very important when you are writing chapters and the flow should never break, especially when shuttling from FBs to present time. Always try making the transitions smooth. Also, when writing dialogues, don't wrote the dialogues of two people on one line in case they speak together. Separate them.
On a personal note, I have another suggestion that will help you out in the long run:
You say that this story was always meant to be a dark one, but you changed the idea around a bit. Now this may either be because you complied to the readers' request or else were uncomfortable to go ahead with your idea (I'm ready to bet on the former because you seem more than comfortable with the latter).
Always remember one thing - do what your heart says and what you've foreseen for the story. All of us do this when we are writing our first novel FF (even I've done this with NC by deviating with two or three points). It's because the readers views are the most important to us and we never want to disappoint them. But as a friend, I will advise you that do what feels right in your heart. At the end of the FF, you should be happy with the outcome and the events.
With NC, till date whenever I read snippets, I'm more than satisfied with what I've put up and that satisfaction is something you should feel as well. So in case you have ideas that you thinks may/may not be accepted, don't worry and just go forward with them. Trust your instinct.
You've been really doing a brilliant, brilliant job! 🤗🤗 Do update the next chapter soon and keep delivering such great works! ❤️❤️
Loads of love,
LM ❤️
Ps. My pet name is Rashu. 🤣🤣 And whatever on Earth is wrong with Gauri's kid, Isha? Why is she an introvert? Is it coz of her dad? 😲😲



Hey LM!

Welcome back and you know the reason for my fast updates and I know the reason for your late reviews. So, no issues on that 😛😛The story did take a huge turn with days moving on swiftly...and so their lives😉😉

And yeah, Baa is no more. I've been a bit logical in this as I cannot show an old lady..I've not noticed such Baas and Matajis in real life🤪🤪 Parekh clan have finally agreed to gel up with the Vaghelas and IshVeer can never stay quiet for a while. They are definitely in their own world, when it comes to 'privacy' ☺️☺️

Ishani is sometimes crazy and you'll witness that in the next update as well🥱🥱 She never takes care of her and creates a hullabaloo, without any intention to do so🥱🥱

So, yeah, she's "Kidnapped" and you'll get to know about it in the next update. I'm sure, everyone her will get pissed off about her "STUPIDITY". Even Ranveer, for that matter. As I specified in reply to Aastha, all I would say is "CHILL DUDE"😎😎

And thank you for that. I'm happy that you found at least a tiny improvement.⭐️⭐️ I'm happy😃😃

And now to the negative/tips?

Detailing, I'm working on them and I am hoping to master them by the end of this FF, which is not very far😛😛

Connectivity, I'll work on them too. I just need a bit of help for it. I'll make them😉😉

And the dialogues...I'll separate them...

Okay. So I take in this suggestion. I'll make sure of that. Yeah, it was definitely because of the former one😆😆 I'll take them too. I was personally not happy with a few updates, tbh😕😕 And yeah, I know the reason too🥱🥱

I'll trust my instinct and work accordingly😊😊 Thank you so much for them😳😳

Thank you,once again⭐️⭐️

Aarushi

Ps. OMG! I didn't know that🤣 If you're not fine, then I'll search for some other nickie for her😕😕

Double Ps. You'll get to know them, soon😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: CarpedeimRose

Arushi u really so fast in updating ,very good going dr 👏👏but one suggestion from my side ,do make sure that ur connectivity blends to ur scenes,coz the characterisation is laid so perfectly when it comes to making points on relativity ,u must be a little bit moving on to that scenes,coz I am used to compile story as my profession rest on that hence these are advices my teachers gave to me ,while I was presenting my own story /poems,hence do make sure of that but ur flow is quite unique ,keep going ,Waiting for the next chapter😃😃



Thank you so much for liking the chapter sweetie:) I'm happy that you liked it :)

Regarding the suggestion, LM and EH too specified me and all I need is some help...That would go good. Because it's taking me time in them :-/

I'll update it soon sweetie and thank you for the suggestion :)😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
Superb update sweetie.. Cute family of ishveer
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Posted: 10 years ago
Hi aarushi!! Hope you are doing great!!
Once again a lovely chapter!!
Aha, amba's motherly care is really nice!
So girls are becoming naughty day by day!!
Just loved to see rashni going adorable day by day!!
Alakya is so caring with being naughty. But I would agree here with LM that girls are siding Ranveer nowadays.

Oh why ishani is so careless!!! Fainting twice in 24 hours!!
No wonder Ranveer going to be angry!!


Regarding the last part of Ishani's kidnap, somehow I am feeling that it is not a matter of worry from the moment I have read it. I have my own theory but I will not reveal it here,in case I turned to be correct. I'll PM you that

Looking forward for your next update!!

With lots of love
Vaishali


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