Alfaaz - A ShraMan FF - Now Moved to Wattpad - Page 7

crazyparrot

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Posted: 7 years ago

#61

Amazing start👏

I absolutely loved the concept of story starting from where shravan left for London!

Now both sumo and shravan are lonely, she did right thing by breaking her friendship with her so called freinds!

Would love to read how sumo apologizes to shravan and how their friendship blossoms to love!

Update soon!

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Ammy

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Posted: 7 years ago

#62

Awesome, I so used to wish such a closure for the teenage version, Zoyi you made my dream come true through this.

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Dolly Chouhan

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Posted: 7 years ago

#63

Ranjish❤️

Finally you're here with the update

I really wanted sumo to realise that what she did was wrong and apologise to him...10 year's is a long time man

And she did...she realised she was wrong and left all those stupid people for HER CHASHMISH in damn! This gives feels

Nanu knows it all😆😆

And that diary 😭😭😭

Oh god! He's so sad...so lonely...so alone and he needs her so muchhh🥺

Itna dard 😭😭

But always beautifully penned 👏👏👏

Please update soon

Thanks for p.m😃

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Safire

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Posted: 7 years ago

#64

This was so very emotional...

I felt very sad for both Sumo and Shravan...

Eager to read whether Sumo will call Shravan or not...

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deltadawn

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Posted: 7 years ago

#65

Zoya..

aap ke baare me likhne se pehle mujhe alfaaz dhundne padete hain 😊

What I liked about it

everything would be too vague but yeah everything. 😃

now precisely I like two things.

Firstly the flow of the story. We skip 10 years so quickly always while thinking of Shraman. those ten years are what made them what they are today and you are exploring them first. I loved it to the core.❤️

And then where you always win as a writer. When you write Shravan you are Shravan, when you write Suman you are Suman. Today you wrote as teenage Shraman and its just them I can read in here. No Zoya here. 👏

Jahanpanah... wish I was half the writer you are ever!! 👏

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vimikrao

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Posted: 7 years ago

#66

Flashback of EDKV ...after Shravan left to London how was his life in London, what all he did there, how was his life, was he missing Sumo or started to hate her because she was not there in his side when he needed her... but was he that tall in his teenage, his height was normal right then why Sumo calling him I miss u Khutub Minar... it's just my opinion...

Thanks for PM

Vinu

Edited by vimikrao - 7 years ago

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adityasingh.246

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Posted: 7 years ago

#67

Indeed its a beautiful series ..

Often we realize worth of someone when we lose him and then realize how we took him/her for granted .. But then its important that we realize & repent .. I liked it how Sumo rebuked & called off her fake friends .. Though her loneliness is a sad thing coz she was way more attached to him then she noticed ..

It was even more heartbreaking for Shravan that he lost all who were dear to him & also remained lonely ..Irony ! How he had money but not the one to spend on .. he may be angry but he loved her more than his anger .. His entry in diary was so touching ..

The best part was he knew that she missed him & gone all quiet & was waiting for her call & she knew that he was lonely there & wanted a friend & she was ready to seek forgiveness ..

Looking forward to next part ..

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srividyasubbu1

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Posted: 7 years ago

#68

Interesting plot. I liked the POVs of Shraman which was actually missing in the series. There were many situations where the exact feelings of them had to be shown, but unfortunatly not shown. Thanx to you writers who are getting the smallest to smallest feelings for us to read

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orion23

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