FF: PALLAVI by Jalebi Jane SEE NOTE PAGE 117 - Page 71

Originally posted by: JalebiJane

True, Sister. Things moved rather quickly. As you know well, the characters set the pace and we as humble writers try to keep up. hehe

I hope all is well with you.

wow i am liking pallavi confidence

and yeah dr rakesh please take next flight to london

becoz raghav will actually kill you if you came near pallavi

I just read the last 3 chapters and for the first time I have disliked the line- "Keep your mind open to possibilities". I know Farhad and Vivek are looking out for Raghav and for his well being- but we all know Raghav never listens to anyone- does what his heart tells- hence reached to DSE the next day.

Although the whole story revolves around Pallavi, it is always a treat to read Raghav's pov. and this line was epic- “While I’ve never understood the hobby of people-watching, I could quickly become a convert to the hobby of Pallavi-watching.” So after Raghav left the shop, Pallavi sensed she was being watched but not before the arrival of Raghav? so maybe Raghav wanted to watch the interaction between Rakesh and Pallavi? I am happy that Raghav doesn't hesistate from getting intimate with Pallavi in public place- be it hospital or DSE.

I wish Raghav sees the Pallavi in the emerald lehenga. He will be mesmerized and loved Mansi for encouraging Pallavi to get out of her usual zone. I hope she remains same throughout.

Raghav was so forward.. i guess he believes, after that kiss they shared, it wasnt wrong either.
Wonder wat Rakesh thinks of it.. Clearly he saw Raghav touching Pallavi’s lips.

I felt bad that Pallavi was thinking of restricting her enjoyment for the wedding fearing wat ppl wud say. But she does have some good ppl to support her..

Wud our hero see her in her short emerald green choli???

Originally posted by: Arati007

Writing not everybody's cup of tea, your pen is so flawless there is no dull moment while reading.......excellent job

What a lovely comment, Sister.

Thank you.

Originally posted by: PinkOrchid

I have continued to read as didn’t want to binge read again lol. It’s great to see you capturing their desires, their inner most thoughts and those moments of closeness so beautifully, I get lost in those bits. We all have desires and inner most thoughts which often get missed or are not well played out on TV hence I love reading and should do it more in general. With regards to TV serials, you should definitely look to write for them and bring about change for the future with your style of writing.

As for lockdown yes it sure does. Hope you are all safe and well Bx

Thank you for your kind comment, Sister. When my country's first lockdown [March 2020], I resolved to read more---and what have I done? Sign up for hotstar!! Yikes!

Your comment has inspired me to recommit to that resolution. So thank you!!

Originally posted by: ReemShah

I just read the last 3 chapters and for the first time I have disliked the line- "Keep your mind open to possibilities". I know Farhad and Vivek are looking out for Raghav and for his well being- but we all know Raghav never listens to anyone- does what his heart tells- hence reached to DSE the next day.

Although the whole story revolves around Pallavi, it is always a treat to read Raghav's pov. and this line was epic- “While I’ve never understood the hobby of people-watching, I could quickly become a convert to the hobby of Pallavi-watching.” So after Raghav left the shop, Pallavi sensed she was being watched but not before the arrival of Raghav? so maybe Raghav wanted to watch the interaction between Rakesh and Pallavi? I am happy that Raghav doesn't hesistate from getting intimate with Pallavi in public place- be it hospital or DSE.

I wish Raghav sees the Pallavi in the emerald lehenga. He will be mesmerized and loved Mansi for encouraging Pallavi to get out of her usual zone. I hope she remains same throughout.

I'm so with you, Sister.

Raghav will totally get a chance to see Pallavi in that tiny choli. I wouldn't have spent that many paragraphs on describing her appearance if only Rakesh-from-London was going to benefit! hehe

Originally posted by: mayabhi

Raghav was so forward.. i guess he believes, after that kiss they shared, it wasnt wrong either.
Wonder wat Rakesh thinks of it.. Clearly he saw Raghav touching Pallavi’s lips.

I felt bad that Pallavi was thinking of restricting her enjoyment for the wedding fearing wat ppl wud say. But she does have some good ppl to support her..

Wud our hero see her in her short emerald green choli???

Yes, Hero will see Heroine in tiny choli! hehe

Lovely updates dear!!

Why should she allow Asha Chetty’s dour looks take away from the pleasure she had always taken in dressing up? She was not an old maid—and she was certainly not a widow.

She was Pallavi Sawant: A young woman with desires and dreams. She would not allow anyone to treat her as a bad-luck omen or a tragic figure.

oh I so love this PALLAVI❤️ go girl!!!

Love this fic, finally 3 dimensional characters with actual real life dreams, desires and not just caricatures of real people.

Literally binge-read it in a few days and can't wait to see where it goes.

I only have one constructive criticism, the chapters are very short but I also understand that you have a life beyond this so anything is better than nothing.

Enjoying your depiction of Pallavi as a rational being with actual feminine desires and her realistic ability to see the flaws with her in-laws rather than being a 1 dimensional self sacrificial lamb with no distinct personality beyond irrational anger and a disillusioned sense of loyalty to a family that does the bare minimum.