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Posted: 9 years ago
Sim will comment later have to go to school but loved it !
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Posted: 9 years ago
Great updates, the past four chapters have been lovely and getting the story to such an interesting point. Even with still so many unanswered q's aliya/rhea couldnt resist her love for zain. So wedding time but man suri n zain really needed this face off but what happened to zain? U love to put him through so much lol hope is is ok. Cant believe the story is finishing im gonna reread for sure. I really hope u come up with something new its gonna be great coz its u and thanks again for the dedication lol cant wait for the next update.
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chp 72
Zain's apprehensions were right after all..
Rehmaan's fatherly attitude an oasis for him,when there was barely anyone older than him,to help him ad guide hi.
Rhea..well rhea was Rhea..asking for chikki..btw..Sim,tell Zain to bring some for me too ;)
Jokes apart..it was a complete chapter..a perfect prelude for something as strong and heartrending as chp 73.
chp 73..
if someone knows how to give justice to all the characters and treat each of them equally..how to express human emotions and the way we are wired,then its you Sim..
Surraiya's outburst,was at the perfect moment..and I feel that she needed it..because she had reached her breaking point..
"akhri baar kuch bolna hai toh bolo...phir yeh mauka nahi milega ..."
Maybe she's right..he won't get another chance...and this fear,with the looming danger and consequences of the snake bite,will make her repent her words and actions..You keep your readers on the edge of their seat..keep them yearning for me..a sign of an extraordinary writer and storyteller..It was perfection..a painting.. a beautiful sunset indeed..
Love
Ann
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Wow what a twist man snakebite ahaa :D ab to maan jaao suraiyya aunty :v rhea aur zain ki shaadi wow excited :D thanks for the double updates :) update soon
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Thanks for the double treat
It was fab as usuall๐Ÿ‘
I liked the the new relation of Zain with his Gabbar cahchu๐Ÿ˜†
Atleast now he have someone to guide and support him
Now comes to Surraiya's behaviour i think it is somehow justified at last she is a mother
Hope so the constant hammering of Zain's love will crack her hard shell
Sim you have perfectly described the conflict of being a son and husband at the same time
continue soon๐Ÿ˜ณ
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Sim I hv never commented on this story I guess??? Yaa never commented... But now I can't control myself from commenting when heard that it's going to be finish soon I loved this concept very much in between some of the chap I hv missed to read but now am gonna read those3-4 chaps thxxx for the pm nd yaa plzz write more u r very good writer nd m really very much addicted to this now am going to read those chaps nd yaa plzz wrote moreee don't end this story so soon... My da and zainu โค๏ธ Aliya Kab aayegi...
Btw chalo am gonna read all these chaps nd then comment..
Bbye take care

Ananya
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outstanding updates as always๐Ÿ˜Š ...perfect depiction of emotions,feelings.and dialogue๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘... ..๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผjust awesome ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ..zain's life in khatra๐Ÿ˜ญ...hope suri ka heart melt ho jaye๐Ÿ˜ณ..thanx for pm...please update karo lavkar lavkar ..waiting... ๐Ÿ˜›
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Mind blowing updates I loved the confrontation scene between Zain and Suraiya couldn't have written it better ๐Ÿ‘ update soon I hope Zain is ok and Suraiya forgives him
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Life is weird when you start typing you go into a different world, its a connection and you want to stay in that dream land, not wanting to return back.

As we reach towards the end of thread1 which will happen by saturday, I know its not a true end ...but just a small break ...to be back in a week with few chapters. If I develop the story it may become 15-20 chaps max and then we reach the climax. As I have warned you earlier its a dark story and as we move through thread2 the darkness will increase.

I dont want to keep your hopes high but just a warning,Zains behavior will be on of the aspects of human nature that we have seen yet avoid.Enough of my gyaan, two chapters back to back

Enjoy

Sim


Dedicated to Nashfa and LuvPreetikaRao, recent addition to me readers and commenters list, thank you dear for your lovely words


Chapter 74

Nasukhra

Suraiya ran with madness and took him in his lap...he had fainted ...she saw his hand it had two deep bite marks ...

she shouted for the driver who was busy smoking at the other side of the road ...

They rushed him to the nearest hospital ...the whole time Zain was in her lap and Suraiya had tied a cloth on his hand ...the swelling and the bluish tinge made her fears worse ...she was loudly saying her dua ...moving her hand on his hair ...his face now drenched with tears ...falling from her eyes ...devastated at his lifeless body ...

The hospital had seen previous case too...for snake bites ...

Doctor please kuch kijiye ...mere bete ki jaan bachaiye ...she was begging ...

Dekhiye madam aap please bahar wait kijiye ...mai abhi dekhta hoo...

The call to Fahad was the worst one...

Mom mai abhi aata hu ...

Haa par Rhea ya ghar par kisi koh mat batana ...please...

By the time Fahad reached ...they had injected the anti-venom and fortunately for Suraiya the snake bite was of a less venomous one...he was shifted to a room, but was still unconscious ...

She waited outside with Fahad ...the hospital had snatched Osman from her leaving him paralytic, an accident from which he never ever recovered ...her heart was sinking ...the whole scene when Zain had pulled her towards him away from the rock ...was to protect her ...she was too close to be bitten and he had held her in his arms ...not caring if the bite could kill him ...

She recalled all her curses ...all her words filled with hatred for him ...he was dead ...and now he really was close to it ..the darkness of her words came haunting her

That he didn't care for her ...and now looking at his hand ...she felt she was the worst mother ...for any child...

She was crying non stop ...Fahad held her and assured her Zain will be fine ...

The doctor asked them that it was safe to take him back home, he would not wake till tomorrow ...they slowly started the journey back home...Zain still sleeping in her lap ...and Suraiya not even blinking for more than a few seconds ...rest if something bad happens to him ...

When Rhea realized she was shattered ...Fahad carried Zain to his room and made him sleep on the bed ...covering him ...When Suraiya stood at the door crying profusely...

After everyone knew what had happened ...she walked out to her room ...leaving a crying Rhea on his bedside ...

It was mid-night when he stirred again ...Suraiya came rushing towards his bed side ...he had a high temperature, the doctor had said he would ...she slowly put the dab of ice-cold towel on his forehead ...changing the water frequently...caressing the drops of sweat that were forming on his face...

Rhea was kept away with great difficulty...Rehman had said that he and Suraiya will both look after Zain ...

At night she heard him murmuring ...she came closer to his chapped lips ...

Please baat kijiye naa ...mai nahi reh sakta aapke bina ...

Please ...Mommm...aur kab tak ...kyu kar rahe ho mere saath aisa ...kyuu...the words died in silence...She was sobbing holding his hand now...what all her hate had done to her child...he was all broken and she had done this to him...

The morning was ...spent by holding his hand ...a small jerk and she saw him moving ...the swelling had subsided a bit but it still looked bad ...he stirred again ...she looked at his face ...the lines residing on his forehead had marked it with pain ..

He slowly opened his half shut eyelids ..still disoriented ...the vision blurred and mocking him ..was he hallucinating ...

In a sudden rush he opened his eyes ...and saw her face again ...

She was sitting next to his bed...he failed to realize he was in his room ...on his bed ...and Suraiya was sitting next to him ...

And the sudden storm of her words filled his heart up with images ...

She hated him ...she had told him to leave the house if he wanted to get married to Rhea ...she had disowned him ...she had even told him he was dead ...maybe she was right he had indeed died ...

He remembered seeing the snake on the rock so close to her when he was giving her the water that she had not accepted ...and just pulling her near to warn her protect her flinging the snake away with his other hand and getting bitten ...

He had wanted to tell her ...but she had started shouting at him before that ...she had poured her heart out and those words were more venomous then the bite ...

He was so frozen that he had forgotten to react ...standing there and just letting the crucial 10 minutes wade by ...

The present just turned back at him ...realizing it was all over ...he had to move on ...he was no longer her son ...hers ...he had chosen his path ...and she had hers ...

He gazed down ...and tried getting up ...putting a force on the same swollen hand and shouted in pain ...she rushed forward to help him ...he had stabilized much before that ...

She wanted to stop him but didn't muster up the courage to speak ...

He took the phone and called up ...

Fahad came rushing to his room ...closing the door behind ...

Zain ...theek ho na ...kya hua tabiyat kharab hai ...chalo doctor ke paas chalet hai ...concerned ...

Bhai ...his voice was still trembling ...

Woh message dena tha ...isliye bulaya ...dariye mat zinda hu ...ab tak ....

The words pointing at Suraiya who had moved towards the window...not looking at his face ...

Woh kya hai na mujhe phirse koi tamasha nahi karna hai ...baat karunga toh phir ghussa karegi ..

Inse kahiye Inka naam lekar bulaya aur chuha ...nahi karta toh inko kuch ho jaata ...mere marne se kisiko farak nahi padega ...par inko kuch ho jaata toh mai nahi zinda reh paata ...isliye karna padha ...

Vaada nahi toda maine ...he frowned ...

Kya pata shayad toda bhi ho, phone karke baat joh ki thi inse ...isliye abhi bhi bhugat raha hu ...

Chodiye, jaane dijiye mere jaise log yehi deserve karte hai ...

Waise...mujhe hosh nahi tha ...par shayad meri jaan bcahyie inhone...

Thank you, boliyega inhe ...mujhe doobara zindagi dene ke liye ...pehle baar bhi nasukar tha ...aur isbaar bhi wahi hu

He slowly and unsteadily got up from the bed taking the blanket with him ...lying down on the couch ...

Mai bed par nahi sota ...couch par hi sota hu ...aapko shayad pata nahi tha

Zain wapas aao ...tumhari tabeeyat theek nahi hai ....Fahad was angry at his adamant behavior

Aaj aap khayal rakh rahe ho ...kal se toh akele hi rehna hai ...

Kal chala jaunga ...yaha se...chinta mat kiyjiye ...waise bhi mare hua log wapas nahi aate ...

The words that burned her alive ...Fahad looked with anger at Suraiya ...

Mom ...kya aapne kaha hai isse ...yeh sab ...

Bhai ..please ...mujhe ek hi mauka mila tha apne safai den aka ...usme mai bhi is zehar ne mujhe behosh kiya ...aur mauke nahi hai mere paas ...

na hi kissi se koi safai deni baki hai...chala jaunga ...kal ...aaj nahi chal sakta hu ...aur haa ...nikaah mei aayega zaroor, apne ho toh accha lagta hai ...

Bhai...aur mai business bhi chod rah ahu...Aaliya koh samjha dunga who operate karegi shadi ke baad...

Zain tum chup rahoge thodi der...

Mom yeh sab kya hai ...

Bhai...maine aapko kisipe chilane ke liye nahi bulaya...unka haq hai ...

agar do thapad bhi marti toh bhi kuch nahi bolta...meri vajah se waise hi pareshan hai, ab aap mat kijiye...

Aur haa ...mujhe sympathy dikhani ki zaroorat nahi hai ...chal phir sakta hu ...

naukri aur ghar dhoondh loonga...par apni Aaliya koh nahi chodunga...agar iski kimat ...yeh hai ...toh yehi sahi ...

Zain ...tum abhi hosh mai nahi ho...

Hmm...shayad ..accha hai ...hota toh ab bhi ummed mai jeeta...

Thanks Bhai...aur haa Rhea se kehiye mujhe bhook lagi hai...

He turned his face ...and closed his eyes ...forgetting that she was still looking at him...

She walked out ...not knowing how to speak ...or look at him ...he was right ...she was dead too...

Closing her door ...she sat on the bed ...words cannot be taken back...once said they linger forever ...

She turned around ...and saw a face ...that was sad and crying

Kaise bhoola du ...tere diye zakham ...

Ab toh yeh asoo bhi lagte hai kam ...

SIM

Precap: Will Zain Forgive Suraiya ...and move on

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Heavy and heavy updates...the relationships finally mending their ways ...three more to reach the end ...

Dedication: Few special twitter fans ...zainab,Moumita Sadia and HarshikaIsLife ...overwhelmed and bowled out by love ..thank you for Reading my ZaYa version even when you are not a part of the forum ...means a lot to me

love you loads

Sim


Chapter 75

Nazdeekiyan...

By evening she peeped in his room again ...Rhea was caressing his hand ...

Tum yeh superhero banne ki addat main a mujhe marvaoge...

He was giggling ...

Da ...agar meh zehrela ho jaata toh ...

Toh mai bhi kya nagin se kam hu ...their jokes and laughter filled the room ...

Suraiya saw what she couldn't give him Rhea could...his Aaliya could...she had lost and after what he had been revealed to her she stood destroyed...

Aur suno meri chikki kaha hai ...

Aree tumahri chikki bachane ke chakkar mai hi toh saap ne mujhe das liya...

Been bajate na ...He kept quiet remembering his mock been for Aaliyas encounter with the snake ...

Accha ...chalo Soup piyo...

Da..Aree wah ...tumhe khana khane ke alava banana bhi aata hai ...

Very funny ..lo she gave himm the first bite...

The moment he tasted it ...he stopped her ...

Da ...yeh tumne nahi banaya hai ...she looked surprised ...

Toh kya hua ...tum piyo...

Nahi ...

Kyu...

Adat choot gayi hai ...aur ab isse peene ki bhi izazzat nah hai ..

Jiske haat se bana hai ...uss haat koh pakadkne ki bhi izaazat nahi hai mujhe ...

Kya matlab ...

Kuch nahi ...

Jaoo mere liye kuch biscuits lao please ...bhook lagi hai ...

She left the soup on the center table and got up...bacche ho bacche ...woh bhi bigdae hua ...

Joh bhi hu ab tumhara hu ...da ...

She kissed him on the forehead and walked out ...

The door closed again ...he looked up to see her standing ...she pulled the curtains and locked the door...

He saw her face and looked away ...both Suraiya and Nafeesa were standing in there now...

Zain ..maine mom koh sab sach bata diya hai...tum yeh ghar mat chodo...mai jaa rahi hu ...baccho koh chodkar ...

He looked up...Bhabhi aap aisa kuch nahi karogi...his first words in a year and three months to him ...

Zain ...please ...

Nahi ...Aaliya se vada kiya tha ..nahi todunga ...aap yehi rahegi ...aur haa please bhai se kuch mat kahiye .

Woh jaante hai ..maine dono koh saath mai bataya ...

Mai unse baat karunga...please aap jaiye yaha se ...mai sab theek kar dunga ...

aur haa Rhea aa rahi hai yaha zara rok kar rakhiye usse ...shayad kuch batein kisise clear ho jaye toh accha hoga ...

Nafeesa walked out ...with tears ...

Suraiya walked near him and sat kneeling on the ground ...

He tried concentrating on his hand rather ...playing with the bite marks ...

Bologe nahi ...

He still palyed with those viscious marks...

Apne mom koh maaf nahi karoge ...Zain ...he finally looked up...

His silence was mocking her now...the same forbidden gaze and words had melted her in a mould of stone ...the one which can hurt others but cant feel anything within itself ...

Accha kar rahe ho...mujh jaise maa ke saath shayad yehi karna chaiye...shayad tumhari khamoshi hi mera zehar hai ...she was crying ...when he finally looked up and spoke ...

Aaj ek baat pata chali toh aapko Aaliya se pyaar ho gaya...kal mera sach pata toh mujhse nafrat ..mujhe nahi chaiye aapki sympathy ...

Maine kaha aapse ...kal chala jaunga ...nahi dikhaunga apni shakal ...

Bhabhi koh tang mat kijiye, mai hu sabke taane sunne ke liye ...aur bhi kasar baki rah gayi ho toh who bhi poora kijiye...

Aap yehi chahti hai na ..ki sab khush rahe ...toh please unhe maaf kar dijiye ...aur mai kuch nahi chahta ..mujhe maafi mile na mile...koi parvaah nahi hai ...

jaa raha hu ... ek baar chala jaunga toh phir umra bhar nahi lautunga ...wada karta hu ...

jaanta hu bahut galat kar rah ahu aapko akela chodkar, par yehi sab ke liye sahi hoga...

maine pehle bhi kaha tha ...mai Aaliya koh aapse jara sa kam pyaar karta hu ...par usse meri zaroorat hai ...aapke paas bhai hai ...uske paas sirf mai hu ...

Apna khyal rakhna ...aur haa dad koh miss mat kijiye, maine dekha hai kai baar rote hue ...

Roz raat 11:00 baje aapko chupke se dekhta tha...kal se sirf tasveer dekhunga...agar koi acchi tasveer hai toh de dijiye...

Zain ...she held his arms ...and kept her hand on his mouth now ...

Chuppp...

He still looked down ...

Nafisa ne sab sach bata diya ...tum kyu she rahe the ya she rahe ho yeh sab ...mujhe sach bataya who bhi adhoora ...kyu zain kyu...

Wada nahi todta mai...naa aapse kiya hua ...na Aaliya se kiya hua ...

Khair...khayal rakhyega ...bahut kamzor lag rahi ho...khana waqt se khayega aur haa kabhi kabar mujhe yaad bhi kareyge ...itnna bura nahi hu mai ...

Tum nahi ...mei buri hu ...haina ...

Mera naam lo Zain ...Mujhe dekho ...

His eyes never ventured up ...didn't move ...he sat paralyzed ...

Please khuda ke vaste ...apni mom se door mat raho ...

teen mahine Zain ...teen mahine se mai har din mar rahi hu ...aur mat maro ...please

He looked up...the eyes drawing her in his ...

He still couldn't muster up the strength to call her ...look at her ...her presence had shadowed him ...

Wapas store room mai band ho jao kya ...aapko rulane ke liye ...

Zain ...she hugged him ....Mom ...Sorry ...

Nahi beta I am sorry ...mujhe aur sharminda mat karo ...maine tumhe bahut dard diya hai...

Aap mom hai ...kar sakti hai ...

Bahut darr gayi thi ...tumhe nahi kho sakti ...

He smiled...

Maine joh kiya uske liye sorry ...

She hugged him tight ...

Mom ...Mom ...Mom ...he repeated the word filling his soul...she kissed his fore-head ...

Ab baccha ban jau ...aapka sabse chota aur shaitaan beta ...

She giggled to see his face the spark was back...Zain Abdullah was back ...

Mujhe soup pilaye ...apne haton se ...

aur haa pasta bhi chaiye ...

aur haa ...aapka birthday phirse celebrate karenge ...aur he looked at her ...

He went down on the floor and put his head on her lap ...

Aainda ...kabhi aise nahi kehna ...koi bhi dard bardhast hai ...par yaha se door mat jaane dena...itni himmat nahi hai mujhme ab ...love you Mom...she gently moved her fingers through his hair ...reciting her dua ...he still had to face the storm ...his soul was battered but he had to wade through it all

Chain se ab sukoon se mai ek raat toh sounga ...

Tere acchal ke chaav mai maa ...mai ab jee bhar ke jiyunga

SIM

Pre-cap: Zain and Rheas wedding ...the festivities have begun
Edited by Zainedil - 9 years ago
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