MANAN FF- LOVELORN(Chapter 14-Pg no.13)(28-4-2017) - Page 3

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Posted: 7 years ago
#21
Intresting dear,
pata hai that Nandu is alive,
hope toh hai,
waiting for her,
continue soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This is not fair, such a small chapter n u left us more intrigued n more curious then the last time.
Hope Nandu joins the story soon n then the story ll actually start with our MaNan.

Loved it loved it loved it to the core n cn't wait for the next update. Plz plz plz update soon dn't keep us hanging.😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
#23
Interesting part... Manik konsi betrayal ka baat kar raha tha..jarur kuch misunderstanding hui hogi. Hope nandini v jaldi join kare story mai.
Cont soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#24
Hi guys...

I am here with another chapter of this story.

Manik's pov is on hold for this chapter.

It will be in my POV (Author's pov)

CHAPTER -4

Manik drove off to Cabir's place after disconnecting the call.

As soon as he left, the caretaker(CT) of the house took out her mobile and dialled a number.

CT- Hello... Wo aaya tha yahan.

Haan... Aisa lagraha tha ki bahut hi Pareshan hai.

Bahut hi dukhi tha bechara. Jab usne apne room ko Dekha to bahut gusse me aagaya.

Daantne laga mujhe.

Haan mai aage se dhyan rakhungi.

Tu bhi sambhal kar rehna Beta.

Mujhe bahut chinta lagi rehti hai teri.

Theek hai mai rakhti hoon.

Saying this the caretaker disconnected the call and went back to her work.

Manik reached Cabir's place.

On seeing Manik, Cabir said - Aaiye aaiye ... SWAGAT hai apka hamare garib khane me. Shukar hai ki aap aagaye warna mujhe to laga tha ki har baar ki tarah you are going to ditch us.

Manik - Aisi koi baat nahi hai Cabir. Mai bas thodi der akela rehna chahta tha. Isiliye tera phone receive nahi Kia. And besides, aisa kabhi hosakta hai ki mai tera call na loon.

Mukti - Acha Ok. Ab tum dono bas karo. Ab Manik aagaya hai na that is more than enough for us.Lets celebrate guys...

Manik - Celebrate for what????

Dhruv - For the success of our song Jo Humne on air gaya tha. Tujhe pata hai kitne ache reviews mile hai Hume ?

Cabir - Aur kayi saare offers bhi to aarahe hai.

Aaliya - Kaise nahi aayenge offers. After all we are Fab5 . To its obvious that we are the best in whatever we do. Right guys...

Everyone in unison - Right...

Dhruv - Waise Manik celebrations to bante hai but usse Pehle Hume ek concert me jaana hai. Bas Adhe ghante ka kaam hai.

Manik - What concert??? Mujhe to iske baare me kuch nahi pata. Soha ne to aisa Kuch nahi bataya.
Lemme call her and check it out.

All four of them looked at each other and Cabir said - Aa... Manik actually Rehne de . Soha to hai hi irresponsible. Kyu Uske peeche apna dimag khapana. Let's just go to the concert and finish it off.

Manik - Ok ... As you guys say. Let's go... Waise jaana kaha hai. Tum log ready to go na song ke sath.

Mukti - Umm... Wo kya hai na Manik ye performance tera solo act hoga. We are not going to perform as a band. To song bhi tujhe hi choose karna padega.

Manik - What nonsense??? Mai tum logo ke bina perform nahi karne wala. Either we perform together or we don't perform at all.

Cabir- Yaar wo concert actually ek Fundraiser concert hai for the betterment of the orphans. Wo log tera solo act hi demand kar rahe the. Isiliye humne accept kar liya offer.

Manik took a deep breath and said-
Ok guys... Ab tum logo ne sab fix kar hi diya hai to mai kaise mana karsakta hoon.

I will perform just for you guys...

Waise kab Jana hai?

Mukti - Ek ghante baad hai concert.
Abhi niklenge to time Par pahunch jayenge.

Manik - So what are we waiting for? Let's go.

Cabir- Tu Chal. Car me wait kar hum abhi aate hai.

Manik - Ok . Jaldi aana.

With this he went out of the house and sat in the car.

As soon as Manik left, all 4 of them heaved a sigh of relief.

Mukti - Guys we should be careful next time. But dont you think this is all too much for him. I mean ek din me do do performances.

Cabir- Mukti aisa karenge tab hi to uska mind occupied rahega. Wo Uske baare me kam sochega.

Aaliya - Cabir is right Mukti. Manik needs to forget her as early as possible. Tabhi to wo move on karpayega.

Mukti - I don't think ke wo move on karega bhi. Pichle 4 saal me to aisa Kuch hua nahi. Aur aane wale 4 saal me bhi aisa hone ke chances kam hi lag rahe hai.

Dhruv - To we need to increase the number of concerts by double.

Cabir- Wo sab baad me sochenge. Filhaal to wo bahar hamara wait kar raha hai. Let's go.

With this all four of them went and joined Manik.

Manik was too tired and was in no mood to drive.

So he asked Cabir to take the driver's seat.

Cabir agreed and occupied the driver's seat while Manik sat beside him in the passenger seat.
The rest of them sat in the backseat.

Cabir ignited the engine and drove to the venue of the concert.

As Manik was tired , he closed his eyes and fell asleep.

On reaching the venue, Cabir woke Manik up by shaking him a bit.

Cabir-Kya baat hai Manik??? Teri tabiyat to theek hai na? Should I cancel the concert?

Manik- No it's Ok. I m fine. Just a bit tired.

Cabir- Are you sure?

Manik- Yes...

Cabir-Ok lets go. Tu jaake change karke stage pe aaja . Hum audience me baithte hai tab tak.

Manik- Ok .

With this Manik took his guitar and went to the changing room.

He quickly changed into his costume and tuned the guitar.

After the announcement was made, Manik came and sat on the chair at the centre of the stage.


The music started and Manik closed his eyes and Nandini's face flashed infront of him.

Manik felt too lonely and wished that he could see Nandini atleast once and hug her to forget his pain.

Ho aaja mahi, aaja mahi aa soneya ve
aake aaj mera gal lag jaa tu

(come, O beloved, come O beautiful,
come and hug me today..)

Tu hi jind meri, tu hi meri taqdeer ve
ban geya ranjha aur tu hi meri heer ve
kaise bataaun tujhe, kitna hai pyaar ve
rab dikhta hai tujh mein o mere yaar ve, haye..

(you are my life, you are my fate,
I have become your lover like Ranjha and you my beloved like Heer.
how do I tell you how much I love you,
I see God in you O my beloved..)

( Manik's pain was coming out in the form of the song lyrics )

Aaja mahi, aaja mahi aa soneya ve
aake.. ho aaja gal lag jaa..

uDti patang meri bas tere maanjhe se
mere jaisa pyaar na hoga kabhi kisi raanjhe se
heer se bhi soNi hai tu keemti hai heeron si
pyaar ki hai chaahat teri ishq ke faqeeron ki..

(my kite flies now with just your string,
no lover shall love like me, ever..
you're more beautiful than Heer, precious like diamonds,
and I wish to be loved by you like some beggar of love begs for love.)

( Manik felt so lost and his eyes were searching for one person who he knew would never come back to him.)

Aaja mahi, aaja mahi aa soneya ve
aake.. aaja mere gal lag jaa
(Tears formed in his eyes as he finished the song. But Manik wiped them away as he didn't want his friends to see it)

Manik continued playing the guitar and as a result his finger got cut.

Manik stood up and bowed infront of the audience who cheered and clapped for him.

Manik stood there for a minute and left the stage.

He reached the changing room and that's when he realized that blood was oozing out from his finger.

Manik washed it and looked into the mirror.

He saw Nandini's reflection in the mirror.

Manik turned back but there was no one there.

In the meantime,

At some place far away from Mumbai,

In a bungalow -

A girl was working in the kitchen when suddenly her finger got cut by a knife.

Only a single word escaped her mouth - Manik...



Phewww ...

Done with another update.

Hope you guys like it.

Ignore the typos if any.

I know that you guys have guessed who that girl was.

Haina

U all are so intelligent people..

Fir bhi, give your valuable comments on the chapter.

Awaiting your response...


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Awesomeee prt
Jb manik nandu se itna pyar krta hai toh usne aisa q kiya...kya reason tha...lovd it
Continue soon
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Again an amazing chapter by u. 👏
But wgy man, u always leave it so early, we jst cn't wait for the next chapter.

Cn't wait for Nandini to enter the story and get our MaNan's story started.

So curious to know wht led Manik think that Nandini is a gold digger.

Plz plz plz plz update the next chapter soon, eagerly waiting for it. 😊
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Nice part!!!!
whatever manik & his great friends have done with nandu is unforgivable!!!!
Whatever reason you show for manik's that betrayal... I don't think will ever be enough for d crime he has committed, bcoz for me its a disgusting deed.
muklya themselves being girls humiliated nandini in a way, that is d most disgusting & hurtful insult for a girl.
knowing everything manik still PLAYED with nandu that night for his revenge, or for feeling betrayed or whatever!!!!
NOT ABLE TO FORGET NANDU, OR SINGING EMOTIONAL & PAINFUL SONGS IN HER ABSENCE ...DOESN'T PROVE HIS SO CALLED LOVE.
INSTEAD I FEEL MORE DISGUSTED OF HIM.
I hope d person shown at d end of update was nandu, but pls show that nandu teaches a lesson to d so called great fab5 , so they never dare to break a girl's heart ever!!!! I have written what I felt is correct after reading all chapters...so if u felt bad by my harsh words for manik & group, then I am seriously sorry.
but I seriously don't support their disgusting deeds & acts...WHATEVER MAY B D REASON.
Eagerly waiting for d next update.!!!!!
Take care & pls reply about what you feel.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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awesome part
please continue soon
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waiting for the update...cont soon
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Hi guys...

Presenting you with another chapter of this story.

CHAPTER -5

A girl was working in the kitchen when suddenly her finger got cut by a knife.

Only a single word escaped her mouth - Manik...

A lone tear escaped her eye .

Inspite of seeing the blood ooze out from her finger, the girl continued her work.

One of the servants saw this and rushed to the girl .

Servant - Nandini Madam ye kya kar rahi ho aap?
Aapke haath se khoon beh raha hai. Ab Rehne dijiye, ye kaam mai karleti hoon. Ab Pehle baithiye yahan pe.

Nandini- Nahi... Mai karlungi. Maamuli si chot hai. Theek hojayegi.

Servant - Madam please... Agar sir ko pata chalega to wo naraaz hojayenge. Aur fir sab ko daant lagayenge.

Nandini sighed and left the kitchen.

As she was climbing the stairs to go to her room, someone from behind shouted- Nandini...

Nandini turned behind and saw her best friend standing there with a smile on her face.

Nandini - Navya... Tum???

Navya - Yes Mai...

Nandini descended the stairs and ran to Navya and hugged her tightly.

Navya hugged her back and said-
Lagta hai tumne bahut miss kiya mujhe.

Nandini - Bahut zyada.

Navya - Nandu tum theek to ho na?

Nandini broke the hug and said - Haan mai bilkul theek hoon. Mujhe kya hoga?

Navya selfthought- Thank God... Nandini ne Manik ka performance nahi Dekha TV pe. Agar Dekh leti to uski purani yaadein taaza hojati.

Navya - Acha batao baaki sab kaha hai? Koi nazar kyu nahi aaraha hai.

Nandini - Wo log pata nahi kaha chale gaye ? Mai kabse un teeno ka wait kar rahi hoon.

Navya - Acha theek hai. Aate hi honge. Tab tak hum baatein karte hai. Itne dino baad Jo milrahe hai.

Nandini - Haan Chalo mere room me chalkar baithte hai.

Saying this Nandini took Navya to her room.

Navya looked around Nandini's room and said- To batao kya chal raha hai life me.

Nandini - Kuch khaas nahi. Tum to jaanti ho wo dono mujhe Kuch kaam hi nahi karne dete. Office ka kaam to chodo... Ab to mujhe ghar ke kaam karne se bhi rokte hai.

Navya - Tum to bahut hi lucky ho Jo tumhe wo log itna pamper karte hai. Aur kare bhi kyu na... Tum unki princess Jo ho. Waise bhi tumhe...

Navya stopped midway as she saw blood on Nandini's finger.

Navya - Ye kya hogaya tumhe. Dikhao.

Nandini- Kuch nahi Navya ye to bas aise ki knife se kat gaya. Theek hojayega.

Navya- Aise kaise theek hojayega. Lao mai dressing kardeti hoon.

Saying this Navya brought the first aid kit and applied bandaid to Nandini's finger.

Navya - Nandini ye hua kaise. Bataogi. Tumhara dhyan kaha tha us waqt.

Nandini - Navya mai... wo...

Navya - Jhoot bolne ki koshish bhi mat karna. Tum mujhse Kuch nahi chupa sakti. So it's better Agar tum sach bata do.

Nandini didn't utter a word and looked away as she couldn't meet Navya's eyes.

Since the time she had known Navya, Nandini could never hide anything from her.

Navya- To tum Uske baare me soch rahi thi. Haina???

Nandini - Navya aise nahi hai...

Navya - Aisa hi hai...

Ek minute... Kahi tumne unlogo ka performance to nahi dekh liya?

Sach batao Nandini...

Nandini didn't say anything.

Navya - Speak up Nandini... Mai Kuch pooch rahi hoon tumse.

Navya asked this shaking Nandini.

Nandini - Haan... Dekha Maine unlogo ko. Dekha unhe performance dete hue...
Bahut hi Khush the wo log.

Khush hai wo...

Bahut Khush hai wo...

Nandini said all this loudly and collapsed on the floor.

Then she started laughing.

Navya came running to her and said- Nandini sambhalo khud ko.
Pagal hogayi ho kya?

Nandini - Haan Haan mai Pagal hogayi hoon.

Pagal hogayi hoon mai.

Suna tumne...

Mai Pagal hogayi hoon.

Nandini had so much pain in her eyes as she said all this.
Tears rolled down her cheeks.

Navya couldn't take this anymore and hugged Nandini tightly.

Navya - Calm down Nandini... Shh... Calm down . It's not worth it.

Navya patted Nandini's back to calm her down.

After sometime, Nandini composed herself and wiped her tears.

Navya - Feeling better...

Nandini nodded her head.

Navya - Good. Get up and wash your face. You don't want THEM to see this state of yours. Do you???

Nandini nodded her head in a no.

Navya - Jao Jake fresh hojao. Mai pani lati hoon.

Nandini nodded and went to the washroom to wash her face.

And Navya went to the kitchen to get water for Nandini.

Nandini came back from the washroom and wiped her face with a towel.

She sat infront of the mirror and looked at herself.

Nandini - Navya is right. Agar Mujhe unhone aise dekh liya to pata nahi kaise react karenge.

As Nandini was lost in her thoughts, someone came from behind and hugged her.

Nandini looked at the person through the mirror and a smile appeared on her face.

Nandini - So milgaya time mere liye???

The person held the ears and mouthed a Sorry.




Done with another update.

I know it's a short One.

Hope you guys like it.

Ignore the typos if any.

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