FF- Treacherous Fate [Thread #2 (Obscured Fate)] Chapter 26- Page 17

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Alright people, I am back.๐Ÿ˜›

A happy new year, and Saraswati Puja!

Now this is the next thread. Sorry about the delay. I tried my hand at banners which unfortunately failed miserably. Apparently I am technologically stunted๐Ÿ˜†

New thread, that means new readers (hopefully) so a new PM list. So readers please like this post for PM's and maybe drop a comment too.

So as Professor Dumbledore says, "Welcome to the new and for the old welcome back!"

OK I am ending my nonsensical, will be updating the twenty first chapter latest by Monday.

Toodles๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰




The story till date...

FF Obscured Fate puts light upon the degrading condition of the Rajput community and the obliviousness of the people to the foreign enemies. It starts with the murder of Hukum Singh a spy by a Hunter later unveiled as Maan Singh.

Kunwar Shakti Singh Suryavanshi lives his life in drowning in a sea of regret, the guilt of betraying blood showing the first inklings of a blood politics.

Panna Dhai, Rana Udai Singh Suryavanshi's nanny, now an old senile woman includes Krishnaa Vaibhavi Mourya in this web by showing her Pratap Songara's portrait wherein she recognizes him as her savior from Surtan Singh Chauhan's lapdog years ago.

Songara, a well known and respected as well as feared name in the business circle show their worth by landing an improbable deal in their sail. The fame of the Songara Prince skyrocketing earns the envy of his brothers. Kunwar Jagmaal already in a fix due to his bad business deals abiding his mentor Rao Shiladitya is outvoted and ordered to return a sum of five hundred crores if he wishes to reign the Suryavanshi Enterprise. His mother Rani Dheerbai Bhatiyani plots to have him marry PhoolKanwar Rathore to gain the sum as dowry and convinces her sister Maharani Uma Devi of the same. Kunwar Sagar meanwhile knits his own trap, a snake in lions clothing, aided by none other than Ratan Punwar, sister of Ajabde Songara.

Ajabde Songara, absent in the picture for six years, leaves her legacy behind in her son Amar Pratap Songara who unaware of his Suryavanshi relatives meets his cousin Prithika Suryavanshi, daughter of Kunwar Vikram Suryavanshi in the Elementary. On the other hand a smuggling shipment goes wrong for Rao Shiladitya, foiled by a man named Patta who worked for a character in the shadows known as Baijilal.

Troubles brewing from the outside eclipse the plot with Rajkumari PhoolKanwar Rathore's accident done by Sharrifuddin Hussain under the orders of Shehanshah Akbar, another player in the game.

Discovered and brought to hospital by Dudarmal Chauhan, PhoolKanwar lives, thereby bringing back Krishnaa to the game.

Flashbacks are common in this FF, which shows pieces of Pratap and Ajabde's story, her tumultuous birth, their ethereal connection, their fight for love, all the way hinting a tragic end. In the whole course however Ajabde's fate is not clearly mentioned, except the instance where Rao Mamrakh reminisces about Pratap losing both his wife and son, throwing light on the fact that Amar's existence revealed to the readers too remains a secret in Rajputana.


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Thread 1 - Obscured Fate: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4076788

INDEX (Thread 2)

Chapter 21 - Page 2
Timeline(1st Edition) - Page 4
Chapter 22 - Page 6
Chapter 23 - Page 8
Chapter 24 - Page 12
Chapter 25 - Page 14
Chapter 26 - Page 17

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Nikiii!!!
Oh don't tell me...u are a Potterhead!!!!
Oh my God!!!!
Have u ever visited the Harry Potter forum!!!!
Gosh!!! Nikiii!!!
Anyways...coming back to the point...
Didn't u talk to Abhishek??? He must have given u some help...
And...why did u change the title???
And please...don't u think that u he lost ur readers...everyone is dying in curiosity of the next chapter...
And what else...
Waiting
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Originally posted by: Aru_A

Nikiii!!!
Oh don't tell me...u are a Potterhead!!!!
Oh my God!!!!
Have u ever visited the Harry Potter forum!!!!
Gosh!!! Nikiii!!!
Anyways...coming back to the point...
Didn't u talk to Abhishek??? He must have given u some help...
And...why did u change the title???
And please...don't u think that u he lost ur readers...everyone is dying in curiosity of the next chapter...
And what else...
Waiting



Hello to you too.
Yup I am a Potterhead. Harry Potter fanfics were my first entry in the world if fanfictions. Btw I am on Pottermore too, in Slytherin. What about you?
Anyway about the banner I sent him a PM with the description of my ficlet and the way I imagine the banner. He agreed to make me one. But more than a week or so has passed without him contacting me and giving no answer to my repeated PM's.
The name change is cuz this thread will hold much more darker themes than the previous one. The first one was called Obscured Fate because everything in that ficlet was an illusion of reality, matters pulled under the rug. Nearly everything was hidden at the start though many loose ends joined up in the end.
This thread, I hope for another 20 or 30 chapters would be filled with the dirtier side of conspiracies, betrayal and conning and I am so going to kill many loved characters.
Thus Treacherous Fate is the name.
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Congrats on your new thread!
I'll just say that I'm waiting for the update!!!
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Eagerly waiting for ur update... ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Hey

Wow so we are stepping into a more action filled world now...really excited for it... ๐Ÿ˜Š
I'm so in love with Obscured Fate that I was literally jumping up and down when I saw your PM
Eagerly waiting for the chapters

PS: Do check out my first FF Lost Faith and Light Up my World OS (I'll send you the links via PM)
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Originally posted by: twilightlover29

Hey

Wow so we are stepping into a more action filled world now...really excited for it... ๐Ÿ˜Š
I'm so in love with Obscured Fate that I was literally jumping up and down when I saw your PM
Eagerly waiting for the chapters

PS: Do check out my first FF Lost Faith and Light Up my World OS (I'll send you the links via PM)



Thanks a lot for dropping a comment. Truthfully speaking I am too horribly excited to start Treacherous Fate.
I will be happy to read ur fics too. Do send the links.
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Whhhooo...HHooo...!!!!!! Finaaalllyyy...finnaaalllyyy Nikki...!!! Season 2 is here !!!
I m eagerly waiting for Monday now...!!!! Title changed...!!! Its awesome !!!
Oh..ho...!! U n Aru come from Potter family...???๐Ÿ˜ณ
N u wrote fan fictions there...?? I ll check them out soon !!!
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I have been a silent reader of your ff and I am so sorry that I never commented before due to technical problems. I think it is almost a month since you last posted. I am soo excited for the next part. I believe that talent for writing is a gift and I congratulate you for that. Please post the next part soon.
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AN - As promised the first update of this new thread is here. I have also edited the previous post in page 1. The Summary of Obscured Fate and the PM list is updated there. If anybody else wants PM, please leave a comment.



Chapter - 21

The soft breeze of the morning, rejuvenated her in ways she couldn't imagine.

Who would have thought, she mused, that despite all the advancements in technologies, no coffee or exercising machine could give the same freshness that a morning stroll could give.

And it really was so.

Krishnaa had always been athletic. Maybe thanks to her troublesome childhood spent under the strain of survival or her disgust for those who let themselves expand from all directions, a fitness maniac, she loved anything that could sweat her out.

Her fifth round around the park completed, she let herself ungracefully fall into a bench, her breaths in swift gasps, heart thudding fast and loud.

As her exertion faded, she let herself comfortably sit on the stone seat. Her face turned upwards, her mind began driving to the closeted areas.

Someone sat next to her. A spicy smell of deodorant met her nose.

"You ran for quite a long time."

Krishnaa straightened, her eyes still closed.

"I believe in remaining fit."

The man sighed. "So you do. Here take the towel. You can use one." He pushed a cloth to her clenched hands.

She opened her eyes a fraction and took the white towel. She wiped her forehead and her fingers met something cold and hard.

She swiped the pen-drive and straightened her bushy hair tightly wound up in a band.

"Thanks." She handed the towel back.

The man took it back, his attention focused on unraveling the knots on the wires of his earphones.

He fixed them to his ears, took back the towel and with a seeming nonchalance, got up and left the place.

Krishnaa sat there for some time, enjoying the morning breeze, but then the sun made its appearance with vigor and soon she too got up and went away, holding a brisk pace.

An irritating smell drove to his senses as he felt something wet and slippery splash on him. A liquid of some kind. The headache inducing smell broke through the spell of unconsciousness he was in.

His head throbbed, as if a truck had run into him headfast.

The smell choked him, he tried to open his heavy unwilling eyes. They opened a fraction and again flickered shut.

With high effort he opened them again, but luck was seemingly not on his side as another splash of the liquid hit his eyes erupting in a volcanic burn.

He could feel the greasy liquid under the eye lids spreading with gusto of success.

He tried to shout, to screech, yell and yet his voice seemed to have abandoned him.

A faint chuckle met his ears.

"Burning is it? I hope it hurts. Though the best is yet to come."

A chill ran through him. He knew that voice. It was something he had heard in his life once before and always dreaded its return. His nightmares stared it.

But it was impossible. How did it happen? How did he come to know?

He tried to speak. Tried to form his thoughts into words but...

"Tchh! Tchh! Tchh! Look how the mighty have fallen. The once proud Rajput who stood tall and strong, now flat on the dirty floor, worthless, useless, valueless. Poor you."

The words brought alive every slumbering wound in his body, a fissuring pain clenching in his heart.

He felt something splash on him again. But this time his whirring brain finally caught up with the smell. It was familiar.

Kerosene.

Taught to be brave at the ugliest of all circumstances, he felt his resolve of courage shatter and dread filled his heart.

A hand grasped his head forcing his watery eyes open, flinching as the open air hit the burning eyes.

Those blurry gazes fixed onto the visage of a familiar man.

He grinned and brought a small matchbox to his focus. His breath shuddered.

The man stood up and stepped back.

He gave the bound up man a wide smile.

"The time draws nearer," he drawled.

Silence met his words.

A small matchstick, a harsh rub and a golden flicker followed.

"You Rajputs love your honour, don't you? So now burn for it."

The burning stick fell.

The kerosene embraced it as its own.

All blazed.

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