How many almonds should be consumed in one day? - Page 10

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It was an awesome read! There were just a few typos here and there.

My suggestion would be that you shorten,
1. Keerti-and-his-abhimaan,
2. Our chitter-chatter in the beginning.
3. ArDi's painful talks.
(Birthday hai yaar uska, rulaaoge kya? :/ )

Try using indirect speech and focus on Sam's reactions. :)

Also, the ending looks a little rushed, could you explain that in greater detail?

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Doesn't my name appear too many times?

this was awesome man!! loved it. but yeh kya yaar!! mereko roltu baby bana dia!!! ek kaam kar. speech ko thoda theek kar. kaun kya bol rha hai kuch samajh nehi aa rha hai. and as pro said tha pehele ka part kuch jyada hi bada ho gya. usse thoda short kar. aur agar ho sake toh wapis aane ke time ArDi ko bhi dikha dena thoda!😆

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Doesn't my name appear too many times?

Yaar Pro ka screen space thoda Badha do (I can't even see her name!) ;)

Just glanced through,it seems really interesting and fun!

Kya baat hai Mou!⭐️

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And I just realised Mahi and Mahishee are different people!🤣

Oops, it's fine!😆

tujhe bola tha maine pehele😆

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Bhul gayi yaar 🤣

😆well ab toh tere liye bhi koi pet name dhundna chahiye taki koi gadbad na ho jaye😆 mahi ko toh bta bhi nhi yahan pe ho kya rha hai!!🤣

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Call me Diks 😉

any story behind this name??😉😆

Originally posted by: aanvi98

any story behind this name??😉😆

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