Akya SS 'Love is in the air' (Chapter-3 updated, Page-4) - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: yudigirl

awwwh nicey dicey...continue!


Thank you!!!! I will... 😳
Edited by Nuha09 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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hi nuha...lovely update...
Beautiful dialogues and story start...
Please tell ne when will you update next????( you see, I can't wait😉)
Thanks for writing this ss...only if I could validate my email...I also would have posted an os till now😭


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: akyabiggestfan

hi nuha...lovely update...

Beautiful dialogues and story start...
Please tell ne when will you update next????( you see, I can't wait😉)
Thanks for writing this ss...only if I could validate my email...I also would have posted an os till now😭



Hi... Thank you!!!! I am really very sorry dear, even I don't know when I will be able to update because my classes is going to start from tommorow... If I can free myself from the studies, I will surely update... Sorry!!!! And best of luck for your OS...

Nuha
Edited by Nuha09 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Guys,
Sorry for late update. I am a little busy now-a-day because of my studies. Here you go... Hope you will like it...


CHAPTER-2
In a mean time a handsome guy entered the pilots waiting room in a pilots uniform and a Air hostress beside him. On seeing him Mr.Sen spoke.
Mr.Sen: "Officer Rawat meet another senior pilot, Captain Akash Saluja. He is your caption of today's flight
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Akash was mesired by seeing the beauty of Ananya, with Mr.Sen's words Akash came back to reality and forward his hand for hand shake and spoke.

Akash : "Hello Officer Rawat"
Ananya in turn also forward her hand and spoke.
Ananya : "hello captain"
Mr.Sen : "she is our Air hostress Natasha" pointing toward the girl beside Akash.
Ananya : "Hi" she smiled
Natasha: "Hi" she turned toward Akash and spoke "Akash, lets go and have some coffee"
Akash : "No, Natasha I have a flight to catch. Okay bye Natasha"
Natasha in a sad tone " bye"

Then Akash and Ananya left for the flight. IN the cockpit there was pin of silence. Tn order to broke the silence Akash was about to speak but Air hostress Shruti came inside the cockpit and spoke.

Shruti : "Captain app ki coffee" and handover the coffee to Akash and asked Ananya.
Shruti : "app kya lengi First Officer??"
Ananya: "I will prefer water"
Akash : " Are you sure First Officer?????"
Ananya: "Yes, Caption, any problem?"
Akash : "No"

And Shruti got out of the cockpit and bring a bottle of water for Ananya then give it to her and left. After she left it was time for landing and so, Akash could not talk with Ananya. After the flight was landed successfully Akash and Ananya came out of the cockpit and head toward the gate of the Airport. After they reached the gate there were two cars for the crew members. One car was full and the other was empty. So, Akash and Ananya got inside the empty car. In the car:

Akash : "First Officer, are you free tonight??"
Ananya: "Yes Captain, par kyu"
Akash : "Actually, main harroze ekhele dinner karta hoon, thats why... Kya app mere sath dinner karengi???"
Ananya a bit hesitantly said : "Okay"
Akash smiled and said : "Thanks"
And Ananya smiled back.

Comments please 😊


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Can I give you one suggestion if you don't mind?

Your concept is very sweet very lovable which is generally very loved by the readers,but since its a short story so you have to be careful about the speed.

Don't make it too fast or too slow.Your story's speed is very fast,slow it down a bit and try avoid adding unnecessary things in short stories.
Edited by -Paulomi- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#16
It was beautiful
loved it
continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amazingly written
Can't wait for dinner part
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Wowww akya's first meeting and aakash already fell for her beauty.Loved it.continue soon😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow Akash & ananya going for dinner. Update the dinner date sooon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Paulomi-

Can I give you one suggestion if you don't mind?

Your concept is very sweet very lovable which is generally very loved by the readers,but since its a short story so you have to be careful about the speed.

Don't make it too fast or too slow.Your story's speed is very fast,slow it down a bit and try avoid adding unnecessary things in short stories.


Thank you di, for your suggestion...
I will surly see to its speed 😊
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