Short Story - Painful Love ~ UPDATED Part 4 ~ PG 13 - Page 2

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TeriKhamoshiyan thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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AMAZING! โญ๏ธ
Superb start! I don't know what to say, that was so beautifully written!
And you said you were rusty! Trust me, that was not rusty!๐Ÿ˜†
The concept you've created based on the current track sounds really intriguing, by the time I finished reading I already wanted more!
I love how you had penned down and expressed each emotion so precisely.
And wow! The twist. Aliya having cancer. That was so unexpected for me. I thought she'd be pregnant, only to later find out that she has cancer!
So, Aliya's not going to tell anyone about her cancer. I sympathize for Aliya though, the poor girl has been battling literally everyone around her and now she's got to fight something as deadly like cancer. Not only is her husband, who was her best friend lost faith in her, but her parents have deceived her as well.
And Zain here. He and Aliya are both stuck in a web full of lies and misunderstandings. He's in so much pain from his father's death and what he and his mother had recently gone through and if that wasn't enough, he also believes the reason why everything in his life has gone wrong is Aliya. Alongside the pain Aliya's going through, Zain's right there with her suffering equally, if not more.
Truly, beautiful work dear!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
Do add me on the pm list! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Will be waiting eagerly for your next update, so do update soon!

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Interesting concept ๐Ÿ˜ณ
waiting for the updates
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This was amazing๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
Plz do pm me the next part๐Ÿ˜›
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Posted: 10 years ago
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OMG I love it!! nice twist..by making her go to the doctor I thought you were going to make Aaliya pregnant, but who would've thought cancer!
Please do continue soon. I'm really looking forward to it ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So so overwhelmed by the response, I shall try and update tonight, if not ill try my best to have an update ASAP!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey everyone,

Just wanna say say a quick thank you for feedback on the last update. I really appreciate u your feedback and it's really made me happy seeing so many liked and comments on something which I penned down in in a hurry.

I may have not replied to the comments from the previous update but I assure you I'm have read each comment over and over; they're my motivation to write the next update and post it ASAP! ๐Ÿ˜†

I hope you continue to shower me with your love in the future.

I continue with the story below...

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Life has many ups and downs, one day you're laughing and the next day crying. Each day is different and every day is new. The most unexpected things give you the most joy but, there's times when they can also give you unhappiness. As humans, you always want the best for yourself and the people around you. Aaliya was different, even in the storms and rains she wanted good for the people who meant so much to her. The same people who did not care about her and wanted her out or their lives. Their wishes were now fulfilled, they had had gotten what they had asked for.

She would die and everyone will be free of her, what can be better than that? After her death it wouldn't seem like there was ever a girl named Aaliya. Allah had made things easier for w everyone; she was his laadli after all. However, somewhere deep down in her heart she wished that she could recover, she would have another chance either Zain, the man she had come from love so much. She cherished each and every moment she had spent with him. The possibility of them being together was nil at the moment and the proceedings for their divorce had already started, however, she couldn't let her mamoo down. The man who had the most faith in her, the one who had brought Zain and herself together, the one who believed that their relationship would work.

She would die soon, she knew this illness would eventually kill her. The little time she had to she would ensure that no one faced any problems due to her. She would stay out of everyone's way. That would be best for everyone. This was here test from Allah and she would make sure she triumphed in the end.

***

Shazia walked into BV, she had just been to see her sister as she had been staying alone after the revelation during the engagement a couple of months back. Her due date was nearing and she had no one there with her. After all these days it was great for her to see her. She had, had had a heart to heart chat with her sister and realised how wrong she was to throw her out of the house. No matter what had happened during holi, it was not right for them to ditch her when she needed them the most.

Just as she was walking past Nafeesa's room she noticed the door was open, being the nosey woman see was she walked towards the room and stood outside observing her odd behaviour. It seemed as if she was in deep thoughts and disturbed about something that had happened. There could have been many reasons for the woman to be so disturbed but here Mrs Fahad Abdullah number 2 had knot one thought.

"Maybe she's worried about not getting the property, after all she had tried so hard go get rid of me due to the same reason," she thought to herself. "Who cares about what she thinks wants, i'll be the rightful owner of this property, I just need to find out who filed the complaint if it wasn't Aaliya or anyone from her family,"

And that's when shazia became James Bond to ensure she doesn't lose any of the money that could come her way of it she succeeded in her task. There would be many twists and turns but she could not give up . She would have her eyes open at all times, maybe she would find some evidence leading her to the 'real' culprit. She was a woman on a mission; a mission which would eventually lead her to a lot of money but that's what she thought.

***

Aaliya walked into the office, she had to be normal for she couldn't let anyone know about the cancer. Deep down she feared what Zain say, there was a part of her which wanted him to be by her side but there was another part of her which didn't want that. She worried that despite being so strong all this time, she would break down again; into thousands of pieces ... never to be able to get back up again. She consoled herself every night regarding her illness; she wanted to get better for her mamoo and the many dreams he had for the future of his family and the business. business She had to fulfill it for him, for he had handed the reigns to her and it was time for her to pay him back for all that he had done for her.

On the other side of the corridor walked Mr Zain Usman Abdullah, he carried a cup of coffee in one hand some files in the other. Aaliya, who was lost in her thoughts, did not notice him approaching her but, Zain did. Not able to her over the pain he suffered due to Aaliya, he felt felt a rage km anger inside of him. He had love her so much at one point but now, now this anger had overtaken every emotion in his body. He no longer cared about people's feelings or should I say about Aaliya's feelings. He continued walking towards her, knowing she hadn't noticed him. He barged into her making sure some of the hot coffee he had in his hand would spill on her. He wanted her to feel the pain he had felt, if not more.

As she knelt down to pick up the files that had fallen due to the collision, Aaliya looked at her hand, it had turned red but it wasn't as bad as the pain she was already going through. She had to ignore these petty things and concentrate on getting her work done. The cancer would slowly kill her and she wanted to make sure she had done all her work before she left the world. She didn't want to disappoint mamoo when she met him again.

See looked up to see who she had collided with, not expecting it to be her husband, she stood up ready to say something but was stopped by his rude remarks.

"CAN'T YOU WATCH WHERE YOU'RE GOING!" he snarled. "AND NOW, SEEING YOUR FACE HAS RUINED MY DAY!"

"I'm sorry, I didn't see you coming" Aaliya whispered. The whisper was so low, Zain had to strain his ears to make sure he had heard her clearly enough. What surprised him even more was the fact she didn't shout back at him like she normally would if they ever had their face offs which was quite regular recently.

Zain was too astounded to say anything back, so he stared at Aaliya's back as she walked to her cabin.

"What's wrong with her?" He thought to himself. "She didn't even argue back, and so the coffee it was really hot and she didn't even wince when it spilt on her. Who cares, I don't feel anything for her so it shouldn't bother me", and he walked to his cabin to continue his work.

***

Right now he couldn't think of anything but the fact she was responsible for the death of his father. No pain of hers in this world would account for the pain he had felt. She was the biggest mistake of his life and he regretted marrying her. But, not for long. There were many things hidden from him which when they do come out in the open would be the biggest shock for everyone and mostly Zain Usman Abdullah. The man had a lot on his plate already and there was more coming his way. Circumstances were such that he chose to separate from the love of his life. But the love which he had for Aaliya was dead, he felt nothing for her now and he wondered whether he ever would again.

***

A quote to end the update;

"Love is the most beautiful thing to have, hardest thing to earn and more painful thing to lose"

Would love to hear how you found the update, likes and comments appreciated.

Edited by .lostatsea. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#17
Res :)
Bookmarked it!

And do send me a PM when you update next :D
Edited by musicxolover - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#18
I could actually feel aliya pain i loved your writing plzzz continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice please continue and do PM me ๐Ÿ˜Š
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I really feel bad for aliya, I hope zain find's out soon
Aliya needs Zain right now๐Ÿ˜”
Amazing update and please continue soon
And thank u so much for the pm, and pm me the next part aswell๐Ÿ˜›
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