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Posted: 8 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: archu_asok

Congrats for new thread. Loving the way u penning this story. U r an amazing writer.Keep up the good work. Update soon.

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Stay blessed😊



Thank u so so sooo muchhh 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vanithanambi

Hearty congratulations dear...πŸ₯³

U are an awesome writer...
So you deserve this...
Thank you for all of your stories...
Loads of love...
Stay blessed...




Thank u...thank u...thank u 😊
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PART 12 :


Not paying heed to anyones calls manik runs out like maniac while kabir too follows him at the same time...

KABIR : manik garden ki ore kyu jara...manikkk...manikkk...
Seeing manik running like crazy nandu who was walking towards house stands at her place shocked without moving while manik in no time reaches near her gasping hard...

Looking her for a second nodding his head manik pounces on her hugging her ever so tightly while kabir reaching near them gets releaved seeing nandu and at the same shocked not getting why nandu was present there and how come manik knew about it...

Closing her eyes nandu places her hands on his shoulders hugging him back while he presses her into himself more making sure about her presence...

Knowing him very well she rubs his back gently while he finally calms down completely feeling her warmth...

moving back he places a long buzz on her forehead while she stands closing her eyes in anticipation...

KABIR : nanduuu...tu yaha kya karri...aur bina kuch bataye aise kyu bahar agayi...patha hain manik kitna pareshan ho gaya... sab kitna dar gaye...

MANIK : kabirrr

NANDINI : main wo phoolon ko pani dalne ayi...maine socha nahi ki...am...am...sryyy...manik...am really...

MANIK : hey shhh...its ok...galthi meri hain...tum ankhon ke samne nahi dikhi tho main...kair...

KABIR : vaise manik tujhe kaise patha ki nandu yaha garden main hi hogi

MANIK : wooo main tho aise hi guess kiya

KABIR : uhmmm anyways chelo ab andar chelthe hain sab wait karre honge hamara

MANIK : ahhh nahi kabir ham bahar jare hain tho tum akele andar jao

NANDINI : bahar????

Manik smiles at her and then looking kabir "ham thodi der main vapas ayenge sabko batha ki nandu mere sath hi hain"

KABIR : haa par ye tho batha tu jaa kaha raha hain nandu ke sath

MANIK : nahi bathani mujhe chel ab jaa aur hame bi jane de byyy

KABIR : byyy

NANDINI : manik

MANIK : puchna bi math ki kaha jare hain

NANDINI : par

MANIK : shhh

NYONIKA : kabirrr...tu akela kyu ara...manik kaha hain...nandu...

KABIR : aunty relax nandu teek hain aur manik usse bahar le gaya hain

NYONIKA : thank god

ALIA : nandini ko ek baar ander tho aana chahiye na uske liye sab pareshan the aur wo hain ki

MUKTHI : arey nandini kya karegi jab manik usse leke gaya hain and infact am sure wo tho usse bina kuch bolne diya hi leke gaya ho

KABIR : haa actually mujhe bi kuch bathaya nahi bas mujhe ander bej diya aur khud nandu ke sath bajar chel diya

DHRUV : haan tho teek hain na nayi nayi shadi huyi hain bahar jane ka man kiya hoga

MAYANK : hmmm chelo ab ham bi bait ke bathe karthe hain

DHRUV : haaa haaa cheliye

getting the car stopped at her one of the most favourite secret place nandu glances at manik surprised while he giving her a slight smile gets out of the car and opens the door for her...

NANDINI : manik ye

MANIK : hath dijiye madam

Placing her tiny hand in his long one she gets down from car and "manikkk...orphanage...!!!!!!"

MANIK : hmmm...wo mujhe ane ka man hua thooo...vaise akela bi aa saktha tha par ab main single nahi hoon na...shadi hogayi hain... isliye tumhe bi sath laya...

NANDINI : tumhe patha tha ki main yaha athi hoon

MANIK : kyaaa...tum bi yaha athi ho...

NANDINI : tum janthe the na ki main har hafthe yaha athi hoon

MANIK : achaaa...har hafthe...lekin main tho bas vakth milne par atha hoon...

nandu turns her head away while he making his grip tighter on her hand walks inside without saying anything...

Diii...bayyaaa...and all the little kids run jumping happily seeing manan making them smile in turn...

PRIYA : arey manik...nandini...

MANIK : hey beautiful

NANDINI : hii maaa

PRIYA : kya bath hain kal hi shadi huyi aur aaj dono yaha pe

MANIK : kyu nahi aa sakthe hain kya

PRIYA : nahi bas puchri hoon

Bayyaaa...Bayyaaa...hamare choclates kaha hain...

MANIK : arey mere pyare bacho ye tho hamari break fast ki timing hain na isiliye abi kisiko chaoclates nahi milenge

Ohhh...

MANIK : ummm pehle sab breakfast karo phir hamare sath kelo aur phir apne choclates lo

okkk...and with this all run to have their breakfast

MANIK : vaise main yaha ek important kaam se aya hoon

PRIYA : kyaaa

MANIK : shadi...teri...meri...

PRIYA : badmash kal ek shadi huyi nahi aaj dusri karne chela hain wo bi pachas saal ki buddi se hmmm

MANIK : arey kal shadi huyi thabi tho meri patni ko bi laya hoon na usse bina bathaye thodi dusri shadi karunga aur tujhe saat saal hain tho kya tujhse shadi nahi kar saktha kya main

PRIYA : bas bas bohuth hogaya ab batha kyu aya itni subah

MANIK : shadi ko aye hi nahi tho phir ashirvad kaise lethe ham isliye ab aye apki ashirvad lene

PRIYA : am sry manik bachon ko chod ke nahi aa sakthi thi na

Jantha hoon baba mazak karra tha chelo ab hame ashirvadh do and saying this manik bends down with nandu to take her blessing

PRIYA : kush raho...sada suki raho...

MANIK : hmmm tum dono bathe karo main abi aya

PRIYA : teek hain

Seeing nandu priya cups her cheek and kya hua...

Not thinking twice nandu hugs her ever so tightly and sobbs hard

PRIYA : nanduuu...kyaaa hua bacheee...

NANDINI : maaa...maaa...

PRIYA : shhh...shhh...main yahi hoon...bas...bas...

after what seems to be eternity nandu slowly breaks the hug and wiping away her tears "wo maaa papa ki yaad agayi"

PRIYA : tu teek hain na

NANDINI : haaa

PRIYA : ye maa tere paas hain iss bath ko kabi bhulna math

Smiling a little nandu nods her head and "aap ne kabi kaha kyu nahi ki manik yaha atha hain"

PRIYA : usne mana kar diya tha tujhe bathane isiliye

NANDINI : jab bi uske bare main bath karthi thi bas muskurathe bait te the main hi pagal thi jo samaj hi nahi payi

PRIYA : tere ane se pehle hi manik ake mujhse kehtha tha ki nandu apke paas ayegi aur mere bare main aisa kahegi aur bilkul usi tharah thu har bar mere paas athi thi aur uske bare main kehthi thi aur phirrr mujhe tujhe dekh hasi athi thi

NANDINI : matlab itne salon se jab bi main yaha ayi thab thab wo bi yaha aya apke paas

PRIYA : haan...tu janthi nahi hain... usne tujhe ek pal ke liye bi kabi akela nahi choda...tere ane se thodi hi der pehle atha tha aur tere jathe vakth tere sath hi tere peche peche jatha tha...

MANIK : kya bathe hori bi yaha

PRIYA : bathe nahi shikayathe...teri patni shikayath karri hain teri...

MANIK : hailaaa ek din pura bi nahi raha main iske sath aur abi se meri shikayathe

PRIYA : wohi tho shikayath hai saab ki aapne pura ek din bi nahi bithaya hain apki patni ke sath

MANIK : ooo agar aisi bath hain tho dont worry i will make sure ki ab se mera sara ka sara vakth sirf nandini ke liye hoga

PRIYA : good

NANDINI : maa main bachon ke paas jathi hoon

MANIK : chelo sath main chelthe hain

Priya smiles looking him while he blinking his eyes walks away with nandu...

MANIK : bachaa partyyy kelna ka time aa gaya

Yippieee

NANDINI : are aram se aram se

Bayyaaa...diii ko bi lathe hain na

MANIK : hey ek minute ek minute

Kyaaa huaaa

MANIK : aaj se na aap log apni di ko babhi bulaoge

Kyu

MANIK : kyu ki apki di ko maine promotion de diya

ooohhh

MANIK : hmmm chelo ab sab milke tumhari babhi ko pareshan karthe hain

NANDINI : manik tum kelo na please

MANIK : lekin nandu

NANDINI : pleaseee

MANIK : teek hain bacho chelo aaj ke liye aap apne bayya ke sath kelo

nandu sits silently looking all the kids completely lost while manik plays with them glancing at nandu every now and then...

MANIK : achaaa ab bas haaa apke bayya thak gaye

Okkk

MANIK : vaise bacho mujhe na aap sab ko ek secret bathani hain tho chelo vaha bait the hain

Kyaaa secret bayyyaaa

MANIK : aap sab mujhe har baar puchthe ho na ki kyu aap sab yaha pe rehre ho aur kyu apke maa papa aap ke sath nahi hain

haaannn

MANIK : tho mujhe aap sab ko usi bare main kuch kehna hain jo bohuth badi secret hain

ooo

MANIK : tho batao secret

Haannn

Nandu who was silently listening turns her gaze towards manik while he feeling her gaze takes a deep breath and "ye jo gar hain na jaha aap sab rehre ho wo iss duniya ki sabse badi aur sabse pyari jagah hain..."

sabse badi??????

MANIK : hmmm

"Nahi" and one of a six year girl utters sadly making manan look her instantly...

"ye gar bada gar nahi hain aur na hi pyara hain" and the baby girl continuous sadly looking manik while nandu presses her lips inside controlling her tears seeing herself in the baby...

Gulping down his throat manik moves close to that girl and makes her sit in his lap...

MANIK : kisne kaha aapse ki ye gar bada nahi hain

"Apse kisne kaha ki ye gar bada hain" and she questions him back without replying

MANIK : batha tha hoon lekin pehle mujhe ye batao ki apke friends kon kon hain yaha

"Friends" and nandu crings her brows while girl too whispers the same totally surprised

MANIK : hmmm friends

"mere friends tho yaha ke sare log hain" and girl replies looking all childen

MANIK : baap re matlab pure ke pure

"Haan" and girl smiles making nandu too smile

MANIK : acha kya ye tumhare sare friends tumse pyar karthe hain

Haaannn and everyone shouts along with the girl making her smile hugest...

MANIK : patha hain jis gar main pyar karne vale zyada hothe hain na wo hi gar duniya ki sabse badi gar hothi hain...

"sachhh" and girl asks innocently while manik pulls her cheek and "muchhh... iss gar main hi sabse zyada pyar karne vale hain aur wo hi sabse pyare bi hain isi liye ye gar hi duniya ki sabse badi aur sabse payari hain..."

nandu sits looking manik without blinking her eyes while girl hugs manik and "thank u bayya ye secret batha ne ke liye"

MANIK : your most welcome sweet heart ab tumhe ek aur secret batao

Breaking the hug she looks him and "kyaaa"

MANIK : ye hi ki aap sab iss duniya ke bohuth hi special persons ho

special persons??????

MANIK : haan sabse zyada bohuth hi zyada special persons

kaise??????

MANIK : aap sab bohuthi pyare ho na iss liye god ne aap sabko iss gar pe rakha hain thaki aap bade hokar sabko ded sara pyar de

"par ham hi kyu" and the baby girl once again questions making manik look her

MANIK : iss liye meri question bank kyu ki sirf aap logon main hi sabko pyar dene ki strength hothi hain

"kyuuu... sirf ham main hi wo strength kyu hothi hain..." and the girl comes with another question

MANIK : kyuki wo strength sirf aap logon ko apne maa papa se milthi hain

"par hamare maa papa hamare sath nahi hain na" and a boy asks who was sitting next to manik

MANIK : arey aap ke maa papa tho apke sath hi hain

"nahi" and boy utters almost having tears

MANIK : sach beta apke maa papa apke sath hi hain lekin wo log patha hain kaha rehthe hain

"Kaha" and boys asks letting tears flow down

"upar sky main... aur jab rath hothi hain na... stars bankar twinkle karthe hain..." and manik answers wiping away his tears

"par kyu wo log hamare sath reh sakthe hain na" and boy questions sadly

MANIK : reh sakthe hain lekin patha hain upar sky main bi na god ki family hothi hain jinhe strength ki zarurat hothi hain

god ki family...!!!!!!!

MANIK : haan aur sirf apke ma papa hi god ki family ko strength dethe hain

"tho kya isiliye wo log upar sky main hain" and boy asks controlling his tears

MANIK : haan isiliye wo log upar sky main hain aur vaha se apko dekre hain
sabko??????

MANIK : haan...sab ko...

Looking at nandu with corner of his eyes he continues "isi liye aaj se kabi ye math sochna ki aap sab alone ho ya phir unlucky ho aur hamesha yaad rakna ki aap bohuth hi special insan ho jinhe god ne ham jaise insano ke life main kushi aur pyar barne beja hain aur agar ap nahi hain tho ham bi nahi hain...!!!!!!"

wowww...!!!!!! and childern clap loudly smiling ever so hugely...

MANIK : tho batao hain na aap special

Haaannn and every one shout ever so loudly giggling all the time...

MANIK : very good...ab agar koyi apse kuch kahe tho ye hi bathana par ye math kehna ki maine bathaya hain...secret hain na...

Okkk...

MANIK : chelo ab apke bayya ko jana hoga aur haa apke choclates apke room main hain baad main kaa lena

Thank you...we love you...

MANIK : love you tooo...byyy...

Byyy...byyy...bhabi aap ko biii...and all childern run out while priya who witnessed everything walks inside wearing a smile staring at manik...

MANIK : ham bi chelthe hain

Moving close priya kisses his forhead and "thank you..."

ane ke liye and continuing after a gap she looks him with tears while he kissing her knuckles smiles at her...

PRIYA : byeee

MANIK : byyy

Seeing nandu sitting all frozed manik walks towards her and "mera kaam hogaya...chele...!!!!!"

Getting no reply he pulls her up holding her arms and walks out entangling their hands silently while priya stands watching them walk away praying god silently for their
togetherness...

manik continous walking even after feeling her constant gaze and soon reaching near car opens the door for her...

Settling in drivers seat he slowly turns his head towards nandu locking the door while she directly places her lips on his pulling him close not even giving him time to register anything...






doneee...boring lage tho am extremely sry...share your opinion if you can...will be waiting...thank u and luv u...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#25
Congrats for new thread...
Wowww... Just one word dear...
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Awesome part.
So beautiful manik made children understand n nandani too
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Wow
Such a sweet update
I loved it
Continue soon...
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#28
very beautiful n heart touching update...
loved it...

manik was supersweet ...

cont soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Aliya Is a bitch like always anyways manan love so cute n loved the way manik understood nandu ke mind keeping baate loved it
N highly disappointed for not getting the pm for this story as well
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Posted: 8 years ago
#30
Awesome...
Thanks for PM
Waiting for next one...
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