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srividhya68

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Posted: 10 years ago

#11

very interesting
looking for nxt part
upt soon

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NONIE

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Wonderful prologue Destiny 😃

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Lekha Ishwar

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Posted: 10 years ago

#13

Thank you for all the love 😳 & the beautiful comments I will take time & reply to each of you!!!

Sorry that this Chapter took so long to post I had this typed out for quite a while now !!! Whoops...

Also constantly switching POVs were almost an epic FAIL

Song For The Chapter :- Feel The Light (Home) Jennifer Lopez

[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9fdAt0ke9w8[/YOUTUBE]

Chapter 2 - Reuniting The Best Friends

#2(Sub Part 1)

Feel The Light

#2 (Part A)

Feel The Light

Radhika POV

My day seemed to be going on well with the wedding planning I was doing for Arjun Sir & his family but I still felt alone througgh this...

My eyes through this all fell on that one picture that was so important for me on Arjun Sir's Desk & then that one year of my childhood I had spent With the Mehra family runs through my head

I was feeling overwhelmed with the startling news that I abruptly just get up & have that urge to walk away stopping all the work I have started with I needed to clear my head so I got up & ran to the door bumping into the very person (my best friend) I was planning to avoid

Here I go

Feel better now

Here I go

It's better now

Feel better now

Arjun POV

What in the world was happening Somehow I keep feeling that she is my pixie butterfly my best friend. but then again pixie was a true chatterbox unlike Radhika Gupta here. There seems to be a story to this girl her eyes are so hollow & emotionless.I intensely look into her eyes and see her expressions twist into a crazy mixture of anger, and joy and hurt...

What happened might have happened but I feel this crazy urge to protect her...

Are you okay Radhika I ask her & she nods and walks away but what is with the tears I wonder???

Do you remember when we fell under

Did you expect me to reason with thunder

I still remember when time was frozen

What seemed forever was just a moment

Hurry up, hurry up

There's no more waiting

We're still worth saving

Radhika POV

He is real... more tears spring up in my eyes the crazy June Bug I knew when I was younger was infact back in my life.. I thought He would REMEMBER ME I pouted. Juno ( That is another stupid nickname I gave him back when I was 5)

despite everything I won't tell him Who I am I say loudly and cringe when I hear him ask me what wouldn't you tell whom Radhika or should I call you Pixie???

Feel the light

Shining in the dark of night

Remember what we forgot

I know it's a long shot

But we're bringing it all back

We're bringing it all back

Arjun POV

What wouldn't you tell whom Radhika or should I call you Pixie??? I see her eyes widen & she visibly cringes when I ask her the question...

I know you are my pixie I say and take her into a warm hug and see her tears streaming down my shirt... she keeps a tight hold on me still crying her heart out it's been a while since we had our best friend moment...

Mom will surely love having her angel back We both smile at each other

I Still Remember when things were Broken

But put together , the cracks were closing

Hurry up, hurry up

There's no more waiting

We're still worth saving

More from this chapter later I promise!!

The Paranoid Writer

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Lekha Ishwar

@-Destiny-

Sparkler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: swaralika
Hi.
Swaralika here.
Well, firstly your story is quite interesting. But before saying anything I just want you to know that I am NOT that great a writer. Still, if you read my fanfic here, and found it good, THEN ONLY PAY ATTENTION TO WHAT I SAY. Because even I don't know whether I'm saying right or wrong.
Anyway, as I read through it, it seems to me that this is just the rough sketch. So, going by this, it would be better if you jot this down as the prologue. And then maybe, in the first chapter you could you know throw some light at their past. That might be able to you know give a kick sort of a thing to their personality.
P.S. I'm warning you DONOT take my opinion seriously. I'm very small to even give an opinion on this, but still. So it would be better if you first listen to what the experienced writers have to say. Because as far as I'm concerned, I definitely do not match your standards. So...
I gave you a warning before hand.😆
But, the start was good.

Hi Yes I just had roughly started reading your story but because of personal commitments I wasn't able to comment Apologies!!!!! I agree with what you said & at some point of time I'll do a re edit and re work on the storyline... My novel is still way too rough and it needs to be sanded down with prompts & ideas

Thanks For Commenting...

Lekha😳

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NONIE

@Nonie12345

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Nice chapter Destiny😊

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Lekha Ishwar

@-Destiny-

Sparkler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Hi I'm Lekha's Sister here

She has been really sick this last few days With food poisoning & is super weak & she feel really bad that she couldn't write & will be back with a massive chapter soon

She says Sorry!!!

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