Unnale Unnale - NEW ff

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Posted: 9 years ago
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part 1

rekha : yenga ,poi edhavadhu udhavi venumanu keteengala?

muthukumar : ila pola

rekha : poi keka sonen la, vayasanavanga rendu perum oru ponnuma vela seiyudhu, pavama iruku

muthukumar : enakumdhan d vayasagudhu,

rekha : na onnum neenga ipo elavattamnu solala, naalu peruku udhavi senjadhan namaku seivanga, adha therinjukonga

muthukumar : apo unoda helping nature ku pinadi selfishness iruku, correcta

rekha : aama apdine vechukongalen, ipo poreengala ilaya?

muthukumar : naa veetla nimmadhiya irukarathey sunday oru naaldhan, adhu unaku pudikala apdidhana?

rekha : konjam kooda manithavimaname ila ungaluku

muthukumar : unaku iruka, katina purushan vaaram poora vela seiyarane inikachum relaxeda iruka vidriya, sondha vela seiya sona kooda paravala

oorula irukaravangaluku vela seiya na enna podhu udamaiya

rekha : innerathuku nane poirukalam, ungala poi sonen parunga, thallunga nandhi mari vazhila ninukituu, nane poitu varen

muthukumar : nillu d, enga pora, nee poi andha mara bureau elam thooka poriya?

rekha : ungaluku ennavam, na help panna poven

muthukumar : pogadha sonna kelu, pogadha d

rekha : neenga relax panikonga, thattula tiffin vechuruken venumna saaptu konjam help panunga

muthukumar : vaai jaasthi aagiruchu unaku

rekha : na poren,

karthik : yaarum poga venam, na poren

rekha : dei nee epoda elundha

karthik : neenga sanda podra sathatha ketutu oore elundhuruchurukum, good morning amma, good morning pa

muthukumar : good morning da. neeye kelu ivala ennanu

karthik : amma, neenga

rekha : enna nee unga appa ku chappakattu katta pora adhana,

karthik : illa ma,

muthukumar : ennada ilanu solta

rekha : pinna avan en paiyanache ungala mari kallu mariya irupan,

muthukumar : apo enna kallunu solriya

karthik : ayyooo neenga konjam niruthunga, amma nane poitu varen,

rekha : neeya, patheengala, neengalum irukeengale

karthik : amma ungaluku ipo nejamave avangaluku help pananuma ilana appa oda sanda podanuma?

muthukumar : rendavadha soniye adhan, enoda sanda podanum, mudiya pichukalam pola iruku

rekha : irundha thana?

karthik smiles

later his father too smiles

karthik : good, ipdi sirichu sirichu sanda potutu irunga, na poi nimishathula help pantu varen

rekha : saamana ulla vekamalaye avanga patuku poitanga, pavam othaila avanga evlo eduthu vepanga karthik neeye solu,

namma pakathu veetuku vara poranga, pathutu summa iruka mudiyuma sollu,

muthukumar : avandhan porenu soltanla enathuku ipo lecture edukara

rekha : neenga konjam...

muthukumar : niruthiten, nee mela sollu

rekha : karthik ,...nee

karthik : inum pesineengana avanga veetla elathaiyum adukina peragudhan enala po mudiyum

she pats him

rekha : jaakrathaiya poitu va da

muthukumar : nee enga pora

rekha : tiffin saapda

muthukumar : saaptu themba sanda podarathuka ? seri seri na onnum solala, va saapdalam

rekha : andha bayam irukatum

raji : apppa, apppa sonna puriyadha, thookadheenga weighta iruka pogudhu, na pathukaren

meesai : adhelam onnum ila ma

vadivu : padichu padichu sonen indha ooru venamnu, ketiya, saaaman eraki vechutu apdiye poitanga, dhadi pasanga

meesai : avanga porula erakinadhum kaasa neetinadhu un thappu, na avanga kitta ulla vekradhukum serthuthan vela pesinen

vadivu : ipdi elama irupanga indha oorula

meesai : ipdi irundhathan polaika mudiyum vadivu, seri nee saptiya

vadivu : ilayenga...

she realizes

vadivu : ayayo yenunga, ungaluku pasikudha, indha poratathula samaika marandhutenunga, irunga nimishathula samaichudaren

she walks fast towards kitchen

meesai : modhala nee va, saamane ilama enatha samaipa nee

he wipes her sweat

meesai : ukaru, asathiya irukum, nee onum samaika venam na velila hotel irukanu pathu vangitu varen

raji : en andha asadhi ungaluku irukadha?

both turn

raji : rendu perum ippadi ukaruunga, na poi vangitu varen

meesai : raji ma nee

raji : unga ponnu inga thhaniya velaike poga pora, pakathu idly kadaiku kooda anupalana epdi?

meesai smiles

meesai : jaakradha da, indha panam

vadivu : raji

raji : unaku poori masal adhaana sola pora

vadivu : ada po d

raji : apo adhu ilaya?

vadivu : road cross panrapa paathu

raji : enna ilukara?

vadivu thinks

raji : summa solla vandhadha sollu

vadivu : adhu vandhu

raji : mosamana oora iruku, dhenamum paper la padikaromla raji ma, kaali pasanga irukara ooru, yaru nalavanga yaru ketavangane theriya matengudhu

nee badhrama poitu seekram va, idhaana ?

meesai : adheydhan iva pudhusa va solla pora

raji : office poradhunalum, kovil poradhunalum, kadaiku poradhunalum orey vasanam, pulichu pochu ma

dialoguea mathu nee modhala, na 2 mmins la vandhudaren

vadivu : ivaluku vara vara vaai perusa pochunga, ava panra elathaiyum rasikarenga adhan ava ipdi pesra

meesai : vidu ma, vaa ava varathukula eduthu vepom, vandha dhaam dhooomnu gudhipa

vadivu : romba neram aagiruchu, neenga pasiye thaanga mateenga, pasiikudhanga?

karthik : indhanga

both blink

karthik : sorry unga permission ilama ulla varaikum vandhuten, actuala velila irundhu kooptuten irundhen, ungaluku kekala pola adhan ulla vanten sorry

meesai : thambi neenga

karthik : en peru karthik, pakathu veetladhan iruken.

meesai : oh, vaanga vanga thambi, manikanum kaadhula vizhala

karthik : cha cha paravala uncle, idha modhala saapdunga

meesai : edhuku thambi idhelam

karthik : amma sonanga, othaila vela seiranga poi help panunu adhan vandhen, inum saaptruka mateenga nu theiryum adhaan vangitu vandhenv

vadivu : en ponnu poiruka thambi saapadu vaanga

karthik : apdingala

meesai : paravala thambi kudunga, vaangitu vandhurukeenga engalukaga, nanga sapadrom, evlavu aachunu

karthik : yenga pakathu veetla irukom, idhu kooda panlana epdi

meesai : paathiya indha ooru karangala pathi kora sonna, epdi palagarang paru

karthik : amma madhiyam samaichu kondu varenu sonanga,

vadivu : ungaluku edhuku seramam, nanga

karthik : adhelam paravala aunty

meesai : thambi ku kudika thanni kudu

karthik : inga pakathulaye can water kadaikum uncle, 35 rooba oru can, maavu kada, maliga kada elame pakathulaye iruku

oru tharava na elathaiyum kooptu poi katidren,idha elathaiyum eduthu vechutu

meesai : ila paravala thambi nangale

karthik : na eduthu vechundren, idhelam neenga epdi thookuveenga

meesai : ponnu vandhuruva pa ipo

karthik : ponungalala epdinga ivlo weight thooka mudiyum, paravala nane vechudren

meesai : modha naale thondharavu kuduthutom,

karthik : adhanaala enna nanga veedu gali panrapa solrom, neenga vandhu help panunga

meeesai laughs

after few mins

meesai : sattunu elathaiyum vechuteenga nandri thambi

karthik : paravala aunty en oru mari irukeenga

vadivu : indhha ponnu sapadu vaangitu varenu pona kaanum romba nerama

karthik : unga ponna?

vadivu : aama pa

karthik : inga pakathulaye kadai iruke, inneram vandhurukanum

vadivu : idhukudhan sonen, enga kekara, enachunu theriyalaiye kadavuley

karthik : vandhuruvanga, inum 10 mins la varlana na poi pathutu varen uncle indhanga idhan en number, edhavadhu help na eponalum call panunga

idhu enga veetu landline, enna help nalum thayangama kelunga

rekha : aamanga thayangama kelunga

karthik smiles

karthik : idhaan en amma

rekha : vanakkam

vadivu & meesai : vanakkam, ukarunga

rekha : irukatum, veedu elam pudichuruka?

karthik : ennama edho house owner mari kelvi kekara

rekha : chumma iru da, ivan epavume ipdidhan, inga pakathuladhan maliga

karthik : soliyachu soliyachu

rekha : adhaiyum soltiya, seringa enanalum koochapadama kelunga

vadivu : romba nandringa

meesai : thambi unga appa

muthukumar : vanakkam, nandhan adhu

meesai : vaanga vanga ulla vaanga, romba sandhosham neenga elarum vandhadhula

muthukumar : irukatum, enada karthik elathaiyum eduthu vechutiya

karthik : aachu pa, kalambalama

muthukumar : seringa, indha area la konjam thiruttu bayam undu, bayapada venam gurkha night elam rounds varuvaru, irundhalum konjam jaakradhaya irukalame nu

meesai : apdingala, seringa

vadivu : enanga rajiku vangina naga nattelam iruke bayama irukunga

muthukumar : adhelam venumna bank la vechurunga, thirudu pona peragu kavala pattu prayojanam ileengala adhaan munecharikaiya

rekha : aama unga ponnu enga?

karthik : avanga pakathu kadaiku poriukanga pola tiffin vaanga, inum varla na poi pathutu vandhudren

rekha : seri da pathutu va nanga pesitrukom

karthik goes to his home to get the bike keys

muthukumar : dei kalambitiya

karthik : ila pa idho

muthukumar : venam venam andha ponnu veetuku vandhuta

karthik : oho, seri pa

muthukumar : nee vei nanga konja nerathula pesitu vandhudrom

vadivu : yey enga di pona imbutu neram

raji removes her slipper

raji : hmm janadhibadhi oda pechu vaartha nadathitu vandhen

rekha : hahah nalla pesrale apdi shock elam aaga vendiya avasiyam ilama nanga unga neighbours help panlamnu vandhom

raji pouts : shhh ma en ma ivanga irukanganu solala, she murmurs

vadivu : solirundha adaka odukama pesirupa

raji : shhh ammmaa

rekha : paravala nanga thappa eduthukala ma

raji : romba thanks aunty, unga veedu edhu,left side la irukara veeda ila

rekha : valadhu pakkam irukara veedu ma

raji : oh ok ok oru nimisham appa indhanga modhala saapdunga, aunty uncle neengalum saapdunga vanga

meesai burps

raji : enapa sapdra munave yepama? pasi yepama?

meesai : na nalla sappten raji ma

raji : sapteengala? epdi?

vadivu : ivanga paiyandhan ma vangitu vandhu kudutharu nee andha pakkam pora indha pakkam thambi vandharu

raji : oho thanks aunty

she smiles

raji gives medicine to meesai

raji : appa enapa neengale elathaiyum eduthu vechuteengala, evalavu vaati solla weight thookadheenga nu sonna puriyadha

idhuku kandipa punishment undu na rendu naal saapda maten ponga

rekha was looking lovingly at raji.

rekha : yenga indha ponna patha namma

she stopped

muthukumar : hmm aama, enakum. seri seri modhal modhala ivanga veetuku vandhu azhanuma,control paniko

rekha : hhmmm

raji : vara vara ungaluku bayame ilama pochu en mela irunga doctor ta potu kudukaren

meesai : poru ma poru poru andha thambi tiffin vangi kuduthutu apdiye elathaiyum eduthu vechutu poitaru

raji : oho marubadi thanks aunty

they smile

rekha and muthukumar : seri ma apo nanga kalambarom

raji : vanga aunty

varom

meesai : romba nalla mariya irukangala

vadivu : aamanga

raji : amma ipo na vangi vechada ena panradhu

vadivu : vechuru d madhiyam saapdalam

raji : ma tiffin ma

vadivu : adhanala enna oru nalaiku madhiyam tiffin saapta korainja poiruva

raji : adhelam enala mudiyadhu enaku nee vekara sambardhan venum

meesai : seri edhuku eduthalum vaaku vadhama, vera vela irundha parunga aprama indha panjayatha pathukalam

rekha : andha ponnu evlo azhaga irukala

muthukumar : aama

rekha : nalla gunam la

muthukumar : aama

rekha : elarume nalla pesarangala

muthukumar : aama

rekha : enna aama.

muthukumar : seri ila

rekha : ungaluku kindala iruka

karthik : tom and jerry couple konjam summa irukeengala

rekha : dei unna nalla gavanichangala andha veetula

karthik : na enna avanga veetu maaplaya gavanika

rekha : apdi ila da help panna poniye

karthik : vitta andha periyavaru kaalulaye vilundhuruparu pola apdi gavanichanga, nalladhan pesinanga

rekha : indha mari nalla manushanga nammala suthi irukarathu evlo nalladhu theiryuma

muthukumar : oru nallavan un kooda 26 varushama irukan avan elam unaku kannuku theriyadhey

rekha : mudiyala unga alapara neenga thalunga dei karthik andha ponnu kooda azhaga irukula

karthik : endha ponnu ma

rekha : adhaan da pakathu veetu ponnu

karthik : na avala pakalaye

rekha : apdiya nalla ponnu da

karthik : apdiya?

rekha : nejama da

karthik : adhu epdi 5 nimishathula pesnadha vechu solra

rekha : 2 nimisham porum oru ponna pathi therinjuka

karthik : ipo edhuku nee nallava certificate kudukaranu theiryum edho perusa plan panra cleara solten enaku kalyanam venam venam venam

rekha : dei dei engada odra nalla ponnu kedaikaradhu romba kashtam da dei karthik

muthukumaran : oru nalla paiyana neeye kedukatha

rekha : nanga enatha kedukarom

muthukumaran : avandhan marriage la virupam ilanu solran la

rekha : adhukunu apdiye vida mudiyuma

muthukumaran : avanuku andha sambavatha overcome panrathuku vaaipu kudunudhan solren

rekha : inum evlo naalnga?

muthukumaran : konjam naal potum avana velila varatum aprama avanukana vaazhkai thunaiya avane thedipan nee kavala padatha

karthik climbed upstairs and was reading book

he heard a song

" paatha seithi pesa poren " he turned towards the source of the song, there stood a girl drying her long hair

he couldnt see her face

karthik : idhaan andha pakathu veetu nalla ponna ?nalla paatudhan adukaga ivlo sounda

sound ivlo jasthi iruku akkam pakathula veedu irukunu kooda theriyadha

he shoke his head twice and started reading again

as if read his mind voice, she reduced the volume

karthik was happy as he thought that he could read the book thereafter without any disturbance, but

raji sang the song alongside, in a low voice

he closed the book and looked down

though her voice was very feeble it reached deep down his heart, he clearly heard her voice despite the shallowness,

he heard each and every lyric

" Avan kannu kulla enna veika poren

Avan nenju kulla enna theika poren

Naaney

Ennnaaa

Thara poren "

it seemed she knew the full lyrics, she was happily singing the entire song and karthik was looking at her,

in the meanwhile she started to make the slight movements that the heroine does in that song,she was enjoying the song very much like a child. he smiled.

karthik was lost in her song, since it was his fav too. she sang the song really well.

without knowing that a guy is standing, she turned towards his side and sang " EN AALA PAAKA POREN, PAATHA SEITHI PESA POREN"

and looked up,still her lips were murmuring the lyric " en aala paaka poren" and she saw karthik

she was embarassed.

karthk was blinking.he dint expect that she would turn to his side.

just then she came to her senses that he saw her dancing. she made faces.

still they were looking at each other.

karthik : ayao namma pathutu irundhadha pathurupalo,"

karthik : enada vamba pochu nammaku pudicha paatu indha ponnnu vera nalla padichunu ketutrundhom indha ponnnu thappa eduthukuchuna"

he doesnot know how to react,

she stopped singing the song and looked at him. the song came to an end but she was listening to it in loop so it was played again, "EN AALA PAAKA POREN" she looked at the phone and then at karthik. she repeated doing this. she didnt know at whom to freeze the look.

he smiled.

he was about to call her,

the first line of the song added fuel to an already embarrased raji, she hid her face with her hands and ran inside

karthik : helllo helllo yenga??

but she just disappeared.

he was confused karthik : thappa eduthukucho??

raji's face turned red

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Posted: 9 years ago
#2
Another karthik raji story wow..Really nice positive opening, I'm surprised, looking fwd to the rest now, keep going and good luck 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sivania02

Another karthik raji story wow..Really nice positive opening, I'm surprised, looking fwd to the rest now, keep going and good luck 😊


Thanks for the encouraging words.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Savitha...Welcome to the forum..

Startinglaye,FF oda vanthurukeenga...Super..

Then ur story's title...its just awesome..πŸ‘

K's parents sema jollyaana type..Loved thier convo..

KR veedu pakkathula pakkathulaya??..ithu nalla iruke..πŸ˜›

K's parentsku Rajiya pidichu pochu pola..

KR scene...LOVELY..😳

Very Good start n Keep Going..All the BestπŸ‘πŸΌ
Edited by shiningstar77 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#5
Welcome savitha and nice and different start to the story
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi welcome to the forum
Hope you enjoy being here

Super start to the story a different concept

Do continue... waiting to see how it all unfolds :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#7
I thank all for the positive feedback
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Posted: 9 years ago
#8
Super start sis. Enaku padikrapa en friendoda story padikara sayal vanduchu. I mean dat writing style characterisation elame. I am a great fan of her writing, ungaldum adey mari irku. Enaku romba pudichi pochu. Lovely start.
Thanks dear
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Posted: 9 years ago
#9

Originally posted by: jjaya

Super start sis. Enaku padikrapa en friendoda story padikara sayal vanduchu. I mean dat writing style characterisation elame. I am a great fan of her writing, ungaldum adey mari irku. Enaku romba pudichi pochu. Lovely start.

Thanks dear

I know who that is . Very much inspired by her writing, I started writing this one. I have no clue why the topic of that thread was closed. Sayal nu neenga sonadhe it's a great compliment. Romba nandri.
I like dhivya's storyline and the way she pens every scene, amazingly talented she is, and also sush and abhi's stories. Love their Co ordination and the presentation. It will be perfect. I also like kalabhas, shiningstar77, AnjanaRavi, Devino, each and every ff by them. I read all the stories in this forum.
Started to write after reading all ur stories.Hope you all like it and Plz inform me if you feel this ff fusty.

Thanks again jaya dhidhi for the compliment.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#10
Hi 😊

Nice start . KR story with different storyline . Love it .
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