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Posted: 9 years ago

POST ONE (Edna_Philip)

With the indistinguishable chatter of guests on full volume and star-like sparkling lights blinking occasionally all around the otherwise darkened space, a dark form fumbled on stage for her mic. A loud boom and static buzz resounded through the surround-sound speakers, causing every guest to cover their ears and wince.

Spotlights went on, focusing on the oblivious host playing with her mic. Then the rest of the stage lit up displaying the marvelous moon and star themed venue.

[Tap, Tap, Tap]

Edna: Check. [Tap] Mic testing. Check, Check!

[Baki joins on stage]

Baki: Jeez, Edna! It's working! Don't blow our eardrums out before we even get the party started!

Edna: Oops. Okay. Uh, Ladies and Gentleman...oh and the little people! Can't forget the kiddos running around now, can we?

Baki: Edna. Focus.

Edna: Right! Ladies and Gentlemen and kiddos! Can we have your attention please?

Dead silence fills the air.

Baki: I think you got their attention when you tried to destroy their eardrums.

Edna: Shh! I'm trying to say welcome.

Baki: So say it then.

Edna: [clears throat] We feel very privileged to have you all join us for this celestial celebration. A party amongst Stars!

Baki: And we mean that literally [Smiles knowingly]

Edna: Yes, we'll definitely be taking you right amongst the stars. But before we start shooting off after stars, how about we take a moment to enjoy glow of the moon? Let's tell everyone why they've been invited to a party on the moon.

Baki: [Makes a face] Well, we're not really on the moon, you know. It's just a set up...

Edna: Jeez Baki, why don't you just go around and pop all the balloons too!

Edna: Ignore her. I'll tell you all about it myself.

Baki: Uh, no you don't. I'm here as your co-host. Means I share the spotlight.

[A small figure looms up behind the hosts]

Mystery Person: Actually, the spotlights mine.

[Baki and Edna turn around and stare in surprise]

Baki: What are you doing here!?

Edna: We...you...this is supposed to be your birthday surprise, Ramya!

Ramya: Uh, I know. I figured it out when I got here and you assigned a shadow to keep me in the dark. Seriously? It was like a challenge waiting to be taken. Just couldn't resist seeing for myself what all this was about...and well wow. I'm speechless! This amazing and all for me!!!

Baki: Well, as you can see this whole thing is for this playful mischievous little girl beside me. A girl who has a dream to go to the moon.

Ramya: I'm here!!! Wow!!

Edna: Since it was a wish of hers, we decided we'd take her to the moon and throw her a magnificent party for her birthday!

Ramya: It's fabulous. Seriously? It's on the moOon!!! Look at those sparkling starlights and the moon looking upon the celestial bodies. So elaborate, so mesmerizing!

Baki: She said what I was supposed to say.

Edna: Well, maybe she doesn't know about the po-

Ramya: Pool!!! I saw that too. Guys, this is amazing. That pool with the lighting and effects gives the impression of a Galaxy. A Galaxy in which I can jump in and swim in as I please!!

Baki: Maybe, I should just resign as host?

Ramya: This is so exciting! Thank you guys...I'm gonna go jump in my Galaxy.

Edna: What? Wait...what about the rest...

Ramya: There's more? What more could there possibly be?

Baki: Looks like my job's safe!

Edna: If I may continued...

Ramya: Please!

Edna: With all the light the moon shines, we're here to celebrate this event with fun and love. And what good is a birthday bash if we can't make our special girl be star-struck?

Ramya: I am already star-struck!

Baki: We're talking about a different kind of Star-struck. The usual kind...

Ramya: Huh?

Edna: Good, something is still left a surprise. Why don't we just let the Stars guide us through our celestial night of fun?

Ramya: What stars do I follow?

Edna: Ramya, just sit back, relax, enjoy and let us do our jobs!

Edited by .LionHeart. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
^^ see above edit of Post One
Hello Team, so I've taken Edna's writeup and worked a scene around it. Giving it more of a build-up😳 Let me Know if this is okay or if anyone wants to add or take away or change something :)

@Baki...yours I'll fix later . Mostly will just add light hearted convo inbetween I think...to give break between celebs :)

Post Two Edit coming soonπŸ˜†
Edited by .LionHeart. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Nandri abhi! πŸ€—

Thanks for the feedback Daya, and I do apologies for the mistakes. I will remember them next time, I've to do the write-up.πŸ˜‰
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Posted: 9 years ago
^ no prob. It's all a learning process :)
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .LionHeart.


Absolutely! ⭐️
Thanks so much πŸ€—
as usual great graphics


Thanks 😳

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Posted: 9 years ago
Edna & Baki, lovely write-up πŸ‘
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Posted: 9 years ago
^_^ 😡 Sorry Daya is I have disappointed you.
Nice write up BTW.
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Posted: 9 years ago
^ it was good effort edna! next time communicate and discuss in detail the writeup with the other person who is writing so you know how to write it to make it flow together.

And try to describe the scene in cases where we're writing dialogue or situation. If we're doing just general thread or a post with description of person then you can keep it more simple.
Edited by .LionHeart. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .LionHeart.

POST ONE (Edna_Philip)

With the indistinguishable chatter of guests on full volume and star-like sparkling lights blinking occasionally all around the otherwise darkened space, a dark form fumbled on stage for her mic. A loud boom and static buzz resounded through the surround-sound speakers, causing every guest to cover their ears and wince.

Spotlights went on, focusing on the oblivious host playing with her mic. Then the rest of the stage lit up displaying the marvelous moon and star themed venue.

[Tap, Tap, Tap]

Edna: Check. [Tap] Mic testing. Check, Check!

[Baki joins on stage]

Baki: Jeez, Edna! It's working! Don't blow our eardrums out before we even get the party started!

Edna: Oops. Okay. Uh, Ladies and Gentleman...oh and the little people! Can't forget the kiddos running around now, can we?

Baki: Edna. Focus.

Edna: Right! Ladies and Gentlemen and kiddos! Can we have your attention please?

Dead silence fills the air.

Baki: I think you got their attention when you tried to destroy their eardrums.

Edna: Shh! I'm trying to say welcome.

Baki: So say it then.

Edna: [clears throat] We feel very privileged to have you all join us for this celestial celebration. A party amongst Stars!

Baki: And we mean that literally [Smiles knowingly]

Edna: Yes, we'll definitely be taking you right amongst the stars. But before we start shooting off after stars, how about we take a moment to enjoy glow of the moon? Let's tell everyone why they've been invited to a party on the moon.

Baki: [Makes a face] Well, we're not really on the moon, you know. It's just a set up...

Edna: Jeez Baki, why don't you just go around and pop all the balloons too!

Edna: Ignore her. I'll tell you all about it myself.

Baki: Uh, no you don't. I'm here as your co-host. Means I share the spotlight.

[A small figure looms up behind the hosts]

Mystery Person: Actually, the spotlights mine.

[Baki and Edna turn around and stare in surprise]

Baki: What are you doing here!?

Edna: We...you...this is supposed to be your birthday surprise, Ramya!

Ramya: Uh, I know. I figured it out when I got here and you assigned a shadow to keep me in the dark. Seriously? It was like a challenge waiting to be taken. Just couldn't resist seeing for myself what all this was about...and well wow. I'm speechless! This amazing and all for me!!!

Baki: Well, as you can see this whole thing is for this playful mischievous little girl beside me. A girl who has a dream to go to the moon.

Ramya: I'm here!!! Wow!!

Edna: Since it was a wish of hers, we decided we'd take her to the moon and throw her a magnificent party for her birthday!

Ramya: It's fabulous. Seriously? It's on the moOon!!! Look at those sparkling starlights and the moon looking upon the celestial bodies. So elaborate, so mesmerizing!

Baki: She said what I was supposed to say.

Edna: Well, maybe she doesn't know about the po-

Ramya: Pool!!! I saw that too. Guys, this is amazing. That pool with the lighting and effects gives the impression of a Galaxy. A Galaxy in which I can jump in and swim in as I please!!

Baki: Maybe, I should just resign as host?

Ramya: This is so exciting! Thank you guys...I'm gonna go jump in my Galaxy.

Edna: What? Wait...what about the rest...

Ramya: There's more? What more could there possibly be?

Baki: Looks like my job's safe!

Edna: If I may continue...

Ramya: Please!

Edna: With all the light the moon shines, we're here to celebrate this event with fun and love. And what good is a birthday bash if we can't make our special girl be star-struck?

Ramya: I am already star-struck!

Baki: We're talking about a different kind of Star-struck. The usual kind...

Ramya: Huh?

Edna: Good, something is still left a surprise. Why don't we just let the Stars guide us through our celestial night of fun?

Ramya: What stars do I follow?

Edna: Ramya, just sit back, relax, enjoy and let us do our jobs!


Post Two (Baki) - Edited

Standing on the red carpet, Baki and Edna stand ready to throw in a big surprise for Ramya.

Baki: Well, since it looks like I still have a job, I guess I better get to it! On this special day, the Crazy Creatives wanted to make our birthday girl's party extra special. So, not only have we taken this party over the moon...

Edna: and on!

Baki: ...we're also going to make sure it's a star-filled night. With all of Ramya's favorite stars, no less. So ready to Star-gaze?!

Edna: Yes!

Baki: Oh, here comes the first star to gaze at. And what a sight this is. Let' all say hey to the delightful and gorgeous Deepika Padukone! It's great to see you! Can you please say a few words about the birthday girl?

Deepika Padukone: Hi Baki! Thank you for the invite. I happy to be here today! Especially since Ramya is a great fan of mine. I've chosen to wear this white saree from the "Titli" song in Chennai Express since I know she loves that movie. Happy Birthday, girl! Enjoy your day and I'm glad to be here to celebrate it with you.

Edna: Thank you, Deepika! Why don't you...

Voice interrupts: Hey, am I expected to fight that TV tower Tingu? You know I find him hairy and scary! And hello, pretty [gives Deepika a friendly hug]

Deepika: You can handle him! [laughs as she walks to the party]

Edna: Ah, if it isn't the superstar of Bollywood.

Baki: Let's welcome, Shahrukh Khan!

Edna: What would you like to say to Ramya?

Shahrukh Khan: Hey Ramya ma! Happy happy returns of the day. I just want to say this to you: 'Hum ek baar jite hain, ek baar marte hain, lekin birthdays har saal aata hai'. Haha, so I just thought I will join the party to make this birthday special for you dude! Abhi toh party shuru hui hai!

Baki: Thank you for coming! Please go ahead and join the party. Wow, the guests are just flooding in now.

Edna: Well, SRK did say the party's just starting...

Baki: It definitely is! Now, here's our beautiful television star, the emerging actress, Preetika Rao!

Edna: Welcome to the party Preetika, it's nice to see you. Can you say a few words about Ramya, please.

Preetika Rao: Thanks, Ladies! It's great to be here. And, hey Ramya! Happy birthday to you sweetheart. I'm so happy to be here, and Baki told me that you're waiting for my comeback on TV. That's so sweet of you. I will come back with a bang. I hope you will be happy with this small gesture. My best wishes for you!

Baki: It's a pleasure to have you here, Preetika. Just follow the carpet to the party.

Edna: Oh, here comes another star from television. Hi, Surbhi Jyoti! You're looking very nice today. How about a few words about Ramya?

Surbhi Jyoti: Allah Miya! Wow! I'm so happy to be here. This is your Surbhi by the way. The whole setup is very grand, and I hope Ramya will be happy to see this. Happy birthday Ramya. I know you love pizza, and I used to eat pizzas in my days as Arzoo in Qubool Hai. So let's have some pizzas today.

Edna: I'm sure Ramya would love to eat some pizza with you. One of her favorite foods plus one of her favorite stars! Definitely can't go wrong here. Head on in, our girl is probably hungry!

Baki: I think I'm hungry too! Hungry to be in the presence of him! [Points]

Edna: Oh, who wouldn't be?

Baki: It's an honor to have you here, Sir! Everyone, let's welcome the adventurous Aamir Khan! You're looking very handsome. Thank you for being here with us. Anything you'd like to say for Ramya?

Aamir Khan: Thanks a lot, Baki. It's a pleasure to be here. Hi, Ramya. You can clearly see how special the Crazy Creatives want to make your birthday for you. Everything is so beautiful here. I've another surprise for you. My upcoming movie Dangal' is planning to shoot one scene in Singapore. I've heard that you'd love to visit Singapore, so I've asked the production house to book a ticket for you as well. I hope you'd love to join my team and me in Singapore. What say?

Edna: She'll love that! We'll let her know, but before that go ahead and enjoy the celebration!

Edna: Now, last but not least, we have the heartthrob Ranbir Kapoor here with us! Hi Ranbir, you look stunning!

Ranbir Kapoor: Thank you Edna, you're looking stunning as well. It's my pleasure to be here on this very special day for Ramya. A very happy birthday to you, beautiful. Since you love YJHD and travelling, I've decided to give you the trip of your life to Himalaya. Take another person with you, and learn the meaning of the life.

Baki: Wow, looks like our birthday girl's going to be busy in the coming days...may even months. Thank you, Ranbir.

Edna: Head on down to the party!

Ranbir: Can't wait!

Baki: Hey guys! We hope you've enjoyed the red carpet with some great stars. Especially you, Ramya. We wish you a very happy birthday and hope you loved the surprise. Even if you did snoop beforehand. Now that all the guests have arrived to enjoy the moonlight and star filled night with Ramya, let's get this party started. This is Edna and Baki signing off from the birthday bash! Take care.

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Posted: 9 years ago
Baki's part updated.
Please check, let me know what you all think of this...and if you notice any grammar errors do let me know😳

Cheers,
Daya

Edited by .LionHeart. - 9 years ago
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