IshVeer OS- The Second Chance? - Page 2

Originally posted by: Mari01

It was just amazing OS. I just do not have words to express in words, what I felt during reading, every word was delightful ... The way you manage to describe with such accuracy the feelings of Ranvir his pain, his love, it's just amazing. thank you so much for such a touching OS, I will certainly read it again.

Hello, Mari! I'm blessed, I think, that you replied! It's rare that you do that. ;)

Just kidding. xD Thank you so much, girl! Ranveer's love is inspirational like that. Can't help being moved by it. ❤️

Thank you once again. Haha, I hope you enjoy reading it the second time as well. ❤️❤️

Originally posted by: RookeyRookers

Did I want to say anything ? Did my comment matters ? If so , seriously there is no ...not even a single word for my side ...thanks for pm dear , if not I may not have read this ...no words to describe its beauty ..and I mean it ! I have checked dictionary , thesaurus , wiki and all other possible sources ...but no words , I found . Then comes a true vote for your ff , ...Tears...I cried ! If tears are my likes , comments , votes ..you got that !

Ranvi's feeling were crystal clear , while ishu's were natural , true ...Nothing more dii , I am not a BIG person to comment your ff , is what I felt !!! And its true ...Each and every word of mine .

I have read many works of you , but each work stirs the emotions that were suppressed in us , no matter how many times we read it !

A heart warming welcome dii...If you continue to write like this , I will forget my works ...will only read your stories , but is work matters when it is abt ishveer ? Nope...

Anyway dii , stay fit and fine . please pen down another work on ishveer soon , I am waiting eargerly dii ! Once a second , a huge huge welcome for you dii ...

And lots of hugs , ...for this ff ...My heart is racing just like a speedometer , while reading the ff and even now ! ...

Hey, Amrita!

Call me sadist, but if it made you cry, I feel this writeup was success. Thank you so much. And your comment definitely matters. 🤗

"I am not a BIG person to comment your ff"
Please don't feel so. You're awesome! And I mean it!

It's awesome to know that you feel that way for the writings. Thank you very much! :) 😳 😳

And thanks for the welcome too. :)

Haha, work is always necessary. Please focus on that first. We're not going anywhere, so. :)

Yes, I will be posting LDE very soon.

Thank you once again and hugs to you! 🤗 🤗🤗🤗

Originally posted by: Elvish_Hobbit

Hey, Amrita!

Call me sadist, but if it made you cry, I feel this writeup was success. Thank you so much. And your comment definitely matters. 🤗

"I am not a BIG person to comment your ff"
Please don't feel so. You're awesome! And I mean it!

It's awesome to know that you feel that way for the writings. Thank you very much! :) 😳 😳

And thanks for the welcome too. :)

Haha, work is always necessary. Please focus on that first. We're not going anywhere, so. :)

Yes, I will be posting LDE very soon.

Thank you once again and hugs to you! 🤗

Originally posted by: dvprt418.py

HI Elvish how are you?
Its been so long since we talked.
How was your exams?

Must say the return of EH was smashing. you made me cry and smile from this single update.
When you told about this the only thing i was expecting was a heartbreaking one more because you are going through such a tough phase while writing the LDE. Honestly i cannot wait for the real revenge phase to start this chishani and ranveer's heartbreak is making me shed tears even now as i read all the chapters again and those were tough i wonder how you had written it. moving further so this OS needless to say was really a masterpiece.

so our devdas is on a never ending last journey. running away from everything which reminds him of her but he cannot separate her from him the biggest remider of her presence it was always like that.
he left that ritika on marriage day wow the best thing he could ever do this single act of hi rectified all the mud slinging and PDA he did with her to show of ishani. Ritika will be like after so much PDA i get nothing.

it covered his journey of entire lifetime his motababuji his love and care for ranveer. His believe in him and then ishani his world in this whole world the only person who can make or break him. from the starting the OS seem to only have a unhappy ending. HE was hurt by the fact that she thrashed his self respect at every occasion and snuff life out of him bit by bit he still couldn't make a head and tail of her sudden change in behaviour and still holds that something went wrong.

this boy what kind of love he had he was still making her daggers look reasonable he was still giving reasons behind her sudden change in behaviour as she want to spend life in others memory as he is doing. no one can ever come even close to ranveer and his love. And this was true he handed her the pistol to kill him infact it was a machine gun and bullets were fired from it everytime.

i loved that para of describing how difficult it is to make someone fall in love again and unclosed chapters always leave a door of anticipation open making everything worst by always thinking that what went wrong suddenly and this holds true even in a normal friendship or for that matter any relationship if we dont get a proper ending then it always hurts even more. Its good his parents fault was shown here because ultimately they pushed him to this edge. And he left everyone and the country to go away far from her.

But the speciality of memories are they never leave you and the more we try to forget the more they become fresh. That day must be difficult for him every second reminded him that he no more can have that moon in his life and moreover he is not left with the chance of watching it from distance especially after having it in his life for few days.

How much he hates to shed a tear on her name but the moment a stranger comes all his mind could think of was her and her presence its his heart who knows the antidote has arrived and there she comes clad in all marriage symbols just marking his essence and then i thought that maybe this is happy ending since ishani would never come if she was married.

Her back story was equally interesting ritika going berserk can you blame her all the life she was running behind finding a papa for her kid and everyone leaves her at the marriage day i mean this girl should have already booked a seat in mental hospital and one for her saasuma also wonder how amba reacted to her vahu's short story and seeking a readymade papa.

ishani atlast showed some sense and left that leech type family and went what was her real family and her world ranveer. i wonder can't their casanova son get another bahu why they were so hell bent on making her DIL. i cannot tell you how much i hated her when on station she showed hesitancy in going with ranveer. I wished baa or ranveer must throw her on tracks that why the hell she was crying when she wanted to full fill her promise.

He tried so to be normal to bring sarcasm and every time he only showed pain. the moment he handed over the pistol it was the best move from his side till date because she should finish him and then he was inflicting all the anger he had but only showed how much her behaviour has broken him. thapad was necessary from both the side but his thapad got rewarded

I have a question why everytime our girl only take the initiative i mean our dhikra is always caught offguard. But neverthless he responded. Aisa mauka fir kaha milega.

and then girl my breath got hitched the moment he fell unconscious i thought okay so this second chance was not for him. But then you saved the day but his story made me cry poor guy attempted suicide how much he was facing he would have never done it but then everyone pushed him on the edge and he had no option.

ishani knows now that he needs to be cared and loved even if it will take time she will bring him back and now that she knows she has broken his trust so much its difficult to gain it back. But she will stand at every step to make him believe that she is there for him in real this time.

The best part of the OS was he seeking assurance that she never considered him as servant the opininon of world doesn't matter to him his own success a living proof doesn't matter her words are the only thing that he need that his entire life what he believed his existence stood on the fact that she considered him human beyond every relation and he was always different from what world his background perceived him. He always knew deep down that she loved him the only thing that shook that belief was she not considering him a human her best friend instead she saw him like a servant just the world saw him. It was she and mota babuji who made him feel like a human and hence he needed to seek that assurance from her that the base of him being human is still intact and his existence was not on a misconception of his mind.

Absolutely stunning dear everyone redeemed themselves in this one single OS whether its amba or baa everyone accepted that ishveer are together forever and no one not even them can separate themselves. i loved the fact that even though ishani tried to forget him the moment his name gets mentioned she forgets all the promises. their love was beautifully portrayed.

awesome i loved it you and your talent gets increasing everyday with every update it was totally wow update loved everything about it whether its there struggle with themselves to forget everything or move on or finding it hard to accept each others presence in their life.

thanks for pm
waiting for LDE update

PS: pardon my lame review

Hey, dv! 🤗🤗 How are you? I'm fine, exams went well. I'd sent you a PM too and will reply to the longer one as well soon.

Ahh, thank you so much! Ha, yes! The most part of this OS was heartbreaking, especially when I'd seen plenty of Shit track. 🥱🥱 I always had this thought of watching Ranveer die and what not! But when the time came, Ishani getting her brains back and Ranveer having a backstory for all the crap in March/April phase made more sense. LDE, well it makes me cry every now and then. 😆😆 It's not even funny anymore. But it's okay. RV's revenge gives me much hope. 😛

Yes, he wanted to escape everything which reminded him of Ishani but she's deeply ingrained in his spirit that she'll part from him only with his death. He knows this, she realized it. ❤️ Hehe, yeah 😈 I always wished this happened in the show too. Instead of being a spineless idiot who had to explain his every move to Ritika, he could stop being a mahaan atma and say no. 🥱🥱 The biggest thing about him which made me angry was this. Ritika could GTH. :/

Yeah, the OS was supposed to have that darker feel, so the entire journey was necessary. :) Yep, when Ishani left him, he was left with hundreds of questions and so many unsaid interpretations and his mind only lured him into thinking about her. Then it was also all the questions and the unsaid answers he had in his mind.

I agree. Nobody's love has made me feel the way Ranveer's did. ❤️

Machine gun is the best metaphor! it was like the bullets killing him all the time and he was bleeding with every assault and yet not dying. :(

Agree, agree, agree and very well said. Ranveer was left with nothing and if Ishani didn't come to him, he would only have died with a hope or maybe lack thereof that she loved him perhaps.💔

Haha, thankfully from the marriage symbols you took it the positive way. I was wondering how would the readers take all this. I'd have killed her if she came to Ranveer after her marriage with Shit. But yeah. 😆


For Ritika I did imagine this mental asylum thing but it seemed going OTT and she wasn't a matter of concern past her exposure, so I let her be.😆 Amba's reaction, you can imagine. I'm more interested to imagine her reaction about Ishani. She'd asked her to stay away from Ranveer with those crappy and cheap lies about Ranveer. Yuk! 🥱

Yeah, Shikhar's family was annoying. Especially his mom. Wow, no one understood Ranveer's love in that phase and that makes me angry on everyone (Ranveer himself included). 🥱🥱 Ishani in that episode was just... 🤬 Why was she crying in the marriage if she had the promise in her mind all the time! That particular scene ruined the rest for me. And Ishani too.

Yes, I hoped she'd kill him (in the show, of course!) and let him be at peace but... Here a slap was necessary. And rightly said. It was well rewarded. ;)

That's because, unlike him, she has full assurance that he's only hers. Ranveer doesn't have that assurance and when she came until the kiss he believed she was Shikhar's wife. :(


Well, when he went unconscious that worried me too but the next part which came helped me a lot. Suicide attempts were quite obvious after all his efforts to live or die had failed. And if Ishani hadn't come, well...

Yes, yes! She knows he only needs her, so now again she'll never, ever leave him.

That assurance part brought tears into my eyes and for the exact reason you mentioned. He'd never care about others as long as Ishani considered him her friend and a human but the moment she refuses so, the sole reason of his existence is taken away as well. And here she'd only said that she would never live with him, and what not. I am tempted to write further as well that how they make up for their lost time and change their relationship. But LDE has been waiting desperately.

Yeah, everyone's redemption was important, and especially IshVeer's. Others take backseat. Ishani and Ranveer needed some redemption.

Thank you once again, dv! 😊 I'll be posting LDE soon as well.

Originally posted by: PrinceAsif

Didu the OS was ...what should i say??..I'm in lack of words...still searching for suitable words for this wonderful creation... Ranveer's heartbreak, pain & unconstitutional love...u have highlighted them so beautifully didu that I'm still awestruck by the daze of ur creativity... On the other hand Ishaani's sacrifices, love for her Ranveer have also brought up wonderfully...i mean trust me didu I've always wanted this kind of story & u have jst fulfilled... A big thanks for that... B safe & stay forever healthy didu

Hey, Prince! Thank you so much! And wow, your one OS's wish got fulfilled! Also, my sincerest apologies. I've been trying to work on the second part of Wounds Unhealed but can't finish it properly. After this OS, do you still want anything like that? :)

And thank you so much! Hugs to you too. 🤗

Originally posted by: .Fragrance.

Awesome OS, Elvish ❤️ ❤️

Thank You 4 the PM . 😛 😎

Hey, thank you so much! ❤️❤️Save

Originally posted by: Lovemyself...

Hey EH!
So i m finally here...

This was a purely treat on 3rd anniversary of matsh...

The way you wrote the state of Ranveer was just painfully beautiful...
As i always say no doubt he made me sadist...
😆

Ranveer's misery & his state of loneliness...
The way he was trying to forget her bt still as she always on his mind...

The thing i loved about this that he deniedto marry ritika... 😛
I wish we would have got this on show...

& she got to know everything & left shikhar...
He wanted her to stay bt she left him 👏

Ranveer waiting for death was so painful
I know he gothurt so many times bt still 😭

Ok...then ishani's return...
For a moment even i thought she got married... 🤔
Bt then that line of his husband is here too...
I got to know what's on the way... 😆

Then that ranveer's agony & pain..
That pistol scene...

& then that kiss 😲
(U write this kind of scenes so nicely that it's never awkward to read)

Then doctor's entry
& untold truths...
I still don't believe he tried to kill himself
That also twice... 😲 😕

& then that morning with confessions...
I just love every bit of this os...

I can say that my coming back to here with this os was all worth it!

I've yet to read few parts of soulmates...
I'll read it & then comment there...

Such a great work i must say!

I'll wait read more from u!
(Happy one )
Coz already much of sad dramas in my life for now!

Welcome back, Zuvi! Apart from that, your comeback was a pleasant surprise on the third anniversary too. :)

Thank you so much! ❤️❤️❤️❤️ Ranveer made us all a sadist. ;)

Hehe, his denial was amazing to read. Yeah, I hope it had happened in the show too but again. Too much to ask for. And Ishani had to leave Shikhar at least now. xD I hope it had happened in the show and I'd have LOVED to see that dood's face. How he used to taunt Ranveer! 😡


Yeah, that girl had left him with nothing except a hollow hope and unanswered questions. He didn't even know what his fault was except for being a servant.

Good to know that you got the hint. She came as a married woman because of him only. ❤️

The kiss was fun to write. Yikes, thank you! ;)

Sighs. Yes, he tried to kill himself. Ishani's absence and his own family's ignorance prodded him to do that. 💔


Glad you think so and happier that you came back! ❤️ You haven't read Soulmates yet? Wow, that's news to me. It's okay. Read whenever time permits.


Thanks again, and I can understand. I'll try working more on the drabbles. So far, LDE consumes most of my time. :)
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Originally posted by: Ishveer45

So nice part.

We all wanted to watch the scenes from your episode in the serial but in vain. Thank you for realizing our dreams.

Very nice descriptions of Ranveer's love, sorrows and feelings.

Waiting for LDE😊😊😊

Thank you so much! Yeah we all wanted a scene like this but that never happened. We keep consoling ourselves with writings only. ;) I'll post LDE soon. Thanks for waiting.😊Save