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Posted: 9 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: --Ari--

that was quick.

🀣

RES.

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You know the concept of a story is with every chapter you reveal something to put the reader at ease. you dont kill them with further suspense 🀣 🀣

Damn its just like the show. one episode ends and you cant wait for the next episode. now i want chapter two. πŸ˜†

Girl you are damn good πŸ‘ Especially with the mystery...intrigue part...you know how to keep your readers glued and HOW.! 😳

Liked abeers possessiveness for the song and for meher. Adorable it was ❀️

The entire way you described the greenhouse and mehbeer singing was just so simple yet so beautiful and really felt private ❀️

but the beginning sadism part was just THE best πŸ‘ and i am sure theres lots more of that coming. *excited* 😈 nothing like a good bout of making the hero cry 🀣

Lekin lekin lekin----india forum wants to know...meher ka kya hua...?
did she jump?
did she break her leg?
did abeer kill her?
is abeer alive
etc etc etc

🀣🀣

*sorrry if i m being too crazy. πŸ˜† I am ari btw. whats your name? dont worry not everyone in this forum is crazy like me 🀣 *

P.s you have to watch the show. Its like ☺️ You'll not regret it πŸ˜†


Loll, I think I told you a lot about Abeer. At least a lot more than what I was hoping for. πŸ˜›

Haha, you'll be happy to know I'm writing Chapter Two right now. πŸ˜†

Aww, thank you. I'm so glad to know that I still have that charm in my writing. πŸ˜ƒ

Oh, you're gonna love the beginning of the next chapter. [ROFL]

Tell India-Forums that they will just have to wait and see for what happens. πŸ˜‰

Loll, don't apologize. Your responses are too cute!

Hi Ari, I'm Gurleen! I've come back to I-F after a really long time so I'm still feeling a bit awkward on how to reply to people. πŸ˜³πŸ˜†

I'm going to start it soon. It's really weird but I'm watching this new series of Scooby Doo and I'm almost done. So I'm going to start right after that's finished. That was so random but yeah.. πŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12
You are a wonderful writer πŸ€—
Ek chutki update ki keemat aap kya jaanu? 🀣

I loved the first chapter! It was nice to see Nisaar's point of view.
I love how the prologue and chapter are separate pieces.
Maybe connecting the dots isn't a skill of mine because I'm a little confused πŸ˜†
But I'm sure it will unravel as the story progresses.

Mere nishaan <3 god I love that song

Please update soon and thanks for the pm!

I'm Ashu by the way but most people call me Baby :)

Cheers, baby! <3
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Posted: 9 years ago
#13
Gurleen , u better update fast , I'm dying with curiosity .
I want to know , what's going on . And the prologue 😳 my eyes popped out . What happened to Meher !!

Ur suspense is killing me . Must agree u have a way with words , very brilliantly written .
This is my kind of story u no. I like sadisims πŸ˜†
Waiting waiting
Update soon and pls pm me
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14
Amazing prologue
Chapter one it's beyond amazing
I loved your way of writing
Well written
Superb

Please pm me whenever you update
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Posted: 9 years ago
#15
chapter two

"Sir, sorry to interrupt but a boy from the hostel has arrived. He says he has some information that could help with the case." The constable informed his superior.

"Send him in right away." Inspector Arjun Srivastav replied.

He was reading through the autopsy report and making some notes. He noticed an escalation in the killer's behavior. His previous victims' deaths had seemed almost accidental or self-inflicted. A slit to the wrist, a jump into a deep river, being run over, etc. There had been virtually no reason to connect all the murders to one person until this one. With this one he had slipped up. There was too much aggression involved. It was almost as if the killer couldn't determine if he wanted to torture the victim or kill her then and there.

"Sir,"

Without looking up Arjun motioned the boy to sit down in the seat in front of him. After a few beats of silence, and finishing up his last thought, Arjun looked up. He scrunched his eyebrows as he tried to recollect the boy's face.

"You're... that friend right?" Arjun flipped through the pages of his notebook to find the images of people that he had interrogated so far. "Nisaar?"

The young boy nodded his head in affirmative.

"What kind of information do you have?"

Arjun noticed the hesitation in the boy's face and decided to nudge him further. He folded his hands in front of him and spoke in a clear manner.

"Look Nisaar. If you didn't think you had something useful for me, then you would have never come here in the first place. So whatever you have, do say it with a clear and open heart. You never know, something that you find to be so insignificant could end up being the vital clue that we need to solve the case."

Nisaar nodded his head. Gulping, he ran his hand over his mouth.

Putting his arms over the table, Nisaar spoke. "I wasn't in the right state of mind. I mean after everything that had happened, things were getting a bit difficult for me. So, I decided to go to my friend Abeer for help. And well, I knocked and he didn't answer. I... he was more affected by what happened than me. I mean I don't know why but things just got really bad for him. It was like he was so undecided on how he should feel. Sometimes he would be so silent that we wouldn't even know that he's in the room and sometimes he would lash out so aggressively that we would start to feel threatened. He... he was just really confused and messed up. He just wasn't talking clearly to anyone. He would just mumble things to himself and cry and pull at his hair and just beat himself over things. So I got really scared for him and I wasn't well that day and I was starting to feel scared for myself as well. So I went to him and he wouldn't open the door. So I broke into it and I found a photo..."

Arjun shook his head indicating Nisaar to continue speaking. When he didn't answer, Arjun encouraged him.

"Whose photo did you find?"

For a response, Nisaar took out the photo from his inner pocket and slid it across the table. Arjun picked it up and analyzed it. Abeer was in an intimate position with Meher. He put the photograph down and observed Nisaar's reaction. He had his head bowed down and had his hands clenched tightly.

"I take it you didn't know anything about this?" Arjun asked.

Nisaar shook his head.

"Do you know who took the photo?"

Another shake.

Arjun sighed.

"Do you know who might have known about this? Other friends? Maybe family? Cousins?" Arjun asked.

"No. I didn't ask anyone. I came here first thing."

"Hmm.." Arjun hummed as a new set of questions started springing into his head.

"Do you at least know where this photo might have been taken?" Arjun inquired hoping to get some sort of lead.

Nisaar picked up the photo and analyzed it for himself. He scrunched his eyebrows as he tried to remember the location.

"I feel like I do but... I can't remember..." Nisaar became even more confused as a new line of thought started sprouting in his mind. "Something was happening that day..."

"What makes you think that?"

"His clothes," Nisaar bit his lip and pointed at Abeer. "I remember he had taken so long to get ready that day. In fact, the whole day. He had made an appointment early morning to get his hair done, facials, manicures, you name it. And his clothes? Don't even get me started on that. He had spent hours perfecting his look. It had taken me to go to his home and ask his mother to help him out before he had calmed down. It was so clear that he was going on a date and when I even asked him about it, he just brushed it off. Didn't want to jinx it or something like that."

"Hmm, do you think his mom might know?" Arjun asked.

"Maybe, but I'm not a hundred percent sure. At the time she didn't know who it was or at least that's what it seemed like to me."

"What about the location? Do you know anything about the location itself?"

"I think it's Rocco's. It's a new restaurant that had opened up. There was a big hype and getting tickets to the place was so hard. I know I tried getting some for my girlfriend at the time. I shouldn't be surprised that Abeer got them. See," Nisaar turned the picture around so that he could show Arjun what he was referring to. "The buildings at the back? Arjun squinted his eyes so that he could make out a couple names of various other restaurants from the locale. Juniper and Spoon & Fork were two that he could make out really well.

"I do," Arjun said holding onto the photograph. He flipped to an empty page and started making more notes. "Nisaar, I really appreciate this. This is truly a huge help."

"Do you think Abeer is okay?"

Arjun pondered for a bit before answering.

"Nisaar, you told me that Abeer had started to get really angry. Have you ever felt like he could cause you harm?"

Nisaar shifted in his seat.

"Has he ever gotten violent before?"

"Hey that's not fair. Given the right circumstances anyone can lose their mind. Anyone can get mad and start lashing out." Nisaar defended.

"I'm not asking about anyone Nisaar. I'm asking about Abeer." Arjun clipped. "Has he ever made you scared? Or doubt him? Like, you might not even know him?"

"Sir, by asking me so many questions you're intentionally trying to create doubt against him. And frankly, I don't appreciate that."

Arjun raised his hands in surrender.

"Fair enough. You can go now, but before you leave, here." Arjun offered Nisaar a card. "Get some help kid." Nisaar held it but Arjun tugged on it before seriously saying, "Get out while you can."

Arjun let go and Nisaar left the station, understanding the hidden meaning behind his warning.

Arjun opened up the page where he had recorded all of Abeer's information and scanned it. Nothing had seemed out of the ordinary in his statements. But Arjun knew he had to look at it again in a new context. The information he has right now is without any connection to the victim. However, underlie it with Abeer and Meher being in a relationship, most of his statements don't make sense. To sort it out, Arjun knew he had to first understand Abeer and Meher's relationship.

He picked up their photograph and observed it.

"So, just where are you two lovebirds hiding?"
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Posted: 9 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: Avalanche.

You are a wonderful writer πŸ€—

Ek chutki update ki keemat aap kya jaanu? 🀣

I loved the first chapter! It was nice to see Nisaar's point of view.
I love how the prologue and chapter are separate pieces.
Maybe connecting the dots isn't a skill of mine because I'm a little confused πŸ˜†
But I'm sure it will unravel as the story progresses.

Mere nishaan <3 god I love that song

Please update soon and thanks for the pm!

I'm Ashu by the way but most people call me Baby :)

Cheers, baby! <3


Aaww, thanks Ashu! πŸ€—

Bas aise filmy wale dialogues deti jao, puri story abhi bata doongi. πŸ˜†

Thank you! Nisaar's perspective was the only option I had since he's the only character I know out of Meher and Abeer. Plus from what I've seen on the show so far, he's such a devdas, brooding type. So it's super easy to write him out all tortured and messed up. πŸ˜†

If you're confused about anything then let me know! I tend to leave out a lot more than I reveal. It's a bad writing habit that I'm trying to fix. 😳

I heard the both the happy and sad version today and omg, I have so many ideas for it! πŸ˜ƒ

Btw, sent you the pm! ^_^
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: madhufx9...

Gurleen , u better update fast , I'm dying with curiosity .

I want to know , what's going on . And the prologue 😳 my eyes popped out . What happened to Meher !!

Ur suspense is killing me . Must agree u have a way with words , very brilliantly written .
This is my kind of story u no. I like sadisims πŸ˜†
Waiting waiting
Update soon and pls pm me


Thank you so much. 😳

What happened to Meher is going to be revealed in Chapter 3 actually. So you'll have to wait for that. πŸ€”

Wow, sorry but I'm just laughing over how I have attracted all the sadists to this story. πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

On a side note, I watched the first episode of the show and I feel like the samosa supplier that Meher was talking about. 🀣

Sorry, just a random tidbit. It's really late right now. Almost two in the morning... I should sleep.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: zaya-firdose

Amazing prologue

Chapter one it's beyond amazing
I loved your way of writing
Well written
Superb

Please pm me whenever you update


Thank you so much! It really means a lot that my writing is being well liked. It really does boost up my morale. :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#19
Omg this story is making
Me mad

Awesome awesome awesome

"what happened to abeer"
"what's that photo story "
"why arjun said "So, just where are you two lovebirds hiding"

Why arjun is saying that "Has he ever gotten violent before?"

It's like I watching episode oops reading 😎

So mysterious

Anyways I loved it
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Posted: 9 years ago
#20
Hi Gurleen..

Its just now I read the prologue..chapter 1 n also chapter 2...must say gal ur awesome at writing..u know very well how to keep a reader hooked to ur writing..this is pretty mysterious..i feel like I read Agatha Christie..this writer is amazing at mystery though I read just one book of the author I loved it..after a long while m reading a mystery n tat too on mehbeer..lovin it...

So looks like abeer n meher wer dating...but it was quite a secret...n prologue says that someone tried attacking meher...is it abeer? But also I see tat meher did dial the last no n it was answered..so thr are chances that abeer came to her rescue..?? Now both are missing?

Omggg soo many questions rolling in ma head..awesome story dea..pls pm me the next update n yea do not hesitate to write..ir awesome at it ! Welcome to the forum n yes I am Scooby doo fan too :D start watching BD soon..m sure u ll be able to relate to the characters soon ;)
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