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pri98.arora

@pri98.arora

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Posted: 8 years ago

#11

"Finally I have learned to lie."

This line is heart wrenching !

This OS was superbly penned like always.

Ur writing is so real that it makes me crave for more.

Superb idea👏

Yes imagining Swaron on this one is a little difficult but hats off to ur command over the language 👏

Keep writing :)

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Aneesha

@aneesha93

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Posted: 8 years ago

#12

This was indeed a great piece of writing. Very well written⭐️

Thanks for the pm

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Ananya

@ExpectoPatronus

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Posted: 8 years ago

#13

fab piece of writing. While reading, i myself felt a hurting lump in my chest. Keep writing...

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Shreya

@Wandering_mind

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Posted: 8 years ago

#14

You are such a versatile writer!...Although it was heart wrenching to imagine this on Swaron,your writing was so overpowering...It surpassed everything and I just went with the flow!..Painfully beautiful..(I hope that makes sense :P)

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Nikki

@HR-DMG4life

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Posted: 8 years ago

#15

That was outstanding

Truthfully I didn't imagine SwaRon in the story because I felt the characters were too different but nice story

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sara

@phoo_honey

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Posted: 8 years ago

#16

Oh my gosh!! This is the most amazing thing I have ever read. I could literary feel the pain. The emotions were too strong. Somewhere I felt sorry for swayam because he tried to handle everything but failed but I am also angry with him, he shouldn't have an affair. Also sharon was at complete lost. I feel so bad for her...Her condition seems horrible...I really wish they could have a happy ending but that not what reality is...Thank you for the pm...this is simply amazing...

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srinidhi94

@srinidhi94

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Posted: 8 years ago

#17

This is... You know what...I don't have any words!!!

Anything that I say will never exactly say how this is

Hats off

Edited by srinidhi94 - 8 years ago

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mythreyii

@mythreyii

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Posted: 8 years ago

#18

heya

as usual a brilliant write-up

the os is jus beautiful.the way all the emotions have been put in words is amazing

thaks a ton for not mentioning any name that made the os all the more good.

the pain that the wife undergoes was well written

though the email was a shocker the end stole the show

the last line of the girl emoted how numb she is...

FINALLY I HAVE LEARNED TO LIE..

beautifully penned

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Manisha Bhardwaj

@Rockingbhardwaj

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Posted: 8 years ago

#19

I wish I could lie too...amazingly written dear

I know their situation is worse..
But the solution they took is not right...
But its good if they find solace in it..
Loved it

Thanks for the pm

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Neet

@.writtenletter.

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Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Beyond amazed! So much that i wish you wrote Short story. Its weird because the concept of the other woman in writing generally carries a lot of regret but i am happy the way you dealt with it. Its how it is in reality, there may be guilt but not enough to change one's way. I think the drinking the bitterness is so on point and justified that my heart broke reading it. Its heart wrenching seeing people break apart that have so much history in what ever world you view them. What can i say it's amazing.

Neet <3

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