I love the way you construct this simple moments between the three/two.
That walk question was so sweet and natural!! Your writing brings me joy because it's so simple yet so new because you never get to see such scenes in ITV!!
It's funny how you like simple things whereas I try to think how I can make this more complicated like the real show. I'll try not to think too much now😂😂
Thankyou for such a beautiful response
Happy reading!
Episode 19
Mallika(entered): haww dadi yeh main kya Sun rhi hoon? Aapke saath bohot bura hua. Ab ek aur bin bihayi maa yahan aayegi?
Rey(in mind): Yeh fir aa gai
Mallika: Dadi maine toh kaha hi tha. Ab gandagi, gandagi ko kheech toh leti hi hai na
She tried to make a innocent face eyeing Pranati
Rey: Yeh toh tune sahi kaha Mallika, achha tujhe kaun kheech laya?
Everyone tried to hold their laughter listening to Reyansh's on point sarcasm.
Dadi: Bas bas. Bohot jhagda mazak ho gaya. Sun oye Maan, jitni nautanki karni thi tune kar li, ab mera phaisla sun. Navya aur uska bacha iss ghar ke aas paas bhi nhi aayenge. Arre janti hoon main aisi ladkiyon ko. Pehle Armaan ko phasaya aur uske bache ke saath pregnant ho gai, ab kyunki Armaan haath se nikal gaya toh usne tujhe phasaya.
Mallika: Bilkul sahi kaha dadi aapne. Iss ghar mein ek najyaz bachi kafi hai.
Rey: MALLIKA!!!!!!!
Everyone startled hearing Reyansh's loud voice. His eyes were blood red due to excessive anger.
Rey: Tu meri beti ke baare mein baat kr rhi hai, soch samajh ke bol. Meri beti hai woh, Reyansh Khurrana ki beti. Najayaz nhi hai. Sabko pata hai ki tu yahan kyun aati hai. Tujhe yahan sirf isiliye aane dete hai kyunki tu Riya ki behn hai. Toh Riya ki behn bnke hi reh, meri beti ke baare mein kuchh bhi bolne ka hakk tujhe nhi hai. (He took a pause). Aur dadi yeh kya aap 19th century ki baatein kr rhi hai. Kya bin bihayi ma, kya najayaz bache. Aankhein kholke dekhiye, iss saare phassad ki jadd apka yeh pota hai. Hamesha ek aurat ki galti nhi hoti. Galti hum jaise raheezadon ki hoti hai, jinko sirf maze krne aate hai. Aur jab responsibility ki baat aati hai, peethh dikha ke bhag jaate hai. Apne surname ko itni bhi importance mt dijiye dadi ki aap bhool jayein insaniyat kya hoti hai. Bohot ho gaya ab. Ab hum apne kaand, apne siyape khud solve kreinge. Ab hum sahi karein ya galat, izzat bade ya kam ho woh hamari zimedaari hogi. Ab koi bhi iss ghar ke logon ki galti ka ilsaam kisi aur per nhi lagayega. Khasker ke ek ladki per.
He gave a last look to everyone and stomped back to his room in full swag. There was a silence in the room and after a few seconds everyone dispersed to their respective places.
Reyansh was sitting on his bed tapping his feet on the floor aggressively. His fingers fidgeting without even him knowing. Pranati entered through the door and saw him in this state. She cleared her throat to grab his attention. His eyes diverted towards her.
Pranati: Mere paas tumhare mood ko thhik krne ka ek tareeka hai. Alcohol se bhi better.
Rey: aisa kya hai tere paas?
She took out a bottle of coconut oil from her behind and showed it to him. She grinned seeing him. Scene shifts to Reyansh sitting on floor and Pranati sitting on bed. She was massaging his head with oil. His eyes were closed and he looked really relaxed just like she said.
Rey: Ab mera mood thheek hai toh tu mujhe bta sakti hai ki maine neeche kya galti kri
Pranati: Tumhein kaise pta main yeh kehne wali thi?
Rey: Kyunki tu mujhe kabhi kuchh nhi samjhayegi jab main gusse mein hoon. Chal bata ab...
Pranati: Tumhein Armaan se chilla kr baat nhi krni chahiye thi
Rey: Really Pranati? Tumhein pta hai na usne kya kiya hai. Usse toh apni galti ka pachhtava bhi nhi hai. Maine toh Maan se pehle hi kaha tha ki Armaan se baat krne ka koi fayeda nhi hai.
Pranati: Tum aur tumhari family ka gussa bilkul ek jaisa hai. Zara samjho Reyansh, Armaan ke liye yeh sab kitna awkward hoga. Uska khud ka bhai uske bache ka step father bnne ki baat kr raha hai. Agar Navya iss ghar mein aayi toh usse, Maan, Armaan, Riya aur Navya ke bache ko saath mein rehna padega. Woh itni saari cheezein ek saath handle nhi kr paya. Aur gusse mein kuchh bhi bol diya.
Rey: Toh tu kya chahti hai, main Maan ko kahun ki apne pyaar ko bhool jaye?
Pranati: Nhi, tum Armaan ko samjhao ki sabse pehle iss baat ko accept kre. He has to let go of Navya. Usse yaad dilao ki Maan uska bhai hai, apni selfishness mein woh uski khushiyan toh nhi chheen sakta na. Aur sabse important baat, usse Riya ko sach batana padega, woh yeh sach deserve krti hai. Uska gussa shaant hone do aur aram se maturely baat krne jao. Time lagega per woh samjh jayega.
Rey: Tu paida hi aisi hui thi ya tune Khurrana khandan per koi PHD kri hai?
Pranati: Tumhare pariwar ko samjhne ke liye mujhe koi PHD ki zaroorat nhi hai. Ek insaan ko samjh liya mtlb poore pariwar ko samjh liya.
Rey: Toh iss khandan ke ek aur insaan ki bhi madad kr de
Pranati: Kiski?
Rey: Meri. Jugnu ko mere bachpan ki photo dekhni hai aur album store room mein hain. Dhoondne mein help kr de.
Pranati: Thheek hai, per usse pehle Hashtag coffee ho jaye?
Rey: Tu baithh main tere liye banata hoon, Hashtag yun gaya aur yun aya.
He stood up and ran to kitchen to make coffee for both of them
Originally posted by: sanakhan240201
It's funny how you like simple things whereas I try to think how I can make this more complicated like the real show. I'll try not to think too much now😂😂
Thankyou for such a beautiful response
I watch Balaji shows only for those simple moments in between the drama because that is the actual story. They add the drama to grab the viewers attention.
But back to your story, I genuinely love the way you construct the scenes because it feels like I am reading about someone real.
Loved the champi scene in the last chapter!
I can actually see this scene in the show.....so good it was...please continue...it's like Oxygen..till we get them back
Thank you for continuing this!
It's going really well!
Excited for what comes next!
Happy Reading!
Episode 20
Reyansh coughed as he entered the store room.
Rey: Kitni mitti hai yahan
Pranati: Haan toh tumhe kya laga, khazana hoga?
Rey: Lele, tu bhi maze lele
Pranati: Yeh sab chhodo, tumhe kuchh bhi pta hai pics kahan hongi.
Rey: Kisi ek carton mein bohot saari albums aur loose photos hongi. Chal, ninja ko promise kiya hai, poora toh krna padega.
They started searching for the box in different directions.
Pranati: Waise aaj tumne jo jugnu ke baare mein Mallika ko bola woh sunke mujhe bohot achha laga
Rey: Main bas thak gaya tha najayaz sun sun ke. Jugnu itni chhoti hai yaar aur usne yeh kitna suna hoga. I wish main kuchh kr pata.
Pranati: Tum kar toh rahe ho, tum apne bachpan ka hissa uska saath share kr rahe ho.
She suddenly started laughing like maniac. Rey turned around to see her.
Rey: Dimag ka koi screw dheela ho gaya hai kya?
Pranati: W-woh....hahahahahah
Reyansh wondered why she was laughing. He went near her looked in the direction she was looking. His eyes became wide and suddenly covered the box she was looking at.
Pranati: 'Rey ka saman hai, agar chhua toh REYzor maar dunga' hahahahahah
She repeated what was written on the front of the box in a weird accent and Reyansh looked embarrassed at her.
Rey: Yaar bacha tha main jab yeh likha tha.
She kept laughing. Reyansh was offended for a bit but then smiled seeing her laughing whole heartedly. He hasn't scene her laughing this openly in a long time. He really wished that she be this happy all the time. He shook his head in amusement and lifted up the box. They both sat on the floor and took the support of the wall. He took out a few photos of him and his brothers and reminisced of old days. Pranati looked for good stuff too. And she did find something amazing.
Pranati: Yeh tumne abhi tak bcha ke rakhin hai?
Rey(smiling): Dance competition ki pictures? Yaad hai main kitna nervous tha?
Pranati: Haan, pehli baar Mr Reyansh confident Khurrana ko nervous hota hua dekha tha.
Rey: Aur teri hassi nhi ruk rhi thi.
Pranati: Woh one hand wala lift tumse tab tak nhi hua jab tak...
Rey: Jab tak humne competition mein perform nhi kiya tha. Usse pehle mujhe bohot darr lagta tha. Kitni baar giraya tha maine tujhe. Kitni baar tujhe chot lagte lagte bachi thi.
Pranati: Per mujhe tum per pura bharosa tha ki tum mujhe kabhi chot nhi lagne doge. Waise tum kitna bhi stud bnne ki koshish krlo, tumhein logon ki parwah bohot hai.
He saw her and gave a sad smile to her
Rey: Kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki main aisa kyun hoon? Main jiski bhi care krta hoon end mein jaake usse hi sabse zada dukh deta hoon.
Pranati: tum future ko sochke apna aaj toh decide nhi kr sakte na. Achha tumhein yaad hai na ki tumhe dance competition mein kabhi part lena hi nhi tha. Aur jab main tumhe sikha rhi tab tumne kitni baar kaha ki hum mazak bnke reh jayeinge. Agar main tumhari baat maanke Decide kr leti ki hum bohot bura perform krne waale hain, toh hammare paas itni achhi memory hoti kya? Jab tak tum apne aapko bura samjhoge tab tak tumhari achhai kaun dekhega?
Rey: Tune toh dekhi na
Pranati(grinning): Ab tumhein toh pta hi hai, main hoon hi ajeeb...
Rey(giggling): Baat toh sahi hai, duniya ki sabse ajeeb ladki hone ka award jata hai Pranati Mishra ko.
He took out a trophy from the box and gave to her. She bowed down and took it like an actual award. It was then she finally saw what trophy it was. It was the one they both won after the dance competition. She admired the trophy for a while.
Pranati: Yahan toh sach mein khazana mil gaya
He smiled on her statement. They picked up the box and went back to Reyansh's room to keep it safe. Except some photos of his and his brothers that he knew would help Armaan remind what his brother meant to him. He took them went down to his room and knocked on the door.
Rey: Aram se baithh kr baat krien?
Armaan nodded and sat down with him. They had a long conversation and Reyansh tried his best to be a good elder brother and guide him to do the right thing. At the end Armaan said nothing and stood up. He walked to Maan's room and Rey got scared that he is gonna fight with him again. He ran behind him to stop him but it was too late as he was already face to face with Maan
Armaan: Tu pyaar krta hai Navya se?
He asked in a heavy tone. Maan nodded nervously as he though he is gonna get punched in the face again.
Armaan: Woh bhi tujhse pyaar krti hai?
Maan: Ha..na..pta nhi
Armaan: Pta nhi? Aise kaise nhi pta?
Maan: w-woh maine abhi tak usse i-iss baare mein ba-baat nhi kri hai
Armaan: Yeh lo Rey bhai, isne abhi tak propose hi nhi kiya.
Maan and Reyansh were shocked seeing his reaction. They couldn't believe that this was happening.
Armaan: Kya ghoor ghoor ke dekh rahe ho mujhe? Shaadi krni hai toh propose toh krna padega na.
Maan's smile grew wider and wider and hugged Armaan tightly.
Maan: Thanks bhai, thanks
Armaan: Yeh thanks na Rey bhai ko bol. Unhone mujhe yaad dilaya ki hum dadi ki wishes puri karne mein itne busy ho gaye the ki hum bhool gaye hum bhai hai. Aur bhai ke liye toh jaan hazir hai
Maan: Fir toh mujhe Prabhi ko thanks bolna chahiye, kyunki aajkal Rey bhai ke badle badle behaviour ke peechhe toh Prabhi ka hi haath hai na.
Rey: Tu meri taang baad mein kheech lio, pehle yeh bta Navya ko kab propose kr raha hai?
Maan: Jab Riya bhabhi allow krein tab. (He turned towards Armaan) Unhe batana toh padega na
Armaan: Hmmm...tu tension mt le, main usse sab sach bta dunga. Waise Rey bhai, itni achhai hazam nhi ho rhi
Rey: Ab jab healthy khana seekh liya hai, toh hazam bhi krna seekh jayeinge.
They all laughed gave each other a group hug.
Originally posted by: Natashapaul
Thank you for continuing this!
It's going really well!
Excited for what comes next!
See it for yourself ;)
How did I missed this FF
Will catch up soon 😘
Gonna read this from the start😛
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