Finally a writer willing to experiment with Swayam. People make him such a saint that he becomes so unbelievable, knowing well that he comes from a family of money i say the characterisation is spot on. You're writing is powerful and effective, and every monologue is clear to each characters internal dilemma. What excites me is that how they will grow over time, the sex, the drugs are a part of every teen or college students life, but we all grow out of it.Eventually settle? Also thank you for making Taani more relatable, everybody needs a breaking point, and you showed her quiet accurately. I think the Rey and Sharon scene was kind of expected but you wrote it well, but i really hope you work on Sharon as a character because she come across very shallow very easily, and it makes me question why would a guy like Swayam ever like her? Surely he isn't supposed to be superficial? If anything i ask is that you make her more redeemable or human, not that you have done a bad job, you kind of wrote just as she is, its just i was never happy with the way she was on the show, the character is bipolar with they way writers wrote her, and its sad that they had a very good actress both times. But please update, waiting for this and i'll send it to more readers that are willing to give it a go. [/QUOTE
I am sorry commenting on comments,forgive me, Lovestory55 I totally agree with her take on Taani and Sharon totally. Sharon always portrayed as the Shallow and Superficial girl, oh god its so unbearable.You took Taani out of her comfort zone. On Swayam it took me till third chapter to accept his character, but now i am happy how you have portrayed it. Lovestory55 said exactly what i wanted to tell you, took the words out of my mouth about Swayam, Sharon, then Taani. Once again sorry Lovestory. Please do update soon.
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