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Posted: 17 years ago
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Bon Great, I was moved for dedicating this " A FOREIGN AFFAIR" to Dasa and Atina, they both deserve it.

The story line is really fantastic. Can't stop my laughter on our ending line saying that the pliest's name is C. Ravie - Cheyar Ravie. Wow........ at least by reading this, let CR look a way for Priya and ACD's marriage, atleast reconcilition with little soup of romance.

Waiting to watch this to happen in our Anandham serial (of course to read our Great Dasa's updates with his added comments and Atina's pics).

Bon, keep going.............. Now, looking for your next special!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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What happen to Bon, no romantic stories. We are waiting for this than the anandham serial (its really waste nowadays)

Thanks
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Super Bon! waiting for part III
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hi Bonheur,


Your stories are fantastic. Please get more details about our ACD and update the website please........

some more good stories for the weekend.

awaiting for your story.

regards

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Posted: 17 years ago
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THE DOOR

Durai pulled up at the driveway of the Sheraton Hotel with a screech. Having just attended a speech by the chief minister, he was clad in a well-tailored dark business suit and a light pink shirt. He slipped off his Valentino tie, flung it into the back seat of his car, handed over his keys to the valet and dashed into the hotel.

As he undid his top two buttons and loosened his collar, his cellphone rang. It was Dilip, a visiting former classmate from Bombay whom he was to meet for dinner. Dilip was calling to say he had been delayed at a business meeting and would take at least another half hour to reach the hotel, where he was staying.

Durai decided to wait at the restaurant. As the waiter was about to lead him to his table, he spotted a familiar figure sitting in a quiet corner with a lady whom he could not place from her back. He realised the man was Bril, who had hitched a ride with him some weeks earlier. Durai recalled his investigators reporting that they had seen Bril frequently in the company of Sivaraman and Sangkarapandian. That raised a red flag. He decided he should suss out Bril for himself and walked towards him. Suddenly, he froze.

He felt a surge of jealousy gripping every limb, every tendon, even fibre of his being as he caught a glimpse of the woman sitting before Bril. She was wearing a black silk saree with a slim gold border. Her skimpy matching blouse unveiled skin so smooth and soft that he wanted to smother with kisses, that he wanted to possess for himself, that he wanted none to see. Her hair was well coiffeured, obviously the result of a couple of hours spent in a beauty saloon. She had a radiant smile on her face, which, however, turned into a frown when she saw him. Durai's face reddened.

"Hello, Mr A. C. Duraay Sir! I am Bril. The one you gave lift to. What wonder to see you here. I am so delight," said Bril, his affected American drawl barely concealing his fractured English.

"Er, ... hi, Bril. How're you? I hadn't expected to meet you here," Durai stuttered as he reached out for Bril's outstretched hand while continuing to stare at Priya.

"Oh, allow me to introduction. Preeyar, this is Mr A. C. Duraay, Assistant Commissioner of Police. Mr Duraay, this lovely lady here is Miss Preeyar, PA to Madam Chaarlaater of L & P Trading. You must be hearing of that company?"

Durai was still in a state of shock and could only manage a "hi". Priya too muttered a "hi" and pretended to study the menu.

"What bring you here, Mr Duraay?" asked Bril, a broad grin appearing on his puffy face, which Durai felt like smashing into smithereens. He clenched his fists to contain his anger.

"I was to have met an old classmate here for dinner. But he has been delayed."

"Why don't you sitting down with us until he comes and having drink?" suggested Bril.

"He may want to spend time by himself," Priya interjected quickly to Durai's exasperation. He stared at her grimly for a moment and then turned to Bril with a strained half smile. "No, that's OK, Bril. I will wait at my table. Good meeting you," Durai excused himself reluctantly, still eyeing Priya.

The waiter allowed Durai a choice of tables and he picked one that gave him a good view of Priya. Bril had his back to him. He glowered as Priya and Bril engaged in animated conversation. He strained his ears in a desperate attempt to hear what was being said but the tinkling of the piano keyboards and the chatter of the other diners drowned out their voices. Everytime he caught Priya's eyes she would quickly avert her glance and smile coyly at Bril, to Durai's annoyance. He picked up the small card on his table marked "reserved" and began fingering its corners lightly for a while. Then he folded the card into two, then four. Next, he rolled the card and began wringing it out of shape as he gritted his teeth in fury. Soon, the card lay in a heap of tatters in the ashtray. All the while Durai's eyes remained trained on Priya. In the meantime, he also downed two glasses of red wine and his face was flushed with anger.

It was nearly 9.00 when Dilip arrived and the two friends got reaquainted quickly after 12 years. Dilip noticed that Durai was restless and sensed that something was amiss.

"Hey, Durai. I am sorry about the engagement that didn't take place. I hope you aren't still smarting over it. Are you seeing anyone else now?"

Durai grimaced.

"Come on, yaar. Get a life. I sense you're still thinking about her," said Dilip.

"You bet, Dilip," replied Durai. "She's just sitting across from us at that table there."

Dilip turned back and caught a glimpse of Priya. "Wow! What a beauty!" Dilip whistled softly. "I can see why you're upset."

"Yes, I am upset. And, not just because she's a beauty but because she's sitting with a beast. That man is a scoundrel, I suspect."

"Hey, chill, Durai. You're just jealous. And with good reason too."

"Yes, I AM jealous, Dilip. You're damned right. I am VERY jealous indeed. You see, I thought there was hope of reconciliation a week ago. When I last went to her house .. you know she lives with some friends of mine. When I went to her house last week, she gave me a half smile and even offered to make me coffee. That was a radical change from some months ago, when she wouldn't even look at my face, let alone speak to me. So, I had hope. But this ... this date with this Bril guy sets my hopes back light years. I don't think she will ever change her mind about me."

"Hey, hey, Durai, take it easy ..."

"I can't, Dilip. And it's not just for selfish reasons. The guy she is with is up to no good. He's been regularly seen in the company of two of the most criminal minds that my department is tracking and I am suspicious of his background. I have a very queasy feeling, Dilip. Even if Priya doesn't change her mind about me, I don't want her unknowingly teaming up with a bad hat and getting hurt later."

"Well, you'll have to warn her, then, Durai," said Dilip.

"Yes, I do intend to. Even if she thinks I am driven by a vested interest."

It was almost 10.30 when Bril and Priya stood up. Bril headed towards Durai's table. Priya moved on and stopped at a potted plant, pretending to examine it. "We're going back, A. C. Sir. Good meeting you again," said Bril.

"How's Miss Priya going home. It's too late for her to ride home on her scooter. I can drop her home." Durai couldn't restrain himself from speaking even as he knew how badly he was coming across.

Bril was puzzled. "How did you know Miss Preeyar is having scooter? Besides, I gave her lift here and I can give lift to her home again," he insisted.

"I knew Miss Priya's late brother well. And I also know Mr and Mrs Karthik, with whom she is staying now," Durai stumbled over to explain his familiarity with Priya.

"Oh, Preeyar didn't tell me that. Anyway, no worries, Mr Duraay. I will drive her home safely, trust me," said Bril with a wink and led Priya out of the restaurant.

For a few seconds, Durai gaped helplessly as the couple left the restaurant together. Then, collecting himself suddenly, he apologised to Dilip for cutting short the dinner and hurriedly got up. As he rushed out, he stuffed several thousand rupee bills into the hands of a surprised waiter and instructed him to keep any change.

Bril and Priya were nowhere to be seen at the hotel driveway. Durai handed over his receipt to the valet, threw his jacket on his shoulder, and paced the length and breadth of the hotel porch impatiently as he waited for his car to be driven up. Minutes later, the valet drove out his Suzuki from the garage. Before the car came to a halt Durai grabbed open the front door, muscled out the shocked valet, stuffed a couple of 100 rupee notes in his hand, took the wheels and revved the engine. Driving at breakneck speed, he reached Shanthi's home in no time.

He parked his car some distance away from the house and walked up to the watchman, who recognised him and saluted him dutifully. Durai discovered that Priya had not returned yet. He told the watchman that he needed to speak to Priya urgently and would wait by the door. He also got the watchman's commitment not to reveal to Bril that he was waiting by the door and then slipped past the gate and hid behind an overgrown bush.

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Durai glanced at his watch. It had been 20 minutes since he had taken up his position and there was still no sign of Priya and Bril, much to his consternation. He wondered where Bril had taken Priya to. Mosquitos were beginning to feed mercilessly on his blood as he lay in waiting. Finally, at 11.50, a car pulled up in the darkness. He was certain it was Bril's car. He strained his ears to hear what they might be saying but he could hardly hear anything apart from the chirping of crickets.

Priya placed a hand on the door handle and demurely said, "Thanks for the lovely dinner." Bril looked at Priya intently. Then he grabbed her by the waist and tried to force himself upon her but Priya ducked in time. "No, Bril!" she remonstrated angrily. "I am not ready for this." She got out of the car hurriedly and slammed the door shut. Bril got out too. "Hey, Priya, wait!" he said and raced after her. "Hey, Preeyar, it's just a kiss." His voice broke the silence of the still night.

Durai felt as if blood would burst from his veins as he heard Bril's reference to "just a kiss". He rushed out from behind the bushes and felt a sharp pain in his arm as he stumbled over the rose bush and fell headlong on the grass patch. His shirt was torn and blood was beginning to ooze from the gash in his arm.

As he nursed his arm and struggled to get up, he heard the watchman explain away the rustle in the bushes. "No, Ma'am, it's just a cat."

"Bril. I am sorry," Durai heard Priya's stern voice. " Tonight's dinner was just meant to be a casual one. I can't think of you as anything more than a friend. You probably aren't aware that I was about to be engaged to someone else. The engagement didn't take place because of some unfortunate events. But I still can't get him out of my mind, much as I want to. I am not ready for a deep relationship with anyone else at this time. I am sorry. Please leave now!"

Seconds later, from where he lay on the grass, Durai saw the contours of Priya's frame as she made her way through the gate. He was thankful that she hadn't seen him in the dark. She rushed into the house and slammed the door shut.

Even as he lay wincing in pain, Durai felt light in his heart. Priya had shut the door on Bril. But Durai knew that she was keeping the door to her heart slightly ajar for the one love of her life.
Edited by Bonheur - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow! what a story bon!👏👏 i actually felt each and every emotion of ACD! hehe.. preeyar? that is exactly how joe would have sounded.😆 thanks a lot for this refreshing cute story!😳

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Good one Bon. Nice refreshing cute story. 👏

Jiggs, for a person who wants Priya & AC's reunion, why did you put up Aloomoonji's face of Priya? See even you can see it is Aloomoonji - hehehehe....... 😆 PUt some smiley ones pls.
Edited by Caryn - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Caryn

Good one Bon. Nice refreshing cute story. 👏

Jiggs, for a person who wants Priya & AC's reunion, why did you put up Aloomoonji's face of Priya? See even you can see it is Aloomoonji - hehehehe....... 😆 PUt some smiley ones pls.

caryn, i didn't request for that siggie. it was made by someone beforehand and posted up. i'm just using it and if there's anyone who can put smiling faces of priya in a siggie, it's kabee not me. i don't make siggies.

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Posted: 17 years ago
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The Bodyguard (remember Kevin Costner?)

It was just before 9.00 am. The security guard announced the arrival of A. C. Durai. Charu's face brightened. She was hoping Durai was bringing her good news about reuniting with Kanagavalli, her long-lost daughter. Durai had got her to commit herself to not revealing herself to her daughter just yet. Charu was hoping Durai would announce that it was now a propitious time to officially introduce herself to Kanagavalli.

"Good morning, Charulatha Madam," Durai interrupted her thoughts.

"Good morning, Mr Durai. Come, come, please take a seat. What news do you have for me regarding my daughter?" she asked, barely concealing her excitement. "Any good news?"

"We at HQ are still working on the case and we assess that it is still not the right time to reveal yourself to Kanagavalli. But you should be able to meet her pretty soon, I promise," Durai said as he settled into the sofa next to Charu's seat.

Charu was visibly disappointed. She had expected Durai to bring her better news. Why would he come all the way to my house just to tell me he and his department are still working on the case, she wondered. What's his ulterior motive? He'd better not play with my emotions, she thought.

Notwithstanding the loss of her equanimity, Charu tried to put up a brave front. "Coffee?" she asked.

"Yes, why not," replied Durai, taking Charu by surprise. He rarely made social calls on her, typically rushing off to work after discussing business.

"You seem very relaxed today, Mr Durai," Charu commented. Durai wasn't paying attention. He was looking in turn at the entrance to Charu's house and the passage that led to the office wing.

"Mr Durai?"

"Er, yes. Madam," the startled Durai responded. "I ... how's your work? How's the business?" he asked uncharacteristically.

"Hmm. It's going well."

"Are your staff reliable? Is everything in order?" asked Durai, again looking past Charu at the passage that led to the office wing.

"How unusual, Mr Durai. You seem to have a special interest in my staff today?" Charu said with a mischievous wink.

"Er, no. I meant ,,. er ...I ... er. I meant, do they threaten to engage in industrial action and that sort of thing ..."

"No, no. They are all super workers. I don't need any police help as far as they are concerned," responded Charu promptly.

"No, I didn't meant that .. I ...er .."

"One second," Charu cut off the stuttering assistant commissioner and picked up her intercom. "Priya, will you bring me the Abode housing complex files."

Durai's face turned red with embarrassment as Charu looked at him straight in the eyes while speaking to Priya on the phone. He quickly averted his gaze and stared blanky at the carpet on the floor.

Within minutes Priya arrived and walked straight up to Charu with some files. She did not notice Durai, who was fidgeting in his seat.

"Thanks, Priya. I shall take these files up to my room to study them. Please make sure Lalita hasn't forgotten the coffee for Mr Durai."

It was only then that Priya turned around and caught Durai's glance. She averted her gaze immediately, as did Durai.

"OK, I am going up," said Charu quickly. As soon as her large frame disappeared from the room, a deafening silence descended. Priya bit her lips until they almost bled. She cast her eyes downward. "Damn, I wish I had gone to the pedicurist yesterday and had my toe nails painted," she thought to herself as she nervously surveyed the fading cutex.

Durai was also embarrassed about making eye contact and glanced at his feet. "Oh darn!" he thought to himself. "I wish I had checked my socks this morning; there's a darn in the left toe of my socks. I hope Priya isn't looking."

After almost a minute's silence, Durai broke the ice. "Hi, Priya," he smiled sheepishly.

"Hi," replied Priya with a half smile.

"How are you?"

"Fine."

"How's Indu?"

"She's fine"

"And Shanthi Madam?"

"She's fine too. And so is Karthik Anna," Priya preempted Durai as he tried to compose his next sentence. That reference to Karthik's wellbeing deprived Durai of the only other polite question he had readily in store. Silence descended upon the room again.

"I will go check on the coffee," started Priya.

"No, that's OK, Priya. How are you?"

"I'm fine."

"Actually, I came to see you, Priya. I was wondering whether ... er ... whether you still take Indhu to the kids park? I know Indhu loves the place. But I don't think it's safe for the two of you to go there alone anymore. If you like, I could ..."

"Oh, you want to take Indhu there?" a sly smile appeared on Priya's lips.

"Yes. I mean, No. I meant ..."

"You meant?" asked Priya cheekily.

"I meant I could take the two of you there ..."

"Oh, that's kind of you."

"So when do you want to go?" asked Durai, his confidence returning slowly.

"How about this Sunday ?"

"Sunday would be great," Durai was beaming with excitement.

"Glad you can make it. And, one good thing, Shanthi Anni is also free this Sunday."

"What?" Durai thought he had misheard.

"Anni is very keen to join us the next time we go."

It took Durai nearly 30 seconds to regain his composure. "Mrs Shanthi? Oh, er ... no problem. I'd be delighted to take the three of you to the kids' park."

"OK, this Sunday, at 11.00?"

"This Sunday, at 11.00 then."

Just then Charu reappeared. "What's happening this Sunday?" she enquired with a broad smile.

"Oh, Indhu, Shanthi and Priya are keen to go to the kids' park and they wanted me to go along to ensure they'd be safe." Durai avoided looking at Priya as he stretched the truth.

"How interesting. You are so duty-conscious, Mr Durai. Even on a Sunday you would accompany two women and a child to the kids' park. Come to think of it. I have never been to the kids' park. I was told it has some entertainment for adults too. So, why don't you swing by my place and pick me up on your way there? And, Priya, can you check whether Mr and Mrs RK are also interested. I haven't seen them in a long while and it would be good to have a sort of picnic at the kids' park. We could all go in my van. Mr Durai, would we need one or two more policemen to guard us all?"

Durai's jaw nearly dropped.

Edited by Bonheur - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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😆 😆, you have a great sense of humor Bon, i'm trying to imagine ACDs face at the end of it, haha. Really nice.
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