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Hi friends,thanks for ur likes and comments.Here's the next part.

CHAPTER 5:
Karthik was standing in the corridor,when Vishnu entered the scene.

Vishnu: Dei,enna da aachu unaku? Yen Raji kita appadi pesina? Pavam da avanga,evlo hurt aayitanga theriyuma?

Karthik: Pinna enna da? Venam nu sonna vidanum,atha vitutu chumma compel pannite iruntha kovam varadha?

Vishnu: Ippo avanga appadi enna solitanga nu kovapata? Nee nala paduva nu therinjadhala thaana avanga compel pannanga.

Karthik: Aana enaku thaan pidikala nu solren la.

Vishnu: Atha konjam pakuvama sonna thaan yenna?

Karthik remained silent.

Vishnu: Padurathula enna da kutham? Athuvum nee super ah padura aalu vera.

Karthik: Enna la eppadi da pada mudiyum?

Vishnu: Inga paaru da,past ah ninaichitu,present la vazhandha,future mosama poidum.

Karthik: Illa da enna la...

Vishnu: Nee ethum solla venam.Poi Raji kita mudhala sorry sollu.

Vishnu leaves the place and Karthik stands thinking hard.

~AT THE WORKPLACE~

Karthik searches for Raji but she's not there.He asks Vishnu,but he's also not aware of her where-abouts.So Karthik goes to the canteen in search of Raji.

~AT CANTEEN~

He searches the whole canteen but she's not there also.Just then he finds Lakshmi.

Karthik: Lakshmi,Raji enga?

Lakshmi: Rajiku udambu serila yam,so half day leave potuta.

Karthik: Aana Kalaila nalla thaana iruntha?

Lakshmi: Athan ennakum purila.Thidirunu kilambi poita.K Karthik enaku neraya vela iruku naan kilamburen.Bye!

Karthik: Bye.

Lakshmi leaves.

Karthik (mind voice): Oru vela naan pesunathu la upset aayithan poitalo? Che...I'm sorry Raji!!!

~NEXT DAY~

Vishnu: Enna da sorry ketiya?

Karthik: Illa da,nethu thaan half day leave potu poitala.

Vishnu: Appo phone panni keka vendiyathu thana?

Karthik: Illa da nerala paathu keklama nu iruken.

Vishnu: Athum seri thaan.Paara 100 aayusu Raji eh vandhutanga!

Raji enters, waves a "hi" to Vishnu,boots her system and continues to work.

Vishnu: Machan,semma kovam pola un mela!

Karthik frowns at him.

Karthik: Raji...

She remains silent.

Karthik: Raji...unna thaan...

Raji: Enna?

Karthik: Nethu naan apadi pesiruka koodathu.Sorry!!!

Raji turns and continues her work.

Karthik: Yenna? Ethum sola matra?

Raji: Enna solanum?

Karthik: Enna manichitiya illaya nu sollu.

Raji: Enna paatha unaku eppadi therithu Karthik?

He remains silent.

Raji: Naan, un talent ah ellarum paratanum nu ninachu unna pada solvenam,athuku nee enna kovapatu thituviyam,adutha naal sapaaiya oru sorry solviyam,udane naan unna manichidanumam.Enna yenna feelings illatha jadam nu ninaichiya? Anaiku unkita kochikama pesunathu nala inikum apadiye irupen ninachiya? Apadi oru vela ninachiruntha, I'm sorry.Naanum oru sara seriyana ponnu thaan.Ennakum manasu nu onnu iruku,athula feelings nu onnu iruku.Un mood ku etha maathiri en manasa ennala mathika mudiyathu.

Saying this she stormed out of the place.

Vishnu: Pppaaahhh...evlo periya dialouge!!!!!!!

Karthik: Venam da...

Vishnu: Seri vidu vidu.Ippo eppadi Raji ah samadhana padutha pora?

Karthik: Therila.

~CANTEEN~

Raji is seated in a chair,when Karthik comes and sits opposite to her.

Karthik: Raji,naan othukuren naan panathu periya thaapu thaan.Naan nethe sorry kekalm nu thaan irunthen aana nee athukula kilambita.

Raji (to the canteen man): Anna sikiram tea ya kodunga late aaguthu.

Karthik: Nee en mela nala kovathula irukanu therithu.Aana enna la ippo atha seripadutha sorry ah thavira vera ethum illa.En manasara solren,naan nethu panna thappa ini eppovum panna maten nu yen amma appa mela promise ah solren.I'M REALLY SORRY RAJI!!! Enna intha ore oru thadava manichidu.Please...

Raji gets up from the place but Karthik holds her hands.She looks into his eyes,he realizes his act and takes his hands away.

Karthik: Sorry,theriyama...

Raji: Inga paaru Karthik,naan normal aaga konjam time aagum.Enaku mood serila na naan ipaadi thaan irupen,ithan en character.So please,enna konjam thaniya vidu.

She moves out,when Karthik interrupts.

Karthik: Appo en mela irukura kovam pogalaya?

Raji: Konjam kammi aayiruku.

She leaves and he has a slight smile on his face.

~NIGHT~

Raji's phone buzzes and it's none other than Karthik.

Karthik: Hello!!!

Raji: Hello.

Karthik: Ippo kovam full ah poiducha illa innum konjam baaki iruka?

Raji: Iruku iruku...

Karthik: Che...appo innum time aaguma? Therinjiruntha nalaiku office laye ketu irupene,ippadi en mobile balance ah waste panniten.

Raji: Enna kindala?

Karthik: Che...che...naan en kashtatha pathi polambunen,avlothaan.

Raji: Seri,appo polambi mudichachu la? Phone ah vechudava?

Karthik: Hey Raji...raji...raji...

Raji: Enna???

Karthik: Intha Sunday naan unga veetuku varava? Un appa va pakka?

Raji: Adikura veyiluku ethavathu aayiducha unaku? Enga appa unna patha vetti poturuvaaru.Avlo kovam un mela avaruku.

Karthik: Atha seri pannathan varen.

Raji: Enna?

Karthik: Aama Raji,anaiku naan nadanthukita morai seri illa.Athan mannipu kekanum nu thonuthu.

Raji: Ivlo late ah va?

Karthik: Time aga aga kovam koraiyum la.Ippo kandipa unga appaku munna maari en mela kovam irukathu nu ninaikiren.

Raji: Therila.Aana enaku enamo bayama iruku.Enga appaku namma rendu perum ore office la vela paakurom nu therinja avlothaan.

Karthik: Ethuva iruthaalum naan paathukuren.Un permission mattum pothum enaku.

Raji (after thinking hard): Seri,aana problem ethum vara koodathu.

Karthik: K done! Seri appo naan sunday morning lam un veetuku vandhuduven.K vechuduren.

Raji: Karthik...

Karthik: Haan sollu...

Raji: Kovam illa.

Karthik: Unaka illa unga appa ka?

Raji: Enaku.

She cuts the call saying this.A cute smile appears on their lips,coz their friendship has blossomed again.

I know it's a big "mokkai".Anyways pls do share ur views guys.All sorts of comments are welcomed.

NOTE:
Friends it takes really a lot of time to write an update n also in middle of studies,exams n assignments.I do all this for ur feedbacks.But i see dat the number of comments r reducing.So pls do post ur views.I'm sry if i'm rude.But it's a request from the writers.Thank U!

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Posted: 10 years ago
#82
Hey its really a nice update...
Sorry the delay..I was not well these days..
Take your time baby...😳😳
Enna Karthik...rajiyaaa kalyanam pannikuraennu solluvanooo
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Posted: 10 years ago
#83
Super update..
Raji Appa kovam ippadi sila pala sorry la seri aadadhey... Enna nadaka pogudho... Nice update.. Take it cool madam... Give many during holidays :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#84
Hi ammu,its a very interesting updatepa👏👏...

karthik...innum thappa unara matennu adamthan😆...nallavela vishnu oruvaliya avanuku puriya vechutan...

"Inga paaru da,past ah ninaichitu,present la vazhandha,future mosama poidum"--vishnu..
its really a very needed one to everyone...good advice👏...

raji...pavam half day leavea...pinna irukatha😡...

but the nextday...kovathula erimalaiya vedichutala karthikitta😆...nice...for that vishnu's teasing ...sema🤣...

canteen scene:paraaa...rajiku k mela kovam konjam kami aaiirucham😳...so sweet when she tell this...

phone convo
.:karthiku rombathan thairiyam...raji appata pesanuma😉...rajiyum athu ok solliyachu...athukum mela ava karthika manasara manichutta😛...very good...

ammu,dont say again n again its mokkai...athu...ithunu...really its wonderfulpa👍🏼...so,contiue it...
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Posted: 10 years ago
#85
hi ammu,
its really a very cute update..

ur flow of writing is very nice..

dialogues were too good...

enjoyed a lot...😃

keep up ur good work...👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
#86
hi ammu, very nice update pa. enjoyed kr & kv scenes. kr phone convo chance illa pa,it reminds me their first phone convo after a big fight. intrsting story line,keep ur great work & all the best fr ur exams. waiting fr next part.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#87
Hi ammu. Thank you for the update. Really enjoyed very much.
I know you are busy...but thanks for taking time for your ardent readers.
KR's dialogues are very forthcoming and good. Hope all goes well when k meets
r's dad...keeping fingers crossed.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#88
Ammu great going ma, don't feel like that ok...
Karthi yenna pesa poraan tu ore tension ah irukku ma 😲
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey friends thanks for ur likes and comments.Here's the next part.

CHAPTER 6:

~OFFICE~

Vishnu: Dei, Raji un mela semma kovam ah irukanga nu kelvipaten,ethukum ushara irunthuko,Kovil patti karanga adi veluthu vanguvanga.Paathuko machan.

Karthik: Apadiya?

Raji enters.

Raji: Enna Karthik,Vishnu etho mukiyamana vishayam solraru pola?

Karthik: Athu onnum illa Raji vazhakam pola podra mokkai thaan.

Raji: Oohh...

Vishnu: Ena da nadakuthu inga?

Karthik: Nethe matter solve aayiduchu machan.

Vishnu: Ennaku theriyamaya?

Karthik: Aama ivar periya Obama,ivar kita sollitu thaan nanga ellam seiyanum.Poda!!!

Vishnu: Appo intha vattiyum naan thaan out ah?

Raji: Intha vatti illa ella vatti yum neenga thaan out.

Raji & Karthik share a hi-5.They chat for sometime and continue with their work.Meanwhile...

Raji: Karthik...

Karthik: Sollu Raji...

Raji: Illa appa va paaka vara nu soniye...

Karthik: Haan,athan sunday varenu sonene.Ethavathu problem ah?

Raji: Problem aagidumo nu bayama iruku.

Karthik: Hey,naan ennamo unga appa kita 4 pera kootitu vandhu sanda poda vara maari pesura.Naan sorry keka thaan varen.

Raji: Illa Karthik,appa oru vela unna manikama,ethavathu thappa pesi,unaku kovam vanthu,apram appaku innum kovam vanthu,athu perusagi,apram...

Karthik: Hey,niruthu,niruthu.Vitta neeye oru problem ah start panniduva pola.Cool ma,onnum aagathu.Apadiye unga appa ethavathu enna pathi sonnalum naan thirumbi pesamaten.Ok va?

Raji: Hmmm...

~SUNDAY~

Raji: Appa,naan unga kita onnu solanum.

R Dad: Sollu ma.

Raji: Solluven ana kovapadakudathu.

R Dad: Naan eppadi ma un mela kova paduven? Sollu.

Raji: Athu vanthu...iniku ungala pakka en friend oruthar vararu.

R Dad: Friend ah? Enna pakkava?

Raji: Aama pa, en kooda office la vela paakuraru.Ungalukum avara theriyum.

R Dad: Enaku theriyuma? Yaaru ma?

Raji: Varampothu neengale paarungalaen. Aana oru vishayam,avar enna sonalum porumaiya kekanum,kovapadakudathu.

R Dad: Yemma,nee yarayavathu kadhalikiriya yenna?

Raji: Appa!!!!!! Naan unga ponnu.Neenga solra payana thaan kalyanam pannikuven.Intha luv kivu lam ennaku set aagathu.

R Dad: Illa da nee pesurathu ellam vechu paatha po,naan apadi irukumo nu ninaichiten.Seri vidu,nee sonna maariye nadandhukiren.Pothuma?

Raji: Thanks pa!

R Dad: Seri,avar eppo varuvaaru?

Raji: Itho ippo vandhiduvaaru.

Just then door bell rings.Raji rushes to open the door.Her dad was shocked to see the person standing before him.It was Him; the guy who refused his beloved daughter's marriage proposal; the guy who crushed his dream of seeing his daughter's marriage; it was Karthik.A sudden sense of anger rushed in his blood.But Raji's eyes controlled it.He can't do anything against his daughter's wish.

Karthik: Vanakam sir!

R Dad: Vanakam.

Raji: Ukkaru Karthik.

He looked at her dad,who also repeated the same.He sat reluctantly.

Karthik: Sir,naan...

R Dad: Raji poi thambi ku coffee potu kondu vama.

Raji: Appa...

R Dad: Po ma...

She signals her dad to keep calm and goes off.

R Dad: Solunga.

Karthik: Sir,naan anaiku appadi nadandhiruka koodathu.Athuku mannipu keka thaan vanthiruken.Actually anaiku en soozhnilai appadi,naan venum nu ethuvum pannla.Enaku kalyanathula ishtam illa,enga appa amma kitta sonna purinjuka matanga,athan ellar munnadiyum vechu en virupatha sonna avangala la ethum panna mudiyathu nu appadi paniten.Sathiyama ungalayo unga ponnaiyo hurt pannrathukaga naan apadi pannala.I'm sorry sir,ennala ungaluku romba mana ulaichal.Enna...enna manichudunga sir!

R Dad: Atha vidunga,mudinju ponatha pathi pesi onnum aaga porathu illa.Aama Neenga 2 perum onna vela pakuringala?

Karthik: Aama sir.

Raji enters with a cup of coffee and offers to Karthik.

Raji: Appa naan venum nu maraikala,enga neenga kovapatu enna velaya vituda soliduvingalo nu bayanthu thaan maraichen.Pls pa,enaku velaiku poi neraya sambadhichu,ungala nala paathukanum nu thaan aasai.Thayavu senju purinjukonga pa.

Karthik: Aama sir,unga ponnu santhosham thaana ungaluku mukiyam.Avanga vela paatha thaan santhosham ah irupanga.So entha thappana mudivum eduthurathinga.

Raji: Pls pa...

R Dad: Inga paaru ma,appa ku unna vitta yaarum illa,athu nala thaan un vishayathula konjam gavanama iruken.Mathapadi un santhosham ethuvo athuthaan enakum santhosham.

Raji: Thanks pa!

R Dad: Thambi,neenga therinjo theriyamalo,en ponnu aasai paata maari vela kidaika uthavi senjurikinga.Neenga mattum anaiku ok soli iruntha,apram iva enakaga ava aasai lam vitu kalyanam panni irupa.Thanks pa!

Karthik: Ayyo sir! neenga ethuku ennaku thanks solringa? Naan thaan ungaluku sollanum,enna ivlo sikiram manichitingale! Thanks sir!

Raji: Rendu perum mathi mathi manipu ketathu pothum.Saapda vanga.

R Dad: Aama aama,en ponnu nala samaipa,neenga saaptu thaan ponum.

Karthik: Kandipa!!!

They had a great lunch and after that Karthik left.

Raji: Thanks pa!

R Dad: Engala sollitu ippo neeye thanks solriya?

Raji: Eppadi pa?

R Dad: Enna?

Raji: Eppadi pa ivlo porumaiya,intha matter ah handle paninga? Enga kovathula unga Thirupachi aruvala eduthu Karthik ah potu thalliduvingalo nu naan bayanthute irunthen.Aana neenga ippadi maaruvinga nu naan ninaiche pakkala.

R Dad: Enaku Karthik mela kovam irunthuchu,aana nee enna oru paarvai paathala appove en kovam pochu ma.Naan kovapatalo,illa Karthik kovapatalo,kashtapada porathu nee than.Unna kashta paduthi paka va ma naan un appan ah iruken?

Raji was in tears.She hugged her father for his luv,affection,and care.She meant the world for him and he was for her,true to the words "A girl's 1st hero is her Dad".

A short update only friends,coz i don't have time.In this story the character of Raji's dad is not the same as in the show.I want to depict him as a "perfect dad".Some may like this,some may not.So pls post in ur feedbacks.Bye!!!
Edited by AmmuKryan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#90
Great ammu...
Yenaku indha daddy a pidichirukku, idhaye continue pannu ma
Dad - Daughter bonding super 👏
Appa vum nallavaru appuram yeppadi pa problem start aagum😕
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