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Posted: 7 years ago
#71

Originally posted by: Sweet-devil

Nice update again rein...

Eagerly waiting for rudra's entry here...
Love reading ur updates..
Plz update it soon..
It is far better than s2..
No no... I dont want to compare even...
Coz s2 is a mess..
And this is the best...
Loved reading it...
Thanks again for the update rein...

Thanks and your welcome for your kind words and valuable feedback pavani! Will update soon!
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Posted: 7 years ago
#72
Rein just started reading FFs πŸ˜ƒ in case of reading thing I was so lazy fellow πŸ˜‰ but also interested to read πŸ˜› will give feedback after complete reading 😳 but wana suggest you for something 😳 .dont mind πŸ˜›

. can you highlight some areas like twisting areas part with "bold " and side headings also πŸ˜‰ so it catch attention on stories which I seen from my other writer friends πŸ˜ƒ .and they manage with different text sizes too some parts with big text size according to its importance like revelation n tension phase πŸ˜‰ .remaining normal phase with normal size 😳 ..headings in "Italics " πŸ˜› ...

sorry if I bothered πŸ˜‰ it's just a suggestion 😳 no need to care πŸ˜›.will be back to comment on story after a while πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜ƒ ..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#73
Amazing story Rein.
This is much better than the Crap EK is showing right now in the show
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#74

Originally posted by: Luna99

Amazing story Rein.

This is much better than the Crap EK is showing right now in the show

Thanks LunaπŸ˜‰
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Posted: 7 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: Rein123

Thanks LunaπŸ˜‰

Welcome Rein.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Episode 4
Part 1

Shivaani's dream sequence

After passing out, an unconscious Shivaani found herself sitting on a boat which began to drift away along with the flow of the river which it sailed on. Her surroundings appeared to be very desolate as no one seemed to be around, be it a human or a non human and the fog that filled the air intensified her feeling of being alone there.

She tried to get off but for some reason she felt very exhausted and drowsy rendering her immobile, hence she decided to just lay there as she couldn't do much about it. As the boat continued to drift along with the flow of the river, her memories and the various events she experienced in her lifetime began to get projected in the thick fog surrounding her which played on one at a time as the boat kept moving further and further towards what began to seem like oblivion.

At the cafe ( Waking Life )

A tearful Ruhi who was sitting down on the floor near a corner of the cafe pressed on to an unconscious Shivaani's head wound with a clean cloth she borrowed from the cafe owner in an attempt to stop the bleeding.

She was worried about Shivaani and knew that she required immediate medical attention as she had exhibited signs of going into shock from the head injury she suffered earlier.

Rocky on the other hand was forced to sit away along with the rest of the customers by the terrorists so they could monitor and observe them effectively. Ruhi tried to reason with their captors to let them free as her friend required medical attention but they didn't care enough and ordered the cafe owner to help her administer first aid instead.

Outside the Cafe

Shivanya and Mr. Kailash just reached the cafe where Shivaani and her friends were trapped. Mr. Kailash had already informed the police who had already arrived there before them and were trying to negotiate with the terrorist group.

The terrorist undertook this operation to avenge the death of their head and began to demand the execution of the person who is responsible for his death in exchange for the hostages held captive.

The incident was soon covered by the media who were gathered outside updating the general of the current situation.

Shivanya tried to get inside only to get blocked by the police and dragged back outside by Mr. Kailash.

"What are you doing?" Mr. Kailash asked Shivanya who was distraught

"I trying to save my child!" answered Shivanya who was still trying to break free from his grip which help on to her wrist

"What exactly do you plan to do once you get inside? You're not a shape shifting serpent anymore! Even if you did go in there you would only end up as a hostage yourself" Mr. Kailash tried to reason with Shivanya

" I know, but I can't just wait out here, plus I have a bad feeling regarding this incident. If I can't get her out at least I can stay beside her even if it means becoming a hostage!" Shivanya countered still restless and uneasy about the whole situation

"You aren't thinking strai-" Mr. Kailash was cut off by Shivanya " I don't care! I just want to be with my daughter!"

Mr. Kailash realised that it was futile trying to reason with Shivanya over the matter hence he decided to make the following proposition "In that case I'll go in there instead!"

Shivanya wasn't sure about how to respond to his proposal but knew it was better than nothing

"What if you get exposed?" Shivanya asked Mr. Kailash

"Don't worry I'm a sage who knows much better than that, plus I'm not exactly going in alone" he assured Shivanya

"What do you mean you're not going alone?" Shivanya asked

"Those details aren't important right now.." Mr. Kailash asserted before walking away to a deserted spot where he transformed into white snake which began to slither its way inside the cafe.

All Shivanya could do at the moment was pray for her daughter's safety.

Shivaani's dream sequence
Shivaani went through all her memory projections her boat approached what appeared to be the river's end at the entrance of a bright tunnel. The fatigue she felt earlier suddenly dissipated, however her mind was still frozen and was unable to generate any of its normal thought processes. She slowly stepped off the boat and then began to walk towards the tunnel. Every step she took forward washed away all the regrets and unfulfilled desires that used to weigh her down in her waking life. However before she could take her final step and enter the tunnel, she heard a familiar yet strange masculine voice call out to her "Come back! It's not your time yet!"

As soon as she heard it she felt a heavy weight burden her chest making it harder for her to breathe until fell on the ground gasping for air. She then began to notice her hand which suddenly began to change and have a scaly serpentine appearance. As she began to feel thirsty she tried to crawl towards the river to drink some of its water only to notice that her brown eyes now developed a feline appearance along with her scaly face startling her and causing her to regain consciousness which begin to manifest in her waking life temporarily for 3 seconds...

To be continued in part 2

Edited by Rein123 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
#77
it was fantastic Rein πŸ‘ read all the parts 😳 it's very smooth n connecting flow πŸ˜› pleasure to read πŸ˜› sply in episodic touch πŸ˜ƒ it made easy to assume the scenes playing infront 😳 cool 😊 .
it looks normal n suddenly changes to mysterious in right balance πŸ˜ƒ .involvement of both Hero's with their ladies πŸ˜‰ protection unknown to them πŸ‘ .shivani unknownly drives towards her fate πŸ˜ƒ .liked alot the bit when shivani travels in her unconscious state n chasing her dreams 😳 .dragon n Neela nag fight ⭐️ ..shivanya suddenly saw Ritik outside cafe in powercut but clueless πŸ˜‰ sage khailash bonding n he about to rescue shivani πŸ‘
shivani bracelet 😳 .
.hope rocky character here u give right place πŸ˜† don't pair him please πŸ˜† ..
story is very interesting πŸ‘ with right elements πŸ˜› .
thanks for making headings in "Bold" which drag attention to certain parts πŸ‘ ..

it's nice if u add index in 1st page and update epi parts with page numbers
.after completing each epis 😳 πŸ˜ƒ ..
and after epi end give a simple pre-cap - mention some random scene of next epi or any new characters entry like a teaser 😳 . πŸ˜ƒ .
hope you don't mind by my suggestions πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜› .
thanks for giving beautiful story πŸ‘ .waiting for next parts πŸ˜ƒ . πŸ˜› ..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: vinnas

it was fantastic Rein πŸ‘ read all the parts 😳 it's very smooth n connecting flow πŸ˜› pleasure to read πŸ˜› sply in episodic touch πŸ˜ƒ it made easy to assume the scenes playing infront 😳 cool 😊 .
it looks normal n suddenly changes to mysterious in right balance πŸ˜ƒ .involvement of both Hero's with their ladies πŸ˜‰ protection unknown to them πŸ‘ .shivani unknownly drives towards her fate πŸ˜ƒ .liked alot the bit when shivani travels in her unconscious state n chasing her dreams 😳 .dragon n Neela nag fight ⭐️ ..shivanya suddenly saw Ritik outside cafe in powercut but clueless πŸ˜‰ sage khailash bonding n he about to rescue shivani πŸ‘
shivani bracelet 😳 .
.hope rocky character here u give right place πŸ˜† don't pair him please πŸ˜† ..
story is very interesting πŸ‘ with right elements πŸ˜› .
thanks for making headings in "Bold" which drag attention to certain parts πŸ‘ ..

it's nice if u add index in 1st page and update epi parts with page numbers
.after completing each epis 😳 πŸ˜ƒ ..
and after epi end give a simple pre-cap - mention some random scene of next epi or any new characters entry like a teaser 😳 . πŸ˜ƒ .
hope you don't mind by my suggestions πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜› .
thanks for giving beautiful story πŸ‘ .waiting for next parts πŸ˜ƒ . πŸ˜› ..

Thanks chandu and your suggestions have been duly noted!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Part 2

At the hospital

As Shivaani regained consciousness she found herself lying on a bed and noticed that a saline drip was attached to her left arm along with a bandage covering her head wound. She couldn't help but wonder what exactly happened and how she made it to the hospital alive.

As she tried to get up she felt a sharp head ache pull her back down. The throbbing pain made her feel like her head was about to explode causing her to cry out. On hearing her daughter cry, Shivanya who had just returned from the hospital pharmacy, rushed inside her room to see what was wrong.

"Shivaani! What's wrong beta?" Shivanya asked worried " My head is aching, I feel like my head is going to explode" Shivaani cried

"Wait here, I'll get the doctor right away!"and then Shivanya rushed out to get the doctor.

As Shivaani was left alone in her room, she began to struggle for breath, her skin began to manifest a reptilian appearance which began to go on and off after every few seconds. As Shivanya entered and was about to let the doctor in she took notice of Shivaani's condition upon which she was stunned. She then stopped the doctor from entering the room and asked him to wait outside and locked the room immediately!

"Mrs Singh what's wrong? Why have you locked the door?" The doctor asked growing suspicious.

" My daughter just vomited, and she wants to change as she doesn't like wearing soiled and dirty clothes, so I am helping her with that at the moment" she lied "so can you please wait outside for a few minutes?"

"OK, but see that you'll make it quick as I have to attend the other patients as well" the doctor agreed

Shivanya in a panic quickly contacted Mr. Kailash through phone and explained the whole situation to him, who then slithered inside the room in his serpent form through the window before assuming his human form.

As they didn't have much time to discuss what was happening Mr. Kailash quickly placed his hand of Shivaani's forehead and recited some mantra in his mind, shortly after which Shivaani's serpentine appearance ceased to manifest.

As the doctor was still waiting outside Shivanya asked Mr. Kailash to leave through the window to which he complied.

Once Mr. Kailash had left, Shivanya opened the door and let the doctor in who then began to examine Shivaani. The doctor then concluded that she was experiencing a post concussion headache for which he had already prescribed the painkilling medicines earlier. He advised her to rest and not exert herself much for at least a week's time.

As the doctor was done he left to attend the other patients before administering the painkillers on Shivaani.

Although the doctor had assured Shivanya that Shivaani would recover in a week's time, she was more worried and concerned about her daughter's sudden brief and partial serpentine transformation. She always believed that her daughter was a normal human being and also wished for her to remain that way, hence this unexpected transformation had her mind trying to figure out the reason for the sudden changes, and wanted to discuss the same with Mr. Kailash about the same.

While Shivanya's mind was occupied trying to figure out the reason, Shivaani laid on her bed staring at the ceiling as her migraine like headache had begun to subside thanks to the painkillers administered on her earlier. She began to wonder and recall about the events took place at the cafe and just as she was about fall asleep, a knock on her rooms door got her attention snapping her out of the sleep like trance.

"Who is it? " Shivanya asked without an answer the door just opened with Ruhi and Rocky entering the room.

"Sorry for barging in like this Mrs Singh.." Ruhi apologised and then nudged Rocky to do the same who complied and apologised as well.

"Its OK beta, how have the two of you been?" Shivanya asked

Although Rocky and Ruhi never visited Shivaani's house they had met her mother at the school cultural functions where the parents usually got interact with others. Many often wondered why Shivanya preferred to live in isolation and had barred visitors but then only ended up dismissing it as a part of her mild anti social nature.

"We've been doing well, we just came to visit Shivaani and see how she's doing" Ruhi answered

"Oh, in that case I'll leave for a while so you'll can spend some time together" Shivanya suggested

"Thank you very much" Ruhi agreed and then Shivanya left the room leaving the three of them alone

Ruhi then dragged a chair away from the bed towards it so she could sit close to Shivaani who was laying on the bed, who then sat upright leaning against its headboard. "Hey guys! How have you been?" She asked

"I can't believe you of all people are asking this" Rocky replied

"Huh?? Did I ask something wrong? Shivaani asked unsure of what he meant

" I mean we're here to ask you all that!" Rocky replied "Really Rocky, like she didn't know!!!" Ruhi scoffed nodding her head with disapproval at his silly question to which he gave her an annoyed look

"OK let's not argue any further with this!" Shivaani intervened to break the tension.

"Yeah I totally agree with her!" Rocky who was still standing exclaimed and then sat near Shivaani on her bed much to Ruhi's annoyance.

"So I have been wondering ever since I woke up... Can you tell me what exactly happened and how did we all make it here alive?" Shivaani asked

"Well it's almost been three days since the incident, plus you've been unconscious since then so it's normal for you to not remember anything" Ruhi answered her

" three days?? Seriously? No wonder I had that headache right after waking up!"

"Well yeah since the injury was pretty serious, I mean what sort of person actually slams another person's head against the table with full force over a phone?" Rocky scorned

"They are terrorists Rocky, so what they do doesn't really matter as long as they get what they want" Ruhi answered who received another look of annoyance from Rocky

"So how did we get out in the end? How did the ATS (Anti- terrorism Squad ) or the cops take them down?" Shivaani asked

"Neither the ATS or the Cops had a role in this, in fact they were just sitting ducks while we were left at the mercy of those people!" Rocky answered

"That's true in fact they were just engaged in a negotiation that was heading no where, since those terrorists wanted one of their men dead, so you can imagine what it meant for us and especially you" Ruhi added "I thought you were gonna die there as you were unconscious and deprived of medical treatment!"

"So what happened? How did we get out?" Shivaani asked once again to which Ruhi finally answered "I'm not sure about howmor why it happened but for some reason it seemed like some of their own men i.e. two to be precise suddenly turned against the rest of the group and then they began fighting amongst themselves.

Ruhi further went to narrate what happened

Flash back - Three days ago at the Cafe

Initially there were three men inside the cafe two of whom were monitoring the hostages while one person was negotiating with the cops.

The ATS men who were outside made several attempts to break in and take them down but then as it raised the risk of harming the hostages they retreated.

Then all of a sudden they heard a noise from the cafe backdoor which was being guarded by two other men to prevent any break ins from there or allowing any of the hostages to escape.

On hearing the sound two of the men left to check what had happened and returned back shortly only to to have one man fire against the person monitoring the hostages and later wrestle against then guy negotiating with the cops giving them the opportunity to escape.

During this time Rocky and Ruhi both tried to carry Shivaani out but they were once again blocked from leaving. On their way out they found four men unconscious of which one had regained his consciousness and caught on to Ruhi and threatened her with his hand gun placed close against her temple.

He then ordered Rocky to help move the unconscious Shivaani into a van and forced Ruhi along with him to move in along as well to carry on with his hostage plan. As he ensured they would all behave he started driving away.

As he kept driving all of a sudden one of the vans tires got punctured and flattened out. To replace the tire the terrorist moved out of the van to retrieve the replacement tire from the back and fix it in place of the flattened one. As he began to remove the flattened tire and later fix in the replacement he noticed a snake emerge from beneath the tire space. Before he could react and move away the snake had already bit him and released its venom in his bloodstream.

It didn't even take a minute for the venom to take its effect and put the wicked man to sleep. However his cries and panic was noticed by Ruhi who them saw a blue snake with a red head slither away allowing her to conclude that the man died due to a snake bite.

Once they confirmed they were no longer being pursued Rocky began to search the dead man for a cellphone which he took out to contact the police, who then came to collect them and later rushed Shivaani to the hospital.

To be continued in part 3
Edited by Rein123 - 7 years ago
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Part 3

Outside the hospital

It was 10:00pm that night and during this time Mr. Kailash was waiting inside his car for Shivanya who was still nursing Shivaani in the hospital. Once she was done she went and met Mr. Kailash who asked her to get inside.

"Mr. Kailash what's going on? I thought Shivaani was a normal human like her father, so why has she suddenly begun exhibiting serpent like features?" Shivanya asked Mr. Kailash who was seated in front of her in the driver's seat

"Shivanya it's true that your daughter was normal till now and even had a normal human birth, however..." Mr. Kailash trailed off before completing what he had to say as he wasn't exactly sure about what he thought

"However what?" Shivanya asked anxiously

"Just because she was born like a normal human and didn't exhibit any serpentine qualities till date does not eliminate her serpent heritage... In fact it still doesn't rule out the fact that she could be a half serpent.." Mr. Kailash explained

"But how and why all of a sudden? She was fine till now so what caused her to transition?"

"I won't say its all of sudden though, its true that you aren't a shape shifter any longer however its quite possible that Shivaani was conceived shortly before your battle against Shesha during which you had assumed your serpent form temporarily as a result of which she might have ended up inheriting the serpent gene..."

Mr Kailash explained and then continued to elaborate further

" It's quite possible that her serpent traits emerged as a result of her need to survive under the dangerous situation she experienced three days back... However I don't think if its just that then you needn't worry much as long as you take care of her!" He told her in an assuring manner.

"So as long as we keep her away from such situations she doesn't risk transitioning into a serpent?" Shivanya repeated

"That's true, also as long as she is alive she would never turn into a full blooded serpent!" He added

Mr. Kailash then took out a necklace from his bag on the passenger seat and hands it over to Shivanya

"What's this?" She asks him

"Its a talisman to ward off negative forces and energies, as long as Shivaani wears this those people won't be able to inflict any sort of life threatening physical harm on her" he explained

As soon as she received the necklace she got out of the car and began to go back inside the hospital.

Just as she left another man entered his car and sat behind in the passenger's seat

"So did you give her the necklace?" He asked

"Yes I did, but why are you back? Mr. Kailash asked the strange man

"I'm back for the same reason why I came here 18 years back, and this time I don't intend to leave until I finish what I came to do!" The strange man answered

"You do realise that you're interference here could lead serious consequences for you later right?" Mr. Kailash asserted

"I am aware of that, however they would be my consequences alone, so you needn't worry about it! He assured him

"What about Rithik? Did you find him?" Mr. Kailash asked

"Yes I did and he managed to escape too, but it appears that he hasn't paid you'll a visit as of yet has he? The stranger asked

"No he hasn't yet and I can understand why, but now that they no longer hold him as a captive, its quite possible that they might come after Shivaani" Mr. Kailash concluded

"Exactly, which is why I'm back here as well... As long as I'm around they wouldn't be able to hurt her at all!" He declared

"True, but then you might end up paying a heavy price for that later yourself!" Mr. Kailash warned him.

To be continued in episode 5

For the full chapter along with index and no breaks visit my page on wattpad

Hi fellow Rivanya fans and Drashivians what do you'll think about the latest update? And i'm sure you would have guessed who the stranger with Mr. Kailash is...

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