ShraMan FF: Contradiction & Reality - Chap 16 on P. 31 & A/N on P.31 - Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
#21
I loved how you balanced both of their mistakes.
Equated them.

Time for some revelations for Shravan baba!
YASS :D

Waiting for the fourth part.
-God bless
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Posted: 8 years ago
#22
Amazing update dear..
Four shots great..
Thnx dear
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Posted: 8 years ago
#23
the third part was awsm as well... I too had thought shravu will feel guilty when he'd get to know that sumo knows wat he said about their relationship n m glad you showed it...cz in serial he didn't even give a damn about it...
finally sumo said all that she must have said before...
I hope shravu uses his lawyer mind which he never uses when it comes to his sumo n papa...
I liked the way u penned his fear of rejection, guilt n everything...
waiting for next part :)
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Posted: 8 years ago
#24
amazing update
totally loved it
continue soon
superb
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#26
Nicely penned.👍🏼... Emotional kar ditta😭 Pls update sooon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#27
Man, this was absolutely brilliant!! Super awesome sauce!!
You caught the vein of the issue so intricately.
Shravan's and Ramnath's mistakes do not absolve Suman and Nirmala of their share of mistakes.
The confrontation was epic, a true masterpiece. You handled the delicate father-son relationship along wulith the feelings of betrayal, guilt and defeat so poignantly.

Shravan got to show his ruthlessness yet he could not keep a hold on his emotions. And Nirmala has been a lousy mother and nothing can make her a true-blue abla nari, haye bechari. I absolutely hated her for showering all her love on that Chomu. She had already given up Shravu in her heart. I dont even want a Niru- Shravan confrontation because frankly she doesnt deserve a second of Shravan's time. But on second thoughts, bring it on for he needs to purge it out.

Shravan's abandonment issues were so well written. And Sumo also did not have him on her priority list. His misty eyes, his burly vision and that defeated stance... Is he going towards a breakdown??

I kept imagining Namik enacting the scene... It gave me goosebumps.
Wish this was the canon version...
Loved it...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#28
Very well written.
Shravan not forgiving suman for what she did by giving up on him and shravan's disappoinment with his mother's act are impressive and reality concepts.

Please continue.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#29
This chapter is SO VERY ON POINT...
"All I wanted is for the people I love to give a damn about me..."
YESSS...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#30
amazing update
absolutely loved it
continue soon
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