---- Vidarth OS: Stupid Little Mistakes----- - Page 2

Stupid Little Mistakes - the title is very intriguing... i wasn't sure what to expect when i saw it first, but it was very catching.

"Kabhi kabhi lagta hai yeh meri life nahi, kisi daily soap opera ki story hai" sometimes Vidushi really reminds me of myself... particularly when she's acting like a drama queen like this 😆 although, to some extent this is true... she has gone through so much, almost like a daily soap (except for the fact that it is a daily soap... so... yeah...)

"The one and only scarf she had in her bag was wrapped around her neck" why is she covering it up? I thought she would have been proud to show off the mark. Sometimes i forgot the distinguish between the Vidushi on the show, and the Vidushi you write. I love your Vidushi much more because we see a more vulnerable side to her that's often left out in the show.

"Mistake tha after all" this is the vulnerability that i was referring to... she's broken inside because of his comment... the comment that he threw out so easily without once thinking about the consequences. It's almost as though Parth assumes that she's incapable of feeling anything, of being affected by his words or actions.

"She was forced to look like an idiot, wearing a scarf in stiffing heat" aww you could never look like an idiot Vids... never... and stupid YoYo keeps taunting her 😡

"She knew if she fell, nobody would bother. Especially not him" sometimes i really hate this vulnerability because it really hits home. Everyone's been Vidushi at some point in their life, felt this kind of sadness, loneliness and rejection. I like that you can channel those feelings into your writing because at some point it stops being fiction and turns into something that is... real.

"He wouldn't even blink if she managed to get lost." really my heart broke at this point. How can one person deal with so much pain, so much hurt, and still be alive and walking. It hurts me to see Vidushi like this, even if it's just in words, it hurts bad. But somehow I thrive on feeling this hurt, I long to read stories like these (written by you of course). It's because I get to see raw human emotions, emotions I've been through myself, through the eyes, words and feelings of another.

Not sure if I've said this before. But thank you. Thanks for giving me a medium to let all those emotions out that I've kept inside for so long. Thank you for writing such beautiful lines that stay with me long after I've read your stories. Just, thank you.

"She didn't want anyone to see the tears starting to build up." I hate how she's never really been a part of the Dream Team, how she's never really been a part of anything. I remember that one scene where she was watching the Dream Team hugging and celebrating, and wishing that she was a part of that. I hate that she has to put up a facade because people (*cough* Parth *cough*) have always assumed the worst of her.

"Paani ji?" I LOVE YOYO!!! Seriously he is the most considerate person (for now at least)... And Vidushi gives him a genuine smile. All it takes is for someone to act openly and kindly towards her, then she automatically drops the mask. If only Parth could see this.

Parth acting all possessive of Vidushi when that leecher is looking at her I want to hate him for the way he's treated her, but he makes it so hard when he does sweet things like this for her. And then when he takes off his shirt and drapes it over her legs. It's like he actually cares, in fact he does care, but he just doesn't want to admit it to himself yet.

"Right now, she felt like a liability. An unwanted responsibility" there is no worse feeling in the world than that. The feeling that people are only around you because they have to be. That your existence is nothing but a burden on others... It's the worst feeling in the world, and not having anyone reassure you that you mean something to them only makes it worse.

"His fingers brushed against the bare skin" in the midst of all this dark and depressing talk, you added a small romantic moment. It's amazing how you can do that, it's almost like a small light at the end of the dark tunnel (oh god what am I even saying).

"Now she's going to stick to me more than ever" You make it really easy for me to hate Parth. He's such a self-centered jerk sometimes. That's why I like the way that a lot of your stories, if not all, are biased towards Vidushi, because I genuinely feel that she is the more vulnerable one in the relationship.

"A mistake. I know. It always is" I didn't think there was any more of my heart left to break, but I was wrong because I can feel it breaking all over again. I'm so proud of her when she gives him back the shirt though. She's not weak or dependent; she can fight her own battles, and she's showing him that by returning his scarf. But still, everyone needs someone to protect them sometimes.

"Parth couldn't help but smile at the innocence she displayed in her vulnerable state" oh so when she's sleeping and vulnerable you smile at her... but when she's awake and vulnerable and scared, what you do you? You scream at her, you insult her, you manhandle her. Sometimes I really wonder why Vidushi sticks with him so much when he treats her so badly. He needs a dose of reality, to see that she isn't going to be there for him always. Maybe then he will realize what he's missing out on.

"He felt the pangs of regret" YES YOU IDIOT.. she loved you, and I'm glad that you finally feel something other than hate for her. You used her, but that wasn't enough, you had to make her feel like shit by blaming your actions on your drunk state. But you choose now to feel regret, after you've already broken her in millions of tiny pieces.

"He was the animal" I'm not even going to mention the ways in which he's an animal. But I just want to say WOW, those six lines in this paragraph, or stanza, or whatever it is... those six lines are beyond beautiful. They're captivating and mesmerizing and so well written, especially those last 2 lines. There are so few words, but they pack a hard hit.

"Nightmare team" 🤣 nice one

"Unfortunately Parth had developed mind reading powers" or maybe he just knows you too well by know because he subconsciously notices everything you say and do.

"Mistake se hua. Don't worry. I don't need a bloody study buddy" she tries to protect herself from the pain that she knows is coming... she tries to distance herself from him because she's physically incapable of dealing with any more hurt. But they're meant to be together, and no matter what, she can't run away from that fact.

"'Genius' was unfortunately not one of Parth's many talents" yeah because if he was truly a genius then he would have understood her feelings for him a LONG time ago. Waise genius title toh Randhi ko bhi nahi jaata hai, he too has many faults in his thinking, especially when it comes to Sanyukta.

"She will never improve" you're right she won't improve, because people like you stop her from doing so. When you refuse to see her as anything but the picture you've painted of her being evil to the core, how on earth can she ever improve. How is she to improve when every time she tries, you knock her right back down.

"That section held the most unused books and was almost always deserted" this is scope for Vidarth romance I like it!

"She found herself against the wall, pinned between it and a hard masculine chest." NICE NICE!!! I know I was upset at Parth a second ago, but i'm liking this position of theirs a bit too much 😆

"She had a wide open mouth to match her big scared eyes" She's back to being vulnerable again. Gosh the poor thing goes through so much shit, she just deserves to be happy.

"His mouth clamped upon hers, taking in the dying shriek" Gosh Ash sometimes you make me question my sanity. I should be feeling disgusted right? I should be pissed off at Parth for taking advantage of her like that without her consent. I mean this is practically molesting isn't it? But damn, it's Vidarth and either way they're kissing so obviously I'm damn happy about it! And the WAY they KISS!! Man you write such hot kiss scenes it never feels like they're enough.

"Mistake pe mistake pe bloody mistake!" Good on you Vidushi, don't take any more crap from him and vent out all that anger and frustration you feel. You are NOT his punching bag, he doesn't have the right to use you and then throw you away when he's done.

"What are you drunk on now? Formulae?" 🤣 hahahahah that was hilarious Ash.. Trust Vids to break the tension with sarcasm.

"Set me free. I beg of you." 😭 I feel for her so much right now. Even though she's a fictional character. I just want him to make things better, be the light in her life, not send her into darkness like he has been doing.

"You want more. You want me" Cocky bast*** really hating you so much right now! And on top of that he gives her another love bite. Do you take pleasure in causing her pain, Parth?

"I'm sorry..." challo at least he realises he was in the wrong. I thought he would continue to be angry-young-man wala Parth for the rest of his life. Vidushi explodes at him and it took all my self-control to stop myself from jumping up and clapping. Girl power all the way! You show him Vids, you show him that he can't control you anymore.

"Maybe I don't want to be right anymore Vidushi" of course Parth has to go and become all gentle and vulnerable so i can't hate him. Why?? It's so much easier to hate him for his actions than to feel sorry for him because inside he's just as broken as Vidushi.

"Because I'm scared I'll believe you and let myself get hurt. I can't take anymore pain or betrayal. I can't open my heart. I'm damaged goods, Vidushi Kumar, and I'll damage you too." and just like that i switched from Team Vidushi to Team Parth. All his emotions, all his fears, everything he dreaded was put out in the open like that and seeing the true Parth, who he really is on the inside. It makes me want to make everything better for him. To take away all his pain and give him nothing but happiness. I've always been Team Vidushi, but in only a few lines you've managed to convert me to Team Parth.

"Now we're even" hehe that was super cute how she marked him as well... now he can deal with the prying eyes and teasing of others.

"Wait... where do we stand?" Woah, I never thought Parth would be asking Vidushi that. He always have the upper hand in their relationship. He controlled all the plays, and suddenly the roles are switched and the ball is in Vidushi's court.

"I have to make one more big mistake" ☺️ melting... melting... melting... and melted! Parth is too good to be true.. only sometimes though. I will never get enough of their kisses. And his apology is the sweetest thing he's ever said.

"I'll be a difficult boyfriend. But if you want me, I'm yours." These are the most perfect lines to come out of his mouth. Gosh how I wish someone would say something so romantic like that to me. He's putting himself out there for her, despite all his fears of heartbreak, he's willing to risk it all if it means he gets to be with her. But at the same time, he's letting her make the choice. Man TEAM PARTH ALL THE WAY!

"More kissing, less talking" 😆 naughty Parth is finally making an appearance, I was waiting for him to arrive.

"He saw a possibility of their future" this line made me the happiest... he just got together with her but he's already envisioning a their future together. It shows just how deep his love is for her.

"And this time, he was not going to let his chance at love escape. He was done making mistakes" what a beautiful way to end yaar Ash. Seriously, it's such a lovely though and a lovely way of summarizing all Parth's feelings.

Hats of to you yaar. I started off the OS on TEAM VIDUSHI, practically hating Parth and everything he did. I don't even know how you managed to do it but by the end I had switched to TEAM PARTH. You're amazing, and no matter how many times i say that, it will never be enough.

All the very best for your exams. Trust me I know how you're feeling. And I expect a brilliant OS from you upon your return 😉

Love you,

Rae

How the hell do you write all this? *mouth agape*

This is so deep and poetic, actually. So complex yet so simple. The simplest things complicate things... I am yet to see it's vice versa..

Will read it again and give my full review..

Because I have a lot to say on this.

*hugs*