RAVIKA OS (CONFESSION) new update pg 8(consumation) - Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: Khushi9full

that is absolutely beautiful loved thanks for sharing with us❤️


Thnk u so much dear..apreciations are always welcomed..
Keep following and reading for some more intresting parts..lots of romance are about to come
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Posted: 8 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: SamreenJ

Hi ritu

(I guessed that is your name)

This OS is just awesome
Very romantic and lovely

Thanks for your beautiful effort and share with us

please update soon !




Hey..thnk u for d feedback.. glad u liked it..
More romance is on way so keep following..further parts wil b more intresting..
Wil update soon..
Btw my name is Riya..just randomly kept that username..
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Posted: 8 years ago
#23
OMG!!! 👏 Now that was a masterstroke!! What an amazing poetry ❤️ And such a unique way of confessing what Devika feels for Ravi!! Not like the common ones in all the other serials! There was a splendid romantic touch to this confession even tough there was no physical intimacy!! Simply loved it!! Well done and keep up your good efforts! Watching for the continuation 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Eera01

OMG!!! 👏 Now that was a masterstroke!! What an amazing poetry ❤️ And such a unique way of confessing what Devika feels for Ravi!! Not like the common ones in all the other serials! There was a splendid romantic touch to this confession even tough there was no physical intimacy!! Simply loved it!! Well done and keep up your good efforts! Watching for the continuation 😃


Thnk u so much dear..kafi dino se poem likhi hui rakhi thi..thought to use it like this..
Further part will be updated soon..
Just wanted to show that love can be felt so pasdionately though being away from each other..
Guess my job is done
Edited by docritu99 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#25
Hello ppl..lets continue wid nxt part of our story..

Its morning now..
Ravi meets his dad who is fine now..he comes out of hospital n thinks to talk to devika..
Ravi calls devika..
There in room devika is sleeping holding teddy bear and there is a cute smile on her face..her phone rings..she gets up hearing it and smiles seeing ravi calling..she picks it up in a hurry as she was dying to talk to him..
D: hello ravi..kaise ho tum?
R:mai thk hu..sry maine tumhe utha diya..kahi tum sapne me mujhe to ni dkh rhi thi?
D: tumhe kaise pata mai so rhi thi?
R: vo jo smile h na tumhare face me usne bataya..
D is surprised hearing him
D: but tumhe kaise...
R: mujhe to ye b pata h k tum bed pe meri jagah soyi ho or vo b mera wala teddy bear pakad k..
Devika is stunned..she luks here and there and thinks kya ravi mujhe dekh sakta h..ni.ni..vo itni jaldi kaise vapas aaega..vo to kafi dur gya h..
R interrupts her thoughs : are itna kya soch rhi ho mai vapas ni aya hu mai to bus guess krra hu..vo kya h na tumhe tumse jda jo janta hu..
Devika gets haapy n smiles..
D: papa kaise h ab?
R: ab vo thk h..maa b h unke sath
D: ye to acchi khabar h..accha vo..(she stops saying this)
R: kahi tum ye to ni janna chahti ki mai kab vapas aaunga??
D (surprised) : ab jab jaan hi gae ho to bata do..
R : kal aajaunga
D suddenly says: matlb ek din or..
Ravi is pleasantly smiling..devika realises what she said and tries to control situation..
R: accha accha matlb tum mujhe itna miss karri ho k ek din b ni reh sakti
D: ni..ni vo to mai bus yuhi keh rhi thi..
R (smilingly): haa mai smj gya sab..accha tumhe akelapan lage to chachi k pass chale jana..mai kal tk aajaunga or apna khyal rakhna
Devika nods..both hung up..
Devika thinks ravi sach me kitna kch janta h mere bareme..usse to ye b pata hota h k mai kya soch rhi hu..tum itna jda pyaar karte ho mujhse..mai sachme bht lucky hu..thnk u ambe maa ravi ko meri life me lane k lie..
There ravi thinks..devika b mujhse bht pyaar karne lagi h..uski baato se pata chlta h vo mujhe kitna miss krri h..devika mai aaj hi tumhare pass ake tumhe surprise karunga..sry mujhe tumse thda jhoot bolna pada..ravi thinks something and smiles..

Later dat day..

Devika goes to her home..she meets everyone and still is lost somewhere..chachi n pallavi notices this and teases her that its just been one day ravi is away and she is missing him so much..she is shyly smiling..
There ravi leaves for ambala in taxi and is excited to meet her lady love..

Its night now..

Ravi reaches home and enquires abt devika when he get to know dat devika is at her chachi's place..he thinks to go and bring her back but then he remembers that he himself has said to go her there..he gets sad and thinks shit yr aaj to devika se ni mil paunga..
There devika is restless and lost in ravi's thoughts..she thinks to call him but chachi n pallavi engages her in their talks..

Later that night..

Ravi is in his room and immensely missing devika..he is not able to rest peacefully..he is lying on bed and luking at their picture..he gets some idea and suddenly his face brightens..he plans to meet devika and surprise her without knowledge of nybody else (chup chup ke)..
He reaches chachi's place climbs off through window and reaches devika's room..he is hidding behind curtain inside devika's room..

Devika is standing near window watching moon..she is sad and deaperatly waiting for him to come back so she can blurt out her feelings..ravi is noticing her from far and smiling cutely..
Devika closes her eyes and thinks abt ravi and says : plz ravi jaldi se mere pass aajao..m missing u a lot..
Ravi silently moves towards her taking baby steps without making noise..he hugs her from back holding her from waist and even pulls her more close..devika feels his touch and still had her eyes closed..her heartbeats increased..ravi comes close and kisses her near her neck and wid wishpering voice says near her ears : I LOVE U DEVIKAAA..
Ravi den moves away and again hides in her room..devika rejoiced wid happiness and turns excitedly..but to her disappointment ravi was not there..she luks here and there in search of ravi and is boggled and compeletly confused..within a jiffy all her excitment to see ravi is vanished..she is amused as to what has happened..
D (surprised) : ye kya hua abi abi..?? (Then bangs her head with her hand and smiles) devika tu b na pagal hogai h..har jagah tujhe ravi ka hi ehsaas hora h..jagti aankho se uska sapna dkhri h tu..shayad issi ko to pyaar kehte h..
Ravi smiles hearing this and runs and her from back..
R: SURPRISE..!!
Devika is initially puzzled but soon realises its ravi and her happiness has no bonds then..she turns and exitedly hugs him back saying: ravi tum sach me vapas aage..maine tumhe bht miss kia..kitna satate ho tum mujhe..she continuosly blabbers some or d other thing..while ravi breaks hug and keeps his finger on her lips and shhssh her..ravi then caresses her lips and then cups her face..he moves forward to kiss her..but devika runs from there..ravi is still smiling..
D: tum kab vapas aae or tumne mujhe bataya q ni??
R: kch der phle hi aaya or agar bata deta to mujhe itni pyari jhappi kaise milti..
Devika shyly smiles..
D: or choro k tarah mere room me q aae? Sabke samne lene aajate..mujhe b tumhare sath jana.. (she stops in middle and shyly turns away)
R: oh hello mai apni wife ko miss krra tha usse milne aaya tha..chachi ki permission k bina tumhe kaise le jata devika..
Devika is touched..
R: vaise tum kch kehna chahti thi..
D (understands he is asking abt ILU and smiles) : ni to mai kaha kch kehna chahti thi..vaise hogya na wife se mil k ab jao bht late hogya h koi aajaega..apan kal baat karenge
R: this is not fair devika abi to tum apne aap se bolri thi k tumhe mujse kcg kehna h or ab bhaga rhi ho..
D: plz hum kal ghar pe baat karenge..kal mujhe lene aajana..abi jao..
Ravi sadly : jaisa miss kach kach ka hukum..
Ravi starts to leave while devika is also sad..ravi comes back and within a moment(in a hurry) kisses her in lips and runs..
Devika is pleasntly surprised and touches her lips and smiles..
D says to herself: pagal h pura ye..
D smilingly goes back to sleep..

To be continued..
PS - sry for delay.. this is actually 2 parts m posting together..so read imagine and njoy.. dnt forget d feedback..will b back wid continuation soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Riya

Beautiful start
Devika and ravi missed each other ...,its really romantic.

Ravi ka chup chup ke devika se milne ana aur phir gule lugana
Jate jate hulki si kiss dena
It's mesmerizing!

Splendid update
Please keep writing more n more and sharing with us.

Thanks a lot.
I throughly enjoyed it !!
Edited by SamreenJ - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Absolutely phenomenal 👏 👏 from the beginning till the end!! It was truly pure romance between Ravika ❤️
The way Ravi always makes her feel special!!! Ufff 😃 How he kissed her in hurry just before leaving and Devika blushing reminiscing the moment 😳
Splendid 👏 Keep sharing your thoughts!! I'm enjoying every bit of it!! Great work, boss 👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: SamreenJ

Hi Riya

Beautiful start
Devika and ravi missed each other ...,its really romantic.

Ravi ka chup chup ke devika se milne ana aur phir gule lugana
Jate jate hulki si kiss dena
It's mesmerizing!

Splendid update
Please keep writing more n more and sharing with us.

Thanks a lot.
I throughly enjoyed it !!


Hey samreen..
Feeling as if mission accomplished..
Thnx for following nd ur valuable feedback..
Keep hooked up for more n more rocking updates which will come soon..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Eera01

Absolutely phenomenal 👏 👏 from the beginning till the end!! It was truly pure romance between Ravika ❤️
The way Ravi always makes her feel special!!! Ufff 😃 How he kissed her in hurry just before leaving and Devika blushing reminiscing the moment 😳
Splendid 👏 Keep sharing your thoughts!! I'm enjoying every bit of it!! Great work, boss 👏



😛
Thnk u so much dear..
I was ctually waiting for ur rply.. thnx for being consistent follower..
Haapy to know u r njoying reading update..
Keep following for some nail bitting updates are gonna come soon..
Keep reading nd njoying..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Its MARVELLOUS
Bang On.. 👏
First of all I just want to applaude for ur imagination and then for ur depiction and description. Like really the way u describe each and every situation their expressions n everything, its simply superb.
Vry well done gal. Plz do keep writing more.
One thing I hv noticed dat Ravika parts are specially in detail describing each n every move wid expresions n all while other parts are cut short like ravi meeting his dad devika's interaction wid her family members ect. This really is a smart move. Motto is clear thats only to focus on RaVika thats what we as a reader want. Claps for this.
The actual beauty of d whole os was the so passionate yet simple POETRY. Like u summerised kalash story so far in such small words that to wid bang on rhymes.(m actually a rhyming poem lover) so keep up for dat.
Riya u actually made me ur fan.. 👏
I must confess I joined this forum as a member just to rply on this particular post and to applaude u for so awesome work u r doing.
Plzzz do continue soon. This os is much better than present episodes which are just unnecesaary dragged ones.
😭
One more request, I no m being much demanding, if just u could include more poems that wil b like icing on d cake.
Waiting impatiently for update... 😛
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