MANAN FF- LOVELORN(Chapter 14-Pg no.13)(28-4-2017) - Page 4

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Posted: 7 years ago
#31
Ok
so kaun hai yeh person?
Please update the next part soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#32
👏👏👏 AH-mazing chapter once again, u left us so intrigued.

Jst waiting whn Manik n Nandini will come face o face n wht u hv imagined for them.

Cn't wait for nxt chapter. Hope u update soon.😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
#33
Kon hai yeah jiske baare mai Nandini itni baate kar rahi hai...curious enough.
Cont soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#34
Nice update... i guess that person is either Aryaman or Madhyam..
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Posted: 7 years ago
#35
Hi guys...

I present you with another chapter of this story.


CHAPTER -6

Nandini looked at the person through the mirror and a smile appeared on her face.

Nandini - So milgaya time mere liye???

The person held the ears and mouthed a Sorry.

Person - Sholly(sorry) Mumma.



Nandini smiled and held the hands of her life(her daughter)
(The person who said sorry to Nandini was her small 4 year old daughter Ishita ) and nodded in a no.

Nandini - Awww... My baby...

Ishita- Mumma... look what I have got .

Nandini - Show me.

Ishita- Aise nahi Mumma. Closh (close) your eyes.

Nandini - Ok fine.

And Nandini closed her eyes with her hands.

Ishita- Mumma no cheating Ok...

Nandini - Ok Beta.

Ishita took out a small toy guitar from her backpack and kept it in Nandini's lap.

Ishita- Mumma open yol(your) ish(eyes).

Nandini opened her eyes and saw a tiny toy guitar.


Her smile faded on seeing the guitar.

Nandini immediately got up and the guitar fell down from her lap onto the floor but didn't break.

Ishita took the guitar in her tiny hands and said- Wot appen Mumma. U don't like it?
(What happened Mumma you don't like it?)

Nandini in a stern voice - Ishita ye kisne diya tumhe?

Ishita in a scared tone said - Dad ne diya...

Nandini - What?

A person entered the room and said- Haan Nandini ye Maine diya hai Ishu ko. But tum aise kyu puch rahi ho? Ishu ko yahi chahiye tha so Maine dila dia. Kya mai apni beti ke liye itna bhi nahi karsakta?

(Nandini was married to Aryaman since four years and their daughter was Ishita)

Nandini - Aryaman... Aisi baat nahi hai. Mai to bas ye kehna chahti hoon ki abhi Ishu choti hai. Usey in cheezo ki samajh nahi hai.

Aryaman cringed his eyebrows and said- Nandini... Relax. It's just a toy. Tum itna bada issue kyu bana rahi ho?

Nandini -Nahi ... Aisi baat nahi hai. Mai to bas.

Aryaman - Acha Ok fine. Leave it.

Aryaman turned towards Ishita who was trying to play the guitar and said-Ishu baby it's sleeping time. Dad ko goodnight kishi do..

Aryaman kissed Ishita's cheeks and waited for her to kiss him back but Ishita ran away from the room wiping her cheeks with her tiny hands.

Aryaman- Kamal hai ye Ishu bhi na ...tumhara gussa mujhpe Nikal rahi hai.

Nandini - Aryaman... Abhi Bhai kaha hai?

Abhimanyu entered the room and said- Mai yahin hoon choti. Bas wait kar raha tha ki kab tujhe mera khayal aayega.

Nandini - What Bhai??? Mai kabhi bhool sakti hoon kya apko.

Abhimanyu - Haan wo to hai... But Nandini Ek baat batao Ishu to sone chali gayi Ab kya Hume bhooka sulana chahti ho kya?

Nandini - Nahi Bhai. Khana ready hai. Aap dono fresh hokar aajao mai table set karti hoon. Aur haan Navya bhi aayi hai.

Abhimanyu - Ok fine. Us Navya ki to mai abhi leta hoon.

Saying this Abhimanyu left the room.

Aryaman walked towards Nandini and said- So Nandini... It's been too long since we have...

Aryaman couldn't complete his sentence as there was a knock on the door.

Navya - Nandu Aryaman... Kya chal raha hai andar?

aap dono aarahe ho khane ya mai khud hi andar aajau? Fir mat kehna ki Maine warn nahi Kia...

Aryaman - Navya andar aajao... Aisa kuch nahi hai jaise tum soch rahi ho. Hum to bas aise hi baatein kar rahe the.

Navya came inside and looked at Nandini.

Navya raised her eyebrows to question Nandini if she was Ok.
Nandini blinked her eyes in assurance.

Navya - To Aryaman let's go and have dinner. Bahut bhook lagi hai mujhe to.

Aryaman - Ok. After you...

Saying this Aryaman followed Navya and Nandini gave a look at herself in the mirror to check if her face was looking good or not.

And Nandini too joined the others for dinner.




Done with another update.

A very short one.

Hope you guys like it.

Ignore the typos if any.

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Posted: 7 years ago
#36
Nycc prt...nandu ka baby hai aur wo aryamnn ke saath married hai...lovd it
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Posted: 7 years ago
#37
Wow nice turn of events, cn't wait to know whts in store for us.

Great chapter, eagerly waiting for the next one, plz update soon... 😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
#38
Kya yaar?
Aryaman?!
Husband?
Shadi?
Unki baby?
Please kehdo yeh jhuth hai,
no no please no...
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Posted: 7 years ago
#39
it was nice story till last update, I read all the 6 updates in one go.

I was really curious to read it further bt last chapter came as complete turned off for me. Nandini is already married to smone else? and her daughter is 4 yrs old... how can it be? 4 yrs ago she got separated from Manik, so how can her daughter from smone else is also 4 yrs old?

and now I really can't read it further.

can't see either of MaNan married to smone else.

I m not bashing u, bt jst wanna ask, why in ur every story, u always like to get either of MaNan married to smone else ?
unacceptable relatnship, frndship or more, and one more story was there... theme was d same. only in u r still d one, u didn't make them married to smone else.

actually this thing puting me off.

I know every writer has their own style of writing. bt ur style or theme is getting repeated in all ur stories.

sorry if u felt bad bt this thing I have noticed and felt bad bcoz I can't see MaNan married to smone else.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#40
Note-
Hey guys...

I just wanted to clear one thing.

Someone pointed out that How can Nandini have a daughter of 4 years when she got separated from Manik 4 years back.

I admit that I made a miscalculation and hence I would like to correct that Nandini was seperated from Manik 5 years back and got married to Aryaman during the same time.

So the correction is Nandini and Aryaman are married since 5 years.

Sorry for the goofup.

Mistakes do happen yaar and I am accepting my mistake.

Sorry for causing inconvenience to the readers.

And regarding the plot of this story and other stories written by me.. Well I am Trying to keep each plot different as much as possible. But still if you guys feel that I am repeating the concept, please let me know.

I don't want to disappoint you guys... So whatever will be your decision, I will agree to it.

If you guys want me to continue my stories I will do so and if you guys are getting bored reading the same concept again and again, then I will stop writing.

This is just a note in reference to one of the readers comment. Coz opinion of every single reader is important for me.


Let me know your opinion regarding this note.

Awaiting your response...

Edited by Sarahpeyton - 7 years ago
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