So when finally you've completed with you story. I would rant my heart out today.
This story was one of a kind. It etched perfectly the filth behind the scenes of politics. How in name of merlin, I wonder you've woven a world that might actually exist somewhere but to relate with it in real life is just horrifying. The home-work and hard-work that you've done building up every single character of this story was incredible. I specially got spell bound to two of the characters one that was of generous Aman- True Man to be precise. His wife knew everything about him and the fact he completely loathed Arnav for his deeds and yet he was beside him like HAPPY TO HELP and second of course Yamir, I completely fell in love with this character.
He was exactly same and yet so different form his father. The creativity, the style, the charisma, way to wrap everyone round his fingers it was like Arnav rather than him yet he was so grounded to earth. He knew what reality is. I mean he could have been the same as his father when Khushi told him everything. He still could have pursued his dream and Khushi would have given up just for him but he did not. Blood speaks, you must have heard this phrase often and it did it was so visible he was like his father righteous and arrogant yet a true son of his mother he was jovial, full of life and kind hearted. The encounter between Father and Son was just commendable. Of course our writer could have wound her path other way round but where's the fun in that. It was simply amazing to see the kind of time you've put up to plan it all up. Nice plot I must impress.
The way you've woven Arnav's character was just marvellous. After being so in love with his wife, it was like he was sipping his favourite coffee when he let her go just like that. In depth of his heart he knew he was doing it all wrong yet he did what he had to, never re-analysing never looking back and yet what he got to see after ten long years was his almost 10 years old son and finally regretting his fatal deeds. Yet at the moment what felt right to him was to leave Khushi again wrenching his heart for about 6 years thinking he was now doing the right thing, never knowing he had wronged Khushi again and this time for the worst. How could he, how would he have thought that a girl who completely worshipped him blindly would be happy without her shining sun? He just can't let go of the little 'I'm always right' attitude from his system and again committed blasphemy of a mistake. And of course when parents go wrong its always a child standing up for the right and making them see reasons. And so did Yamir. Completely taken aback, a rather feeling tiny in front of his son Arnav, did he should have done years before. Again a round of applause for your commendable writing ethics 👏
Coming to the ending of your story I can't comment if it was perfect but all I know is it couldn't have been better really! ?I can totally imagine your scrunched brows, your hand feverishly typing and striking off words in haste to be perfect of the perfection as always that you've given to this story! Open ended endings are way better that creating fuss in your head at least for the ardent readers its a true gift for they get to fit the best piece their heads can create. I'm so elated reading this fantastic piece by you. 👏
If asked me story's ending would have been something of this sort-
"Feeling Khushi's warmth truly touching his heart after what felt like a millennia Arnav knew what he had to do.
No matter how ignorant he had been in the past he just couldn't get over the cold looks in the beautifully brown eyes that xeroxed his.
He had now or never to create his wonderland he had only dreamt in his most beautiful dreams after that fateful morning he had abandoned his own cup of happiness. His serenity of life. His Khushi and along with her their little bundle of joy rightly named Yamir. After all he was the one to show him the path he should have followed a lot earlier.
Lightly pecking Khushi on her forehead he quickly walked out of the house. Not to get away again but to come back to his ocean of happiness forever until death do them apart."
--Ah don't kick me after reading it 😉 but just couldn't let it go today. I since starting knew, would be writing a whole book praising you down here in my own style 😛
I can't thank you enough Ari. This was the most increadible piece of writing that I've come across. Just keep up with your beautiful work. I know you have a long way to go. Its just a small warm up for you 😃
Love you always 🤗
Radhika
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