SanDhir OS ~||WELTSCHMERZ||~

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Heyya guys! This is my first try at writing! I am terrible as a writer! But some of my friends on IF encouraged me to write! So, here I am with an OS! I dedicate my first OS to

Anu di (federized2210) :: She was the first person who suggested me to write. She is the sole reason I joined IF. She is an amazing writer and I can't help but admire her every time! Love your works! <3
Vaani (-Ms.Rocker-) :: She is my best friend cum sister on IF! She has been my constant supporter! Talking to her is fun and always will! Saying anything wouldn't suffice! All I can say is I love you Vaani! :*
I was inspired of writing this OS by the song Alvida. Please listen to it!
Here's the link- https://sound30.mp3slash.net/indian/dday/[Songs.PK]%20D-Day%20-%2002%20-%20Alvida.mp3
Happy Reading! :)





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07:00 pm
Randhir Singh Shekhawat, a 4th year student of FITE, Roorkee was on the terrace of the campus leaning against the railing. He stood there witnessing the sun's last struggle against death. The world had begun to dye red.
Red..,,color of blood..,,.death..,,
He felt his heart ache at those words. He closed his eyes as his thoughts made their way to his memory lane, to that fateful day
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"Umrrr bhar ka saath de jo, Kyun WAHI pyaar ho! Kyuuun...na mit ke jo fanaa ho, Woh BHI pyaar ho~~!"Sanyukta sung in her drunken state as she swung along with the lyrics. But instead she stumbled. Before she could fall, a pair arms held her.

"Theek se chalna toh aata nahi hai aur chali dance karne" Randhir spoke while helping her stand straight.

"Isse pehle ki tum kisi aur problem mai pado mai tumhe tumhaare room tak chorne jaaunga..." Randhir spoke but stopped when he found her looking at him.

"Umm...m.." he fumbled.

"...Agar kisi ne tumhe aisi halat mai dekha toh puri dream team suspend ho jaayegi" Randhir said not meeting her eyes.

Both in their drunken state headed towards the staff quarter assuming it to be the girl's hostel.

"Mera dorm kahan hai?" Sanyukta said checking the rooms.

"Main tumhe boys hostel leke nahi aaya"

"I trust you Randhir"

Randhir stopped moving and looked up to see her surprised by her sudden confession. She was standing in front of one of the rooms which were supposedly Professor Vardhaan's. She pushed the door open but the site in front of her caused her Goosebumps. Her facial expressions changed from confusion to shock to fear in a matter of seconds.

But her thoughts were interrupted by Randhir's voice.

"I love you Sanyukta" Randhir spoke in a trance.

He heard a gunshot from the room Sanyukta was peeping in. In a split second, Sanyukta pushed Randhir causing him to stumble and then fall on the floor! Randhir heard another gunshot and then found Sanyukta lying upon him bleeding uncontrollably.

"Sanyukta..." was all he could whisper.

She moved her shaking hands behind his back with utmost difficulty and dug her nails in his back. He winced in pain by her sudden act. He was shocked to why she was doing it. Suddenly, his pain lessened and the surroundings seemed to quite a bit. It was then he realized her grip had loosened.

"Sanyukta...Sanyukta..." He caught hold of her shoulder and pushed her gently so as to lay her down on the floor. His shirt was tainted with red tears of her body.

"San..." Randhir started but was cut off by Sanyukta.

"Ta..ta..ke..care...o..of...yo...your..yourself..." Sanyukta spoke with all her energy. Her last words to him. She wanted to see him happy even when she was not with him.

A lone tear rolled down her right cheek as she went into a deep slumber for eternity!

He panicked on seeing her close her eyes. He patted her cheeks to wake her trying his best to ignore the obvious.

"Sanyukta...Sanyukta wake up...talk to me"

"Sanyuktaaa..." He shrieked engulfing her in a hug begging her to open her eyes.
~~
His thoughts were interrupted by the persistent ringing of his phone. His mobile flashed Parth. He picked up the phone.

"Randhir! Sanyukta aur Vardhaan sir ko aaj insaaf mila hai. Dean ne apna crime confess kar liya hai. Us raat dean..." Parth narrated whatever Dean confessed in the court.
~~
I ran from the jail to take revenge from Vardhaan. I lost everything all thanks to him. I entered his room through the window careful not to make any noise.

I entered the room and found Vardhaan working on his table. I took out a pistol and pointed on his head. Vardhaan turned and was shocked to see me there. I told him the reason I was there. I told him I was there to kill him. He moved backwards. I thought he was afraid imagining what was coming up. But he attacked me with a vase. I never realized when he managed to get hold of the vase. Before he could play smart I shot him dead.

I heard a gasp from the door. I saw Sanyukta peeping inside the room. She panicked on seeing that I noticed her. I rushed towards the door. She was horrified and tried to run away. I couldn't let her go. She was an eye-witness. If she told anybody about what I did, I could be hanged right away. I raised my gun to shoot her and clicked the trigger.
But she was already out of my sight. I pushed the door ajar to kill her if she was alive by any chance.

I came outside the room and turned to my right. There lay Sanyukta and Randhir in a pool of blood. Randhir shrieked in pain while Sanyukta laid there as if someone suck life out of her. Of course, it was none other than me.

When I wished to kill Vardhaan , I was in rage. I couldn't think beyond that. But I killed the two poor souls just for my greed. I am an evil. I should be killed.
~~
Parth choked with his words. His voice cracked. Not able to say more he hung up the call. He was unable to narrate his best friend's DEATH incidence. He used to talk to her rudely in her last days. How he wished to reverse her death. If only he could change what he had done. He craved for her friendship..,,.for her.

"I couldn't bring Arpitaa back. But Sanyukta was with me. I could have enjoyed those moments. But I let go of her even without listening to her. I hurt her, ignored her...,.I made her go through a lot. I don't deserve anybody." Parth cried. He mourned for her bestie's death.
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"She spend her last minutes in saving my life...For a person who have always tortured you.,.for a person who gave you nothing except problems...you had a big heart Sanyukta...I wish to come to you right away but I know you would be upset on seeing me...You were a fighter and I know you want me to fight too...You wanted me to live a happy life ...But I am not so strong Sanyukta...life without you is miserable...but I wish to see that smile of yours...that smile, which could even force a dead flower to blossom again...I am ready to fight for you...just for your happiness...just for you and your friendship."
He stood up and wiped off his tears. He closed his eyes absorbing the dark around him as his thoughts again drifted to THAT day!
"Umrrr bhar ka saath de jo, Kyun WAHI pyaar ho! Kyuuun...na mit ke jo fanaa ho, Woh BHI pyaar ho~~!"Sanyukta sung in her drunken state.
It was then he knew it wasn't friendship. It was more. More than what he thought. More than what she assumed.
"There is never a time or place for true love. It happens accidentally, in a heartbeat, in a single flashing, throbbing moment."
- Unknown


#Shefali
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I would also like to thank everybody who encouraged especially my #Spamming_Sisters and Sana (Sana07)
Special thanks to Rii (Anyania) and Preetu di (DamselInDistres) for their help! ^_^ I love you guys! :*

Please share your views! ^_^

P.S. My friend Rosh (panchan) has also written an OS.
DO check it! Here's the link --> Sandhir OS ~||DECODING THE IMBROGLIO||~

And don't forget to share your thoughts! :D
Edited by ShefaliMalhotra - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res.
Unres.
Moi first. x)
Dhinka chika dhinka chika dhinka chika dhinka chika hey hey hey.. 🤣
MEEE FIRST! 😃
Yeah people. 😆
______________________________________________________________________________

You dedicated it to me!? Really?
*dies out of shock*
*remembers I have to type a comment while dying*
*wakes up in a hurry*
Thankyou so much! :D :*

Firstly I'd like to thanks Anuradha di for suggesting her to write, varna this stupid girl wouldn't have ever done anything like this and we wouldn't get such an awesome OS! So thanks a tonn. :)

Shivvu, this was beautiful. Who the hell told you that you are a terrible writer? They totally need to visit an asylum. x(
Don't listen to anyone Listen to me, this was unbelievably spectacular. You seriously need to keep writing more.

Okay, coming to the OS now,
When I saw the first line, I was like what is this girl up to! xP Then gradually I started loving each and every bit of the OS. I had such a deadly expression on my face for two reasons, firstly I wanted to kill that bloody Dean and secondly, I wanted to kill you for hiding your writing skills. :/ I felt so bad when Sanyukta died. She gave up her life for Randhir, for the one she loved. She realised in her last moment that she loved Randhir, she couldn't let him get hurt, could she? She saved his life by giving up hers. :'(
#Respect!

And Parth, he felt so bad upon deserting his bestie in her last days. He must be so guilty.

Randhir? I have nothing to say. He wouldn't be happy with his life without Sanyukta. He will try to for sure but it will be extremely difficult for him. :'( Especially when, she sacrificed herself for him.

This was indeed heart-touching Shivvu.
My sincere advice, keep writing. :)

Love you like crazy :*
Vanii ^_^

P.S. Sorry for this not-so-long comment. I ain't good at long comments and also I need to run! Moms shouting. Sorry.
Edited by -Ms.Rocker- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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MT!!! Do u know how much of a dumbass u are?!
U say u suck at writing?Eh?
If u say this is terrible then yeah! I would call u a big dumbass n much more than that!
Ok now enough of criticizing u on this!
Kuch zyada ho gaya na?
Well! Nahi hua🤣
Coming to the freakingly awesomish OS!
MT u are seriously a dumbass!
Okok now finally coming to the os🤣
Tere idea!! Woah mane!
Tune toh sanyu ko hi maar daala!🤣Par seriously!!
Uss ass**** dean ki itni himmat😡
Tuune itni himmat dene ki himmat bhi ki kaise use?😡🤣
He killed both sanyu n vardhan!😡
Bechara Randhir😭😭
"He stood there witnessing the sun's last struggle against death. The world had begun to dye red."
These lines! They stole my heart and made me wana cry😭
Tune meko ye lines bataye the par tab mujhe connection samjha nahi tha!
Par abb...u have connected them so well!T_T
Sun's last struggle against death...Sanyu's last struggle against life
And in these struggles..Randhir's world had been dyed red, the color of blood!
His world was almost over!
I'm happy that Sanyu could hear him confess before she breathed her last!
But I'm still sad that she died leaving Randhir all alone...
And then comes this wonderful line!
"Umrrr bhar ka saath de jo, Kyun WAHI pyaar ho! Kyuuun...na mit ke jo fanaa ho, Woh BHI pyaar ho~~!"
I died reading this line!
Its soo heart-wrenching! Especially after reading this OS!
Imma cry anytime soon T_T
MT
U
gotta
admit
that
this
Os
of
yours
is
too
very
AWESOME!
It jus doesn't seem like u r writing for the 1st time!
It jus feels like you have been writing for ages together!
Your OS is extremely stupendous! Jus like you!
Dare u talk one more word against ur writing skills ever again!
M gonna come to ur place n shoot u then n there!Okay?

Love ya too very much MT :*:*

Too much pyaar ubharing 🤣
Your Rosh <3

Edited by panchan - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res

unres...


Shivi, you are such a liar ..

I hate you that you didn't write before ..

This was so beautiful ..

I am currently thinking on how to pester you write again ..

*evil smile *

This was first attempt and you literally .. noo noo .. Practically blew my mind with your writing ..

Now this bio mind is writing the comment .. haahaa

You dedicated your first attempt, your first os to them which is worth it mane!!!!!!!!!

And the link hopefully works .. *fingers crossed *

Coming to the update ..

The first thing that stole my heartwas this!

He stood there witnessing the sun's last struggle against death. The world had begun to dye red.

This line is so simple but has unlying thoughts and depth in it which immeasurable ..

Then the flashback part came and I m already in sandhirland ..

Sanyukta talli .. mane!!! I was right ...

Main talli, main talli main talli ho gayi .. *winks *

Haye, Randhir cares for her so much ..

He is himself in drunken state but see, he is accompanying her to her hostel ..i mean staff quarter ..

*eyes pops out *

What are they doing there in this state??????

Mystery man!!! Mystery!!!!

OMG!!!!!!!!! Professor Vardhan's room .. see their courage mane!!!

And what the ...??!!!??

Gunshot !! Professor Vardhan!! Sanyukta !!

What is happening yaar!!??!!

Everything is just like a 10 seconds things revolving in front of my eyes..

Unexpected, surreal,

I m speechless ..

*reads the line again *

I m shocked out of wits ...

You killed Sanyukta??

She gave her life only to save him, her Randhir...

And who did this!!!!????

DEAN... I want to kill him now.. how dare he??? He is the reason behind a sad ending.

Mane shivi!!! I m speechless after reading this..

I don't know what more should I write...

Everything is in front of my eyes still I m hesitating to type the inner turmoil inside me...

It is speechless ... I personally like sad endings but this one was heart-wrenching???

Ok, I have no more words to say after reading this beautiful piece of writing of yours

And please... now I m going to torture you for writing..

So Do Write More!!!!!!!!

Edited by anyania - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Shivi!!
This was SO touching!
As i had told you, I felt really sad after reading this. Rula daala moi ko 😔
Nii!!! Sandhir ke sath aisa apshagun nahi hoga 🤣 🤣

This was SO well written!
You HAVE to write more!
Am sorry,. I had planned to unres badda wala 🤣 But time seems so less 🤣
I love u :-*
Edited by angel_anisha - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Heya Shivuu <3
*sees your scrap*
*wonders what is it*
*opens it*
*sees the title then the writer*
*shocked would be understatement*
*Jumping like a kid who has got a candy*


Damn I am so happy that you started writing!!
Yay...!!!
Who the bloody hell told that you're a terrible writer that person is getting a punch right in the middle of his face with a complimentary kick. I TELL YOU



Do hell with people who say so. You're are a AMAZIIINNNGGG WRITER...

Dude what a choice of Song.. You're awesome yaar... *hi-fie*



Happy that you dedicated your first OS to wonderful writers thay deserve it. Congratulations you BOTH. <3

You Both are People whom we look towards for writing with such precision.



The OS was fantabulouslyawesome...
Why didn't you posted it before? You should have done it long before yaar...

Remember one day you asked me if you wrote something will I comment. Then here is my irritating comment for you LOL.


When I read the first line only I was so shore of it that the OS would be BLAST. and so it was.

Heart touching OS <3

Damn I so hate this dean. Feel like chopping his head off. Do hell with him. He killed Sanyu and Vardhaan both. May he rot in hell oh yeah he certainly will. No doubt!!



Awww while going also Sanyu cared about RD. Why did she died!!😭

Okay now chuck that dean will not spoil the comment on the mere mention of his name.

Okay Enough of my Bak Bak. Please keep on writing cause you are hell amazing..!!😳

Love You :*

Edited by sandhirlover15 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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it was awesome n very heart touching ❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I was on the verge of crying..
It was so emotional..the ending touched my heart..
Already I am an emotional fool .. 😭
Keep writing dear..
Janavi
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Posted: 11 years ago
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This was heartfelt.😭
beautifully written👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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luvd it to the core👏👏
awesome writing⭐️

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