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@JNam
I really loved your MoNa story and you're style of writing is commendable! It didn't even take me a lot to get pulled into the story.
I was literally able to picture each scene in my head because it was written so beautifully and you paid attention to every detail.
Ayna's relationship with Emran, her feelings before compared to her feelings now, Ayna and Mohsin's thoughts, How Ayna enjoys conversing with Mohsin and how she feels hurt when he tends to shut her out, Mohsin's reservedness, etc.
I loved how Mohsin, while writing his feelings and thoughts out to Nadia, he always ends up talking about Ayna in some way or the other. I also loved how Mohsin mentioned the reason to why he refuses to acknowledge his feelings towards Ayna and hides his true feelings from her. As a reader I was able to understand where he's coming from and why he acts the way he does. I'm not going to talk much because I don't want to ruin it for the people who still haven't read it.
Even though you used the Hindu culture in your story, since you said that you chose to write about the culture that you grew up being involved with, I loved how Mohsin and Ayna were still so much in character. Also, it actually made your story more real since you wrote about something you've seen or experienced.
Overall, I can't say how much I enjoyed reading your story. Your writing skills are praise worthy 👏
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