Naina-Sandhir 4 shots Last part on page 5,culdnt PM :( sorry

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Guys!!! A N OS by me!!! Please drop your comments!!! Tell me if you like it or not..it's based on my fav song "Naina form Khoobsurat"
Happy reading...

The breeze was suddenly blowing fast...everything was silent...she was standing near the window...looking outside...crying...

*FLASHBACK*

"KAUN HUN TUMHARI RANDHIR MAIN???BOLO!!!"

"SAB KUCH! HO TUM MERI..."

She was a little shocked...but anger flowed now...

"AB KYA FAYEDA...huh???? WHY NOW??? KAAL MAIN JA RAHI HUN!!! MERI SHAADI HAIN TEEN DINO MAIN!!!"

It pierced his body, mind, soul...he fell down...and she also fell down with him...now both were crying...

"Pleeassee...mujhe chodke mat jayo..." He choked on his own voice...

"Ab kya fayeda Randhirr??" She cried...

"Main ab Sanyukta Mittal banne wali hun..."She whispered...

He went numb...he had now an expression like a statue...tears stopped...he froze...she cried...

"Naina nu pata hai
Naina di khata hai
Saanu kis gal di phir
Mildi khata hai
'

She kissed him...tears flowing...but he didn't respond...he was too numb...she broke the kiss and ran away...crying...and locked up the hostel room...Kaustaki didn't come still now...but somebody woke up due to this sound...

"What the..."She stopped...Vidushi saw an utterly broken Sanyukta in front of her...whose life engineering, Randhir...FITE...everything was finished...She was disheveled...she looked at Vidushi with pleading eyes...as if to say "Not today..."

"As if main kuch kehne wali thi.." She thought irritated...

But what happened today was a miracle...she actually felt BAD...like genuinely bad for her...the day when Parth told her that they both love each other...she was kinda noticing them...and actually she can understand Sanyukta's condition...she knows how it feels when you are never gonna be together with your love...Her own eyes moistened...

Sanyu walked like a zombie to the window and stared outside...

"
Neend ud jaave, chain chhad jaave
Ishq di faqeeri jad lag jaave
Neend ud jaave, chain chhad jaave
Ishq di faqeeri jad lag jaave

Ae mann karda ae thagi thoriya
Ae mann karda ae seena zoriyan
Aine sikh laiyan dil diyan choriyan
Ae mann diyan ne kamzoriyan (x2)

Aa..."

She was remembering all those moments spent with him...and crying...Vidushi looked sympathetic and actually said

"Dekho...is baat ke bare main hum aj ke bad kabhi baat nahi karenge...but...I am sorry...I know how you are feeling...don't worry...sab ko sab kuch nahi milta life main..."

Sanyu smiled a little bit...sensing her genuine concern and empathy...

Vidushi smiled a little too...

He was still n the storeroom...kneeling down on the floor...replaying all the thoughts on his head...

"Ab kya fayeda Randhirr??" She cried...

"Main ab Sanyukta Mittal banne wali hun..."She whispered...

"kYaa...who sachme..." He was not able to comprehend..it can't be...

"NOOO!!!" He screamed and cried...meanwhile Parth was already searching for him as to where he went...and then he heard the scream..and immediately rushed to the storeroom...and he also felt bad...


"Mann mann ki sunta jaaye
Sunta nahin mann waalon ki
Mann hi mann mein banaye
Duniya ek khayaalon ki.."


Randhir looked at him...with hope...at least Parth could tell him it was all a nightmare...Parth's eyes became moist and he patted his shoulders...and helped him stand up...Immediately Randhir hugged the life out of him...crying...and Parth hugged him back too...He knew how it felt to be away from someone who is your life...a tear escaped his eyes too...

Both of them crying...two souls...crying over their fate...crying about the situation...But we all know... Their destinies are meant to be together...

"Paas koi aave, door koi jaave
Hota hai kyun ye, koi samjhaave

Neend ud jaave, chain chhad jaave
Ishq di faqeeri jad lag jaave

Ae mann karda ae thagi thoriya
Ae mann karda ae seena zoriyan
Aine sikh laiyan dil diyan choriyan
Ae mann diyan ne kamzoriyan (x2)

Naina nu pata hai
Naina di khata hai
Saanu kis gal di phir
mildi khata hai

Neend ud jaave, chain chhad jaave
Ishq di faqeeri jad lag jaave

Ae mann karda ae thagi thoriya
Ae mann karda ae seena zoriyan
Aine sikh laiyan dil diyan choriyan
Ae mann diyan ne kamzoriyan (x2)"

End...how was it? Bad? Very bad??? Do tell!!!

Baishali

part 2- page 3

part 3- page 4

last part- page 5

Sorry guys couldn't PM anyone...some stupid error...sorry...




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Zyra thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res
Unres.
I'm the first one. Yipee!😛
It was a beautiful OS.👏
Short and Sweet.
Please continue with this and that too with a happy ending. _/\_
Keep Smiling and Keep Writing! :)
Edited by Zyra - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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This was sad dear :(
But beautiful xD
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nyc one ...touchy os
well done dear ...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Im felling too bad plzzz end this os with an happy ending u can write an prt in which parth nd vishushi help sanyu nd randhir to become sandhir
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zyra

Res

Unres.
I'm the first one. Yipee!😛
It was a beautiful OS.👏
Short and Sweet.
Please continue with this and that too with a happy ending. _/\_
Keep Smiling and Keep Writing! :)

Thnks Zyra!!!!!!!!!!! 😃 well if people say to continue this...i will...
baishali
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: sudi_4m_kol

nyc one ...touchy os

well done dear ...

thnks! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: MDKRM

Im felling too bad plzzz end this os with an happy ending u can write an prt in which parth nd vishushi help sanyu nd randhir to become sandhir

Thnks! but if more people will say to conitnue then only i will post part two...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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its so sad.. Please do continue it and end it on a happy note.. Its a request... Can't c randhir like dis
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey,
Amazing OS :)
Just loved it.
BT yaar y such a open end???? :(
Plzzz continue it na with a happy wala end.
Plzzz
N PM me when u do.

Love
-Pihu

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