Jeevan Saathi- AR-Part 5 Pg.1 | 11/25/08 - Page 12

hey anita!!!
i'm so sorry for my on and off comments for this and TMR.. school's just keeping me on my toes!
but i have to tell you.. i'm completely in love with the concept of his ff!! i really like how you show armaan still in love with anjali.. and how riddhima slowly pulls him out of it..
you know i'm a huge fan of your AR scenes :) and the wet shirt one here was pretty awesome anita!!
i love the pace you've set.. how things are gradually building up.. and i love riddhima's character in this.. she's so different from the stereotypical riddhima in a lot of the ffs.. it's really neat how you show her thoughts.. helps me connect a lot better with her character!

oh and we visited dallas over the last winter break.. and we ate at masala wok.. mmm their tandoori chicken stuff was absolutely delish!! lol i read that in your update and i'm going.. hey.. i've been there too!! :D
we might come down to texas over this winter break too.. my mom has friends in dallas and houston.. so we were thinking of coming!

well anyways.. awesome part! :)
love you!
shruti

Wowwwwwwwwwwwww Anita, that was some update!! Loving the way ur taking this girl!!

The first scene was an excellent start, him living up to his khadoos image, sending her extra work....poor girl. And her meekly asking for a leave.....awww and ultimately he did allow her.......as i said great start........👏

The wedding scenes again awesomely described........RM trying to convince him for the wedding. Loved the way u portrayed them as concerned friends and Armaan being him self......infact the way u show his two sided nature. The caring, gentle guy on one hand and him being hard and strict because of the bitter incidences in his life....brilliant job Anita........👏

Sssiir aap?" said Riddhima, stuttering as she was the one who accidently flung the water at him. Nervousness took control of her body as her hands began to shake. She didn't want to face his wrath at her sister's wedding in front of everyone.

Awww poor girl, the way u penned her nervousness was fab!!👏

And OMG the scenes after she spilled water, outstandingly written girl!!! The way they both felt strange, the feelings described deserve an applause!!

He handed her the shirt and she started ironing the wet patch in silence as the situation was really awkward. Here she was ironing her strict boss's shirt while he was standing half-naked in her room. How ironic…

Armaan felt a weird vibe go through his body also as he wiped his chest with the towel. It would be quite an absurd situation for anyone. In the office, he was all strict and everything, but at the moment he was standing in his close friend's sister's room, who is an employee, with his shirt off while she irons his shir

^^ That was flawlessly written, thats wat i meant, their feelings, the weird, awkward feeling, Way to Go!!!!!!

And the lights went of convineintly.......😆 she ran into his arms...aww well if i there then i wud hav done the same😍,,,....whether i was scared or not.......😆

And him feeling all awkward all over again......and disappearing......i mean going away quickly from the party, unable to fathom wat happened, trying to run away from those feelings again was marvously written!! Girl u got me completely hooked!!

Will be very eagerly waiting for more.........hoping to see an early update. love ya!!

luvd it...very well written...

hey Anita

Hey Anita!!
I just read all 4 parts in one go...and so far its amazing.
Aww I feel so bad for Armaan....poor guys living such a depressing.
I loved the way you described Anjali and Armaans love story...Anjali's definitely different in your fan fic...she's soo simple here lol.
But i noticed some similarities like in the meetings between Armaan and Anjali and Armaan and Riddhima...like her saying a small prayer to god with her eyes shut tight and clutching her files tightly..sorta similar to what armaan and anjali did in the elevator.
I loved part 4...i can defintely see the attraction building between AR....haha i loved your lines when ridz had to iron armaans shirt

. 'I can't believe I'm standing here and asking for my boss to take his shirt off'I just had to fling my water on my BOSS out of all people, right?' she thought in her mind as a unexplainable feeling roamed through her body, giving her the chills.

and i loved how you made the lights go out.....and she clutched onto armaan..awwww....and he's starting to feel something for her even though he doesn't know it yet!!
Seriously your fan fic is tooo AMAZING =]
I personally love the pace its going at...its not too fast or too slow its just perfect =]
This comment might be long..haha sorry didn't mean to bore you..i was just trying to comment on all 4 parts at the same time lol.
If its not tooo much trouble for you...can you please pm me when you next update?

Update as soooooooooon as you can...no rush...well the sooner the better...but i understand if your not able to! =]

Luv,
Mira

I am reserving my spot, will come sooner or later but will come for sure. Laut ke budhhoo ghar to aayenge hi.

Hey Anita

i rea ur parts plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz pm me wen u updte very nice FF i would love to read more n fast lolx

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Omd .. That was amazing

anita, i'm eagerly waiting for your next update. please update soon.