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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Fatima, I can't believe it am replying when the story is almost ending..am so sorry for having missed this FF before....
You are a wonderful writer...this story is really good...loved veesha scenes and the jealousy angle...and the confession scene...very well writtenπŸ‘

Nice to see that you made kamini positive in this...and pammi-rajdeep are cute together...love the ff...and now eagarly waiting for the last partπŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ

I hope there are more ff's in the pipeline...your oneshots are cool too.....πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ
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Posted: 14 years ago
haan fatima.. jaldi update karo.. mein toh next update padhne e liye betaab hoon !!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Fatima its 16th Feb today when u r updating?
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NOTE:Friends sorry for unconvenience but last part is getting so long so i have split it into two parts.Hope u guys don't mind reading two parts and also sorry for late update because i was busy.

HIDDEN FEELINGS

Part 16a

After Kamini and nandini left for marriage preparations from store room.Ayesha looks at veer who is looking naughtly at her.Ayesha blushes and looks down.Veer slowly comes towards her.Ayesha is thinking what to do when she remembers about nihal.

Ayesha:Oh yaad aaya main tu nihal se milne ja rahe thi.

Veer:Per woh.... chalo main bhi tumharay sath isse mil aata hoon.

Ayesha:Laykan... ok.

Ayesha and veer go to nihal's room.Nihal is very happy because Kamini told him about veer and ayesha's marriage.

Nihal:chachu maasi main aap logon ka pas hi aa raha tha.

Ayesha and veer both sit down infront of nihal.

Veer:Kyu kya hoa beta?

Ayesha:Tum thauk tu ho nihal?

Nihal:Main thauk hoon per mujhe aak confusion ho rahe thi.

Veer:Kya?

Nihal:Chachu main app dono ke shadi ka baad maasi ko kya chachi bolayo ya maasi hi bolayo? ......

Veer:Iss main kya masla hai tum ayesha ko......

Ayesha:Maasi bolana.

Veer:Nahi chachi bolana

Ayesha:Nahi nihal mujhe maasi bolaye ga.Maa jaise maasi.

Veer:Nahi nihal tumhi chachi bolaye ga.Chachu ke wife chachi.

Nihal:Aray aap log tu abhi se larnay lagge mera pura question tu aap ne suna hi nahi ka main chachu ko baad main chachu bolayo ya .....

Veer:Rahnay do nihal mujhe tum chachu hi bolana.

Ayesha:Aur mujhe maasi.

Veer:Nahi chachi.

Nihal:Acha app log laraye na karyein meray pas iss ka solution hai.Kyu na main maasi ko maachi bolayoon maasi se maa and chachi se chi.

Ayesha:Thauk hai.

Veer:Ok then tum ayesha ko maachi bola lena.

Suddenly veer's mobile ring.Veer goes out of room and picks up the cell.

Veer:Hello veer vardhan singh.

Rajdeep(angrily):Ab main ne phone kiya hai tu mujhe pata hi ho ga ka tu veer vardhan singh hai.

Veer:Acha tum itna gosay kyu ho rahay ho???

Rajdeep:Nahi tu main kya khushi khushi tujhe congratulation kahoon ka tere shadi ho rahi hai aur tu ne apnay best friend ko iss baray main inform nahi kiya.

Veer(smiles):Oh tu tum iss liye aak dam angry young man ban gaye?

Rajdeep:Haan mujhe bhi tumhi aak bat batani thi.

Veer:Kya??

Rajdeep:Yahi ka ab jab tu shadi kar raha hai tu main tu akela rah jao ga tu main ne bhi shadi karnay ka decision liya hai.

Veer:Wow great congratulation dude tu shadi kab.............

Rajdeep:Pehle meri baat tu sun lay actually mom horoscopes per bohat yekin karti hain.Horoscope ka matabik jis din meri shadi hone chaheye iss din mom india nahi aa sakte.Meray mom ne tumhare mom se baat ke hai aur yeh coincidence hai ka tumhare aur meri shadi ki aak date hai tu humari shadi aak din aur aak sath ho ge.Tumhare mom ne meri shadi ke responibility le le hai.

Veer:Oh that's great.

Rajdeep:OOOO....Mujhe aak important kaam yaad aa gaya hai.I will call u later.Bye

Veer:Ok bye.

After talking to rajdeep,veer starts to think about his future life.

AT Marriage day(14th February):

Veer is in his room thinking that he has not seen ayesha since last week.Rajdeep also comes to veer's room.

Rajdeep:Veer dhak main thauk tu lag raha hoon.

Veer(in thoughts of ayesha):....................

Rajdeep:Aray kaha kohi hoye ho ayesha ka bare main soch rahay ho????

Veer:Nahi woh...... main .......bas

Rajdeep:Sahi sahi bata baat kya hai?

Veer:Aaj valentine's day hai per main ne ayesha ko previous week se nahi dhakha.

Rajdeep:Tu mil la iss mein problem kya hai?

Veer:Per milo kaise??

Rajdeep:Bas tu chupke se ja ayesha ka room mein abhi waise bhi sab log shadi ke teyaarion mein busy hoon ga.Tu kisse ko pata bhi nahi chale ga.

Veer:Ok main jata hoon per plz tu yaha sab sambhal la na.

Rajdeep:Ok per jaldi aana.

Veer quietly goes out of the room towards ayesha's room.Nobody is near ayesha's room.Everybody is busy in preparations.Veer knocks on the door of the room.

Ayesha:Aa jao.

Veer enters in the room and sees ayesha's back towards him.She is searching something in her dressing table.Veer is mesmerised by her beauty.She is looking goregous in red lenga.

Ayesha:Tum aa gaye main ne tum se ..........

Ayesha turns around to find veer in the room.She can expect anyone but not him in the room.

Ayesha(shouts shockly):Veer aap yaha??

Veer:Ayesha ahista bolo tum itna shout kyu kar rahe ho.

Ayesha:Veer aap ko yaha nahi aana chaheye tha koi aa jaye ga.

Veer:Janta hoon.Per kya karoon tum se milne ko dil kar raha tha.Anyways tumhi pata hai aaj kon sa din hai?

Ayesha(while looking down):Ofcourse aaj humare shadi ka din hai.

Veer: Shadi ka din bhi hai aur valentine's day bhi hai.

Ayesha(blush):Oh haan.

Veer:Abhi tu main tumhi kuch nahi de sakta shadi ka baad doon ga per aak cheeze da sakta hoon.

Veer takes a red rose from his pocket and kneeling down.

Veer:Ayesha main ne socha tha ka main tumhi khud valentine's day per propose karoon ga per aisa na ho saka iss liye abhi ka liye kya tum yeh rose accept karo ge as valentine's gift.

Ayesha blushes and looks at the red rose which is looking so fresh.She hesitately takes rose from veer.

Ayesha:Ab jaye plz koi aa sakta hai.

Veer:Ok per baad main miltay hain.

While going out,he quickly give ayesha peck on her cheek.Ayesha's face turns red.She happily starts to see red rose and touches the place where veer gave her peck.She blushes and starts to dream about her future life with veer.

PRECAP:Last part of the ch.

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Posted: 14 years ago
I want to update this part on valentine's day but couldn't do this i hope u guys don't mind.Thanxx for such nice comments on previous parts and also for waiting for updating of this part.Hope u guys like it.
fatima
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Posted: 14 years ago
Heyyy...,fatima not fare. U noe...this chachu-masi wali confusin ke baarein mein mujhe likhna tha....u noe as a continuation of my os....but..aab nahi hoga πŸ˜›

πŸ˜†πŸ˜†Just kidding....baba...ur update was relli shweet. Good that u posted it today...let the post valentine hangover continue
Lokking forwad to ur next update. Good luckkkk.. N no worrie...ur updates rockkkkk
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Fatima- great update! Veer and Ayesha getting married- wah 😍; kaash itna acha din show me bhi jaldi aaye, but only after all the great romance from your FF too:). Love the masi-chachi confusion. Waiting for the next part and thanx for the message sweetie xxx
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Posted: 14 years ago

Fatima..nice update.πŸ‘πŸΌ..waiting for the next one😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi fatima nice update so they r getting married could not wait for the next update.πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Fatima, very sweet chapter...chachi-maasi confusion was cute...
Waiting for the next chapter...keep it upπŸ˜ƒ
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