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Well ... what can I say?
I'd read the first chapter(or prologue?xD) yonks ago, when you initially posted it as an OS,(?) and I loved it then, and I love it now. Honestly.
That first bit, with [who I assume to be] Arnav "Nuzzling her neck" made me a little ... ill, because it just ... just didn't feel right to read, because it wasn't KHUSHI he was enjoying that with. Does that make sense?! I don't know, I just have too many feels, ok?!
I really liked the intensity that was in the first 3-ish chapters - of NK frantically asking for answers, (I love NK, BTW. Hands down, that character is just the best😆), Arnav realising that he needs to go and find her, he realises just what he stands to lose! I really liked that whole inner turmoil you showed Arnav having at the beginning of chapter 2 - he knows she's being reckless and he knows it's because of him. He feels guilt, remorse, and all that shebang. Good, I say!
That text though ... *sniff*sniff* when she said she'd be watching them from heaven, I was literally just like, "PLEASE don't let her be dead, please let him find her and this just can't happen!" 😆
The whole "connection" they have - 'she should have gone by now, but something stopped her'. Well, what else could it be, other than our very own Arnav looking for her?! :') Rabba Vey, blad. Big time. 😆
I had a friend who almost succeeded in killing herself, and so when you described that utter feeling of hopelessness and desperation that Khushi was going through, I could really relate because I KNOW, albeit second-hand, how one feels whilst going through all of that. That was really a poignant section of the update, seriously :(
And NK!! MY POOR, POOR NK! 😭 <3
The letter was just heart-breaking ... I swear it should be nothing short of illegal to write so many upsetting things into one update -_____-
And the end! 😲A cliff-hanger! But not for me, whoopee! 😆 [THIS is the consequence of being drugged up on Ibuprofen and Vicks. >.<]
(BTW, just to let you know - there's no link that takes you from Chapter 2 to Chapter 3; I felt like a right stalker trolling through the pages to find the next chapter :P But yeah, just thought I should let you know so you can fix it :) )
- - Okie-dokie, ON TO THE NEXT ONE! xD - -
Ah! Excitement! Horror! Intensity! All of it! Literally had me at the edge of my seat and I was like, "no, please, no no no no no no no". Yeah. It's not normal to be affected this much by something, is it? Hmm ...
But the line where she turns around as he screams her name and the fact that she's finally at peace, and can just be without complications ... Oof! Hit me straight in the blood-pumping organ. 😭
Ok ... PHEW. She's alive! *at the time I did a bit of a Staying Alive jig ... don't ask why 😆* So, it's blatant that he DOES care for her ... more so than possibly he's let on so far? Hm, interesting ...
NK! Good ol' NK! It's not funny how amazing he is ... He STILL cares and loves her despite knowing that she can never wholly be his, because she will always love Arnav more than him, and it just makes you so ... so upset that it just can't be between them :(
And LOL - a pissed NK is not to be messed with! ^___^ 🤣
OK, now I'm definitely convinced - Arnav plays a big, BIG role in Khushi's decline in a sane state of mind ... I wonder what he did, though? Whatever it is, I have a feeling it's not gonna be sunshines and rainbows 😕
The fact that he just doesn't even REALISE that, though, until now is just ... bloody typical!! 😡 Gah, Arnav, you absolute ... 🤬
5 more minutes? Oh no! 😲
TO CHAPTER 4! :D
"Tortured into believing she was mentally disturbed"?!?! Why, oh why, are they all hell-bent on withering away such a treasure?! I just hope they've finally learnt their lesson!! >:(
And Khushi ... I understand how you feel, but seriously ... you've got somebody like NK waiting for you! Wake up, baby, come on! YOOOHOOO! 😆
Heartbreaking first couple of chapters dude ... Y U do this?! 😭
* *FLASHBACK MOOODE* *
21st birthday party, eh? Already know that it can't end well! 😆
Aww, THIS is the Khushi I love - the fiery, confident, 'in-your-face' kind ... not the poor, limp and pathetic figure still in limbo at the mo :'(
What had been planned? she asks? Well, that's what we'd like to know as well! :P [even though I could probably make a highly valid guess ... 'when a man and woman meet under arranged circumstances ... ' LOL 😛]
NEXT OONNEEE:
Oh. Friends ... their fathers would like them to be FRIENDS. But we all know, from the cult classic, that "pyaar dosti hai", yadda, yadda, so I have high hopes! 😉😆
Oh, Arnie boy ... loosen up a bit! You'll get wrinkles, otherwise! :P haha
And Khushi's already weary of the guy! Yeaaahh!! 😆
LOOOL she really should have expected this though - like, really? ARNAV SINGH RAIZADA was gonna pull a chair out? For someone he's only just met? No way, babes. Naat happening!! 🤣
Ooh-la-la! Seorita Martita, eh? Mistress, eh?! Sending naughty pictures, eh?! Well ... Iss Beshaarmi ko Kya Naam Doon?! Sitting in a public place, with a guest, indulging in such affairs?! Hmpfh! 😆
Yeah, I also wondered at first why not call her Seorita ... why Mademoiselle? "Let's say Spanish doesn't interest me" Errr ... you have a Spanish mistress ... I sniff a porkie!! 🤣
And that last question ... bang on! Why, indeed, had he changed his attitude towards her? Hmm ...
* * Aww, last one I'm saying this for! :'( but still, ON TO THE NEEEXT ONE!! 😆* *
Their banter! OH, their banter! I LOVE IT!! Hopelessly, completely and utterly, love it! 😆
Ew, she would have preferred AKASH?! Oh good Lord above, whyyy?! 🤢😆
Bless, they actually managed to have a decent conversation without biting each other's heads off! Progress ... has been made!! I'm so proud! :') LOOL 😆
Very well-written and thought out - definitely looking forward to more on this!! ⭐️
Thanks for all the PMs and scraps and I truly hope you enjoy reading the huge mess above 😆
Edited by MsIPKKNDManic - 12 years ago
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