RiKara TS - Traces of You (completed)pt 3 pg 12 (28/6/17) - Page 8

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Genie

@writergenie17

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Posted: 7 years ago

#71

Okay... there's just so much perfection here that I need to take a breath and calm down.

You had me squealing like a teenager at every second sentence. This was adorable and beautiful and every other positive adjective I can think of atm...

This is what the coma track should've been like on the show... I'm just gonna think of this as canon from now on cuz I've stopped watching the show as it gives me too much michmichi.

Gauri's individual relationships with Shivaay, Rudy and Anika are beautiful to say the least. Even with minimal amount of interactions, you've managed to showcase just how special they are.

Om and Gauri slowly gravitating toward each other... in the absence of misunderstandings from his side and the lack of inhibitions from hers... is so satisfying to experience from your point of view.

Give us more soon Sakura!

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Rishrabh

@Rishrabh

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Posted: 7 years ago

#72

Damn good sakura.. The way u r showing rikara its amazing. Keep writing.

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AparnaChinnu

@AparnaChinnu

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Posted: 7 years ago

#73

Awesome Loved it yar...

I really loved the way shivaay and Rudra trying to bring

rikara together...Rudra is too hilarious yar...

awww om wants to know why gauri is afraid to be around him...he wants to make a relationship with her

waiting for the next update

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Poorva Chakraborty

@Cinnamon_Kisses

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Posted: 7 years ago

#74

Sakura 🤗

This is so realistic ... Its not about how you are writing the story ... Its about you gifting us an experience ... You make it feel like the whole nonsensical mess created by the CVS is actually worth it. The way you have gone below the ocean floors of DBO and reach IB to do all kind of damage repair is a very intricate job.

Coming to the story ... Finally Artist Kara getting back to work ... Aakhein taras gayi hai ... To see him mould clay and talk to paint. But again he keeps thinking about this mysterious woman who is his wife ... Gauri ne uske Nandi KO itni shiddat se chaha hai ... Ke ab pura universe unko milaane ke liye reki bhej raha hai ...

I am loving Shivaay and Rudra with their attempts to bring RiKara closer ... Bhai ka farz nibha rahe hai woh ...

Coming to my favorite element ... It is how Gauri has started pursuing her studies and Om is proud of her ... The way he encourages her is genuine husband goals ...

RiKara is spell binding ... Whether it be how she is sleeping, their hug or the geometry homework ... He is so subtly caring ... The way they have established a comfort level is actual relief to the painful fan hearts ...

I simply love Rudra ... Pehle math phir chemistry phir biology 😆 you know I was thinking of those words and you wrote it ...

Omkara has respected her as a woman, accepted her as his wife ... Is being possessive about her ... Falling for her ...

After all she is his wife !!!

I like his retrospection and urgent want to know her ... And the worry for her happiness.

The way he takes care of how she should not cry ... The way he studies her expression ... The way he is observing her physicality is so romantic ... Her eyes, her back, her palms ... He is going to make all other husbands a run for their marriage 😉

Om and his advances ... Trying to help his wife with hair ... How mischievous ... He is so demanding ... He has begun to realize his emotions ... Gauri is going to have the best time of her life as they both fall for each other after knowing each other.

The best part was when he promises her that whatsoever happens OSO will be there ... I was like je baat! This is Omkara the man with a point of view and all flesh and bone ...

Reading this ... I felt like this is the real Om and the one On screen is a revengeful twin brother of his who was an infant lost in kumbh ka Mela 😆

Now that he knows about chulbul .. Looking forward to how he will take the story ... And both of them and going to help in ShivIka Milan ...

Intezaar ki intehaan ke baad bhi meethe phal ki jagah CVS ne kadwe karele diye ... You are proving that they lost their one of the last chance to save their show ...

Hats off too you for penning down every frustrating twist and element of the show and making it look like ... It was supposed to be there ...

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rikara94

@Raghav_Rao

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Posted: 7 years ago

#75

Aah such a long update u know its amazing update
Gauri resumed her education and shivaye helping her
And shivaye and rudra are planning for getting rikara together
Firstly phone and then helping in study

I love when rudra say.. pegle math phir chemistry and then biology haha
They share very sweet moment
And mujhe hasi hi aa gyi when he read the caller id and thought surely not salman khan from dabangg and who the hell called their wife chulbul😆
And at the last he said i am not going to leave you agar memory waps bhi aa gyi tab bhi
Oh god i hope he will not leave her after memory return bcoz as we how much he hate her before memory loss.. anyway oso ne promise kiya hai toh nibhayega bhi..
Update soon

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

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Posted: 7 years ago

#76

Originally posted by: Rumadiv
Dear Sakura,
Cant explain how you had expressed the coma track as most fans wanted. The original track as ruined both Om and Ri character. I thought there will be a memory loss drama, but CV's have other ideas.

Om wondering who Ri is?? Ri hurt as Om doesn't remember her was well described . Shivay being the big brother and knowing about Ri as taken the best decision. Both of them being each others company as their loved ones hurted them unintentionally. Om has come to know about the real Ri he Doesnt know. He has started falling for her without himself knowing. Om being jealousy with Ri as his family members are damn close to her.

Then their private moment which we wanted badly in serial is happening in your story and its nice to read it. Now Om has started to learn about his past and as promised Ri. Will see whether Om will realize is love soon and tell her. Will see even he will keep his promise of not leaving Ri. Waiting for answers. Hope you will update soon this and other story also.

With love,
Divya :-)

Glad you loved it Divya! I am among the fans who wanted it this way. Anyway, what if we can't have it onscreen? We can always have it on the Fic land. Loved the fact that you loved their moments, please keep reading. I would look forward to hear what you think of the final update.

Thank you so much!

Love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

Rocker

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Posted: 7 years ago

#77

Originally posted by: Tellywoodaddict
Uokay you left me speechless ..this is so my om ...this is so much rikara ...this is so much perfect I mean ...eacha and every element of your story has some emotions like you can't even afford to leave a word ...this story makes you smile and emotional .. like nothing ever did...we people who have followed in from day one know the value of this om an the gauri who is been suffering since day 1
This story is so much special to me thank you so much for this

Much love
Trish

Hi Trish!

Aww, it means a lot when you say that! Thank you! I really want to see this Om, you know that deep, understanding guy from IB? I'm really into writing emotional stuff, so yeah, my writing is full of them. I'm feeling so blessed to be able to write something that is special to you!

Love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

Rocker

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Posted: 7 years ago

#78

Originally posted by: pt311288
it was lovely 👏

Thanks dear!😃

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

Rocker

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Posted: 7 years ago

#79

Originally posted by: writergenie17
Okay... there's just so much perfection here that I need to take a breath and calm down.
You had me squealing like a teenager at every second sentence. This was adorable and beautiful and every other positive adjective I can think of atm...

This is what the coma track should've been like on the show... I'm just gonna think of this as canon from now on cuz I've stopped watching the show as it gives me too much michmichi.

Gauri's individual relationships with Shivaay, Rudy and Anika are beautiful to say the least. Even with minimal amount of interactions, you've managed to showcase just how special they are.

Om and Gauri slowly gravitating toward each other... in the absence of misunderstandings from his side and the lack of inhibitions from hers... is so satisfying to experience from your point of view.

Give us more soon Sakura!

Thank you Genie! Truly humbled by your lovely compliments dearest friend, since you know how much I admire your writing, to able to write something that you consider perfect is absolutely terrific!

Yeah I'm kinda allergic to cannon these days as well😕 But glad you're promoting my version into cannon at least in your world.

Truly isn't this what we all want? Gauri to find some place of her own within the O family? No idea when that would happen in real, but in fics we can have what we want.

I hope you'd love the ending I've on cards for them. It's not a complete ending, there is enough open spaces for the story to continue. Do tell me how you find it, once I post😳

Love,

Sakura

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

Rocker

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Posted: 7 years ago

#80

Originally posted by: X.shmm
Lovinv your story keep it up

Thank you!😳

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