SwaRon SS | November [Updated P16] 23/11 - Page 13

Originally posted by: amyraswaron

Hi Paridhi!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OMG ... u write like a real author...!!!!!!!!!!!👏

I mean u write ...hmmm...out of wrld!!!!!!!!!!!!👏

Yeah and I was Going to ask the que... but keechu asked it!!!!

Hmmm... Now I see ur point behiind writing thiis as NOVEMBER!!!!!!!!

PLS Continue!!

By d way sorrry cannot post a long comment as everyone else because my Myra(lappii) is a little DIVA herself😆

She is not leetiing me post a longer cmnt!!!!!!!

By d way i m gonna get a new ! day after tmrw so frm the will post longer cmnts...

AND MIND - U WRITE FANTABULOUSLY AWSM!!!!!!!!!😃😊👏

LUV

KRITI

Originally posted by: --Destiny--

Woah. Firstly you're a stunning writer. Stunning doesn't exactly fit in , but all thanks to my limited vocabulary , I can come up with that now. 😆 Every write up is excellently done and has high repeat value. As in I can read the whole stuff numerous times without feeling the need to skip anything. That's how wholesome you write a prose. This one was after a long wait. And it was worth it.

First and foremost my most favourite aspect would Swayam taking the front step in their relationship. It was long due and I always ALWAYS I wanted to see him doing that , you placed quite a fitting position to build that up. How you write such angst man. The emotions that are penned hits you like a whirlpool straight on the face. And some beautiful stuff you write which leaves a deep impact on you. Take it. I remember qoutes from your prose. Doesn't happen often while reading fanfictions.

If I quote all my favourites then it would take the whole page. Would do though some of the many.

"Sharon is like sand, captured in his fist. The tighter he tries to hold on, the faster she slips away." SO DAMN TRUE. I do wish to see them one day where he would tightly hold on and she won't go away. Not it reference to your prose specifically. Its was my most wanted ultimatum to their story. Finale kind of. Anyway. Moving on.

" Is he selfish to want to be her everything? He wants her in every way possible. He wants the good and the bad, and everything between and beyond. " - Ah Swayam. This . This desperate and helpless yet aesthetic love of his was something I SO loved.

" She pulls away from him and catches his reflection in the glass. His eyes are haunted. Hers, plead him to understand. They stare at each other through the glass, neither breaking away. They are hurting each other. Her indifference, and his doubts will be the end of them." This was a heartbreakingly beautiful moment. WOAH.

"It is no surprise that Sharon takes it personally, and the irony does not slip by either of them. It's okay for her to keep things hidden from him, but when he does it, she cannot accept it. While it should infuriate Swayum, it only makes him love her more. Her claim on him is undeniable, but she expresses it rarely. This in one of those precious occasions." - Being someone who connects more to Swayam. This trait of Sharon I had somewhat love-hate relationship with. It used to frustrate me. At the same time it was one the most intense and beautiful showcase of love for Swayam from her part. Kinda Sharon way.

In all your prose of "November" you create huge turmoils between them and tangle them to where it looks like they can't get out of this. But they do. And that's always one step ahead of where they were the last time. That has been always one huge complaint for me in the SwaRon story. SwaRon used to remain in the constant zone in terms of their feelings after every meltdown. Only during the phase after hospital confession till the proposal I saw that falling and getting up together thing. They never had huge meltdown during that phase but the minor clashes in opinions and then sorting it out someway and be together was something I would cherish. *I know i shouldn't be talking about D3 so much in a comment related to your story but I can't seem to stop 😡* That's your huge success as a writer where in writing such complex characters you never loose the essence and the motive of the story. And move them ahead whether positive for their relationship or not.

Need I have to say more that I absolutely loved every bits of it. I read you have lost interest in the fandom. Its quite selfish of me. But can't help but request. Please do keep writing for us readers. Reading such top notch writing is my pleasure. And SwaRon kind of will always be my incomplete fairytale. So I want to keep reading.

Also I read about SS going haywire in the village . Oh I know. I know. I really don't know what happened. And suddenly things went so haywirish as soon as that village track started. I won't say Sharon was desperate. But more so in my understanding she was more in teasing bracket. She knew way too well Swayam would never reciprocate. I really wished they would have shown Swayam reciprocating to scare her a bit. But it didn't happen. Huge disappointment for me was Swayam's non committal weirdness. That was like dunno what to say. Marriage ho ya na ho. That wasn't him. Noway him. Anyway. Have nothing but some random and sweet memories from those days of SwaRon.

I always wanted to know the reason behind choosing the month November. But never got around asking it. Thankfully got to know.

I have made it terribly long . Sorry for that. Do write the next part soon. Thanks for this wonderful read.

P.S : Paridhi please make a PM list and send PMs to people na. People would be in touch with the story. Many don't visit the forum anymore. Please put a thought to it.

-Uzma

Originally posted by: Rockingbhardwaj

So ayam's POV is well penned

There fears..emotions everything is nicely put down

Moving in..wow

Originally posted by: zaara.fkm

Amazing work, read it all in one go! Somewhere I understand the "silence" people are talking about and what you're portraying, because I too have that issue as Sharon, and I can completely relate to her feelings and inhibitions. I often keep big things, good or bad hidden till I have completely exhausted all resources to solve it myself, and I am absolutely ready to speak on it, because I feel the person in front is either competition, or a loved one whom I don't want to stress. This way both groups only see the strong side, and prevents me from showing the struggles/weakness along the way. Not healthy haha, but I'm working on it. That's what initially drew me to Sharon's character (Vrushika) in D3 as well.

Coming to the story, I feel this is the exact representation of today's couples, who try to balance both a professional and personal life, and as much as we'd like to say that transparency, trust, faith, etc will help ease any of these issues, it is much easier said than done looking at the complex variables, differing interests/goals, and expectations in ourselves and each other as partners. But seeing Swayam's point of view it helps me understand what my loved ones feel and expect from me, so thank you for that and I'll try to keep that objective perspective as shown in the story. Please do continue the story or create similar characters/stories in your other works. And last but definitely not the least, brilliant writing, your stories always take me to an alternate universe not too far from reality, for swaron or vrushan, which makes me feel that what is written may be true in another time/space, in the past or future. Hope you write long fanfictions too on swaron/vrushan, would love to read more of your work.