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Posted: 14 years ago
#11
ok!i will try to update next part but u have to wait for tomorrow.as right now i have to do some important work.i hope that u will like next part as u like this part
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Posted: 14 years ago
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plz post the next part as soon as possible coz i like the awkwardness between the lovebirds before their proposing to each other and i find it exactly that in ur fiction😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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fabulous............im waiting for the second part.......want to know why aysha screamed........i hope she has not seen a mice in the store roomπŸ˜†
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Posted: 14 years ago
#14

beautiful dr

its amazing

can u please just send me a pm when update

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Posted: 14 years ago
#15
sure i will send u pm when i will update next part.thankx for reading and commenting.
fatima
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Posted: 14 years ago
#16

HIDDEN FEELINGS

Part 2

Veer opens the door of store room and to his surprise he sees

Veer:Ayesha

He sees ayesha sitting on a floor and she is holding her leg from which blood is flowing out.Veer runs towards her.

Veer:ayesha yeh kasay hoaa??

Ayesha:main oper se glass utha rahay thi tu aak glass nichay ghar kar thoat gaya

Veer:main tumhi abhi hospital lay kar jata ho.

Ayesha:sir iis ki koi zarurat nahi hai now i m alright.

At this time minnie enters in store room and says

Minnie:ayesha tum ni itna lateeee....aaa veer sir ab yahan???

Veer:minnie first aid box lay kar aao.

Minnie:(with a shock look):main sir??

Veer:jalday se lay kar aao

Minnie:(while making face):ok sir.

Minnie gives first aid box to veer and while giving ayesha angry glare goes back to her work.Veer starts to do bandage.

Ayesha:app rahni da sir main khud kar log gi.

Veer(while ignores her speaking): main ni kaha tha kay main tumhi housekeeping department ka head bana dhayta ho but u refused

it.kamazkam tumhi koi taklaf na hoti.

Ayesha:sir mujhe apni job pasand hai.

Veer(while speaking in emotions):agar aaj tumhi kuchh ho jata tu main kiya karta main kase........

Ayesha looks shockingly at him.

Veer (don't know what to say):i mean ...aaaaa main kase tum jaisi housekeeper lata who is very dedicated towards her work.

Veer is thinking how he has hidden his feelings and try to control his emotions.

Veer:ayesha tum aisa karo kay ghar chali jao.

Ayesha:but sir mujhi yaha bohat kam hai

Veer:ayesha this is an order

At Vardhan Mansion,kamini vardhan decides to make gajar ka halwa for veer because he likes it very much.Ayesha comes back to Vardhan Mansion and sees kamini vardhan is trying to make something.

Ayesha:aunty app kuchh bana rahi hain.

K.V(turns and looks surprisely at ayesha):beta tum yaha?

Ayesha:woh aunty bas thori se chot lagi thi aur veer sir ni ghar bhaj diya.

K.V:iss ne acha kiya jo tumhi ghar bhaj diya ab tum aram karo.

Ayesha:app bana kya rahi hain?

K.V:bas gajar ka halwa bananay ki recipe phele bar try kar rahi ho.

Ayesha:app jain main bana dhatay ho.

K.V:per beta tumhari thabhiyat kharab hai.

Ayesha:main thak ho app jain.

Ayesha cooks gajar ka halwa.When kamini vardhan tastes it she loves it.Ayesha gets a call on her mobile.

Ayesha:hello

Minnie:ayesha tum kahan ho abhi hotel aao right now.

Ayesha:ok ma'am main aa rahi ho

Ayesha goes to kamini vardhan room

Ayesha:aunty mujhe abhi hotel jana hai.

K.V:acha tum bas ghajar ka halwa Veer ka liya lay jao.

Ayesha:ok aunty bye

After reaching hotel,she goes to veer's room and gives him the box of halwa.

Ayesha:sir yeh aunty ni app kay liya bhaja hai.

Veer:ok thanx

He is abt to say that go back home but she leaves quickly.She goes to minnie's room.

Minnie:tu miss ayesha app hotel aa giyan.App ko kam nahi atha hai bas veer sir kay aagay pehchay gomti ho aur innocent sa face bana kay inhay apna lover bana chahatey ho aur tumhari nazar in ki property per hai tumhi tu..

Minnie is abt to say something else when someone angrily called her

............: MINNIE

Minnie and ayesha looks back and to their surprise.They see ..................

(to be continue)

PRECAP:SURPRISE.

plzzzzz give comments so i know that have i written nice fanfiction or not?plzz give your suggestions and also guess who is the person who have called minnie angrily.

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Posted: 14 years ago
#17
hey guys i have updated the second part of the fanfcitions plz give your comments.thanx for evryone who has given their comments on previous part.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#18

its amazzing and mind blowing

tks for the pm

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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey fatima,

hmm. finally here to edit my reserved post.

well, coming to the part, i am madly in love with this fan fiction.

OMG. are you kidding me ? this is your first fan fiction ?

seriously speaking. you are really doing a fantabulous job. in the presence of all the fights from JPSYA track, i feel so stressed up and your fan fiction is the place, where i can give up everything and get a smile on my face. seriously, i really love the way you write.

and coming to the part. aww.. how sweet. veer can not hide his feelings. that is awesome. and ayesha made gaajar ka halwa for him

😍 and she is so kind and helped kamini even when her leg is not well. this minnie you know, she disgusts me. wanna kill this cruella but i want to leave that work to my naughty chocolate, veer. πŸ˜‰

i am sure that, he is going to give her a piece of mind, if she is going to involve into the issues of ayesha anymore.

please do update the next part as soon as possible.

please. because, i am so very addicted to your fan fiction πŸ˜†

keep writing and please PM me whenever you update, if possible

loads of love
deepu πŸ˜ƒ
Edited by loyal-kashian - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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gud 1....sorriefpr dese late comments....an bzeeee with xams....nway..lovely update...hope that angry voice blongs to Veeru
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