Hamlet's Revised Fanfic Collection Index - Page 94

Originally posted by: simple2joy

Hammie hammie hammie, hi taz..got here
Another sizzling chapter.on chap 12.amazing to think U wrote it.this fauzi is getting hotter in every single chapter. Now d baarish guzarish scene k baad I didnt expect d same bheege bheege romance again but it seems there were too many girls to give u chaabi to write about that bheege bheege saari n duttas sudden arousal. 😆 .waise fauzi log bohat controlled hote hain he is not controlling shukar hain nakku k bappa,well how can naku even resist him I have no idea. Bwakuf aurat hamesha bappa ko bij me laati hain..ahhh I Think I recall the scene.. yes taz was trying to fulfill readers needs😛
Enough of romance abhi action time.I loved d way it ended.naku taking care of dutta, it is very beautiful how after a day full of emotionak roller coster one takes shelter to d loved one and find peace.I feel this is d best thing about love. Love is not all about romance n flirting n dating n more than that...love is what stahs within u,when a tired bird returns to the nest,as there is a companion, to share n complain...thanks hammie for portraying this very beautifully,finally dutta sleeps like a baby.man kf golden heart. beautifully described taz.. humm somehow he knew she would be there for him in thick or thin.. the confidence in the other person.. will Dutta learn it the hard way? too much faith in naku... read on loved reading your feedback on chapter 12.. revives my faith in myself as a writer even though of yester years... much love,yours hammie

Originally posted by: simple2joy

Hammie ... hummm, me here
Okkk nuspaaa so finally that kiss thing happened.ye padhlooo hammie kiaise kaise romantic diwlpgues marti hain: they both shook in rapture, today no music was needed, there warm erratic breathing was melody and their beating hearts was the cadence of the drums. 😳 😳 . yes taz.. it was me.. dunno which world I was in.😕.. but it was good while it lasted
Laagi forum pe dhum mach gye hoga. ohhh bhaut zayeda...
Dutta ,Iove this dutta, talks straight forward, never stretches things and moreover not much shy and dramabaz.I loved the WILL U MARRY ME?YES I WILL...no hesitation... 👏
well you know him ,fauji..no messing about straight to the point... and Naku daren't mess with him
Keep writing for us.all ur nakkus seems to b gori n pretty.havent read fettered affection and following the heart yet. Sometimes try writing for d koel naku, that naku may b a dhoka but there r koel nakkus among ur readers...there must b some.
haannn sorry taz.. this one has a peaches and cream complexion with hazel green doe eyes.. Mahi had a big impact on me... after that I think dharisti dhami is pretty.. .. sorry deviating... keep reading and commenting taz.

Originally posted by: NusiSg

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Chap 12: hayeee wot a cooling ,sizzling number ... thanks NUS can see the chapter has left a mark on you
Hammmie..☺️ that post guzarish extension reminds me of ths.. absolutely hot scintillating n raw.. it was penned brilliantly. .can't believe hammie u wrote that.. ye sab likhty thy tu.. a bit of commercialism bt man love the flow..

yes I agree... it was more of supply and demand in those days..

Then I jst love Datta standing on his own feet though with the help of crutches bt he standing tall on his own feet..a pride moment.. thoroughly enjoyed it..

to be stuck in disability was hard for him to swallow.. its an emotional post tuama distress syndrome too especially with soldiers... think of ones with severed limbs...

Bt then comes the bitter part.. he was reminded of the bitter truth of his life in a most cruel way.. so many families without the guardian suddenly though datta took responsibility bt still ..n I hav felt the pain thru ur words..the msg sent brilliantly. .some strong writing,,, sketching the bitter picture in front of me.. yaken nahi aata ths was ur frst.. if I wud hav reading it then I wud hav adviced u to focus more on dark part rather then clich romance scenes.. ur writing jst amazes me while writing dark stuffs.. the fluency n naunces u bring in.. seedha dil tak gya..hats off..

thanks NUS.. I took always maintain.. I PREFER to deal with conflicts of the heart and mind rather than.. romance.. remember Shakeapeare's tragic hero Hamlet fascinated me due to the emotional duress and conflicts he suffered.. ..tried to paint that in Dutta's character too... thanks for your interesting feed back.. glad you and taz are enjoying this long FF... my first and longest one.. much love hammie

Originally posted by: Barbie_KK9629

no me nus and taz know your harketien.. you beam up! but dil saf hai tera.. isliye we waving at you... me however pulling my arm back and tightening my fist at your face... and you duck! dutta .baji style😆
Sorry my friends.. I know i should not be interfering aise beech mein.. U all are busy discussing about the FF and look at me.. I could not complete wedding bliss till now still stuck at chapter 3.. Will come once i complete but still i could not stop myself from commenting here..
ohhh ok.. WB is a bit on the naughty side..😛

Didi.. Kya boli aap??.. Bewakuf aurat bappa ko beech mein laayi.. ?? U should know that besides tasha and duji, the other two hit jodis of ltl were naku-bappa and AS-jagadambe😛😆 and naku ko bewakuf nahin bolne ka.. Woh vahini hai hamari.. Marathon queen of dutta's heart.. She was capable enough to make dutta fall in love even with bappa in the end😆
BARBJI I love the new jodi's you have identified👏👏 super so right you are😆

And yes do make a vm on guzarish.. I too like this song.. A mishsan vm will be great.. Would have definitely demanded for a tasha vm but i know that u don't have high quality videos..

taz did ye ju barish on viplavdhani.. and very nice one too... barbji your didi is quite clever..apart from the fact thori yedhri hai😛

@mere bhau. Aagayi tumhari nautanki baaji.. I will sit on ur head and dance 🤣

you are in my heart.. saar ko chor tu barbji

Emmm i am also in love with mahhi's green emeralds.. She was really pretty.. And used to look awesome with mishal.. I was and still am in awe of their on-screen chemistry.. My fav actress.. After her aashka is my fav.. She has always been too good in vamp roles.. Bole toh ekdam perfect.. Had watched her in maharana pratap and she was good..

yes...AAKSHA was stunningly glamouous... do you remember her earrings and blood red glossy lipsticks and designer sari... and her love of chaman prash she called it champagne...

Its super to chat with u all.. Sorry for tang adaying.. Mein bin bulaye bakwas karne chali ayi😆

waving at you...go make those body guards work! kaley etc.. love hammie..

Originally posted by: simple2joy

Hammie, humm.. mera name only the once..
Just read chapter 14.nuspa still lags behind.but as I have such a long tiring holiday, I m not waiting like she waits for me.I intend to finish not only one but two chapters today.
why are you in such a mood???
Hmm this is d chapter u once mention.after d kiss dutta insted of being happy,suspects that naku might have kissed before,keeping her willingness in mind.😆 humm.. too eager he thoughtso
I loved d way u compared first kiss with pulling d trigger for first time...lol.but dutta in is very chapter isnt looking as impressive as he was previously.I read d remarks of other readers.n I agree with them.mostly I hate d thing , Its ok for me cz I am a man,but its not ok for her,she is a woman...virtue...etc etc etc... it seems d man of golden heart is a just like a general MAN not someone really special.nakku d regular doormat,ughhh..well here can't connect with her either.its great to love someone this much but sacrificing d last bit of ur self respect for d sake of love, to tame him its nothing I can support,nakku here still educated but still d doormat nakku portrayed in d serial,pati k maar khati hain proudly. ..look.. to reduce the distance between them was a mammoth job for both of them.. to kiss. someone is a very intimate action.. yes..dutta was sterotyped in his reaction..not even in his wildest dream did he expect her reciprocrate..he himself was clumsy taz.. she was the first woman he touched... it was testing times for him to.. but as a soldier and a man he knows when to stop... the kiss happened.. shocked he was more than her.. but he honours her...
U were brilliant as usual cz u aroused d issues in my mind, and I must give u credit not to portray an animated hero, dutta looks a man of flesh and blood and like any other human beings , full of flaws. lovely line taz..but its a fact.. men generally may romp around,especially in urban set up..where there is more permissivness as compared to rural areas.. and mind you dutta 's back ground is rural.. however when it comes to marriage they want an angel,pure and pristine.
Thanks for writing so beautifully.I loved how it ended.she will have to walk with him, beside him, under him, within him... 👏
thanks for reading... taz and giving a very interesting comment.. love hammie

Originally posted by: NusiSg

Chap 13: marriage of true minds. .
hi nus.. super to see you here on tasha thread..
Ohhh Hammie.. I love the chap.. romance was a bit too much..😛 actually rimance written by hammie sunne main ajeeb sound karta hai..😛 bt ur storytelling is impressive doesn't seems ur first at all.. absolutely brilliant.. there kiss was scintillating never rushed properly executed n extremely raw.. ☺️ I also loved the fact how u actually kept it after the proper propasal of datta in front of whole family.. n how naku accepted the proposal was fab.. my replies hav becoming repetitive n influenced by joyu lately.. all caz she has decided to finish it before me..n everytime I got her response even before reading the actual chap so bear with me plzz..😛 ohhh yes dutta does things by the book..besides I wanted to show kiss as part of haq.. after proposal... chup kar nehin... he respects naku's honour and alongside his family's dignity
oyee tum dono doctors... round lageta lageta bhi.. jhik !jhik!
Ohh so Kala tai is back.. I loved how u ve mentioned her as most elegant lady of PW though she seems neg here too.. m looking frwd to her now..was missing her till now..😛 kala ki negativity k bina ltl is incomplete. .😛..yes.. but compare her to kamini in ishq... kalavati in Laagi had class!
Hmm so some surprise waiting in 14.. as chhotti is fuming in her reply.. will be bac soon..😳
hummm chotti is showing too much taavar... she cry when I show my looking the other way or past her taavar..😛... thanks for commenting nus.. checking your chap 14comment now..love hammie