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Posted: 5 years ago
#31
This part is very emotional. When Yasmin took Aladdin to her horse it reminded me one of my fav Jodi vitharav scene where heroine took injured hero in his bike.
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Posted: 5 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: sanchita1410

This part is very emotional. When Yasmin took Aladdin to her horse it reminded me one of my fav Jodi vitharav scene where heroine took injured hero in his bike.

Thanks dear for reading, yes it was an emotional part... .well sorry if I offended you but I don't know this jodi...But could imagine the scene completely how she had carried him on the bike...
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Posted: 5 years ago
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This is such a emotional update
Yasmine was so strong here and her agreeing to marry that chiefs son to just save Aladdin is so ❤️
Hope Aladdin recovers soon and is able to steal Yasmine away before her nikha after all he is kalechor he is able to steal any precious item and his nachadii is the most precious to him
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: AProudBookworm

This is such a emotional update
Yasmine was so strong here and her agreeing to marry that chiefs son to just save Aladdin is so ❤️
Hope Aladdin recovers soon and is able to steal Yasmine away before her nikha after all he is kalechor he is able to steal any precious item and his nachadii is the most precious to him

Thanks dear for reading, yes I tried to plot Yasmine's character of a bold warrior princess in this story...
Aladdin have to recover soon for his Nachidii...
Well your words gave me an amazing idea...The stealing part... I am definitely going to use it in the story... Hope you will like that...
Stay tuned...
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Hi Sanchita, Sorry dear for being late... I will try to update next part by tonight or tomorrow 😊

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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: 1973deepak

Hi Sanchita, Sorry dear for being late... I will try to update next part by tonight or tomorrow 😊


No u are not late. But ur story made me addicted. Now after reading one part I eagerly wait for next part
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: 1973deepak


Thanks dear for reading, yes I tried to plot Yasmine's character of a bold warrior princess in this story...
Aladdin have to recover soon for his Nachidii...
Well your words gave me an amazing idea...The stealing part... I am definitely going to use it in the story... Hope you will like that...
Stay tuned...


Wait really!!!! Yayyy No one has really written something based on my suggestion before so thank you Ananya
Now I really can't wait for the next part
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Part 4

At the base camp..

Doctor put some stitches and herbal paste on Aladdin's wound... They were treating him for 2 hours and finally he gained consciousness and he opened his eyes...

Aladdin seemed to restless and anxious... He whispered his Nachidi's name even in a state of dizziness...

Aladdin - Sana... Sana...

Doctor tried to calm him and understood that he wanted his partner near him...he asked a tribal lady to get the girl to Aladdin...

The lady entered Yasmine's room and found her still praying with full dedication..

Lady- Maaf karna ladki par tumne kal se kuch nahi khaya kuch khalo...

Yasmine didn't reply she was so devoted to her cause...

Lady - ladki tumhaare saathi ko hosh aa gaya hai... Aur vo shayad tumhe bula raha hai

Yasmine lips which were moving in silent prayer stopped.. She opened her eyes and turned towards the lady...

Yasmine - kya kaha aapne... Aladdin ko hosh aagaya... Main darkhwaast karti hoon aapse ki aap mujhe uske paas lejayiye..

Yasmine broke into tears... She was so grateful to everyone foe saving her love.. Lady nodded and took her to Aladdin..
Yasmine entered a sort of medical camp...

Yasmine - Aladdin!!

Yasmine rushed towards the bed on which he was laying...

Aladdin slightly opened his eyes only to see his Nachidii sitting beside him and crying with tears of joy...

A sense of fear surrounded his heart.. He tried to lift himself up.. Doctor and Yasmine helped him to sit on the bed...

Aladdin - ouch!!! Kya hua sana tum.. Tum itna ro kyu rahi ho...

Yasmine cried, her throat choked to speak a single word... She hugged him tightly...

Aladdin was stunned at her reaction... Doctor saw them and leave the room to give them a little privacy...

Aladdin - kya hua Sana... Ouch!!

Yasmine quickly moved aback..

Yasmine - maaf karna...

Aladdin smiled at her innocence...

Aladdin - Tum yaha...

Yasmine - Main yaha iss jungle mein tumhe talaash karte aayi thi...par tum yaha aaye kaise???

Aladdin - jaha tak mujhe yaad hai.. Main bazaar se jaa raha tha.. Tabhi kisi ne mere sar par kisi cheez se humla kiya aur main behosh ho gaya... Aur aur.. Phir mujhe iss jungle mein laya gaya.. Aur shezaadi..

Yasmine - Shezaadi!!!

Aladdin - haan!! Nachidii mujhse shezaadi milne aayi thi... Par mujhe lagta hai ki shezaadi ki jaan khatare mein hai... Kyoki uss ladki ne apna naam... Shayd Meher bataya tha...

Yasmine - Meher!!

Aladdin - tum jaanti ho meher kon hai... Zaroor bohot bada jaal bichaya ja raha hai... Shezaadi Yasmine ki jaan khatare mein hai...

Yasmine (to herself) - yah allah... Yaani yeh sab uss meher ki bacchi ka kiya hua hai.. Hum use chodenge nahi...

Aladdin - kya hua Nachidii... Kuch soch rahi ho... Vaise yeh log kon hai aur humkaha hai...

Yasmine - tumhe iss buri halat mein dekha toh paas ki iss basti mein madad maangi aur unhone humaari madad bhi ki...

Aladdin - Nachidii!!! Tumne meri jaan bachayi hai... Main zindagi bhar tumhaara esaan nahi bhool sakta...

Yasmine - tumne bhi toh humaari jaan bachaayi hai kai baar bas hum tumhaari jaan bachakar apna esaan chuka rahe the...

Aladdin - bas isliye tumne meri jaan bachayi... Sach mein...

Yasmine -haan!! Aur kya vajah ho sakti hai...

Yasmine cheeks turned red... She turned around to avoid eye contact with him...

Yasmine - Tumhe araam karna chahiye... Hum chalte hai...

Suddenly Yasmine felt as if someone hold her dress from behind... She paused for a moment and turned to see it was non other than Aladdin holding corner of her black dress...

Aladdin - Thodi der aur ruk jao... Mujhe acha lagega...

Yasmine nodded and sat beside him...

Aladdin saw her exhausted face and some scars and bruises on her arm...

Aladdin - yeh chot kaise lagi... Aur tumne in par koi dawayi bhi nahi lagayi...

Yasmine - yeh chot... Theek ho jayegi... Tum fikr mat karo...

Aladdin - kaise fikr na karu... Tum mere liye jaan se zyada keemti ho...

Yasmine - sach...

Aladdin realized he opened up his heart's deepest emotion... So he just twisted the topic

Aladdin - haan!! Meri jaan bachaane wala toh mere liye keemti hoga hi na...

Yasmine just smiled... She expected him to confess his love...

Aladdin - yeh log kitne acche hai na... Humaari madadd ki aur badle mein humse kuch nahi maanga...

Yasmine was silent... She has nothing to reply... She remembered her promise to the Chief of marrying his son...

Yasmine - tumhe araam karna chahiye kaale chor..

Yasmine rushed outside the camp just because she didn't want to show him tears that filled her eyes..

Aladdin confused by her reaction thought probably she needs some rest...

After few days..

Aladdin was fit and fine...He was always attended by a lady which seems to be head of the nurses..

Lady- Allah ka shukar hai ki tumhaari tabiyat mein itni jaldi sudhaar ayaa... Sab uss ladki ki dua aur hakeem sahab ki dawa asar hai...

Aladdin - Dua!!!

Lady-haan vo jo ladki tumhaare saath hai na... Usne peechle chaar dino se khana bhi nahi khaya.. Jab se tum yaha aaye ho bas aalah se tumhaare sehat mein sudhaar ke liye hi dua karti rehti hai...

Aladdin was astonished to listen this...

Aladdin - Nachidii!! Mera matlab Sana ne khana nahi khaya...
Lady-nahi!! Khane ka ek niwaala bhi nahi khaya... Na jaane kaisi hogi vo...

Aladdin - mujhe uske paas jana hai...

Lady-par.. Tumhaare khaane ka samay...

Aladdin - jab tak meri sana nahi khayegi ab mein bhi nahi khaunga...

Aladdin rushed towards her camp and saw her praying...
Aladdin - Sana!!

Yasmine opened her eyes and turned around to see Aladdin standing at the door...

Yasmine - Aladdin Tum..yeh Tumhaare khaane ka samay hai.. Tymne khana khaaya.. Aur tum yaha..
Aladdin - bas bas Nachidii itni chinta karogi toh mujhe tumse pyaar ho jayega...

Yasmine looked with eyes widened as if he said what she wants to hear...

Aladdin - Nachidii!! Yasmine came out of stupor...

Aladdin - Tumne khaana khaya...

Yasmine lied - haan khaya na..

Aladdin raised his left eyebrow and came closure to her

Aladdin - sach mein tumne khaana khaya hai... Toh batao khaane mein kya tha...

Yasmine - sabji aur...

Aladdin - galat aaj murg bana hai khaane mein...

Yasmine - haan vo..

Aladdin - kitna jhot bologi... Chaar din se tumne khaana nahi khaya aur allah se meri salamati ki dua kar rahi ho...

Yasmine was about to give another silly reason but was stopped in midway...

Aladdin-kuch nahi bologi tum.. Chup chaap khana khao... Vo bhi mere saath...

Aladdin hold her hand and dragged her to his camp were his food platter was ready...

Yasmine suddenly felt little dizzy.. Before she could say something she lost her balance and was about to fall.. When aladdin get hold of her..

Aladdin - sana!!! Tum theek toh ho... Kisne kaha tha mere liye yeh sab karne... Tumhe kuch jo jaata toh...

Yasmine - aur tumhe kuch ho jaata toh...

Aladdin - toh kya???

Yasmine hugged him tightly and said- toh jaan chale jaati meri... Tumhe khone ka khwaab bhi mere dil aur dimaag ko bechain kar deta hai...

Aladdin - sana!!! Mujhe tumse kuch kehna hai...
Yasmine - kya Aladdin...

Aladdin - sana!!!

Aladdin cannot process what his Nachidii was saying... Does he matters so much to her...
He barely have words to express

Aladdin - Sana!!! Main nahi jaanta hum dono ke bewch kya par tum mere liye dost se badkar ho... Shayad meri zindagi ho...

Hope you all like this part...Do like, comment and tell your opinion about it..
Edited by 1973deepak - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: sanchita1410


No u are not late. But ur story made me addicted. Now after reading one part I eagerly wait for next part

Thanks dear, its a great thing for me... I have updated forth part of the FS above... Hope you will like it...
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Posted: 5 years ago
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Originally posted by: AProudBookworm


Wait really!!!! Yayyy No one has really written something based on my suggestion before so thank you Ananya
Now I really can't wait for the next part

Really... Your suggestion is amazing... I will definitely put it in the part in which they escape...BTW I have updated forth part above...Hope you will like it...
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