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Posted: 11 years ago
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DOLOUR
a smile that would just refuse to leave,
a vision which seemed to play on an infinite loop,
a sleepless night,
a blushing morning...
if this isn't love then what is?

An innocent smile graced her face,a smile that refused to leave promising the flowers to blossom, and the fireflies to glow.
"I'll always shine for you"
and she meant it,she would! After a long time something good was coming her way and all she could think of doing was basking in her glory...
a little joy,
a little hope,
a blossoming love
that refused to glow
while the stars shine
and the fireflies glow
I plunge into this darkness
that refuses to let go

Musicana was long forgotten,the most beautiful evening of his life a blur,the only thing whirling in his mind were a set of words that turned his life upside down.
"I think I love her Manik"
his heart shattered into million pieces and his guitar bore his wrath,his rage ,happiness,wasn't meant for him he accepted and closed his eyes.
~~~~~
The next day turned out to be the worst for her, for it started with a video that changed everything,someone knew and someone exposed ,crushing her into pieces as she stood helpless and got accused ,while the devil she'd been warned against smirked at his newly found victory ,her life was torn apart and he stood motionless , not a word or a sign,while everyone else accused and insulted ,even her own team seemed to be distant ,hot tears rolled down her eyes...
all she could hear was the hurt in voice as he sung his heart out and she stood statue still...looking back one last time...
and she knew...
as I stand here torn,
I look at you,
and I know
today I cry my heart out
for you and for me
but there's always a promising tomorrow,
and I promise I'd always shine for you
because your eyes tell me a different tale all together
and I trust you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
okay so it didn't really turn out the way I wanted ,but duh!!
here's my 2nd OS on the forums.
do leave ur honest views. criticism is welcome
love
Rads😃





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Posted: 11 years ago
#2
Aww dat was beautiful.. ❤️
'and I promise I'd always shine for you
because your eyes tell me a different tale all together'
i want 2 see dis happenin in da show..

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Gosh rads... This is so beautiful!!!
After a long time u hv written in the genre and I noe hw I always love when u write angst...not just because I'm a sadist!!🤣 but also cause you have a mesmerizing way with words...!!
The feels of manik...the dilemma he was in...he would always put his friends before his own...n u described the pain beautifully..!!
Den comes Nandini: turns out after all the happiness...she is again pushed into a sorrow...a heartbreak...difficult to take in...yet deep down she knows she would always shine for him and nly him...
It was beautifully written... The POEM...!! Rads gosh...it was utterly awesome...!! N no amount of my words would tell you exactly how I feel reading angst of urs!!
Regards
Safrena
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Posted: 11 years ago
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you are shining...

your words are shining...

this amazing piece of work is shining...

thanks for shining like this..🤗

Jiya😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice os. Dnt know what to say or how to say everytime I read smthng I felt this one is amazing bt then the nxt one prome me wrong. Excellent work, keep writing.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice os...
it completly justified the current situation
beautifully written
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful OS, I really loved the title of ur OS 'dolour' I have never heard that word before 😳 I loved how u wrote both of their emotions and in the end finished the OS giving hope that it will all be okay Thanks for the PM
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Posted: 11 years ago
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this ws so lovely...thnx rads for pm...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful! U described them perfectly! The way they must have felt! Nice! Keep goin!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: TheBlueAngel

Aww dat was beautiful.. ❤️


'and I promise I'd always shine for you
because your eyes tell me a different tale all together'

I m glad u liked it😳
i want 2 see dis happenin in da show..
me too...❤️


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